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发表于 2006-7-3 22:04:54 |显示全部楼层
"In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was.
People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books."


disagree

“learning”

a. books cover a much wider area of topics than television does.

b. books can convey concepts while television can not.

c. books would become more important in the age of television


With the fast development of television channels and programs, should we pursue
knowledge mainly by watching the television rather than by reading books? The
speaker claims so. However, I propose here, however flourishing the television
programs are, more of our learning tasks should be accomplish by reading books.

Books, as the oldest and chief manner of conveying human knowledge, consist of
almost every aspects of human experiences. During thousands of years, myriad of
people have recorded every piece of knowledge they thought valuable in books,
and most of the books remained until today. Even in modern times, the number of
publication is still experiencing an explosive increase. In the enormous sums of
books, people can find the overall knowledge for some specific realms - science,
technology, or the arts. On the contrary, for its younger age and smaller sums
of contributors, the television covers a relative narrower range. Assuming a
history student wants to know what had happened during one certain period 500
years ago, he could not benefit from any television program. But large sums of
history records in the library would help to reveal the answer.

By further looking into the advantages of books and television, we can find that
the television can provide vivid descriptions of objects in the forms of sound
and pictures, meanwhile, the books are better at conveying comprehensive and
abstract concepts. As most advanced learning would inevitably concern a lot of
complex and abstract concepts to render their unique features, to acquire
knowledge in such realms by watching television is obviously infeasible. For
instance, could a television program help to analyze topics and problems in
mathematics, economy and psychology? Surely impossible. Conversely, authors of
books can perform analysis and deduction in details by writting them down, while
leaving enough spaces for the readers to image and to extend.

Admittedly, facts would not permit us to deny the proliferation of television.
But the also same facts would not permit us to underestimate the importance of
book reading in modern society. More and more people, especially children, are
more likely to watch interesting TV programs rather than spend several hours
reading beneficial books. And, as discussed above, the television is incapable
to cover the wide area in human knowledge and to convey comprehensive concepts.
As a result, this trend of spending more time on TV gives rise to a widespread
absence of expertise and logical thinking. A recent survey in China involving
thousands of secondary students shows that, pervasive and undue television
watching has already exerted a negative effect on the next generation - more
than half of the respondents could not tell at which year the WWII has broken
out. To counteract the situations, we should lay more stresses on the meaning of
reading books, especially in modern times.

To sum up, the proliferation of television has not undermined the importance of
reading books. Books, as the major manner of recording human knowledge and
passing it on, with its unique characteristics and advantages, could not be
replaced by any contemporary media.

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发表于 2006-7-4 21:43:56 |显示全部楼层

re

With the fast development of television channels and programs, should we pursue
knowledge mainly by watching the television rather than by reading books? The
speaker claims so. However, I propose here, however flourishing the television
programs are, more of our learning tasks should be accomplish by reading books.

Books, as the oldest and chief manner of conveying human knowledge, consist cover of
almost every aspects of human experiences human life, no matter academic or mundane daily life. During the thousands of years, myriad of
people have recorded every piece of knowledge they thought valuable in books,
and most of the books remained until today. Even in modern times, the number of
publication is still experiencing an explosive increase. In the enormous sums of
books, people can find the overall knowledge for some  every specific realms - science,
technology, or the arts. On the contrary, for its younger age and smaller sums
of contributors, the television covers a relative narrower range. Assuming Suppose a
history student wants to know what had happened during one certain period 500
years ago, he could not benefit little from any television program. But large sums of
history records in the library would help to reveal the answer.

By further looking into the respective advantages of books and television, we can find that
the television can provide vivid descriptions of objects in the forms of sound
and pictures, meanwhile, the books are better at conveying comprehensive and
abstract concepts. As most advanced learning would inevitably concern a lot of
complex and abstract concepts to render demonstrate  their unique features, to acquire
knowledge in such realms by watching television is obviously nearly infeasible. For
instance, could a television program help to analyze topics and problems in
mathematics, economy and psychology? Surely impossible.用词太绝对了 Conversely, authors of
books can perform analysis and deduction in details by writting them down, while
leaving enough spaces for the readers to image and to extend.

Admittedly, facts would not permit us to deny the proliferation of television.
But the also same facts would not permit us to underestimate the importance of
book reading in modern society. More and more people, especially children, are
more likely to watch interesting TV programs rather than spend several hours
reading beneficial enlightening books. And, as discussed above, the television is incapable
to cover the wide area in human knowledge and to convey comprehensive concepts.
As a result, this trend of spending more time on TV gives rise to a widespread
absence of expertise and logical comprehensive horizon. A recent survey in China involving
thousands of secondary students shows that, pervasive and undue television
watching has already exerted a negative effect on the next generation - more
than half of the respondents could not tell at which year the WWII has broken
out. To counteract the situations, we should lay more stresses on the meaning of
reading books, especially in modern times.例子不支持论点。说得是少expertise and logical thinking, 举的例子是说缺乏常识

To sum up, the proliferation of television has not undermined the importance of
reading books. Books, as the major manner of recording human knowledge and
passing it on, with its unique characteristics and advantages, could not be
replaced by any contemporary media.

楼主的文章很简练,直击要害,向你看齐。
有个问题,字数到底要多少比较合适?500?600?
我和你是一组的,去拍拍我的吧
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... d%3D9#pid1768774701

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发表于 2006-7-4 22:45:35 |显示全部楼层
恩,这篇挺赞的~~~~~~
一楼改得很好啊,呵呵~~~
提几个意见,文章的二、三段讲得非常好,从书本可以覆盖比电视更多的知识和书本可以解释更为抽象的知识两个方面论述书本不可被电视所替代,但是第四段就有些问题了,基本的论述内容重复了二、三段的观点,在深化的时候讲到孩子受电视的负面影响,用survey作例子,这段的这个部分非常不恰当的说,建议楼主把第四段重写一下,例子可以换一下。我个人感觉没有必要去花大段文字去强调电视的负面作用,倒是可以再写一下书本知识的优点,比如说更系统,更有连续性。
that's all,楼主用词蛮不错的,有空也去拍偶的吧~~~~~
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发表于 2006-7-5 11:06:01 |显示全部楼层

修改版本,谢谢大家

https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1

"In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was.
People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books."


disagree

“learning”

a. a lot of human knowledge is accumulated in the form of books throughout the
long history.

b. books can convey complex and abstract concepts while television can not.

c. reading books furnishes as an active manner of learning while watching tv is
passive.


With the fast development of television channels and programs, should we pursue
knowledge mainly by watching the television rather than by reading books? The
speaker claims so. However, I propose here, however flourishing the television
programs are, more of our learning tasks should be accomplish by reading books.

Books, as the oldest and chief manner of conveying human knowledge, cover of
almost every aspects of human experiences, no matter academic or mundane daily
life. During the thousands of years, myriad of people have recorded every piece of
knowledge they thought valuable in books, and most of the books remained until
today. Even in modern times, the number of publication is still experiencing an
explosive increase. In the enormous sums of books, people can find the overall
knowledge for every specific realm - science, technology, or the arts. On the
contrary, for its younger age and smaller sums of contributors, the television
covers a relative narrower range. Suppose a history student wants to know what
had happened during one certain period 500 years ago, he could benefit little
from any television program. But large sums of history records in the library
would help to.

By further looking into the respective advantages of books and television, we
can find that the television can provide vivid descriptions of objects in the
forms of sound and pictures, meanwhile, the books are better at conveying
comprehensive and abstract concepts. As most advanced learning would inevitably
concern a lot of complex and abstract concepts to demonstrate their unique
features, to acquire knowledge in such realms by watching television is
nearly infeasible. For instance, could a television program help to analyze
topics and problems in mathematics, economy and psychology? Mostly impossible.
Conversely, authors of books can perform analysis and deduction in details by
writting them down, while leaving enough spaces for the readers to image and to
extend.

/*
Finally, the popular feature of television determines it can hardly concern many
serious topics. In modern society, the main criteria of television programs is
the number of its audience. A television program without enough viewers would be
canceled for it can not bring much economic benefits. Hence, the programs are
specially designed to meet the popluar needs, which are mostly entertainment
content. From this angle, in order to achieve the learning of serious realms,
such as classic music and formal history, we should put more stresses on
learning from their paper works.
*/

Last but not the least, the television only provides a passive way of accessing
information, which may lead to low efficiency and flaws in knowledge system. A
television viewer has no right to choose or skip to his most interesting topics,
but only switches among the limited channels or even turns off the TV set. On the       contrary, menus, table and figure indexes in books have enabled the reader to quickly
browse and to find the focus, therefore he can actively choose his favourite
parts and omit the rest. This gives much rise to the efficiency. In short, the
way to learn from books are various according to individual characteristics, but
the way to watch television is humdurm.

To sum up, the proliferation of television has not undermined the importance of
reading books. Books, as the major manner of recording human knowledge and
passing it on, with its unique characteristics and advantages, could not be
replaced by any contemporary media.

[ 本帖最后由 linxz 于 2006-7-5 11:41 编辑 ]

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发表于 2006-7-7 09:47:29 |显示全部楼层

再做了一些小改动!

"In the age of television, reading books is not as important as it once was.
People can learn as much by watching television as they can by reading books."


disagree

“learning”

a. a lot of human knowledge is accumulated in the form of books throughout the
long history.

b. books can convey complex and abstract concepts while television can not.

c. reading books furnishes as an active manner of learning while watching tv is
passive.


With the popularization of television channels and programs, should we pursue
knowledge mainly by watching the television rather than by reading books? The
speaker claims so. I strongly disagree. However flourishing the television
programs are, more of our learning tasks should be accomplished by reading
books.

Books, as the traditional and chief manner of conveying human knowledge, cover
almost every aspects of human experiences, no matter academic or mundane daily
life. During the thousands of years, myriad of people have recorded every piece
of knowledge they thought valuable in books, and most of the books remained
until today. Even in modern times, the number of publication is still
experiencing an explosive increase. In the enormous sums of books, people can
find the overall knowledge for every specific realm - science, technology, or
the arts. On the contrary, for its younger age and smaller sums of contributors,
the television covers a relative narrower range. Suppose, the very description
about one certain period 500 years ago, known by few, is wanted, any television
program might incapable to help, while enormous sums of history records in the
library would do.

By further looking into the respective advantages of books and television, we
can find that the television can provide vivid descriptions of objects in the
forms of sound and pictures, meanwhile, the books are prefered at conveying
comprehensive and abstract concepts. As most advanced learning would inevitably
concern a lot of complex and abstract concepts to demonstrate their unique
features, to acquire knowledge in such realms by merely watching television is
nearly infeasible. For instance, could a television program help to analyze
topics and problems in mathematics, economy or psychology? Mostly impossible.
Conversely, analysis and deduction can be expanded on the paper, together with
enough spaces for the readers to image and to extend.

/*
Finally, the popular feature of television determines it can hardly concern many
serious topics. In modern society, the main criteria of television programs is
the number of its audience. A television program without enough viewers would be
canceled for it can not bring much economic benefits. Hence, the programs are
specially designed to meet the popluar needs, which are mostly entertainment
content. From this angle, in order to achieve the learning of serious realms,
such as classic music and formal history, we should put more stresses on
learning from their paper works.
*/

Last but not the least, the television only provides a passive way of accessing
information, which may lead to low efficiency and flaws in knowledge system. A
television viewer are not free to choose or skip to his most interesting topics,
he can only switch the limited channels or even turn off the TV set. While
menus, table and figure indexes in books have enabled the reader to quickly
browse and to find the focus, therefore he can actively choose his favourite
parts and omit the rest. This gives much rise to the efficiency. In short, the
way to learn from books corresponds to individual characteristics, but the way
to watch television is relatively monotone.

To sum up, the proliferation of television has not undermined the importance of
reading books. Books, as the major manner of recording human knowledge and
passing it on, with its unique characteristics and advantages, could not be
replaced by any contemporary media.
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