作文第一帖，超时。。。拍屎我吧【T01 8.21 teachers' salaries】

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独立：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
The best way to improve education is to raise teachers' salaries.(Money)
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Is raising the salaries of teachers the best way to improve education? Somebody proposes this. In some degree, raising the teacher's salaries may help them work harder, but we should do more than that so that to benefit the education.

Admittedly, pay our teachers more money may sometime inspired them. It is well know that strengthen motivation is the best way to improve work efficiency, teachers would of course have more motivation of teaching.

However, money is not everything, in other word, there are many problems that could not be solved just by raising the salaries. For example, experience, which plays a significant role in judging the level of teaching, seems more important than money sometime. A teacher could do his or her teaching well without well paying if he or she regards money slightly, but if he or she has not enough experience, it is just impossible for him to do this work well. So, it is more important to help teachers with their experience rather than raising salaries. Thus, we could easily imagine that money may be a miner reason for improving the education.

Furthermore, there are many good ways to improve education which sound better than the one related to money. For instance, improving the instruments of the school is one of the reasons that could be realized rapidly. We could easily consider that terrible situation for student would make them feel disappointed about the school, thus our education quality would of course be worse. To the contrary, if we improved our instruments and satisfied the students’ requirement, they would of course work more diligent, thus, our education is improved.

In sum, although raising salaries of teachers may help improving education in some degree, we should take more measures rather than just think about money to benefit our instruction such as improving our teaching instruments.


Improve = enhance = strengthen

Instrument = equipment = facility

积极 positive = active = energetic = vigorous

to some extent = to some degree

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同学，抱歉，不知道为什么，下载不了你的文档，无法打开，就直接在这儿修改啦。
Is raising the salaries of teachers the best way to improve education? Somebody proposes this. In some degree, raising the teacher's salaries may help them work harder, but we should do more than that so that to benefit the education.) D) ?' R4 z8 F' a4 p)

Admittedly, pay（paying） our teachers more money may sometime （sometimes) inspired(inspires) them. It is well know(known) that strengthen(strengthening) motivation is the best way to improve work efficiency, teachers would of course have more motivation of teaching.3 C7 J/ V3 \# l1 a3 V" S8 L: J# K, ^
个人建议，可以再展开一点说。
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However, money is not everything, in other word（s), there are many problems that could not be solved just by raising the salaries. For example, experience, which plays a significant role in judging the level of teaching, seems more important than money sometime(s). A teacher could do his or her teaching well without (being)well paying (paid)if he or she regards money slightly, but if he or she has not enough experience, it is just impossible for him to do this work well. So, it is more important to help teachers with their experience rather than raising salaries. Thus, we could easily imagine that money may be a miner reason(way to improve) for improving the education.
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Furthermore, there are many good ways to improve education which sound better than the one related to money. For instance, improving the instruments of the school（teaching facilities) is one of the reasons that could be realized rapidly. We could easily consider that terrible situation for student(s) would make them feel disappointed about the school, thus our education quality would of course be worse. To(On) the contrary, if we improved(improve) our instruments and satisfied (satisfy)the students’ requirement, they would （will)of course work more diligent, thus, our education is improved.1 H( @5 \: E/ I# h3 \5 O# N
我觉得这儿可以直接用正常的假设句，不用虚拟语气。
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In sum, although raising salaries of teachers may help improving education in some degree, we should take more measures rather than just think(thinking) about money to benefit our instruction such as improving our teaching instruments.
结构没有什么问题，但是，可以考虑论证的时候，说理更透彻一点，用一些比较复杂的句子。
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pai shi wo ba


第一次写综合啊！万分纠结！！

两大困扰： 1、听了两遍才听出全部信息，考场上这样岂不是死很惨？
                2、写了30+分钟才搞定，是不是要多写啊。。

谢特吧。。掐头去尾只有18天就考试了！！！

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太感人啦。。那么速度

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