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yufengfeng9UID: 197696

自我感觉还不错得一片 头一次些完全不同意立场得文章 大家互改啦:lol


0510G0同主题写作第九期－－Issue52

【题目】：
52"Education encourages students to question and criticize, and therefore does little to promote social harmony."

【翻译】：

教育鼓励学生们提出问题和进行批判，所以无助于促进社会的和谐。

【出现频率】：

7月频率－4次，总频率－44次


Position:
Completely disagree.
提纲：
1.        教育虽然教学生question and criticize，但同时也教会学生cooperation。比如学化学的学生做化学试验， 有很多试验一个人单独完成是不可能的，因为同时需要两种药品。这时就需要分工合作。教育也教会学生give the precedence out of courtesy .如in China，孔融让梨的故事。这些都促进而不是毁坏社会和谐。
2.        即使教育教会学生提问和批判，也不一定就无助于社会和谐。社会的不和谐并不是由于skepticism 和criticism 导致的，而是由于某些心术不正的人导致的。不能说善于question和criticize的人就对社会和谐不利。很多为社会做出伟大贡献的人正是skeptics and critics，如Copernicus，Aristotle。
3.        concession。教育确实鼓励学生提问和批判。

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Does education do little to promote social harmony because it improves students’ skeptic and critic thinking? The speaker claims so, and I tend to disagree. Education, one of the key words in modern society, not only gives students skeptic and critic thinking, but also enhances their sense of co-operating and courtesy.

Firstly, it is true that education encourages student to question and criticize, but it also trains them to learn the significance of cooperation. For example, there are many experiments to do in Chemistry lessons, and sometimes it is impossible to complete it for one student alone. In one organic synthesizing experiment, it needs to compound two products simultaneously to prepare for the next step. Hence, two students are needed to cooperate and finish the experiment. Without cooperation, there is no chance for them to complete this work. 更别说，更别提,要怎么讲？ There are far more examples that could illuminate that education teaches students the sense of the importance of teamwork other than critics and skeptics. No matter in humanities or sciences, in arts or mathematics, the sense of cooperation is always in the main spirit of education. Moreover, as well as cooperation, education fosters the ethos of understanding and tolerating others, too. For instance, one traditional Chinese lesson teaches students about a smart child named Kong Rung who had became a most famous scholar in his period of time eventually. The lesson mentions that once upon a time when young Kong Rung was seven, his mother asked him to choose one pear from a dish full of pears in different sizes and colors, and he chose the smallest one. As his mother was thinking he is the youngest child and should have chosen the bigger one, she asked him why. And the reason he gave his mother was that since he was the youngest, it was his duty to leave the bigger ones to his elder brothers. Every Chinese student has learned the lesson and each of them is imparted the spirit which is to give precedence out of courtesy. And it is a spirit which is of extreme significance in promoting the social harmony. In short, education does not just augment the students’ sense of skepticism and criticism, it also teaches students to learn about the importance of cooperation and courtesy, hence, education does not do little to social harmony but bolsters it.

Secondly, even though education mainly encourages students question and criticize, it is not the inevitable result that the social harmony would be harmed that education will surely bring about. The social harmony could not be sabotaged by questioning and criticizing but by the evil minds and extremely expanded ambitions. The reason why Hitler exerted such a destructive influence on the social harmony is not his skepticism and criticism but his ambition to dominate the whole world; on the contrary, a myriad of great philosophers and scientists who have made numerous donations and efforts to the social harmony are good at questioning and criticizing. Without questioning and criticizing the predecessors’ conclusions, Aristotle would never be the greatest thinker in more than ten thousand of years but just an ordinary person with a little cleverness. In one word, even if education indeed augments the students’ skepticism and criticism, we can not draw the conclusion so fast that it does little to social harmony. On the contrary, skepticism and criticism do not do harm to social harmony as the evil minds do.

In conclusion, except for questioning and criticizing, education teaches students far more things such as cooperation and courtesy, and these spirits indeed augment the social harmonyindeed 的位置如何摆我一直不太清楚，望赐教. Even though education gives the students senses of skepticism and criticism, we can not conclude that it does little to social harmony，and sometimes it is just the skepticism and criticism boost the social harmony but not other senses.

[ Last edited by yufengfeng9 on 2005-7-26 at 20:49 ]

bananatreeUID: 208398

Does education do little to promote social harmony because it improves students’ skeptic and critic thinking? The speaker claims so, and I tend to disagree. Education, one of the key words in modern society, not only gives students skeptic and critic thinking, but also enhances their sense of co-operating and courtesy.

Firstly, it is true that education encourages students to question and criticize, but it also trains them to learn the significance of cooperation. For example, there are many experiments to do in Chemistry lessons, and sometimes it is impossible to complete itthem for one student alone. In one organic synthesizing experiment, it needs to compound two products simultaneously to prepare for the next step. Hence, two students are needed to cooperate and finish the experiment. Without cooperation, there is no chance for them to complete this work. 更别说，更别提,要怎么讲？Let alone There are far more examples that could illuminate that education teaches students the sense of the importance of teamwork otherrather?不太确定，你要是确定other than是这样用的，就告诉我一声，我好像没有见过other than的用法 than critics and skeptics是不是应该是criticisms and suspicions?. No matter in humanities or sciences, in arts or mathematics, the sense of cooperation is always in the main spirit of education. Moreover, as well as cooperation, education fosters the ethos of understanding and tolerating others, too. For instance, one traditional Chinese lesson teaches students about a smart child named Kong Rung who had became a most famous scholar in his period of time eventually. The lesson mentions that once upon a time when young Kong Rung was seven, his mother asked him to choose one pear from a dish full of pears in different sizes and colors, and he chose the smallest one. As his mother was thinking he is the youngest child and should have chosen the bigger one, she asked him why. And the reason he gave his mother was that since he was the youngest, it was his duty to leave the bigger ones to his elder brothers. Every Chinese student has learned the lesson and each of them is imparted the spirit which is to give precedence out of courtesy. And it is a spirit which is of extreme significance in promoting the social harmony. In short, education does not just augment the students’ sense of skepticism and criticism, it also teaches students to learn about the importance of cooperation and courtesy, hence, education does not do little to social harmony but bolsters it.

Secondly, even though education mainly encourages students question and criticize, it is not the inevitable result that the social harmony would be harmed that education will surely bring about. The social harmony could not be sabotaged by questioning and criticizing but by the evil minds and extremely expanded ambitions. The reason why Hitler exerted such a destructive influence on the social harmony is not his skepticism and criticism but his ambition to dominate the whole world; on the contrary, a myriad of great philosophers and scientists who have made numerous donations and efforts to the social harmony are good at questioning and criticizing. Without questioning and criticizing the predecessors’ conclusions, Aristotle would never be the greatest thinker in more than ten thousand of years but just an ordinary person with a little cleverness. In one word, even if education indeed augments the students’ skepticism and criticism, we can not draw the conclusion so fast that it does little to social harmony. On the contrary, skepticism and criticism do not do harm to social harmony as the evil minds do.

In conclusion, except for questioning and criticizing, education teaches students far more things such as cooperation and courtesy, and these spirits indeed augment the social harmony indeed 的位置如何摆我一直不太清楚，望赐教. Even though education gives the students senses of skepticism and criticism, we can not conclude that it does little to social harmony，and sometimes it is just the skepticism and criticism boost the social harmony but not other senses.

文法上没有什么大问题，至改出了一点小的毛病，给你的结构上提一点意见，个人意见，仅供参考：
我觉得第二、三段的篇幅要是能再平衡一点就好了，孔融让梨的例子说的有点长，而第三段感觉上展开的不够充分
哈哈，纯属个人意见，欢迎讨论。


也帮我拍拍吧：https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... mp;extra=page%3D1:)

bananatreeUID: 208398

好像上面的连接有问题
重发一个
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1

Pluto13003780UID: 2118087

先回答你的两个问题：
1. 更不用说： say nothing of     
                    let alone
                    not to mention
2. indeed我觉得你摆得没错啊


个人感觉第二段稍长，不易形成好的style.
事实上，文章还讲了education另一个aim，cooperation，which promote social harmony
而对questioning and criticizing的作用还需要充实。
个人意见：）

我的比较短，应该很快就看完了
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=307043

amostimeUID: 2117906

Does education do little to promote social harmony because it improves students’ skeptic and critic thinking? The speaker claims so, and I tend to disagree. Education, one of the key words in modern society, not only gives students skeptic and critic thinking, but also enhances their sense of co-operating and courtesy.

Firstly, it is true that education encourages student to question and criticize, but it also trains them to learn the significance of cooperation. For example, there are many experiments to do in Chemistry lessons, and sometimes it is impossible to complete it for(by)  one student alone. In one organic synthesizing experiment, it needs to compound two products simultaneously to prepare for the next step. Hence, two students are needed to cooperate and finish the experiment. Without cooperation, there is no chance for them to complete this work. (Not to mention) There are far more examples that could illuminate (illustrate)that education teaches students the sense of the importance of teamwork other than critics and skeptics. (critisizm and Skepticism )No matter in humanities or sciences, in arts or mathematics, the sense of cooperation is always in the main spirit of education. Moreover, as well as cooperation, education fosters the ethos of understanding and tolerating others, too. For instance, one traditional Chinese lesson teaches students about a smart child named Kong Rung who had became a most famous scholar in his period of time (用in his time即可)  eventually. The lesson mentions that once upon a time when young Kong Rung was seven, his mother asked him to choose one pear from a dish full of pears in different sizes and colors, and he chose the smallest one. As his mother was thinking he is the youngest child and should have chosen the bigger one, she asked him why. And the reason he gave his mother was that since he was the youngest, it was his duty to leave the bigger ones to his elder brothers. Every Chinese student has learned the lesson and each of them is imparted the spirit which is(which is显得累赘)  to give precedence (有点chiglish,可用put others in the first place) out of courtesy. And it is a spirit which is of extreme significance in promoting the social harmony. In short, education does not just augment the students’ sense of skepticism and criticism, it also teaches students to learn about the importance of cooperation and courtesy, hence, education does not do little to social harmony but bolsters it.

Secondly, even though education mainly encourages students question and criticize, it is not the inevitable result that the social harmony would be harmed that education will surely bring about. The social harmony could not be sabotaged by questioning and criticizing but by the evil minds and extremely expanded ambitions.  (好观点，但我觉得本段第一句的让步逻辑有点问题，这不是argument，所以这样写不太妥当，可以承认education有影响，而不用去讨论它是不是education中最重要的部分 ) The reason why Hitler exerted such a destructive influence on the social harmony is not his skepticism and criticism but his ambition to dominate the whole world; on the contrary, a myriad of great philosophers and scientists who have made numerous donations and efforts to the social harmony are good at questioning and criticizing. Without questioning and criticizing the predecessors’ conclusions, Aristotle would never be the greatest thinker in more than ten thousand of years but just an ordinary person with a little cleverness. In one word, even if education indeed augments the students’ skepticism and criticism, we can not draw the conclusion so fast that it does little to social harmony. On the contrary, skepticism and criticism do not do harm to social harmony as the evil minds do.(有点argument的味道，虽然你这篇是驳论，但是若被认为是argument写法，会很危险)  

In conclusion, except for questioning and criticizing, education teaches students far more things such as cooperation and courtesy, and these spirits indeed augment the social harmonyindeed 的位置如何摆我一直不太清楚，望赐教.(两处均可，不过放在前面更加强调)   Even though education gives the students senses of skepticism and criticism, we can not conclude that it does little to social harmony，and sometimes it is just the skepticism and criticism boost the social harmony but not other senses.


我写的52,提提意见吧
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=306257

yufengfeng9UID: 197696

多谢大家修改 明天就把我改的发上来！