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发表于 2006-2-24 20:41:33 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
题目:ISSUE 212 - "If a goal is worthy, then any means taken to attain it is justifiable."
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Every one has the desire of achieving the aims he/she has anticipated and realizing his/her dreams. Whether it is justifiable to take any means to attain a goal becomes a realistic problems which everyone will encounter. I cherish the belief that the answer alter according to different situations.

At first, the answer should be determined by who would benefit from the goal. If a goal is worthy for all the human beings or the majority of a society, it is justifiable to take any means to achieve the target. An illuminating example is the Second World War. In order to satisfy individual aspiration of being the supreme of the world, Hitler campaigned a calamity to all the human beings. In addition, with an unreasonable discrimination toward Jews, he decimated Jews without humanity. All the people resented Hitler's autocracy and began to fight against him. Although the war cost thousands of lives and brought injuries to countless soldiers, it is worthy of taking any means to accomplish the goal of ending the nightmare of all the human beings and reconstructing a peaceful world again. Therefore, given most people will benefit from the goal, any methods taken to attain it is justifiable.

Nonetheless, sometimes, such goal conflicts with the future which is also paramount to the society. In this circumstance, the most appropriate measure is to find a balance between the current benefit and the future needs. The case which can expound the point best is the dilemma of choosing between the development of industry and the environment. If we choose to take any means to protect the environment and stop all the factories, the society would face innumerous problems such as unemployment, the stagnancy of the society, etc. On the other hand, if we choose to take any means to develop the industry, the earth would be improper for any creatures to live in a foreseeable future. Both of the two sides can benefit all the people, but neither of them should be taken any means to develop. A balance, such as sustainable development, which can ensure the industrial progress while keep friendly to the nature is the most intellectual choice.

If the goal is the one which an individual strives to, I claim that to achieve it, one should take more into account rather than taking any means. First, the path to success cannot be aberrant from normal ethics and morality. For instance, when making progress in science and pursuing reputation of oneself, a scientist must keep scientific spirit. No matter how worthy the goal is, it is not advocated for the scientists to take the means of selecting favorable statistics or trump up fake experimental result or even plagiarize from others. Second, the method to accomplish goal can not do harm to others. Take a running race for example. Every athlete aspires to win, but one can not hurt others to ensure one’s own victory. Victory is precious while an fair and egalitarian method should be taken above board. In one word, chasing for individual achievement, one must not put others’ interests and societal regulation aside.   

All in all, seldom goal is worthy enough for people to take any means to achieve. When we make a decision to accomplish something, we should take various aspects, say, the cost, the impact, the consequence in the future and so on, into consideration and then choose a best and most appropriate way and finally make every effort to reach the goal.
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发表于 2006-2-24 23:36:41 |只看该作者
今天有点晚了,明天拍你的!

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发表于 2006-2-24 23:47:47 |只看该作者
简单的看了一下,有几个方面想说:
1,什么目标值得我们想尽一切办法(甚至不择手段)去达到呢,小cow举了希特勒的例子,不过我不是很懂.我个人觉得"any means"这个修饰过于绝对。
2,第三段写的很经典!把它引到了“当务之急与百年大计”的范畴中
3,第四段的例子稍多。
总体来说比我的强很多!我现在一限时就写P话,郁闷阿....

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发表于 2006-2-25 00:56:24 |只看该作者
Every one(Everyone) has the desire of achieving the aims he/she has anticipated and realizing his/her dreams. Whether it is justifiable to take any means to attain a goal becomes a realistic problems(problem) which everyone will encounter. I cherish the belief that the answer alter according to different situations. 采取引用题目的方式开头,观点一目了然。

At first, the answer should be determined by who would benefit from the goal. If a goal is worthy for all the human beings or the majority of a society, it is justifiable to take any means to achieve the target. An illuminating example is the Second World War. In order to satisfy individual aspiration of being the supreme of the world, Hitler campaigned a calamity to all the human beings. In addition, with an unreasonable discrimination toward Jews, he decimated Jews without humanity. All the people resented Hitler's autocracy and began to fight against him. Although the war cost thousands of lives and brought injuries to countless soldiers, it is worthy of taking any means to accomplish the goal of ending the nightmare of all the human beings and reconstructing a peaceful world again. (again可删?) Therefore, given most people will benefit from the goal, any methods taken to attain it is justifiable. (这句不对,请再改一下)个人觉得,与其用希特勒的例子,不如举一个在科学研究上用尽各种手段,研制出新的项目造福全人类的例子。
Nonetheless, sometimes, such goal conflicts with the future which is also paramount to the society. In this circumstance, the most appropriate measure is to find a balance between the current benefit and the future needs. The case which can expound the point best is the dilemma of choosing between the development of industry and the environment. If we choose to take any means to protect the environment and stop all the factories, the society would face innumerous problems such as unemployment, the stagnancy of the society, etc. On the other hand, if we choose to take any means to develop the industry, the earth would be improper for any creatures to live in a foreseeable future. Both of the two sides can benefit all the people, but neither of them should be taken any means to develop. A balance, such as sustainable development, which can ensure the industrial progress while keep friendly to the nature is the most intellectual choice.这一段很精彩,工业与环境的矛盾,也是当下的热点,很切题
If the goal is the one which an individual strives to, I claim that to achieve it, one should take more into account rather than taking any means. First, the path to success cannot be aberrant from normal ethics and morality. For instance, when making progress in science and pursuing reputation of oneself, a scientist must keep scientific spirit. No matter how worthy the goal is, it is not advocated for the scientists to take the means of selecting favorable statistics or trump up fake experimental result or even plagiarize from others. Second, the method to accomplish goal can not do harm to others. Take a running race for example. Every athlete aspires to win, but one can not hurt others to ensure one’s own victory. Victory is precious while an fair and egalitarian method should be taken above board. In one word, chasing for individual achievement, one must not put others’ interests and societal regulation aside. 道德伦理和伤害其他的人并不是特别鲜明的两个方面,可以合并在一起写,例子要进行更深入的剖析,否则会有堆积例子的感觉  

All in all, seldom goal is worthy enough for people to take any means to achieve. When we make a decision to accomplish something, we should take various aspects, say, the cost, the impact, the consequence in the future and so on, into consideration and then choose a best and most appropriate way and finally make every effort to reach the goal.

文章很切题,观点表达清晰明确,可以把第三段和第四段的位子调换一下,使文章更自然(多数,个别,现在与未来的矛盾)。在句式语法以及用词上没有严重的错误,但是可以再斟酌一下,让文章语言更加地道。

这是偶第一次改作文,改得不好,请见谅哦!``

偶的issue,去看看哦:https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D2

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