Argument65[jet小组]第六次作业

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Argument 65  The following appeared in a memo from the president of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States."For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were all domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."
提纲：1 关于survey 该杂志的订阅人是否足够多。订阅该杂志得人是否是去该店买奶酪的人？
      2 即便我们承认调查，订阅者对于国产奶酪的倾向性越来越高，可能原来就很小，倾向性高了也不至于高出太多。
       去年的销量不代表今年， 可能是那种奶酪去年搞了促销，比较便宜，今年不搞了， 每人买了
     3 可能该店的进口奶酪很受大家欢迎。(我没写)
     4 停止储备很多进口奶酪，不一定就是最好的盈利方式

In the argument, the president of the chain of cheese stores advice that it is the best way that the stores should reduce the number of imported cheeses and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses for the propose of improving profits. To support his conclusion, the president also provides us the best-selling cheeses’ place of production and the result of a survey. However, the president fails to consider other possible alternatives which may destroy his assertion as follows:

First, the president suggests domestic cheese will sell well by citing the fact that the five best-selling cheeses at their newest store were all domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin last year. However, the president does not provide us more details about the cheeses produced in Wisconsin. It is possible that during last year Wisconsin's cheeses producers combine to assist a sales promotion of their cheddar cheeses, therefore the average price of their cheddar cheeses is lower than other producers especially foreign cheeses producers, so that the cheese customers were appealed by their low price. However, this year, the sales promotion does not exist again, this circumstance directly causes the customers choose other cheeses which may include imported cheese. In a word, the president's evidence about the five best-selling cheeses last year cannot convince me on his assertion.

Second, the president also points out a recent survey conducted by Cheeses of the world magazine showed that the subscribers have more interest in domestic cheeses than before. However, are there enough subscribers who responded the survey to show the reality of the survey? If the number of the respondents is very few, the increasing interest of domestic cheeses contributes little to the president's conclusion. What's more, are the respondents of the survey mainly the consumers of the chain store's cheeses? It is possible that the viewers of the magazine rarely go shopping in the chain of cheese stores we talked above and they don’t even know the which cheeses are on sale in the chain stores. Though the respondents expressed their preference of domestic cheeses, they won’t buy the cheeses in the chain of stores.

In addition, even though we admit that discontinue stocking imported cheeses will reduce the expense, there is no sufficient evidence to show that it is the best way to improve profits. The president ignores other possibilities of improving profits such as sales promotion, decreasing the purchase price of the cheeses and so on. Overall, without further analysis of other ways of improving profits, the chain stores should not follow the president’s advice.

In sum, though the president’s conclusion seems logical, there is no reason to adopt the president’s suggestion. Before final decision is made, the president should take respect the possibilities carefully which may cause the failing of the chain store.

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看完之后，觉得语法没啥问题，想就文章的攻击的角度方式提一点我的看法。文章的攻击点和攻击的方式和我写的有比较大的不同，这里主要是通过逐一分析题目中的evidence来完成攻击，每一点都表达得很清楚，但觉得和段之间的联系有些松散，使得文章给人一种：每段各说各的，整体打击效果不足的感觉。
另外，我觉得这题的最主要的一个漏洞是作者假设了“减小存放进口货省下来的钱比不卖那些进口货赚的钱要多”，而事实上可能出现相反的情况，使得不能达到提高盈利的目的。

:)一些拙见，希望还可以和楼主继续讨论，也希望楼主狠批我的文章:handshake