[April作文互助小组]Issue108 第三周作业

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Issue 108 In many countries it is now possible to turn on the television and view the government at work. Watching these proceedings can help people understand the issues that affect their lives. The more kinds of government proceedings---trials, debates, meetings, etc --that are televised, the more society will benefit.

The speaker asserts that the more procedures about government exposed to public, the more advanced the society will be. The author’s contention has considerable merit on the basis that overseeing authority will avoid abusing of power and involve a large portion of citizens in the management of one country; however, I will take exceptions when it comes to some special conditions.

It might be tempting to agree with the author's contention considering that televising some kinds of government proceedings has significant effect on preventing politicians and leaders from abusing of power in hands. Think about the financial corruption both in the official departments and in corporations, have the accounts be showed to public, leaving them transparent, the chances for forgery will inevitably decrease dramatically; therefore, sources and budgets can be utilized fully. Similarly, the more procedures about how the money is spent are supervised by citizens, the less embezzlement will occur. Another benefit about this suggestion is that autocracy will be minimized which is adverse to democracy of one nation.

Also, another implicit rationale behind the author's contention is that by televising some kinds of government proceedings, more and more citizens will be concentrated on policies affecting their lives and development of their nation. It is well known that the more views and ideas offered, the better systems will become. Taking enacting certain act for example, public will acquire complete information about  what the intention of this particular bill ,which measurements will be taken toward this purpose, to which extent does this particular law has effect on deterring crime or ameliorating living levels. What is more, people can air their opinions whether this law is feasible by weighing the benefits and costs closely associated with them and if it is advisable, what flaws still exist in this act to be amended? In a word, political proceedings exposed to people excited more taking part in the management of one country, that will inevitably maintain the well-being conditions.

While this suggestion has considerable merit on the improvement of one nation’s democracy and prosperity, on the other hand, however, not every government proceedings can be televised. Otherwise, serious consequences will be resulted. One argument against the author's contention is concerned about those containing confidential information closely connected with security of one country and its citizens. Imagine conferences constituting plans against the terrorism, or measurements arresting drug traffics, these plans and measurements will no doubt fail if citizens are informed in advance through televisions, leaving safety of civilians under threatening.

The author's assertion is unsubstantiated when it comes to conditions which will cause panic around public if they were publized. Take some penalties for example. The scene about penalizing some felons may be fraught with crudity and blood which is noxious for the development of children and even do harm to some adults suffering from nightmares after watching those blood-filled scenes. Or some riots intending to topple contemporary authority are also forbidden from televising and broadcasting, for those will cause panic and feelings of unsafe around people which is disadvantageous to the stability of one nation.

In conclusion, the author begs questions. While I concede that broadcasting and televising certain kinds of government procedures, such as the enacting of acts, innovations about the educational systems has significant impact on improving the democracy and development of society, however, not all procedures can be publized, that is to say, medium should select the kinds exposing to publics.

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The speaker asserts that the more procedures about government exposed to public, the more advanced the society will be. The author’s contention has considerable merit on the basis that overseeing authority will avoid abusing of power and involve a large portion of citizens in the management of one country; however, I will take exceptions when it comes to some special conditions.

It might be tempting to agree with the author's contention considering that televising some kinds of government proceedings has significant effect on preventing politicians and leaders from abusing of power in hands. Think（thinking） about the financial corruption both in the official departments and in corporations, have(having) the accounts be showed to public, leaving them transparent, the chances for forgery will inevitably decrease dramatically; therefore, sources and budgets can be utilized fully. Similarly, the more procedures about how the money is spent are supervised by citizens, the less embezzlement will occur. Another benefit about this suggestion is that autocracy will be minimized which is adverse to democracy of one nation.

Also, another implicit rationale behind the author's contention is that by televising some kinds of government proceedings, more and more citizens will be concentrated on policies affecting their lives and development of their nation. It is well known that the more views and ideas offered, the better systems will become. Taking enacting certain act for example, public will acquire complete information about  what the intention of this particular bill ,which measurements will be taken toward this purpose, to which extent does this particular law has effect on deterring crime or ameliorating living levels. What is more, people can air their opinions whether this law is feasible by weighing the benefits and costs closely associated with them and if it is advisable, what flaws still exist in this act to be amended? In a word, political proceedings exposed to people excited more taking part in the management of one country, that will inevitably maintain the well-being conditions.

While this suggestion has considerable merit on the improvement of one nation’s democracy and prosperity, on the other hand, however,(两者都表转折选其一就可以了。否则会显多余呢。) not every government proceedings can be televised. Otherwise, serious consequences will be resulted. One argument against the author's contention is concerned about those containing confidential information closely connected with security of one country and its citizens. Imagine conferences constituting plans against the terrorism, or measurements arresting drug traffics, these plans and measurements will no doubt fail if citizens are informed in advance through televisions, leaving safety of civilians under threatening.（这些例子都很恰当。）

The author's assertion is unsubstantiated when it comes to conditions which will cause panic around public if they were publized. Take some penalties for example. The scene about penalizing some felons may be fraught with crudity and blood which is noxious for the development of children and even do harm to some adults suffering from nightmares after watching those blood-filled scenes. Or some riots intending to topple contemporary authority are also forbidden from televising and broadcasting, for those will cause panic and feelings of unsafe around people which is disadvantageous to the stability of one nation.

In conclusion, the author begs questions. While I concede that broadcasting and televising certain kinds of government procedures, such as the enacting of acts, innovations about the educational systems has（改成innovations about the educational systems，have） significant impact on improving the democracy and development of society, however, not all procedures can be publized, that is to say, medium should select the kinds exposing to publics.

之前改了你的argument感觉你的语言表达很好，所以促使我再来看看你的issue真的很不错再短时间内完成这样一篇文章不容易的。恩还是让我感觉很不错的一篇文章，body中正反个两段，很好地论述了你的观点。思路很不错了，以至于我只能看一下你的语法的小错误，虽说语法小错误也是允许的，但是如果没有瑕疵的话弄不好就是满分作文拉。哈
发现你的作文中用了不少the more....the more/the less的句型，很不错的。希望你有空也看一下我的作文给我提点意见。谢谢哦