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Argument76
共用时间：30分5秒     379 words
从2005年7月5日22时47分到2005年7月5日23时30分
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The following appeared as part of an article in a health and beauty magazine.
'A group of volunteers participated in a study of consumer responses to the new Luxess face cream. Every morning for a month, they washed their faces with mild soap and then applied Luxess. At the end of that month, most volunteers reported a marked improvement in the way their skin looked and felt. Thus it appears that Luxess is truly effective in improving the condition of facial skin.'
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In this argument, the arguer concludes that Luxess is truly effective in improving the condition of facial skin. Basing on some analysis the arguer provides above, this assertion seems to be sound and convincing at first glance, while it can hardly bear some careful examinations due to several logical flaws discussed below.

To begin with, the survey is open to doubt since it provides no detail information about the survey. In evaluating how the survey is, the arguer should provide how broaden the survey was firstly If the number of the respondents was not enough, or if the survey was just conducted in some restricts, it might be that the result would be not representative. Perhaps this result cannot repeat when it turns to some other people. What is more, the survey was just last for a month, which is not a long period of time to ensure the result are reliable enough.

In addition, the arguer assumes that it is the Luxess that makes these volunteers to feel better about their skin. But the arguer does not rule out any other possibilities, which might result in that result. Perhaps it is the mild soap, not the applied Luxess that affects the skin since they firstly washing their faces with it and then applying Luxess later. In a word, the arguer does not provide any evidence to rule out the possible effect of the mild soup.

Finally, the arguer provides no evidence to support that Luxess indeed could improve the condition of facial skin, though the arguer mentions that these volunteers' skin looked and felt very well. Common sense tells us that what we look and feel always not the real case. It might be that Luxessl has some negative effect to the skin, while just looking and feeling about the skin could not detect this effect. And perhaps just for a longer period, this kind of negative effect will show up. If so, the use of Luxess would destroy, not improve the skin of people to some extend.

To sum up, the argument is not well reasoning and lack of credibility to some extend. Before any final conclusion are made about whether the use of the Luxess is truly effective in improving the condition of facial skin, the arguer should take some comprehensive and thorough investigation in the real situation about the Luxess and these respondents.

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Argument76
共用时间：30分5秒     379 words
从2005年7月5日22时47分到2005年7月5日23时30分
------题目------
The following appeared as part of an article in a health and beauty magazine.
'A group of volunteers participated in a study of consumer responses to the new Luxess face cream. Every morning for a month, they washed their faces with mild soap and then applied Luxess. At the end of that month, most volunteers reported a marked improvement in the way their skin looked and felt. Thus it appears that Luxess is truly effective in improving the condition of facial skin.'
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In this argument, the arguer concludes that Luxess is truly effective in improving the condition of facial skin. Basing on some analysis the arguer provides above, this assertion seems to be sound and convincing at first glance, while it can hardly bear some careful examinations due to several logical flaws discussed below.（首段快速为驳斥做好准备，挺好的，如果能够在语言上再提炼一下就更好了。）

To begin with, the survey is open to doubt since it provides no detail information about the survey（it）. In evaluating how the survey is, the arguer should provide how broaden the survey was firstly（是不是漏了标点啊？） If the number of the respondents was not enough, or if the survey was just conducted in some restricts（districts,吧？）, it might be（true） that the result would be not representative. Perhaps this result cannot repeat when it turns to some other people. What is more, the survey was just last for a month, which is not a long period of time to ensure the result are reliable enough.(a reasonable enough/an adequately reasonable result which the conclusion relies on)这样改你觉得怎样呢？

In addition, the arguer assumes that it is the Luxess that makes these volunteers to feel better about their skin. But the arguer does not rule out any other possibilities, which might result in that（the same） result. Perhaps it is the mild soap, not the applied Luxess that affects the skin since they firstly washing their faces with it and then applying Luxess later. In a word, the arguer does not provide any evidence to rule out the possible effect of the mild soup.(这一段的驳斥实在太简洁，其实可以动脑筋想想其它的使皮肤感觉舒服的，多想几个他因会增加文章的亮点，显得你思维比较广阔。)

Finally, the arguer provides no evidence to support that Luxess indeed could improve the condition of facial skin, though the arguer mentions that these volunteers' skin looked and felt very well. Common sense tells us that what we look and feel always not the real case. It might be that Luxessl has some negative effect to the skin, while just looking and feeling about the skin could not detect this effect. And perhaps just for a longer period, this kind of negative effect will show up. If so, the use of Luxess would destroy, not improve the skin of people to some extend.

To sum up, the argument is not well reasoning and lack of credibility to some extend.（extent） Before any final conclusion are made about whether the use of the Luxess is truly effective in improving the condition of facial skin, the arguer should take some comprehensive and thorough investigation in the real situation about the Luxess and these respondents.(文章写得一般，我觉得文章的遣词造句上还应该多下点功夫。在驳斥方面虽然做的不错，但是要想考个好成绩还需要多多练习。祝好运！)

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抱歉！该的时候有颜色，但是粘上去的时候不知道为什么没有了，请见谅！

cloudbirdUID: 208021

非常感谢！
建议太好了！！
也祝你好运！！！

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留下你的连接，我也帮你看看！

lawrence1984UID: 178326

呵呵！谢谢你的好意! 其实我刚刚考过六月份的考试了。
祝你成功！

cloudbirdUID: 208021

你真是大好人啦！忠心谢谢！！