9月ibt第七次作业——optoAz

optoAzUID: 2313070

我承认这篇作文我写了两个小时以上。。。直奔三个小时。。。
查了无数baidu和词典。。。
这种题目的作文，要不是作业布置，估计我一辈子都不会写的。。
痛苦的说，终于写完了。。。我真的不会写这个类型的。。。



7.24：第七次作业（请于7.24晚22：30之前交,在7.25晚22:00前完成批改）
写作：
You have the opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks. Which country would you like to visit? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.


意大利，开头ｈａｖｅ　ｕ　ｂｅｅｎ　ｔｏ．．．
文化，食物，足球

Have you ever known the Leaning Tower Pisa? Have you ever seen the fashion TV show hold in Milan? Have you ever sit up late at night to watch TV to see a splendid soccer game in Florida? If you have ever had these experiences, you will learn how much you want to go Italy, just as I do. If there's two weeks for me to go to a foreign country, obviously, I will choose Italy, the most attractive country in my heart.

It is the culture of Italy that magnetizes me most. As everyone knows, ancient Rome, which is the precursor of modern Italy, is one of the most famous great ancient civilizations. Ancient Rome subjected most of Europe to its rule around BC 300 to BC 200. What's more, in the very long period came next, renaissance, which is a cultural rebirth from the 14th through the middle of the 17th centuries hold in Florence, had a great influence on the whole Europe, or probably, the whole human culture. Dante, Leonardo da Vinci, Michelangelo, Galileo, who has change our life greatly, was all born in that miraculous period in Italy. So because of the brilliant culture in Italy, I can not emphasize my desire to Italy any more.

But that is not the only reason that Italy absorbing me so much. Another advantage for me to choose Italy to travel to is its food. Italian food is famous all over the world. For example, the pizza, the pasta, and the wine in there taste also special. It is universally acknowledged that nothing is more essential than food for human beings. So just imagine all of those foods are in front of you, what a happy life! So with no suspense, food is another reason for me to love Italy.

And if you are a soccer fan, you must know the Italian soccer team, which have a great mass of football stars, won the World Cup Football Match this year! It is the soccer in Italy ignites my passions to football. I always thought if I can watch Inzaghi play a soccer game in Italy, it may make me ecstasy just like living in a dream. What's more, my favorite football star, Batistuta, has attended the team of Florence for ten years, from 1991 to 2000. It also makes me crazy for Italy.

In conclusion, nothing foreign countries else for me is more attractive than Italy. If I really have some opportunity to visit a country, there is no doubt that I will choose Italy.





口语：
Plant can provide food, shelter, clothing, or medicine. What is one kind of plant that is important to you or the people in your country? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.

Well, personally speaking, maybe I think rose is one of the most essential plants in our country.
First of all, rose always be used as gift between lovers to express their emotion. And emotion, especially love, is a significant thing in the whole human culture. So the rose is also important.
What's more, roses can also make food. For instance, rose pie and rose tea is both a kind of delicious food.
Thirdly, rose can also be made of articles for daily use, such as rose shampoo, that smells good.
So as far as I am concerned, the rose is important to the people around our life.

实在找不到可写的了。。别说植物名次我本身知道的不多，就算那些熟悉的东西，大米麦子杨树桑叶，好像都想不出来很多种用途。。还是玫瑰花吧。肤浅就肤浅了。。

[ 本帖最后由 optoAz 于 2007-7-25 11:03 编辑 ]

sigtemUID: 2169461

Have you ever known the Leaning Tower Pisa? Have you ever seen the fashion TV show hold in Milan? Have you ever sit up late at night to watch TV to see a splendid soccer game in Florida? If you have ever had these experiences, you will learn how much how much 不能这样用吧，不知道能不能用how eager you want to go to Italy, just as I do. If there's two weeks for me to go to a foreign country, obviously, I will choose Italy, the most attractive country in my heart.
It is the culture of Italy that magnetizes me most. As everyone knows, ancient Rome, which is the precursor of modern Italy Rome 怎么是precursor? 顶多是precursors住的地方, is one of the most famous great ancient 这里几个形容词有点多 civilizations. Ancient Rome subjected most of Europe to its rule around BC 300 to BC 200. What's more, in the very long period which came next, renaissance, which is a cultural rebirth from the 14th through the middle of the 17th centuries hold in Florence, had a great influence on the whole Europe, or probably, the whole human culture. Dante, Leonardo da Vinci, Michelangelo, Galileo, who has change our life greatly, was all born in that miraculous period in Italy. So because of the brilliant culture in Italy, I can not emphasize my desire to Italy any more. 这段讲了这么多意大利的历史，但没有说清楚它们为什么会吸引你
But 这里没有转折吧 that is not the only reason that Italy absorbing me so much. Another advantage for me to choose Italy to travel to is its food. Italian food is famous all over the world. For example, the pizza, the pasta, and the wine in 删去in there taste also special. It is universally acknowledged that nothing is more essential than food for human beings. So just imagine all of those foods are in front of you, what a happy life! So with no suspense, food is another reason for me to love Italy. 这段的话有点Chinese English的味道
And if you are a soccer fan, you must know the Italian soccer team, which have a great mass of football stars, won the World Cup Football Match this year 是去年吧! It is the soccer in Italy ignites my passions to football. I always thought if I can watch Inzaghi play a soccer game in Italy, it may make me ecstasy just like living in a dream. What's more, my favorite football star, Batistuta, has attended the team of Florence for ten years, from 1991 to 2000. It also makes me crazy for Italy.
In conclusion, nothing foreign countries else for me is more attractive than Italy. If I really have some opportunity to visit a country, there is no doubt that I will choose Italy.
第二三两段有个毛病，你说了意大利那么多好的地方，怎么让它们跟你的desire挂钩，你要体现你的愿望，否则就成了介绍意大利了。建议向第四段学习。就以足球为例吧，你可以说意大利的足球好，同时你应该再说说你是多么热爱足球运动，关心意甲联赛。用一些具体实例，比如你每天放学都会去踢球，每一场意甲的比赛你都看，拉其奥、尤文图斯等球队的明星你能倒被如流，这样你才能顺理成章的推出你想去意大利。否则你光夸他们足球好，让读者觉得这跟你有什么关系？第四段还算不错，写了些你对足球的兴趣，但前两段要改进。

口语：
Plant can provide food, shelter, clothing, or medicine. What is one kind of plant that is important to you or the people in your country? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.
Well, personally speaking, maybe I think rose is one of the most essential plants in our country.
First of all, rose always be used as gift between lovers to express their emotion. And emotion, especially love, is a significant thing in the whole human culture. So the rose is also important.
What's more, roses can also make food. For instance, rose pie and rose tea is both a kind of delicious food.
Thirdly, rose can also be made of articles for daily use, such as rose shampoo, that smells good.
So as far as I am concerned , the rose is important to the people around our life.
口语写得不错，发现了玫瑰这么多用途，我都头一次听说

[ 本帖最后由 sigtem 于 2007-7-25 20:38 编辑 ]

optoAzUID: 2313070

唉，我实在觉得sigtem改的相当的细致。。不管是从词句上的分析，还是逻辑上的处理都说的很好。。俺总觉得自己写不出太地道的句子。脱离了句套，总有种特无力的感觉。。。
况且，说起国家，我实在对除了中国以外的所有国家都不感兴趣。。
我想写东坡太白竹林七贤，想写陶潜的散发跣足阮籍的穷途之哭。。
扔下键盘仰头发呆，人为什么很多时候都要和自己的梦想背道而驰呢？
大声的吼我就是喜欢中国这块土地的文化风情山川秀美，难道非要在走出去之后么？。。