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发表于 2006-6-17 11:25:18 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
Issue136  第7篇 让砖头来得更猛烈些吧!
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The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very, very rare.
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The statement asserts that the absence of choice is a circumstance that is very rare. Though this statement is too absolute, since actually people cannot change the reality, including natural rules and past events, human beings have the ability to find out or create alternatives for their future life.

Admittedly, people cannot choose the existing reality of the world. Natural rules are so absolute that they will never vary according to people's wishes. As the past time cannot be experienced again, people cannot obtain alternatives of the past events. A person cannot choose his parents, even if he does not enjoy the current family. A person cannot deny his activities, even if he did not wish to induce such situations. A person cannot change the results of examinations or competitions, even if he cannot accept such pity consequences. The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very popular in this world.

However, people have the ability to find out or create alternatives for their future. Although human beings cannot change the existing reality of the world, they can consider it in many different ways. A person cannot choose his parents, but he can whether to create an enjoyable family with his assiduity or give up before any attempts. A person cannot deny his activities, but he can choose whether to find out ways to make use of the current situations or only regret and complain about his deads. A person cannot change the results of examinations or competitions, but the next step of his life is still to be determined by himself. One can easily give up a competition before the end, but one can also find out a great deal of possibility. One can simply attribute the failure to the absence of talents, but one can also hold confidence to develop oneself and prepare for the next chance. As a result, when considering the possibility of future, the absence of choice is a circumstance that is very rare, just as that has been expressed by the statement.

In conclusion, though people cannot change natural rules and gain alternatives of the past events, they can observe and create choices for their future life. When the current life passes quickly and quietly, the past time stands still, while the future is colorful and alternative.

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发表于 2006-6-18 00:09:06 |只看该作者
这篇文章的字数把我震撼了!待我仔细看看

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发表于 2006-6-18 00:52:20 |只看该作者
写得象诗了!但是这样仅仅罗列例子,会不会被说成没有深度?毕竟例子是罗列不完的,其他人也可能举出反例。举个不恰当的例子,被判死刑的罪人完全没有选择余地……

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发表于 2006-6-18 10:08:07 |只看该作者
The statement asserts that the absence of choice is a circumstance that is very rare. Though this statement is too absolute, since actually people cannot change the reality, including natural rules and past events, human beings have the ability to find out or create alternatives for their future life.

Admittedly, people cannot choose the existing reality of the world. Natural rules are so absolute that they will never vary according to people's wishes. As the past time cannot be experienced again, people cannot obtain alternatives of the past events. A person cannot choose his parents, even if he does not enjoy the current family. A person cannot deny his activities, even if he did not wish to induce such situations. A person cannot change the results of examinations or competitions, even if he cannot accept such pity consequences. The absence of choice is a circumstance that is very popular in this world.

However, people have the ability to find out or create alternatives for their future. Although human beings cannot change the existing reality of the world, they can consider it in many different ways. A person cannot choose his parents, but he can(少动词) whether to create an enjoyable family with his assiduity or give up before any attempts. A person cannot deny his activities, but he can choose whether to find out ways to make use of the current situations or only regret and complain about his deads. A person cannot change the results of examinations or competitions, but the next step of his life is still to be determined by himself. One can easily give up a competition before the end, but one can also find out a great deal of possibility. One can simply attribute the failure to the absence of talents, but one can also hold confidence to develop oneself and prepare for the next chance. As a result, when considering the possibility of future, the absence of choice is a circumstance that is very rare, just as that has been expressed by the statement.
此段的排比运用的很精彩,观点是在阐明人的主观能动性吧?很生动
In conclusion, though people cannot change natural rules and gain alternatives of the past events, they can observe and create choices for their future life. When the current life passes quickly and quietly, the past time stands still, while the future is colorful and alternative.
这段像歌词,哈哈
思路很清晰,语言也到位,但就论述客观性时(第二段),仅谈及自然规律会否以偏概全?还有保守的问一下,字数少有否影响?

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发表于 2006-6-18 13:32:27 |只看该作者
这篇之前看了题目,想了好几天,就是不知道怎么写。。。
昨天是硬着头皮写完的,写到时间没有了,就觉得也没什么好写的了
我觉得关于这种行为类意识流的题目,最好还是能去图书馆借两本书来看看
关于昨天写的文章,我承认不会太有深度,因为用的完全是漫画里的台词,又不是很好表达
其实主要想要表达的观点是:人们的过去是不可以选择的,但是人们可以选择以不同的态度来看待过去,更加可以选择不同的未来
不知道怎么写能深刻一点,我还是决定去借书。。。

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