Argument200【0710G-HIT坚持交作业小组作文大帖】第九次作业

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT200 - Statistics collected from dentists indicate that three times more men than women faint while visiting the dentist. This evidence suggests that men are more likely to be distressed about having dental work done than women are. Thus, dentists who advertise to attract patients should target the male consumer and emphasize both the effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients.
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In this argument, the arguer draws the conclusion that the dentists who advertise to attract patients should target the male consumer and emphasize both the effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous of suffering patients. However, I find this argument has many logical errors.

To begin with, the arguer advises that the advertisement only focuses on the male is not conceiving. Why we only focus on the male? Can we lose the profit from the woman patients? Although three times more men than women faint while visiting the dentist, there is no information to support that the number of women is not larger. It is possible that the number of the woman is 1,000 and the man only 600, but there are 300 men faint due to their more sensitive to the pain, compared with only 100 women. Even if the number of the woman is very small, we can get no evidence that the number will not increasing in the next year. It is possible that, with improvement of the life, women have more candies, without washing the teeth before going to bed, which causes many women going to the hospital. If so, it is not wise for the dentist to make this decision.

Second, even if the advertisement should focus on the men, we still can not get the conclusion that we should emphasize both the effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients. Do all the people only care for the anesthetic techniques? In fact, whether the patients choose the hospital contains many factors, such as the doctors, environment, traffic and the price, which are all important for a hospital. It may be possible that the patient will choose another hospital, because this hospital’s price is very high. Perhaps the patient will go to the hospital, because the traffic is very bad. In addition, maybe the hospital’s sanitation is bad, so people are willing to go there. So we can not only focus on the anesthetic techniques.

In summary, I think the arguer has little evidence to support his conclusion, through the discussion mentioned above. If the arguer wants to make this argument conceiving, he has to provide that whether the number of the woman is larger and will increase in the next few years, what the other factors to influence the people going to the hospital. If so, we can get a more conceiving answer.

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In this argument, the arguer draws the conclusion that the dentists who advertise to attract patients should target the male consumer and emphasize both the effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous of suffering patients. However, I find this argument has many logical errors.

To begin with, the arguer advises that the advertisement （advertising）(加上should比较好)only focuses on the male is not conceiving. Why we(你和他是一伙的吗用clinic 之类的比较好) only focus on the male? Can(Will) we lose the profit from the woman patients? Although three times more men than women faint while visiting the dentist, there is no information to support that the （total）number of women is not larger. It is possible that the number of the woman is 1,000 and the man only 600, but there are 300 men faint due to their more sensitive to the pain, compared with only 100 women.(这个可能性说的挺好的，但是后面可能有点过) Even if the number of the woman is very small, we can get no evidence that the number will not increasing in the next year. It is possible that, with improvement of the life, women have more candies, without washing the teeth before going to bed, which causes many women going to the hospital. If so, it is not wise for the dentist to make this decision.

Second, even if the advertisement should focus on the men, we still can not get the conclusion that we should emphasize both the effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity of their staff to nervous or suffering patients. Do all the people only care for the anesthetic techniques? In fact, whether the patients choose the hospital contains many factors, such as the doctors, environment, traffic and the price, which are all important for a hospital. It may be possible that the patient will choose another hospital, because this hospital’s price is very high.（直接说because of their low price比较好） Perhaps the patient will （not）go to the hospital, because the traffic is very bad. （和前面一样，逻辑有点拧着）In addition, maybe the hospital’s sanitation is bad, so people are willing to go there. So we can not only focus on the anesthetic techniques.

In summary, I think the arguer has little evidence to support his conclusion, through the discussion mentioned above. If the arguer wants to make this argument conceiving, he has to provide that whether the number of the woman is larger and will increase in the next few years, what the other factors to influence the people going to the hospital. If so, we can get a more conceiving answer.

落了一个点：
faint和distress的错误因果