小咩的作文帖。。大虾们，各种求拍

羊小咩89UID：2848665

7.21 综合一篇

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On the whole, the lecturer in the listening material demonstrates her own point of view that the cause of declining of sea otters has been largely contributed by attacks of predators, but not the pollution hypothesis as the author mentions.

Initially, the professor presents the notion that the theory of environmental pollution is not well-supported, for the absence of dead sea otters along the beaches is consistent with the predator hypothesis, while the otters could be eaten by their predators and thus left no remains on shore. However, the article indicates that the increased chemical pollutants has led to the greater invulnerability of otters to infections.

Another viewpoint the lecturer uses to challenge the article is that orcas are more likely to be the cause of the decreasing sea otters. She elaborates on this by saying that for the fact that the main diet of orcas were largely killed by human hunters, orcas could only feed on small preys like sea otters to survive and consequently leading to the disappearance of them. This is incongruous with the reading’s concept which suggests that the pollution theory is the only explanation of the decreasing numbers of sea otters as well as other sea mammals live along the coast.

Furthermore, differ from what the author holds, the professors demonstrates her idea by saying that the uneven declining of otter numbers is due to the different locations of otter habitat. It can be easily seen that sea otters live in the area which is more easily accessed to orcas, their population tends to decline more dramatically. Whereas those lives in shallow water or rocky areas can avoid such tragedy, which their numbers remain stable.

羊小咩89UID：2848665

7.22 综合一篇 :loveliness:

The reading passage presents the idea that the trend of less and less people reading literature has now become a troubling trend. Adversely, the professor contends an opposing stand.

Initially, the professors argues that literature is not necessarily the only source of good books, she elaborates on this by saying that there are large amounts of high quality books out there in other categories, such as science books, history books, etc. It is not that only literature can stimulate our imagination and cultivate our thoughts. Basically, books in other genres can also be thought-provoking. However, this is incongruous with what the reading demonstrates.

Another viewpoint the professor uses to challenge the author in the article is that reading non-literature books cannot be narrowly depicted as superficial and low-taste. For the reason that this world is now fast-changing, the new ways of recreation that people choose instead of reading, like listening to music or watching a good movie, is actually more contemporary and more comprehensive than merely reading literature.

As an ending point, differ from what the author in the article holds, the professors argues that we should blame the writers for the result of the troubling trend of less reading nowadays, but not the readers. She furthers this point by saying that writers tend to make their works more difficult to read and thus contributed a lot to readers' decline of interests in reading.

JeniusUID：2964631

小咩~昨天我做的综合不是这个，我做了再来看啦~

冰雪蜂鸟UID：2754485

The reading passage presents the idea thatthe trend of less and less people reading literature has now become a troublingtrend. Adversely, the professor contends an opposing stand.

Initially, the professors argues thatliterature is not necessarily the only source of good books, she elaborates onthis by saying that there are large amounts of high quality books out there inother categories, such as science books, history books, etc.(etc.在TOEFL中禁止使用) It is not that only literature can stimulate our imagination andcultivate our thoughts. Basically, books in other genres can also bethought-provoking. However, this is incongruous with what the readingdemonstrates.

Another viewpoint the professor uses tochallenge the author in the article is that reading non-literature books cannotbe narrowly depicted as superficial and low-taste. For the reason that thisworld is now fast-changing, the new ways of recreation that people chooseinstead of reading, like listening to music or watching a good movie, isactually more contemporary and more comprehensive than merely readingliterature.
这一段的观点与听力材料中不太一致。听力原文的意思应该是世界变了，文化变了，听音乐看电影同样是文化，来否定文章中说不读文学丧失了文化这个论点。

Asan ending point, differ from what the author in the article holds, theprofessors argues that we should blame the writers for the result of thetroubling trend of less reading nowadays, but not the readers. She furthersthis point by saying that writers tend to make their works more difficult toread and thus contributed a lot to readers' decline of interests in reading.
写综合的感觉和方法我还没有练习出来，继续交流讨论~

羊小咩89UID：2848665

4# Jenius
恩啊。。不要紧

羊小咩89UID：2848665

5# 冰雪蜂鸟

谢啦。。终于有人给我回复了
你应该是考过G的吧，，感觉wording和structure都比较好
综合的话，找几个好模板多练练就好。。一同进步 ^_^

羊小咩89UID：2848665

第一篇独立不限时。。字数貌似有点多。。。求拍啊，any 建议 is welcomed ！
ps。麻烦大家改了后也附件给我
      刚看一帖说在网上发多了可能会判雷同，哎╮(╯▽╰)╭
      亲们，谢谢合作！
      

everyday41UID：2885297

我改好了~~
但是我级别不够附件传不了T.T
你看到回复之后群里叫我一声吧亲~

羊小咩89UID：2848665

9# everyday41

在群里呼叫你了，貌似不在捏
麻烦发下我邮箱可以吗。。thks a loooooot ^_^
glamorousme@qq.com

幕阳素素UID：3025800

改完了，挺不错，很多话，我都不知道怎么表述呢值得学习

羊小咩89UID：2848665

7.25  综合加独立

（独立随后奉上 ^_^）

独立作文练习得比较少，所以很晚才写完。。同组孩子对不住哈。。请恨批！

冰雪蜂鸟UID：2754485

7.23独立换综合~
加油！

羊小咩89UID：2848665

13# 冰雪蜂鸟
哈哈，it's our deal
改得好仔细。。thks a loooot
一起加油↖(^ω^)↗

wilsonchen2011UID：3137568

楼主，你的综合作文我帮你改完了，可你的独立作文怎么还没写完？      

附：

The reading passage and the professor present contradictory points on the issue of increasing commercial fossil trade nowadays. The reading passage says this is unfortunate for the masses and scientists. However, the professor contends that the advantage of private collectors doing fossil trade definitely outweighs the disadvantage of it.

第一段最好以教授的观点结尾，因为综合作文重点是写教授的观点，而不是写文章的观点。

First and foremost, the professor illustrates that the fossil trade actually provides the public with more opportunities to see the fossils, instead of less exposures as the reading passage states. The hunting for fossils more frequently exposes low-level institutions, such as public schools, libraries and so forth, to the fossils.

第二段语法方面问题可能比较多，注意着重积累一些搭配的用法，例如make opportunities for的用法是不规范的，中间出现了将exposure拼成explosion的情况，把我吓了一跳。

The professor also challenges the reading passage by pointing out that no commercial fossil trade is without scientific identification. Every fossil has to first pass through scientific tests to examine if it is a fossil before coming onto the market. Thus nothing important is missed out in the scientific research, opposite to the reading passage unrealistically suggesting that scientists has less access to the fossils.

第三段问题不大，记得把听力中的所有信息尽量都写进去，使逻辑辩证更顺畅充实。特别注意thus的用法，它是个副词而不是连词，所以用它要重新开一个句子。段首的衔接部分也要注意简洁，不要累赘。

Finally, contrary to the reading passage holding that certain degrees of damage to the fossils can be caused by private collectors is the professor's strong affirmation that weren't it for the fossil trade, there would not be more fossils being discovered. It is much better to have more petrified remains been found even if we do not get all the data about the existing fossils.

第四段和第三段一样，需要更加抓住听力里面的所有信息。文章的中心词汇是fossil，如果通篇都用效果不是很好。我写的时候用petrified remains, ancient remnants, debris等词替换。这项技能可以说也比较重要，是写作功底的训练。

In brief, the professor argues that the negative consequences of commercial fossil trade are exaggerated in the reading passage, reasoning out the obvious benefits in terms of the general public, of the scientific community as well as of the private collectors.

在三段式要求下的英文作文体系中，一个结尾是需要加上的，这样才更完整。注意补上所有听到的关键信息，如exaggerated这个关键词，一个都不要落下。