argument2 微观状态小组第五次作业 诚恳排砖

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT2 - The following appeared in a letter sent by a committee of homeowners from the Deerhaven Acres to all homeowners in Deerhaven Acres.

"Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting."


Before adopting a set of restriction on landscaping and housepainting, the homeowners in Deerhaven Acres (DA) should make a complete examination to evidence afforded by the author. The author assumes that the measures taken by homeowners in nearby Brookville (B) community is successful, and that we will also succeed if adopting similar means without considering other some factors which may have impaired his or her assertion.

First of all, there is no evidence to show that it is the restrictions implemented by homeowners in B that enhance average property values in B. In fact, a myriad of variables that caused the rise in the property values in B have been overlooked by the author. For instance, perhaps B city has been established as an economic special region by the authorities in the last few years, which bring many opportunities to work and invest there. As a result, a larger number of emigrants and investor come into and work in B and so give rise to the rapid increase in their property values. Without taking the case into consideration, it is too rashly to contend that the restriction of homeowners in B make effects.

Even assuming that the measures taken by homeowners in B are successful, to claim that homeowners in DA also can succeed by implementing similar measures as B's is open to doubt. As is well known to all, there may be extremely huge disparities between different regions, such as surrounding transportation, living facilities or even the safe. If the there are much more bus stops and subway lines in B than in A, it is fully likely that due to the bad transportation condition, people, although they are satisfied with our arrangement of unification, still cannot choose to live in our community. Consequently, lack of the consideration, the assertion that A will enhance their property values is not unconvincing.


Finally, the author fails to take into account the fact that something may have been changed over time. As is known to all, fashionable styles are constantly changed with time, so people's interests in the appearance of community before seven years are possibly entirely different with theirs nowadays. Further, perhaps people quite like the unified appearance of community before seven years, which make B's measures take effects; while the similar measure may be ineffective in that today people seek for the individuality and switch to be fond of the community where there is different appearance. For that matter, the average property values in DA can not be enhanced.

（下面这段是我对这个题的充分性进行的补充， 希望大家帮忙看一下能不能这样写）
Even if the similar measures to B can make effects in DA, whether they is the best measures and homeowners in DA can boost their property values only through them is suspicious. In actuality, there are many measures to boost the property values. For example, improving the safe environment, or making great efforts to publicize the characteristics of DA to the investors, or even spontaneously lobbying the authorities to enhance invests to the area, and so on, all of which will conspicuously enhance their propriety values at large. Consequently, the author should not ignore many other better possibilities above to increase propriety values but only recommend to adopting the restrictions similar to B.)

From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw a conclusion that unless the author recognize the possibly real reason for the increase in propriety values in B and the difference between two areas, the recommendation provided by the author cannot be convincing.

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Before adopting a set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting, the homeowners in Deerhaven Acres (DA) should make a complete examination to the evidence afforded by the author. The author assumes that the measures taken by homeowners in nearby Brookville (B) community is successful, and that we will also succeed if adopting similar means without considering other some(去掉) factors which may have impaired his or her assertion.

First of all, there is no evidence to show that it is the restrictions implemented by homeowners in B that enhance average property values in B. In fact, a myriad of variables that caused the rise in the property values in B have been overlooked by the author. For instance, perhaps B city has been established as an economic special region by the authorities in the last few years, which bring many opportunities to work and invest there. As a result, a larger number of emigrants and investor come into and work in B and so give rise to the rapid increase in their property values. Without taking the case into consideration, it is too rashly to contend that the restriction of homeowners in B make effects.
不能证明B的房价上涨是由于采取了社区政策.

Even assuming that the measures taken by homeowners in B are successful, to claim that homeowners in DA also can succeed by implementing similar measures as B's is open to doubt. As is well known to all, there may be extremely huge disparities between different regions, such as surrounding transportation, living facilities or even the safe. If the(去掉) there are much more bus stops and subway lines in B than in A, it is fully likely that due to the bad transportation condition, people, although they are satisfied with our arrangement of unification, still cannot choose to live in our community. Consequently, lack of the consideration, the assertion that A will enhance their property values is not unconvincing.
房价还会受到其他因素的影响,DA和B不同.

Finally, the author fails to take into account the fact that something may have been changed over time. As is known to all, fashionable styles are constantly changed with time, so people's interests in the appearance of community before seven years are possibly entirely different with theirs nowadays. Further, perhaps people quite like the unified appearance of community before seven years, which make B's measures take effects; while the similar measure may be ineffective in that today people seek for the individuality and switch to be fond of the community where there is(are) different appearances. For that matter, the average property values in DA can not be enhanced.
七年前后,人们的要求和审美观可能会不同.

（下面这段是我对这个题的充分性进行的补充， 希望大家帮忙看一下能不能这样写）
Even if the similar measures to B can make effects in DA, whether they is the best measures and homeowners in DA can boost their property values only through them is suspicious. In actuality,(Actually) there are many measures to boost the property values. For example, improving the safe environment(可以这样讲么?the secure of the environment), or making great efforts to publicize the characteristics of DA to the investors, or even spontaneously lobbying the authorities to enhance invests to the area, and so on, all of which will conspicuously enhance their propriety values at large. Consequently, the author should not ignore many other better possibilities above to increase propriety values but only recommend to adopting the restrictions similar to B.)
个人意见是,完全可以举出不同的方法来证明,但是,篇幅不应该很长.因为,批驳作者的观点,才是argument应该重点考虑的.而且,作者也没有说,to adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting is the only way to increase the property value in DA.....可以讨论下.

From what has been discussed above, we may safely draw a conclusion that unless the author recognize the possibly real reason for the increase in propriety values in B and the difference between two areas, the recommendation provided by the author cannot be convincing.

观点明确,论证清楚.不错.

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谢谢楼上的批改.:)
关于最后一段的批驳, 我是想把比较大的错误都找出来, 练一下,防止以后遇到比较变态题.
我看北美里七宗罪中, 充要条件里的充分性好象就是说的这一点,  你说的 "only" 这种情况当然是一个比较明显的信号, 但我看北美上好象只要有should 就可以驳.