Daily Writing- feifeionly

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非常感谢帮我修改的同志，欢迎狠批，我们一起努力，相信付出就会有所收获。

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Daily writing-20110215

As to whether technology has made children less creative than they were in the past, my opinion and reasoning like this: technology is the outcome of development of human culture and wisdom, which gives us agood opportunity to teach children and inspires their creativity. Technology is one thing and another important factor is what kind of personalities thechildren have and what kind of methods their parents will use to teach them.

First and foremost, technology provides different kinds of method to make children more creative. Have you ever imagined there will be television program, computer software and online programs which make teaching methods more effective? I have seen one of my friends used the cartoon programs to teach her litter daughter to learnEnglish. If without the development of technology, the learning process will become more boring and unattractive.

In the second place, technology has actually changed our life mode and makes it more colorful. Comparing my childhood withthe situation nowadays, just let the facts speak to themselves. When I was achild, the television program showed on a black and white screen which only told me some stories and the educational aspects of the television has not been exposed. The information I received from the outside world was apparently limited. In this situation, it was not helpful for activating a child's creativity. On the contrary, I have seen one of the American popular children’s programs called "sesame Street" recently which used vivid pictures and animated cartoon to spread the knowledge to children in an active way.

Finally, every coin has two sides. Some people may think that technology will constrain children’simagination to some extent, since they think if we depend on technology too much the potential of children’s creative ability will not be fully expressed. What is more important, technology is the outside factor to make children more creative. The basic element is children'spersonality. Some children have not interested in the novelty and unwilling tolearn more. What kind of methods their parents will apply to stimulate them, undoubtedly,technology seems to be an effective measure.

Hence, we are able to clearly say that technology plays more and more important part to make children creative than it did before. We all witness the development of the technology.And in the foreseeable future, technology will be propelled by new creative generations continuously.

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As to whether technology has made childrenless creative than they were in the past, my opinion and reasoning like this:technology is the outcome of development(要不要加冠词？)of human culture and wisdom, which gives us a good opportunity toteach children and inspires their creativity（creativities）. Technology is(only) one thing and another (the other) important factor is what kind(kinds,如果这样改不对请告诉我) of personalities the children have and what kind(kinds) of methodstheir parents will use to teach them.

First and foremost, technology providesdifferent kinds of method to make children more creative. Have you everimagined there will be television program（s）, computer software（s） and online programswhich make teaching methods more effective? I have seen one of my friends used（took advantage of） the cartoonprograms to teach her litter daughter to learn English.（to teach her litter daughter English.） If without the development of technology（if去掉，或者加个谓语）, the learningprocess will become more boring and unattractive.

In the second place, technology hasactually changed our life mode and makes it more colorful. Comparing mychildhood with the situation nowadays, just let the facts speak to themselves.When I was a child, the television program(s) showed on a black and whitescreen which only told me some stories and the educational aspects of thetelevision has(have) not been exposed. The information I received from theoutside world was apparently limited. In this situation, it was not (very)helpful for activating(to activate) a child's creativity. On the contrary, Ihave seen one of the American popular children’s programs called "sesameStreet" recently which used vivid pictures and animated cartoon to spreadthe knowledge to children in an active way.

Finally, every coin has two sides. Somepeople may think that technology will constrain children’s imagination to someextent, since they think if we depend on technology too much the potential ofchildren’s creative ability will not be fully expressed(since they consider toomuch dependent on technology will affect the extension of their children’screation ). (However)What is more important, technology is the(only a ) outsidefactor to make children more creative. The basic element is children’spersonality. Some children have not interested(are indifferent) in the noveltyand unwilling to learn more. What kind of methods their parents will apply tostimulate them, undoubtedly, technology seems to be an effective measure.

Hence, we are able to clearly(delete) say (withcertainty)that technology plays (an) more and more important part to makechildren creative than it did before(children’s creation than ever before). Weall witness the development of the technology. And in the foreseeable future,technology will be propelled by new creative generations continuously.   

帮你改作文我表示压力很大。如果发现我有改错的地方告知我好吗？文章有一点点小问题就是经常有冠词丢掉~~希望我修改对你有帮助

sun3mayUID：2574771

2.15独立 改好了
不好意思 放上来晚了。

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2月17日独立，谢谢童鞋们，辛苦鸟，热烈欢迎痛批：）

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支持你，顶下先

弱问一句，你每天写作的时候严格按照考试的时间要求来吗？

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6# styc

刚开始没有计时，主要把文章内容构架，和逻辑感觉理顺，到后面再计时

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2.17 改

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第一个例子不是很恰当，那是给大人看的，跟south park一样，所以可能例子不是很恰当

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9# tin@milk

谢了，我那天刚看了一集就把它用上了，下次注意再收集下素材。呵呵

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22日独立

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2.22改

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2.22独立
改好了。

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看到这个作文题目居然头痛，有史以来最没有感觉的一次：（