issue99 同主题，留链接互拍

ddloveyyUID: 2225606

TOPIC: ISSUE99 - "In any realm of life-whether academic, social, business, or political-the only way to succeed is to take a practical, rather than an idealistic, point of view. Pragmatic behavior guarantees survival, whereas idealistic views tend to be superceded by simpler, more immediate options."

限时又失败，哎，8月21日机考，我什么时候能限时成功啊……失望，迷茫。
留链接，互拍。

P.S. equally important
A: ideality in academic
B: ideality in business and politics
C: practicality

The speaker asserts that the only way to succeed is to take a practical point of view. Indeed, it makes sense to some degree because we should enssure our basic needs by way of practice. However, if we had overestimated the role of practicality and overlooked ideality, something terrible would happen. In any social fields, academic or business, idealistics and practics are equally important.

Firstly, les us take a look in academic, what we usually believe that is a idealistic field. Actually, since antient Greek, science and academic played a pivotal role in people's daily lives. Archimedes discovered Law of Buoyancy , which help the king recognized the cheat. Thomas Edison, invented the light bulb, not only light the night, but also scintillated the ignorance of human. Though Newton's calculus still affect people's lives, people often think today's mathematics is more or less beyond practice for the difficult concept and conplex theory. In fact, most significant mathematical discoveries served as very important tools like calculus despite the unpopularity and theorisitics. That is to say, it seems that mathematics, as well as other theoretical discipline, is regarded as a fundamental basis and theoretical guidance. Without ideality of these theoretical academic, we human beings would totally strayed in the forest of aimlessness, thus practicality lack the basis and object like a castle in the air.

When it comes to business or politics, what we often believe as practical scopes, idealistics also serves as a great aim to guide people's efforts and endeavor. In business, it is no doubt that all of the commercial activities pursue the maximization of profits. But profits can be divided into long-term and short-term, marked and potential. Usually, the long-term and potential profits are      larger than the opposite ones. Nowagays, more and more companies and corperation have taken the long-term profits into account and given up some practical profits before eyes. For instance, numbers of companies fund in education and environmental preservation and they believe these fund will bring them more profits in future. As for politics, democracy and liberty have deeply established in today’s people’s mind, but three or four centuries ago, they both the idealistic imagination. Consider, if the forerunners of democracy and liberty have given up the “idealistic” goal for human, maybe people in today were still in the darkness of tyranny and despotic. Decades  ago,president of South Africa Nelson Mandela lifelong dedicate to the fight against racial oppression in South Africa. It is the idol of democracy and liberty which guide him to make arduous efforts to achieve the goal.

Admittedlly, overestimating idealiscits is unefficient even dangerous for human. On individual level, we human should pursue material and practical substance for survival. After all, ideality is founded on the basis of life. On social level, imagination above practice serves no good but a joke. Two hundrud years ago, an idealistist Robert Owen attemped to establishe a utopia, but unfortunately he failed owe to his endeavor beyond practice. Twenty years ago, the projects of Star War died in swadding clothes because its aimlessness and large consumation. Without practice, any wonderful and colorful imagination or plan is just like a picture, cannot be acomplished.

In sum, ideality and practicality are two sides of a coin. Idealistics serves as an aim, while practices serves as basis, both indispensable. One, eager to survival and success, must to place sufficient emphasis on both sides so as to achieve a lot.

paburawUID: 2204657

本来想帮你改的,贴过去都是错字,你自己还没改过吧,先自己看看吧
我也是21号考加油

SerendipUID: 2227806

TOPIC: ISSUE99 - "In any realm of life-whether academic, social, business, or political-the only way to succeed is to take a practical, rather than an idealistic, point of view. Pragmatic behavior guarantees survival, whereas idealistic views tend to be superceded by simpler, more immediate options."

限时又失败，哎，8月21日机考，我什么时候能限时成功啊……失望，迷茫。
留链接，互拍。

P.S. equally important
A: ideality in academic
B: ideality in business and politics
C: practicality

The speaker asserts that the only way to succeed is to take a practical point of view. Indeed, it makes sense to some degree because we should enssure our basic needs by way of practice. However, if we had[delete] overestimated the role of practicality and overlooked ideality[ideality不等于idealism，即使你要写前者，这里最好也要说后者], something terrible would happen. In any social fields, academic or business, idealistics and practices[两个adj怎么能加谓语动词？] are equally important.

Firstly, les us take a look in academic, what we usually believe that[delete] is a idealistic field. Actually, since antient Greek, science and academic played a pivotal role[2 play 1 role？] in people's daily lives. Archimedes discovered Law of Buoyancy , which help the king recognized the cheat. Thomas Edison, invented the light bulb, not only light the night, but also scintillated the ignorance of human. Though Newton's calculus still affect people's lives, people often think today's mathematics is more or less beyond practice for the difficult concept and conplex theory. In fact, most significant mathematical discoveries served as very important tools like calculus despite the unpopularity and theorisitics. That is to say, it seems that mathematics, as well as other theoretical discipline, is regarded as a fundamental basis and theoretical guidance. Without ideality of these theoretical academic, we human beings would totally strayed in the forest of aimlessness, thus practicality lack the basis and object like a castle in the air.[ ideality of these theoretical academic，我觉得和前面的例子联系有些牵强，好像前面说他们为解决这些难题而务实不错，放在理想主义上面反而不合适了，这里idealism=goal？]

When it comes to business or politics, what we often believe as practical scopes, idealistics also serves as[重复] a great aim to guide people's efforts and endeavor. In business, it is no doubt that all of the commercial activities pursue the maximization of profits. But profits can be divided into long-term and short-term, marked and potential. Usually, the long-term and potential profits are      larger than the opposite ones. Nowagays, more and more companies and corperation have taken the long-term profits into account and given up some practical profits before eyes. For instance, numbers of companies fund in education and environmental preservation and they believe these fund will bring them more profits in future. As for politics, democracy and liberty have deeply established in today’s people’s mind, but three or four centuries ago, they both the idealistic imagination. Consider, if the forerunners of democracy and liberty have given up the “idealistic” goal for human, maybe people in today were still in the darkness of tyranny and despotic. Decades  ago,president of South Africa Nelson Mandela lifelong dedicate to the fight against racial oppression in South Africa. It is the idol of democracy and liberty which guide him to make arduous efforts to achieve the goal. [没有结论]

Admittedlly, overestimating idealiscits is unefficient even dangerous for human. On individual level, we human should pursue material and practical substance for survival. After all, ideality is founded on the basis of life. On social level, imagination above practice serves no good but a joke[？？？]. Two hundrud years ago, an idealistist Robert Owen attemped to establishe a utopia, but unfortunately he failed owe to his endeavor beyond practice. Twenty years ago, the projects of Star War died in swaddling clothes because its aimlessness and large consumation. [这两个例子赞，但是还是和后面连接不紧密，你要说下他们呢为什么不实际，直接就这么说beyond practice不太好。]Without practice, any wonderful and colorful imagination or plan is just like a picture, cannot be acomplished.

In sum, ideality and practicality are two sides of a coin. Idealistics serves as an aim, while practices serves as basis, both indispensable. One, eager to survival and success, must to place sufficient emphasis on both sides so as to achieve a lot.
[我觉得lz的用词和句法很不谐调，就是说很多地方用词很不错，但是句子结构和语法都有问题。错误应该改一下再发，这样看着也方便，有一个比较重大的问题是对Pragmatic behavior guarantees survival这句话阐述不够，其实你B3完全可能提到的，改一下吧。个人意见，lz参考一下]

SerendipUID: 2227806

我也是21号，呵呵

paburawUID: 2204657

TOPIC: ISSUE99 - "In any realm of life-whether academic, social, business, or political-the only way to succeed is to take a practical, rather than an idealistic, point of view. Pragmatic behavior guarantees survival, whereas idealistic views tend to be superceded by simpler, more immediate options."

限时又失败，哎，8月21日机考，我什么时候能限时成功啊……失望，迷茫。
留链接，互拍。

P.S. equally important
A: ideality in academic
B: ideality in business and politics
C: practicality

The speaker asserts that the only way to succeed is to take a practical point of view. Indeed, it makes sense to some degree because we should ensure our basic needs by way of practice. However, if we had overestimated the role of practicality and overlooked ideality, something terrible would happen. （什么叫很可怕的会发生，讲的这么笼统不如不讲呢，虽然是开头但是也稍微具体点啊）In any social fields, academic or business, idealistics and practics are equally important. （，感觉最后一句完全可以不要啊，开头很乱啊，其实我的开头也是写的很不好，后来想想既然写不好，不如就少写点，也算是没办法中的办法了。虽然模版有千不好，万不好，不过我现在开头上基本妥协于摸版了，而且太长了，不简洁，快考试了，赶紧总结下开头啦）

Firstly, les us take a look in academic这个是ADJ, what we usually believe that is a idealistic field. Actually, since antient Greek, science and academic played a pivotal role in people's daily lives. Archimedes discovered Law of Buoyancy , which help the king recognized the cheat. Thomas Edison, invented the light bulb, not only light the night, but also scintillated the ignorance of human. Though Newton's calculus still affect people's lives, people often think today's mathematics is more or less beyond practice for the difficult concept and complex theory. In fact, most significant mathematical discoveries served as very important tools like calculus despite the unpopularity and theorisitics. That is to say, it seems that mathematics, as well as other theoretical discipline, is regarded as a fundamental basis and theoretical guidance. Without ideality of these theoretical academic, we human beings would totally strayed in the forest of aimlessness, thus practicality lack the basis and object like a castle in the air.没。。。没。。。真没看出这段想要说什么。例子和理由也搭不上

When it comes to business or politics, what we often believe as practical scopes, idealistics also serves as a great aim to guide people's efforts and endeavor. In business, it is no doubt that all of the commercial activities pursue the maximization of profits. But profits can be divided into long-term and short-term, marked and potential. Usually, the long-term and potential profits are      larger than the opposite ones. Nowagays, more and more companies and corperation have taken the long-term profits into account and given up some practical profits before eyes. For instance, numbers of companies fund in education and environmental preservation and they believe these fund will bring them more profits in future. 事实是这样吗？太站不住脚了吧As for politics, democracy and liberty have deeply established in today’s people’s mind, but three or four centuries ago, they both the idealistic imagination. Consider, if the forerunners of democracy and liberty have given up the “idealistic” goal for human, maybe people in today were still in the darkness of tyranny and despotic. Decades  ago,president of South Africa Nelson Mandela lifelong dedicate to the fight against racial oppression in South Africa. It is the idol of democracy and liberty which guide him to make arduous efforts to achieve the goal. 例子太多，连接的也不好

Admittedlly, overestimating idealiscits is unefficient even dangerous for human. On individual level, we human should pursue material and practical substance for survival. After all, ideality is founded on the basis of life. On social level, imagination above practice serves no good but a joke. Two hundrud years ago, an idealistist Robert Owen attemped to establishe a utopia, but unfortunately he failed owe to his endeavor beyond practice. Twenty years ago, the projects of Star War died in swadding clothes because its aimlessness and large consumation. Without practice, any wonderful and colorful imagination or plan is just like a picture, cannot be acomplished.

In sum, ideality and practicality are two sides of a coin. Idealistics serves as an aim, while practices serves as basis, both indispensable. One, eager to survival and success, must to place sufficient emphasis on both sides so as to achieve a lot.
忍不住改了一下，下回发出来之前自己先看看，错字太多了
其实我也是一样，写完一帖，满满的红字，每次都被打击得很惨，加油哈
我和你同一天考，最近也是越写越烂，急啊，那个急啊
没好好改，不好意思

liubai0831UID: 174805

绿色是我认为比较好的表达。

The speaker asserts that the only way to succeed is to take a practical point of view. Indeed, it makes sense to some degree because we should enssure our basic needs by way of practice. However, if we had overestimated the role of practicality and overlooked ideality, something terrible would happen.（这个不太好，应该说的具体一点。） In any social fields, academic or business, idealistics and practics are equally important.

Firstly, les us take a look in academic, what we usually believe that is a idealistic field. Actually, since antient Greek, science and academic played a pivotal role in people's daily lives. Archimedes discovered Law of Buoyancy , which help the king recognized the cheat. Thomas Edison, invented the light bulb, not only light the night, but also scintillated the ignorance of human. Though Newton's calculus still affect people's lives, people often think today's mathematics is more or less beyond practice for the difficult concept and conplex theory. In fact, most significant mathematical discoveries served as very important tools like calculus despite the unpopularity and theorisitics. That is to say, it seems that mathematics, as well as other theoretical discipline, is regarded as a fundamental basis and theoretical guidance. Without ideality of these theoretical academic, we human beings would totally strayed in the forest of aimlessness, thus practicality lack the basis and object like a castle in the air.（这段我不太明白你的意思，你怎么理解ideality? ）

When it comes to business or politics, what we often believe as practical scopes, idealistics also serves as a great aim to guide people's efforts and endeavor. In business, it is no doubt that all of the commercial activities pursue the maximization of profits.（这个no doubt不太爽，太绝对了。很多公司还是做公益活动的啊！） But profits can be divided into long-term and short-term, marked and potential. Usually, the long-term and potential profits are      larger than the opposite ones. Nowagays, more and more companies and corperation have taken the long-term profits into account and given up some practical profits before eyes. For instance, numbers of companies fund in education and environmental preservation and they believe these fund will bring them more profits in future. As for politics, democracy and liberty have deeply established in today’s people’s mind, but three or four centuries ago, they both the idealistic imagination. Consider, if the forerunners of democracy and liberty have given up the “idealistic” goal for human, maybe people in today were still in the darkness of tyranny and despotic. Decades  ago,president of South Africa Nelson Mandela lifelong dedicate to the fight against racial oppression in South Africa. It is the idol of democracy and liberty which guide him to make arduous efforts to achieve the goal. (后面的例子还有一定的说服力，不过前面的公司的例子有点混乱，不明白idealistic和long-term profits有什么关系。）
Admittedlly, overestimating idealiscits is unefficient even dangerous for human. On individual level, we human should pursue material and practical substance for survival. After all, ideality is founded on the basis of life. On social level, imagination above practice serves no good but a joke. Two hundrud years ago, an idealistist Robert Owen attemped to establishe a utopia, but unfortunately he failed owe to his endeavor beyond practice. Twenty years ago, the projects of Star War died in swadding clothes because its aimlessness and large consumation. Without practice, any wonderful and colorful imagination or plan is just like a picture, cannot be acomplished.
（前面的例子还是很不错的，不过后面的star war好象不只是idealistic那么简单。）
In sum, ideality and practicality are two sides of a coin. Idealistics serves as an aim, while practices serves as basis, both indispensable. One, eager to survival and success, must to place sufficient emphasis on both sides so as to achieve a lot.

总体感觉例子太多了！缺少有力的分析。而且有些例子欠妥，或是分析的稍微有点欠。不过总体感觉语言还是不错的哦！！比我强多了！！注意限时吧！再就是语法错误稍微多点。

加油哦！！

[ 本帖最后由 liubai0831 于 2006-8-9 07:24 编辑 ]

zqznedUID: 2114587

大致的看了下,例子举的很多,不过例子后的分析还要加强.
我的也一般,25号,看来还要勤加练习啊
至于推迟嘛,我想问下楼主你笔试的准备的如何?我想作文再练十天应该会有4吧
毕竟开学大二还是比较年轻

ddloveyyUID: 2225606

作文会到4吗？现在写一篇要2小时呢。
语文部分还是蛮有信心的，再练练上500应该没问题，600还需更加努力。数学，呵呵，俺就是学这个的。