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本帖最后由 armstrong 于 2010-2-17 20:38 编辑
2月17号
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To solve problems present and future is itnecessary to understand the past.
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According to the local media(
不太理解), many people are debatingthe function of history, so recently, the issue of whether it is necessary tounderstand the past when we solve problems present and future has been posed topeople. Someone whobelieves this statement argues(罗嗦了,简洁点,据说ETS比较讨厌模板,一句话里面没有什么具体内容竟是模板了,someone believe) that history can provide usmuch valuable experience, which can avoid us (怎么看就是别扭,us)
making some mistakes.However, as far as I am concerned, I don't agree with the opinion as studying the past will cost us muchtime and energy and situations are changing all the time.(很好表明了自己的观点,看看下面是否支持的好)
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To begin with, it is clearly that we need to spendmuch time on studying the past if we want to find the similar issues which canprovide us useful experience(这个句型我们下来讨论一下,好像一般语法和文章上都说定语从组可以简洁的分词结构,当然你这里不错). As we know(觉得有点口语化了), finding the similar issuesthough millions of historical issues is a tough task for people .Even though wehave computers now, it is still necessary for people to analyses(analyze) something which thecomputers cannot do. Moreover, we cannot just copy the methods which ourancestor used, we need to pick out the method which is useful for us to solvethe problems present and future(我感觉,说说我的感受,你圆周句用的少,应该长短结合,如果长时间用定语从句会很boring的).Certainly, doing these tasks still need more time, energy and money. A vividexample can be found from the flooding issues. People want to solve theflooding problems all the time. Imagine now the Yangzi River has some floodingproblems, we cannot use the methods which were used to treat with(用词不太准却,treat一般对人,招待啊,治疗啊,用occur) the Huang River. And also,in different parts of the Yangzi River, the geography situations is quietdifferent(varied)。 in consequence, we need tofind just the same part of it. No doubt(口语化),
可以这样说 it is not doubt that
, thisprocess will cost us a lot of time and energy. If we can make full of use thistime, maybe we have already solve the problem. Our society abounds with theseexamples.( 你是论证了你的ts,但是,觉得很罗嗦,我觉得concise的语言是ets rater比较喜欢的)
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Furthermore, the situation(the problem always evolves) is changing all the time, itis not quite certain that the historical experience will give us some valuablesuggestions and the problems whatwe face now maybe not appear in the past. Just like(口语词汇太多了), in ancient time peopleused birds to exchange information but now we use the internet, so manyhistorical experience will not benefit to us. with the development of societyand technology, some tough problems such as the environmental problems appear.It is manifest that in the past our ancestors didn't use the chemical materialoften so the global warming didn't exist in the past but it is oneof the most significant problems去掉s human beings need to facenow. As a result, if we want to solve this problem, we cannot find some usefulinformation in history because it didn't exist in the past.
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这段论证的不错,
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(让步了,好)Admittedly, the historical experience will provide us someinformation which can enable us to avoid some (repeat same)mistakes. In the industrialage(revolution), most countries developedtheir economics at the cost of the pollutions of the environment (with ignoring the sustainabledevelopment)
which is a warning for some developingcountries that they cannot do the same way and need to protect the environment.. q) Y! o, o# ^1 J! P$ ~* w) r
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Judging from all evidence offered, we may safelyarrive at the conclusion that though the advantages that studying the historyleads to are considerable, they cannot compete with the benefits that focusingmore on the contemporary issues brings out, when the disadvantages which isstudying the history will cost more time and energy and maybe it cannot applyfor the contemporary situations are taking into account. With respect to thesedrawbacks, I deem that studying the past and concentrating on the presentissues at the same time will improve the situations.(说实话模板的痕迹比较清晰,呵呵,其实有模板也好,心里不慌了,我觉得有些罗嗦的模板可以不要,不用凑字数,ets不在乎字数,比如不是有个GRE写作还没写完,还是满分吗?
我觉得ibt写作需要特别特别低级详细的detail,只要有detail,就行)另外的建议,可以尝试把定语从句改写,练习圆周句,长短结合才能好啊。
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