大疯的作文贴

dadafanUID：2659273

作文好痛苦的说
对我来讲
中文作文都没话讲的


多谢大家批改
鸡蛋西红柿随便砸

dadafanUID：2659273

前面的作业也写了几次的
但，由于速度太慢，一直没赶上交作业
这次因为周末，多了一天调整
开始交作业吧

水平有点菜
呵呵

8.31作业
09.05.30NA

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Younger school children (ages five to ten) should be required to study art and music in addition to math, science, history and language.

lucia85524UID：2166143

2# dadafan

lucia85524 修改稿

因为用了word 的修订功能，直接贴上来估计效果就没有了， 所以还是上附件吧。

dadafanUID：2659273

3# lucia85524
多谢啦

dadafanUID：2659273

9.2 独立作文
09.06.12NA
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students should not take part-time jobs while they are studying in universities.)

lanzhi_gjyUID：2717147

改好了，请查收

dadafanUID：2659273

6# lanzhi_gjy

我确实写过argument
厉害，一眼就看出来了，呵呵

你给我的批改，真的很到位
谢谢

dadafanUID：2659273

9.4 独立作文

09.08.01NA

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If you do not make sure other people (especially influential people or your employers) know about your strengths and accomplishments, you will never get successful in life.

zhouchlcyUID：2847817

恕不能发附件，直接改了哈
09.08.01NA  
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If you do not make sure other people (especially influential people or your employers) know about your strengths and accomplishments, you will never get successful in life.

Nowadays, some people hold the opinion that people could not get successful in life if other people do not know about their capabilities. But others may have a negative attitude. This question is a much-disputed one which can impact almost everybody in their lives, and people may prefer one to another although some may have no mind about it at all. As far as I am concerned, in some respects both of these tow positions have considerable merits, but there are other important aspects in which should be weighed, and it is necessary to take a glance at the argument of both sides before we take the assertion.(太长了，而且有些生硬)

Generally speaking it is quite easy for ordinary people to support that statement because of the most important feature of successful men --- competence. They would point out that capability is the only reason which is linked with success, just like a proverb says, "You cannot keep a good man down." To be frank, it is true that only competence the people have, then they could get success.

But at the meantime, although this statement has its powerful talking point, the effect of making sure other people know about your abilities also cannot be underestimated; in other words, if we notice the invisible befitis of if, we will understand it more deeply. Here I would explain a few of the most important reasons.

The main reason is that success needs chance. Besides the competence, people also need opportunities to represent themselves, to put what they know and what they can into practice. While the influential people and our employer is the one who can give us the opportunity. And only when they know about our capabilities and admire us, then they would accommodate us about chance, and we can probably get success. In a word, people without chance just like performers lack stage, the seeds outside the soil.

Furthermore, another reason why I hold the opposed attitude to this statement is that the influential people could help us to get success. Making sure the authorities and our employers appreciate us, they will believe that we will make more benefits for them, therefore, they probably might help us and offer us conveniences.

To sum up, from what has been disccussed above, we can come to the conclusion that although the main feature of successful people is qualification, but we also need that other people appreciate us, then they will provide opportunities for us. Therefore, I strong disagree with the statement of the topic.

文章段落分的太细了，显得论述的不够详细、透彻。首尾两段有些生硬，建议把模板去掉一下，换上自己的发挥。

nishuowosheiUID：2843451

改好了~望回批~

dadafanUID：2659273

9月7日 独立作文
2009.8.7 NA
是否同意 parents help determined the future of their children or children allow to make their own choices."

superchaosUID：2863434

作文给你改好啦……

执着的丸子UID：2626299

改好啦

dadafanUID：2659273

9.11独立作文
09.9.19 NA

Government should more support art museum and music performance than recreational facilities, such as swimming pool or play ground.