进军美利坚独立作文by soarer0474

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辛苦批改的兄弟姐妹了
望狠批
谢谢



11.11 Governments should focus more on natural environment problems and less on economic developments.

There is an increasing controversy in that whether the government should focus more on economic developments or natural environment problems. Contrary to the opinion of many people is my heartfelt objection to the idea that economics is more important than the environment protection.
I concede that the economic development is crucial to our city status and the citizens’ life. After all, how much the city is developed in economics is closely associated with everyone’s life, such as our salary, commodity costs, house price and so on. However, when we lead a happy life, isn’t it necessary to give some consideration to those cute animals some place for surviving and improve our surroundings for our health?
Firstly, a good environment benefits our body. Much research shows that the people in the polluted areas don’t lead a long and healthy life as well as those in the places with wholesome environment, completely in accordance with our common sense. Health is the very foundation of all other things we own and thereby, keeping ourselves more healthy is far more important than earning more money, so we should take our environment as the first consideration.
Secondly, unlike economic development, so urgency are the natural environment problems that they couldn’t wait any more. Everyday in the world, it is said that hundreds of species extinct and this process is irreversible. For example, the giant pandas and the Chinese alligators are both in severe danger. If we don’t protect them, our later generations could know them only by books or the specimens in the museums. We have only one planet and hence, for our earth and the animals and other species living on it, it is the right time for us to give more attention to the environment.
Last but not least, a fine environment could also improve the economics. Living in a good environment, people could achieve health and less pressure; consequently, their produce will increase and medical treatment costs will decrease. This is good for the economic developments. On the other hand, if our city or our county has a excellent natural environment, it appeals the tourists from world. Take Hong Kong, one of the most famous tourist cities, as a vivid example. Not only for the convenience for shopping, delicious food for eating and interesting places for visiting, but also for the attractive scenery thousands of tourists come to the city. They bring millions of dollars to the city. So protection of environment is not a waste of money; in the contrary, it could lead our economic development to a unprecedented level.
To sum up, the economic development has many good aspects, but owing to the advantages and the urgency of good environment, our government should pay more attention on solving natural environment problems nowadays.

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11.16人们应不应该被允许在公共交通（巴士、火车、飞机）上使用移动电话
9:04:16 PM
Nothing has made us more convenient to communicate with friends, especially ones far away, than mobile telephones. We could use it to connect with others almost anywhere and at any time, but about the implementing of a phone there is a controversy debated more and more that whether people should be allowed to use it on a public traffic. In my perspective, stopping the use of cell phones is unreasonable.
I must concede that it is impolite and somewhat crude when one talks loudly totally without considering the feeling of others in the same vehicle. After all, our society and sufficiently advanced education system couldn’t make sure all of the people considerate in public locations such as in a bus, train or a plane. Yet allowing people to make use of the mobile phones is not only reasonable but also desirable.
Nowadays cell phones play a very significant and irreplaceable role in our daily life, especially on our way to some other places. When on a long boring journey by train, we need the cell phones to talk with one of our intimate friends to kill time; before we go to the aim place, we need the mobile phones to tell the bosses or the clients where we are; when fly to another city for business, the merchants need cell phones to deal with a large amount of things. These part played by cell phones couldn’t be overlooked and hence forbidding them in public traffic could bring much inconvenience to most of people. One the other hand, the object that we invent these communicate equipments is to give us a chance to talk with others far away, particularly when we are on a moving traffic, such as a running bus. We could simply obtain that from the tools’ name “mobile phone”, in which “mobile” means movable. Consequently, if cell phones can’t be used on public vehicles, they will, to some extent, be useless for most of people.
What’s more, sometimes we have to employ mobile phones in urgency. Take the thing happened to me recently as a vivid example. Last week, I was sitting and a little asleep in a quiet bus, when suddenly a man’s phone rang up. I was woke up and felt in ill humor. Then the man said to the phone: ”Oh my god, my mother is in hospital? I will be there soon.” Only at that time, I am aware that the poor person had something emergency and thus forgave him. Thus if we forbidding using mobile phones on the public traffic, it will bring much trouble to those who already have a trouble.
To conclude, considering the convenience in daily life and the irreplaceable role in urgency situation of the use of cell phones in public traffic, we could safely draw the point that people should be allowed to employ cell phones in those vehicles. Meanwhile we shouldn’t neglect considering others’ feeling in the same public places and keep our talk from disturbing others much.

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11.18 不同兴趣,人格的人能不能做朋友?) F6
6:58:49 PM
9:00:30 PM
What exactly is a real friend? It is the one who could encourage me after my failure, who would directly point out my short comings to improve me, and who will help me without any hesitation when I am in trouble. Someone believe that the people with different characters and interests has no possibility to be friends. However, in my perspective, that statement is totally wrong.
I must concede that it is easier for the people to make friends because of same interests or characters. Take some people with extensive interests for example. They, in general, have more friends. After all, same interests and characters always mean same topics and activities between the people, and after some heart-to-heart talk and cooperation on several games such as football, basketball and so on, they will naturally be friends. Yet it is still reasonable, feasible and somewhat desirable to make friends with who like different activities or possess different senses of value.
To begin with, we are usually attracted by the people interested in different things and this could establish friendship, just like, to some extent, that the attraction between boys and girls is the very cause and foundation of love. The people with different interests always obtain totally different experiences, which could broad our mind and enrich our life. Take the thing happened to me recently as an instance. Last Wednesday, I went to an english corner to have a talk with others about the topic that what is the world going to be in the future. Because partners in our team all majored in those about science and technology, we talked about the possible development of technique or machines, which is entirely normal and a little boring for me. Then a stranger, whose major was literature, involved in the talk and then she imaged the further in a completely different angle, which was appealing me very much. After that talk she and I frequently communicated with each other and now we are good friends. Hence same interests and characters are not the only factor for the establish of friendship. In the contrary, different people could be friends just due to their differences.
Besides, trust and consideration appear to be more significant for friends than same interests. Trust usually is believed as the prior foundation of friends. If one couldn’t obtain our trust, not mention to consideration, how can he get our friendship finally, even though we could share the same interests with him? On the other hand, let’s review our friends, count the numbers of those who are our friends not because of interests, and then we will find out that it occupies about third or half of the total, coinciding with the status published in a science journal. Consequently, same interests isn’t the dominant factor in formation of the friendship.
To sum up, such factors as trust and consideration are more important for friends; although we have different interests or characters, it is possible for us to be intimate friends, which could make our lives more colorful and meaningful.

zhengping001UID: 2689322

11.18 不同兴趣,人格的人能不能做朋友?) F6
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What exactly is areal friend? It is the one who
could
encourage me after myfailure, who would (will,与后面的统一吧)
directly point out my short comings (shortcomings) to improve me, and who willhelp me without any hesitation when I am in trouble. Someone believe(s) that the people with different charactersand interests
has(have)
nopossibility to be friends. However, in my perspective, that statement istotally wrong. U5 L' Z3 D- Z- b0 L7 T$ X$ n
I must concedethat it is easier for the people to make friends because of same interests orcharacters. Take some people with extensive interests for example. They, ingeneral, have more friends. After all, same interests and characters alwaysmean same topics and activities between the people (among of them),
(可以分开为两个句子) andafter some heart-to-heart talk and cooperation on several games such asfootball, basketball and so on, they will naturally be friends.
Yet (therefore) it is still reasonable, feasible and somewhatdesirable (过了，一个形容词就够了) to make friends with who like differentactivities or possess different senses of value.- U1 i- X( i% {, M( j( y: c
To begin with, weare usually attracted by the (可去掉) people
interested (interesting,表主动) in different things and
this could (this指什么, we could or they may)establish friendship, just like, to some extent (这个要去掉), that the attraction between boys andgirls is the verycause and foundation of love (后面这个句子分开来说). Thepeople with different interests always obtain totally different experiences,which could broad(broaden) our mindand enrich our life. Take
the (one)thing happened to me recently as an instance. Last Wednesday, I went to anenglish corner to have a talk with others about the topic that what is theworld going to be in the future. Because partners in our team all majored in those about ( 去掉)
science and technology, we talked about the possibledevelopment of technique or machines, which is entirely normal and a little boring for me（这个句子有点怪怪的, due to few fresh things so Ifelt bored）. Then a stranger, whose majorwas literature, involved in the talk and then she imaged the further in a completely different angle (point), which was appealing me verymuch. After thattalk she and I frequently communicated with each other and now we are goodfriends(有点中式，帮你改一下thereafter, we were keeping touchfrequently. Now she is my good friend). Hence same interests and characters arenot the only factor forthe establish of friendship (to establish the friendship). In the contrary, different people could be friendsjust due to their differences.

: s% x( S& q: {2 [Besides, trust and consideration appear to be more significant forfriends than same interests. Trust usually is believed as the prior (primary) foundation of friends. If onecouldn’t obtain our trust, not mention to consideration, how can he get ourfriendship finally, even though we could share the same interests with him? Onthe other hand, let’s review our friends, count the numbers of those who areour friends not because of interests, and then we will find out that itoccupies about third or half of the total, coinciding with the status publishedin a science journal (这个长句被你绕晕了).
Consequently, same interests isn’t (are not)
the dominant factor in（of） formation of the friendship.
- E* o- q* H3 j. A8 h: i; cTo sum up, such factors astrust and consideration are more important for friends; although we havedifferent interests or characters, it is possible for us to be intimatefriends, which could make our lives more colorful and meaningful.(建议以短句为主长句为辅)

zhengping001UID: 2689322

不知道怎么回事，在明明改好了，  发到网上就成这样子了

soarer0474UID: 2665789

11.19Do you agree or disagree that: spend time alone is the truly best way to relax the stress.
8:21:210:06:03 PM PM
With the development of social economy, more and more faster our lives become and more and more pressure people feel. what is the best way for us to have a relax? Someone may prefer to spend time alone. However, in my perspective, it is not a good idea.
I must concede that , for some persons, staying alone is a very comfotable way to relax themselves. After all, perhaps all they need is a tranquil place to organize their thoughts without disturbing or some TV players to have a fun. What’s more, this method almost depends on no expense. Yet, spend time alone is a good but not best way for releasing pressure.
First and foremost, staying with friends or relatives are good for us in health and keeping away from the stress. With friends, usually we have many activities to do, travelling, basketball, taking a part in a party, enjoying a movie and this list will go on. These things could help us to ajust our mood effectively. When we play a interesting game, say, poker, nobody will be involve in pressure from work or some other things. On the other hand, few people would like to go to travell or sing alone, because there is nobody could share our happiness. Hence if one want to be alone, he couldn’t enjoy the relax brought by those activities.
What’s more, sometimes if we stay in the place without any one, it may do some harm to us mentally. Take the murder Ma in China as a vivid instance. Three years ago, he killed his roommates. In the prison, he said that it was all due to his roommates’ errors, but I believe the reason for the happened miserable case is the deficiency of his personality. That is he don’t like to stay with others and talk with friends when in the stress. When he couldn’t bear the stess after a long time, the tragic happened. We should learn something from him. In addition, according to the Freud theory of phsycology, if somebody doesn’t find some ways to decrease the stress in daily life, they will be accumulated and finaly lead to aggrassive behaviors. Whereas, staying alone to do something such as watching TV, playing PC games and so on, is the least effective method to release the pressure, which has been proved by the phsycology studies. Consequently, find some people to stay with is a better choice in most situations.
To sum up, according to the reasons above, if we have the opportunity to stay with our friends, it is unreasonable to be alone.
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根据zhengping建议修改，谢谢
修改：11.18 不同兴趣,人格的人能不能做朋友?) F63 H+ ~4 G/ {0 W. L
What exactly is a real friend? It is the one who will encourage me after my failure, who will directly point out my shortcomings to improve me, and who will help me without any hesitation when I am in trouble. Someone believes that the people with different characters and interests have no possibility to be friends. However, in my perspective, that statement is totally wrong.
I must concede that it is easier for the people to make friends because of same interests or characters. Take some people with extensive interests for example. They, in general, have more friends. After all, same interests and characters always mean same topics and activities among them. After some heart-to-heart talk and cooperation on several games such as football, basketball and so on, they will naturally be friends. Yet it is still reasonable and somewhat desirable to make friends with who like different activities or possess different senses of value.
To begin with, we are usually attracted by people-interested in different things. This could establish friendship, just like that the attraction between boys and girls is the very cause and foundation of love. The people with different interests always obtain totally different experiences, which could broaden our mind and enrich our life. Take; one thing happened to me recently as an instance. Last Wednesday, I went to an english corner to have a talk with others about the topic that what is the world going to be in the future. Because partners in our team all majored in those about science and technology, we talked about the possible development of technique or machines, Due to few fresh things I felt bored. Then a stranger, whose major was literature, involved in the talk. Then she imaged the further in a completely different point of view, which was appealing me very much. Thereafter, we were keeping touch frequently. Now she is one of my good friends.. Hence same interests and characters are not the only factor for the establish of friendship (to establish the friendship). In the contrary, different people could be friends just due to their differences.- K% w' i* G9 i' K; z0 D
Besides, trust and consideration appear to be more significant for friends than same interests. Trust usually is believed as the primary foundation of friends. If one couldn’t obtain our trust, not mention to consideration, how can he get our friendship finally, even though we could share the same interests with him? On the other hand, let’s review our friends, count the numbers of those who are our friends not because of interests. Then we will find out that it occupies about third or half of the total, coinciding with the status published in a science journal. Consequently, same interests is not the dominant factor of formation of the friendship.
To sum up, such factors as trust and consideration are more important for friends. Although we have different interests or characters, it is possible for us to be intimate friends, which could make our lives more colorful and meaningful.

zhengping001UID: 2689322

11-19

With the developmentof social economy, more and more faster our lives become and more andmore pressure people feel。What is the best wayfor us to have a relax (good time or relaxing,词性问题,)? Someone may prefer to spend time alone. However,in my perspective, it is not a good idea.

I must concede that, for some persons (不常用表达，some people), staying alone is a very comfotable （comfortable）way to relax themselves. After all, perhaps all they need is a tranquilplace to organize their thoughts without disturbing or some TV players to havea fun. What’s more,this method almost depends on no expense. Yet, spend time alone（没有这样的结构，要么用不定式再者用动词ing形式）
is a good （way）but not best way(the best way,最高级必须要用the) for releasing pressure., v4 I'B- t$ z+

First and foremost,staying with friends or relatives are (is) good for us in health (为什么不直接用our health呢？搞不懂) and keeping away from the stress. With friends, usually we have many activities to do,travelling, basketball, taking a part in a party, enjoying a movie and thislist will go on. These thingscould help us to ajust (adjust) our mood effectively. When we play a (an) interesting game, say, poker,nobody will be involve in pressure from work or some other things. On the other hand, few people would like to go totravell or sing alone, because there is nobody could share our (their) happiness. Hence if one want to be alone, he couldn’tenjoy the relax brought by those activities.

What’s more, sometimes if we stay in the place without anyone, it may do some harm to us mentally. Take the murder (murderer) Ma in China as avivid instance. Three years ago, he killed his roommates. In the prison, hesaid that it was all due to his roommates’ errors, but I believe the reason forthe happened miserable case is the deficiency of his personality. That is he don’t (doesn’t) like to stay with others and talk with friends whenin the stress. When he couldn’t bear the stess after a long time, the tragic happened. We should learn something from him. In addition, according to the Freudtheory of phsycology, if somebody doesn’t find some ways to decrease thestress in daily life, they will be accumulated and finaly lead toaggrassivebehaviors. Whereas, staying alone to do something such as watching TV,playing PC games and so on, is the least effective method to release the pressure, which has beenproved by thephsycology studies.Consequently, find some peopleto stay withis a better choice in most situations..

To sum up, accordingto the reasons above, if we have the opportunity to stay with our friends, itis unreasonable to be alone.
结尾太少。

1.
字数是很多，画线部位，都是有问题的地方（单词拼写错误，语法错误，以及逻辑问题，没有太多时间帮你仔细看了）
2.
结构上没有什么大问题，不过有较多的语法错误，以及有些单词词性没有掌握好。
3.
有比较多的单词拼写错误。
4.
不是缩进式段落，段与段之间要隔行。
5. 加油，一起努力奋斗

soarer0474UID: 2665789

很欣赏你的直率，呵呵
一起加油

8# zhengping001

liuxiaoyinUID: 2631993

With the development of social economy, more and more faster our lives become and more and more pressure people feel. what is the best way for us to （have a relax，relax是动词，好像这么用不太对~~~该成relax ourselves吧）? Someone may prefer to spend time alone. However, in my perspective, it is not a good idea.I must concede that, for some persons, staying alone is a very comfotable way to relax themselves. After all, perhaps all they need is a tranquil place to organize their thoughts without disturbing or some TV players to have a fun. What’s more, this method almost depends on no expense. Yet, spending time alone is a good but not the best way for releasing pressure.

First and foremost, staying with friends or relatives are(is) good for us in health and keeping away from the stress. With friends, usually we have many activities to do, such as travelling, basketball, taking a part in a party, enjoying a movie and this list will go on. These things could help us to adjust our mood effectively. When we play an interesting game, say, poker, nobody will be involve in pressure from work or some other things. On the other hand, few people would like to go to travell or sing alone, because there is nobody could share our happiness. Hence if one want to be alone, he couldn’t enjoy the relax brought by those activities.  Z% ~* E# C2 Z+ [

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What’s more, sometimes if we stay in the place without any one, it may do some harm to us mentally. Take the murder Ma in China as a vivid instance. Three years ago, he killed his roommates. In the prison, he said that it was all due to his roommates’ errors, but I believe the reason for the happened miserable case is the deficiency of his personality. (which is改成定语从句会不会好点)That is he don’t like to stay with others and talk with friends when in the stress. When he couldn’t bear the stess after a long time, the tragic happened. We should learn something from him.

In addition改成Finally吧，前面不是已经有what's more了么~~, according to the Freud theory of phsycology, if somebody doesn’t find some ways to decreasing(way之后的to是介词) the stress in daily life, they will be accumulated and finaly lead to aggrassive behaviors. Whereas, staying alone to do something such as watching TV, playing PC games and so on, is the least effective method to release the pressure, which has been proved by the phsycology studies. Consequently, finding some people to stay with is a better choice in most situations.理论引用得很到位~~~学习了

To sum up, according to the reasons above, if we have the opportunity to stay with our friends, it is unreasonable to be alone.感觉结尾有点短，建议稍微总结一下上文的分论点
总评：文章写得很好~~有很多例子，读起来不枯燥。个别的语法错误要注意哈。
给你评的有点晚了，抱歉哈~~

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11.23自己练习，下一步保证质量的同时控制时间

纠正拼写问题。。

The government has announced that it plans to build a new university. Some people think that your community would be a good place to locate the university. Compare the advantages and disadvantages of establishing a new university in your community. Use specific details in your discussion

政府打算建一所新大学，有人认为你家附近是个合适的地方。比较好处与坏处，详细阐述
21:17:01
It is said that the government plans to establish a new university nearby. About this proposal, there is a bitter controversy among the residents in our community. Someone totally supports the announcement, while others hold the different view. It is sure that making an agreement about this
is not easy in a short period, because the advantages and disadvantages are too difficult and complex to weigh. They could be demonstrate as follows.
Firstly, the new university will bring much benefit to our community. When it is established, there will be more people living in this area, such as students, professors and workers. These people’s requirement about food and other commodities will inspire the economy near our homes. We could safely predict that some more stores, restaurants and even a theater will be built consequently. This could benefit the citizens in the community a lot. What’s more, the university and these new stores all need workers, so the plan of building a new university could helps people in our community more easily find jobs and increases the employment status. These two advantages just two typical ones of all, there are still some other merits, such as increasing the incoming of renting, improve the level of community’s education and so on.
On the other hand, the new university will also have some negative effect on our community. The people holding this view argue that with the increase of population, the traffic will carry a heavier burden. The traffic jam near our community will become more common. It will be more hard to find a parking place for cars. Consequently, it will takes us far more time on the road to work or some other places. Addition to this traffic problem, after the establish of the new university, public security is another one should be considered. When there are variety of people coming from all of the country, surely it will break the tranquility and harmoniousness in the community kept for a long time. Hence it is understandable the someone worries more cases will happen, and less sense of safety will be felt.
According the disadvantages and advantages mentioned above, I believe that it is a much wiser choice to build the university in our community, when it comes to the considerable benefit it will bring to us. Whereas, when we build it, we’d better take its’ negative effect into account such as to widen the roads, to improve the security system and to add other facilities in the community.

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还是超时了，
慢慢缩短时间。。。

11.25 The telephone has a greater effect on people's lives than the television do6

9:52:22 PM10:43:19 PM
Almost no other technology brought us more benefit than electronic technology.
We use this invented so many useful equipments, which include the typical examples of telephones and televisions. These two kinds of inventions are both very important for us, but here is the question: which one exactly is more important. My answer is the former one, telephones.

I must concede that televisions are good at entertainment. After all, we all need something to have a relax after one day’s hard work, and televisions are just the things. There are variety of programs for us to choose in them, such as comedies, kong fu movies, or TV plays. Yet, telephones take a more irreplaceable role in our daily life and work.

First and foremost, telephones could help us work more efficiently. As you know, in work, we always have an enormous number of things to communicate with bosses, colleagues or clients. If there is no telephone, we could only walk or go by some transportation to talk with others. This will waste much time and energy. But the things will be much simple when we have a phone. We could talk with the American client about the business at our home in China simply by dialing the phone. This function obviously couldn’t be obtained by televisions, as a kind of entertainment equipments.

What’s more, the news from telephones is more valid and could be more personal. In a TV, there are variety of programs, but they are for the public, not just for someone himself. When I am urgency to know what happened just now outside, televisions couldn’t satisfy me at this point. For example, if I want to know the weather of my hometown before coming home, I have to wait the weather forecast program. But if I have a phone, I could know the information immediately by calling my mother. So telephones makes our personal requirement about some information achieved more easily.

To conclude, telephones have a more positive effect on our work and could meet our personal requirement more, which televisions have nothing to do with. Hence, telephones play a more practical and more active role in our life than televisions.

hualazimiUID: 2707120

Almost no other technology brought us more benefits than electronic technology.
We use this invented so many useful equipments, which include the typical examples of telephones and televisions. These two kinds of inventions are both very important for us, but here is the question(这个问题有价值吗？)[/color]: which one exactly（去掉） is more important. My answer is the former one, telephones。
I must concede（There is no doubt 这个用法会比较好一点，因为must语气太强烈了） that televisions are good at entertainment（do well in +名词，be good at 后加动名词）. After all, we all need something to have a relax after one day’s hard work, and televisions are just the （去掉）things. There are variety of programs for us to choose in them（去掉）, such as comedies, kong fu movies, or TV plays. Yet, telephones take a more irreplaceable role in our daily life and work.
First and foremost, telephones could help us work more efficiently. As you know, in work, we always have an enormous number of things to communicate with bosses, colleagues or clients. If there is no telephone, we could only（不要only，不严谨，如果有internet呢，我们还可以发邮件联系） walk or go by some transportation to talk with others. This will waste much time and energy. But the things will be much（more） simple when we have a phone. We could talk with the American client about the business at our home in China simply by dialing the phone. This function obviously couldn’t be obtained by televisions, as a kind of entertainment equipments（注意应该是mobile phone，如果只说phone是座机。
What’s more, the news from telephones is more valid and could be more personal. In a TV, there are variety of programs, but they are for the public, not just for someone himself. When I am urgency to know what happened just now outside, televisions couldn’t satisfy me at this point. For example, if I want to know the weather of my hometown before coming home, I have to wait the weather forecast program. But if I have a phone, I could know the information immediately by calling my mother. So telephones makes our personal requirement about some information achieved more easily. （也可以在电视上看天气预报嘛，这个例子说服力不是很大，你可以说phone很方便，给妈咪打个电话就可以了，但television的天气预报不是每个台每个时段都有的）

To conclude, telephones have a more positive effect on our work and could meet our personal requirement more, which televisions have nothing to do with. Hence, telephones play a more practical and more active role in our life than televisions.

总之，有自己的想法，这点很值得我借鉴，希望内容上再充实一些，使自己的事例更有说服力。例外我觉得开头就开门见山是最好的。当然，这也不是一成不变的，但是我觉得这个题目没有引出的必要，直接写就好。

hualazimiUID: 2707120

I'm sorry,不知道怎么回事把字全都弄成红色的了~~~

soarer0474UID: 2665789

写得比较郁闷
超时，没有思路

11.27 Good looks and dresses are more important for success than good ideas. Agree or disagree? 9:30:49 PM10:47:25 PM

11.27
Good looks and dresses are more important for success than good ideas. Agree or disagree?

9:30:49 PM10:47:25 PM

Currently, with the dizzying change of society, make a decision in a short time becomes very necessary. An increasing number of people believe that good looks and dresses play a more significant role in success than good ideas. However, I definitely disagree with this point of view.

First and foremost, in a long term, good ideas have far-reached effects on our careers. As you know, to establish a career is not something that we could do in one day or in one year; it maybe needs five or ten years. Just as the old saying, “roman is not built in one day”. During the long period, our intellect will become more mature, and we could find out more good ideas after we experienced more things. These good ideas will continue to contribute to our careers. Whereas, our good looks can’t maintain the same for so long time. If I am dressed well but cannot be competent with the job, I think my boss won’t consider give me any promotion. So considering the long period of success, good ideas are more important.

What’s more, utilizing good looks for success are not practical to some extent. The majority of us is normal person; most of us have normal looks. In the other word, seldom of us could be benefited by our looks. So, in general, the truth is good looks are less important for our success. History abounds with the examples that someone without good looks succeeded. For example, Abraham Lincoln, one of the most respected presidents, was not very handsome, but he led American people to the success in the American Civil War.
This example vividly indicates that good looks is not the necessary condition of success.

To sum up, some of us could get benefit from good looks, but it can’t last for a long time and it has nothing to do with most people and most situations. Hence good ideas are more vital for our success than good looks.