issue207 不知这样写行不行，欢迎互相帮砸！！

lignumvitaeUID: 207532

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Rituals and ceremonies help define a culture. Without them, societies or groups of people have a diminished sense of who they are.
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Generally viewing the human history, ritual and ceremonies are significant parts of a culture. By developing of globalization and generalization, rituals and ceremonies are gradually simplified and even going to disappear in some regions. Without them, societies or groups of people may have a diminished former sense of who they are, but they will form new sense according to the new situations.

To begin with, in current society, people lead more quick speed lives and simplify many traditional rituals and ceremonies, which help define a culture. Ritual and ceremonies as the traditions in many regions and countries for hundreds of thousands of years represent the aspects of culture then. But the content of culture has been variational all the time. Considering the Hui, a minority of Chinese Muslim, its believers did not eat pork before due to their religious belief. However, more and more current generation of Hui eat pork now and have fewer characteristics of their folk and religion. Many of them emigrate from their former resident places in Ningxia province to a broad region from south to north in China, and no longer have white hats and folk costumes. Certainly, they disseminate their folk characters representing their culture while absorbing new culture from other places. A case in point is the Muslim food as an example of their dietetic culture. The Muslim noodle is famous around the country nowadays and is made for other non-Muslim people in an improved way.

Furthermore, with the development of science and technology, people around the world become more assimilative than they were before, and have the common culture. Since there are more tools and means to broadcast and diffuse factors of culture from different places, such as music, novels, paintings etc. For instance, the Internet has contributed to connect people from all around the world closer than before. People with different culture communicate with each other on the Internet freely and exchange their ideas and opinions. It helps to broad their horizon, learn from more respects, and improve their minds to form a new social culture as a whole. So people would not have a diminished sense of who they are, but develop their senses or form another new one to suits the contemporary culture.

To sum up, ritual and ceremonies help define a culture, but do not the only factors of a culture. More and more new scientific and technical innovations, such as TV, mobile phone, help to shape the current culture. Maybe there will be many other things to reform the culture the next generation. And people at that time have another kind of sense.

lignumvitaeUID: 207532

拉一把，沉的不行了

lignumvitaeUID: 207532

忽然觉得我写的走题了，回民的民族穿着和饮食习惯不属于ritual or ceremony吧，哎～～:L

wkh_1124UID: 2116606

可能举完例子还是对它进行一下分析，以更有力支持论点。 如果例子就举的不好，甚至别人看不懂于你的TS有关系，你来个总结，会让别人觉得你的文章还是较完整。

GladysryUID: 198609

我觉得好像是走题了。

看完后就觉得你在说现在的社会怎样改变了曾有的生活习惯和风俗（暂且认为他们和rituals and ceremonies沾边），但是那些民族和人们又是怎样适应了他们，并没有失去自我（好像你仅仅提出这个论点但是毫无支持，适应就代表对自己文化特性的东西没有迷失？没有任何分析）就是说即使你没有跑题，论证也是没有说服力的。

感觉你的分段结构式：ts+无分析的现象陈述+重述TS

恩，如果说得严重了，请见谅。

lignumvitaeUID: 207532

谢谢你耐着性子看完我的练习，确实如你所说，我自己也有同感，我会再重新考虑的