半夏之北的作文 为4.10二战做准备~~

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In the modern society, education is one of the most attractive topics for people to discuss. Recently, according to the local media, a new debate about education begins. The issue of whether improving schools is the most factor in successful development of country. Someone who agrees with this opinion believes that improving schools can cultivate more talents for society. However, as far as I am concerned, improving schools is an important factor in facilitating a country become marvelous, but it is not the most significant one. In my opinion, the individuals themselves and public relationship are also pretty important factors.

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To begin with, It’s evident that nowadays people is the key factor in improving a society. In consequence, cultivate more brilliant people will contribute to make society prosperity. Obviously, improving schools only provide some objective facilities; the most key is the students themselves. If students don't want to study, no matter how well the facilities such as libraries and laboratories the government can offer them, they still cannot become brilliant. A vivid example can be found just from one of my high school classmates. Her parents give her the best hopes. They asked the family tutor for her and provided all material which she needs to study, but she didn't like to study .Finally, she still cannot go to university. In contrast, in the retrospect to history, Edison, one of the most innovative scientists in the 21st century, he didn't have the chance to receive some well material to study, but he still became talents and makes a big contribution to society. Our surrounding abounds with examples like that. 5 \  Z" |; x  e0 i+ o# E' u2 c7 ~7 s* N( ^+ L

Another significant factor is Public relationship .It’s manifest that school is only a part of one's life, but the public relationship and communication is throughout all one's life. If the government wants to educate the individuals to become talents, absolutely, public relationship is a key factor. Moreover, in modern society, what can bring us more benefit is teamwork and the bound to maintain teamwork is the public relationship. Columbus cannot get to America only by himself. With the development of technology, increasing number of tasks become complex and need to use the knowledge from many different subjects. Imagine, a physicist needs to solve a task with some chemical problem but he didn't have a good relationship with other scientists, how can he solve this problem.（加个？，感情色彩会更强烈些） What’s more, a country also needs to have a good relationship with other countries which plays a key role in improving a country as the globalization is developing all the time. Typically in economy, countries need to exchange goods to get what they want. For example, China exchanges clothes and daily necessities for iron from Australia./ U3 N) @5 i" H, C& \2 P% ]! `. ^
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Admittedly, improving schools will enable a country become successful. As if more advanced facilities can be offered to students, they will have a chance to receive a better education which will enhance the possibility that they will become talents. Through the Hope Project in China, more and more students can go to schools which will benefit their hometown.. V8 A! D1 C: c

Judging from all evidence offered, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that improving schools is not the most significant factor. Though the advantages that improving schools leads to are（去掉）considerable, it doesn't take the individuals themselves and the public relationship into consideration.

你的文章读起来好过瘾啊，写得真好，就是第4段可以考虑不要，因为你的2.3两段已经把观点表达得很鲜明了。向你学习！

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In the modern society, education is one of the most attractive topics for people to discuss. Recently, according to the local media, a new debate about education begins. The issue of whether improving schools is the most factor in successful development of country. Someone who agrees with this opinion believes that improving schools can cultivate more talents for society. However, as far as I am concerned, improving schools is an important factor in facilitating a country become marvelous（这个词漂亮）, but it is not the most significant one. In my opinion（这个和之前那个as far as I am concerned 重复）, the individuals themselves and public relationship are also pretty important factors.

To begin with, It’s evident that nowadays people is the key factor in improving a society. In consequence, cultivate more brilliant people will contribute to make society prosperity. Obviously, improving schools only provide some objective facilities; the most key is the students themselves. If students don't want to study, no matter how well the facilities such as libraries and laboratories the government can offer them, they still cannot become brilliant. A vivid example（漂亮） can be found just from one of my high school classmates. Her parents give her the best hopes. They asked the family tutor for her and provided all material which she needs to study, but she didn't like to study（可以考虑用代词替换） .Finally, she still cannot（个人认为，这里不好用cannot，这表示不能，而例子中表述的是，主观上的不愿意） go to university. In contrast, in the retrospect to history, Edison, one of the most innovative scientists in the 21st century, he didn't have the chance to receive some well material to study, but he still became talents and makes a big contribution to society. Our surrounding abounds with examples like that.

Another significant factor is Public relationship .It’s manifest（漂亮） that school is only a part of one's life, but the public relationship and communication is throughout all one's life. If the government wants to educate the individuals to become talents, absolutely, public relationship is a key factor. Moreover, in modern society, what can bring us more benefit is teamwork and the bound to maintain teamwork is the public relationship. Columbus cannot get to America only by himself. With the development of technology, increasing number of tasks become complex and need to use the knowledge from many different subjects. Imagine, a physicist needs to solve a task with some chemical problem but he didn't have a good relationship with other scientists, how can he solve this problem. What’s more, a country also needs to have a good relationship with other countries which plays a key role in improving a country as the globalization is developing all the time. Typically in economy, countries need to exchange goods to get what they want. For example, China exchanges clothes and daily necessities for iron from Australia.

Admittedly, improving schools will enable a country become successful. As if more advanced facilities can be offered to students, they will have a chance to receive a better education which will enhance the possibility that they will become talents. Through the Hope Project in China, more and more students can go to schools which will benefit their hometown.（这个让不段专门列出来显得有些多余。）

Judging from all evidence offered, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that improving schools is not the most significant factor. Though the advantages that improving schools leads to are considerable, it doesn't take the individuals themselves and the public relationship into consideration.

半夏破题点选得很好，很巧妙，用两个比较宏观的论点避免了许多细节的纠缠，值得学习。词句很好，意思表达到位，语言流畅。个别细节注意下就好了。

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2.20所学到的
factor --aspect--element---component
flourish
elevate a country’s competitive position around the world.
benevolent funds   慈善基金
evitable--inevitable
trivial or fatal不重要的，重要的
Education as a mirror for progress of society.
It is widely acknowledge that
Arabian Nights
melioration改进
it is indisputable 无可争辩
prerequisite 先决条件
indispensable part of 不可缺少的
unceasing  不停的

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2.21 Teachers should not show their political or social views known in the classroom.


In modern society, education has been one of the most debatable topics in people's life. According to the local media, many people talk about teachers' behavior at class and the issue of whether teachers should show their political or social views known in the classroom has been posed to people. Those who agree with the argument believe that if teacher show their political and social views in the classroom, children will know more about society. However, as far as I am concerned, teachers shouldn't do that as this behavior will mislead children and decrease the time which they should spend on teaching academic stuff.

To begin with, if teachers show their political and social views, it will mislead their students. It is obviously that most people have prejudice on social and political issues. Moreover, children have deeply respect on their teachers which means they will believe what their teachers said and they are too young to tell right from wrong. As a result, children will have the same bias on these issues. Imagine if this bias or prejudice is the opposite of society and children are the future of society, where is the future of society going to? What's more, different teachers have different opinions on the same thing, if all of the teachers tell the students their opinions and the students are too young to judge them, it will make them quiet confused which cannot contribute to their development.

Furthermore, the primary purpose of school is to teach academic stuff. When teachers show their political and social views or issues at class, it will decrease the time which they should spend on teaching academic stuff undoubtedly. Moreover, it will also distract the students' attention and also affect the consistency in teaching. A vivid example can be found from one of my teacher who would like to talk about some social news at class. The most frequent sentence he said during the class is where we left off last time. He even needed some time to think it back and then restart to talk about our lessons. But it is widely acknowledge that social news is more interesting than lessons. With this contrast, students prefer to listen to this news. In consequence, this will deeply distract the students' attention and make them study less efficiency.

Admittedly, showing political or social views will bring some advantages .Making people unity is one of them.  I remembered the article --the last lesson which was written by a French writer, it talked about that during the wartime, the teacher told his students to remember their country and language which will make people hold together and fight for their country.

Judging from all evidence offered, we may safely arrive at conclusion that teachers shouldn't show political and social views at class. Though the advantages that may lead to are considerable, they cannot compete with the benefits that not showing them, when teaching time and misleading effect are taken into account. With respect to these draw backs, I deem that teachers can recommend some books in this aspects for students which will make contributions to improve the situation.

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2.21半夏之比的作文修改

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2.21号作文修改----Nicole

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Advertisements make products seem better than they are.

According to the local media, nowadays many defects but in advertisements these products look really effective have been disclosed. As a result, the issue whether advertisements can make products seem better than they are sparks a heated discussion. Someone who objects to this opinion believes that people have already known that producers will use some methods to make their products look better, so they don’t believe them. Nonetheless, as far as I am concerned, I agree with this statement because of the advanced technology and the effect of famous super stars.



To begin with, with the development of technology, increasing numbers of methods can be used to make their products look better in the advertisements. In modern society, the most frequent way we can see the advertisement is through television in which we can't see the products by ourselves. In consequence, it provides the producers a chance to hide the defects with some special technology. Cite my own experience as an example. When I was at high school, there are many whelks on my face and I need to find a way to make them disappear. One day, I just saw some advertisements on the television which was introducing a product to solve this problem; they showed two pictures to display the effect of their products. When I saw this, I really believe their products were effective in this field, but actually, it was not. They just used the technology--Photoshop to make the consumers believe them. Our society abounds with these examples as the media can offer an opportunity for producers to use the advertisements to hide the defects.



Furthermore, nowadays, clearly, the effect of super stars in the advertisements is pretty common. Many people are just going after their idols especially teenagers. It is obviously that super stars have a deep influence on people in society. Precisely, their actions and words have the power which can lead people to do something. When they use some products or say that some brands or products are effective, most people will believe that and have the same opinion with them. According to the statistics, the research shows that super stars can facilitate the producers to sell more products, namely 30%.A vivid example can be found from a brand of sugar, after they hire a super star to represent their products, an increasing number people start to consume their products as consumers think their products with better quality.



Admittedly, the individuals have already known that some methods in advertisement and cheated by some producers. For instance, nowadays, just few people will believe what they see from the contrast photos as they have already known the Photoshop. Some lies will make the consumers cannot believe them and don't think their products are better than others.



Judging from all evidence offered, we may safely arrive a conclusion that advertisements can make their products look better. Moreover, I deem that the producers should improve the quality of their products and use some advertisements to promote sales at the same time which can finally increase their sales for a long time.



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03.02 It's better to watch serious movies to get deeper think or watch movies that amuse or entertain you.
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According to the local media, nowadays, people discuss why people are fond of watching movies. In consequence, the issue of which kind of movie can bring more benefits to people, serious movies or entertainment movies sparks a heated discussion. People who choose serious movies believe that people can obtain deeper thinking from that. Nonetheless, as far as I am concerned, I will choose entertainment movies as it can release our pleasure and provide an opportunity for family to get together.

To begin with, it’s obviously that watching entertainment movies will release people's pressure as it can make people laugh and forget some unhappy things. In modern society, in order to live a better life, people need to work harder than before attributing to increasing number of people competing with them. As a result, the pressure on their shoulder becomes heavier and heavier. The need to find a way to aid them self-control and reduce stress tends to be more and more obvious. Without doubt, watching funny movies is a method with many advantages, namely it can save money and time as you can just watch them at home. A vivid example can be found from one of my neighbors. She works quiet hard as she wants to buy a house in this city. In consequence, sometimes she needs to work until midnight. And at weekend, she merely goes outside while she stays at home to watch funny movies as she thinks it can bring her some entertainment and help her make a positive preparation for a new week. Our society abounds with these examples.

Furthermore, entertainment movies are suitable for the whole family watching them. It is manifest that nowadays people become busier and busier. There is very little time they can leave for their families. Moreover, when they have some spare time, they also need to use this period of time to rest. As a consequence, watching entertainment movies is an advantageous choice because people can spend this time with their families to enjoy the family time and also they can have a good rest at the same time. Cite my own experience as an example. My father is a lawyer, He is quiet busy and has a little time to spend with us. So, once he has some spare time, he will take my mother and I go to the theater to watch some funny movies. We all enjoy this happy and laughing time.

Admittedly, some serious movies can lead people to have a deeper thinking.  From some movies which introduce some disasters such as 2012 and the day after tomorrow, it will give warnings to human beings. We think over what we did to nature and avoid some same mistakes owing to watching these serious movies.

Judging from all evidence above, we may safely arrive a conclusion that it's better to watch entertainment movies. Though the benefits that serious movies bring about is considerable, it cannot compete with the advantages that entertainment movies lead to, when the functions of releasing pressure and staying with family are taking into account. With respect to the benefits that serious movie bringing about; I deem that if we have enough time, we can watch both of them which will improve this situation.

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According to the local media, nowadays, people discuss why people are fond of watching movies. （如果第一句改成，nowadays,people fod of watching movies衔接起来是不是要好呢）In consequence, the issue of which kind of movie can bring more benefits to people, serious movies or entertainment movies sparks a heated discussion. People who choose serious movies believe that people can obtain deeper thinking from that. Nonetheless, as far as I am concerned, I will choose entertainment movies as it can release our pleasure and provide an opportunity for family to get together.
（release our pleasure sounds weird…what about delight people）


To begin with, it’s (似乎看过书上说，不能简写的)obviously that watching entertainment movies will release people's pressure as it can make people laugh and forget some unhappy things. In modern society, in order to live a better life, people need to work harder than before attributing to increasing number of people competing with them. As a result, the pressure on their shoulder becomes heavier and heavier. The need to find a way to aid them self-control （selfcontrol is impropriated ）and reduce stress tends to be more and more obvious. Without doubt, watching funny movies is a method with many advantages, namely it can save money and time as you can just watch them at home. A vivid example can be found from one of my neighbors. She works quiet hard as she wants to buy a house in this city. In consequence, sometimes she needs to work until midnight. (如果上述两句合成一句效果更好，两句感觉有些重复的元素略显罗嗦)And at weekend, she merely goes outside while she stays at home to watch funny movies as she thinks it can bring her some entertainment and help her make a positive preparation for a new week. Our society abounds with these examples.



Furthermore, entertainment movies are suitable for the whole family watching them. It is manifest that nowadays people become busier and busier. There is very little time they can leave for their families. Moreover, when they have some spare time, they also need to use this period of time to rest. As a consequence, watching entertainment movies is an advantageous choice because people can spend this time with their families to enjoy the family time and also they can have a good rest at the same time. Cite my own experience as an example. My father is a lawyer, He is quiet busy and has a little time to spend with us. So, once he has some spare time, he will take my mother and I go to the theater to watch some funny movies. We all enjoy this happy and laughing time.



Admittedly, some serious movies can lead people to have a deeper thinking.
From some movies which introduce some disasters such as 2012 and the day after tomorrow, it will give warnings to human beings. We think over what we did to nature and avoid some same mistakes owing to watching these serious movies.( We think over avoid 改成avoiding吧？然后我也不太理解你为什么要写serious movies’ advantage)

Judging from all evidence above, we may safely arrive a conclusion that it's better to watch entertainment movies. Though the benefits that serious movies bring about is considerable,(are) it cannot compete with the advantages that entertainment movies lead to, when the functions of releasing pressure and staying with family are taking into account. With respect to the benefits that serious movie bringing about; I deem that if we have enough time, we can watch both of them which will improve this situation. 我也不太理解你为什么要写serious movies’ advantag

蓝色是我觉得特别好的句子，你写得真的很好了。。。蓝色应该很多，但是我懒得画了了。。加油！！

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03.02 It's better to watch serious movies to get deeper think or watch movies that amuse or entertain you.

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According to the local media, nowadays, people discuss why people are fond of watching movies. In consequence, the issue of which kind of movie can bring more benefits to people, serious movies or entertainment movies sparks a heated discussion. People who choose serious movies believe that people can obtain deeper thinking from that. Nonetheless, as far as I am concerned, I will choose entertainment movies as it can release喜欢这个词，我都要用bring用烂了~嘿嘿~~偷走了~~ our pleasure and provide an opportunity for family to get together. " ?) p+ O* S- T4 v. x7 _7 N
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To begin with, it’s obviously that watching entertainment movies will release people's pressure as it can make people laugh and forget some unhappy things. In modern society, in order to live a better life, people need to work harder than before attributing to increasing number of people competing with them. As a result, the pressure on their shoulder becomes heavier and heavier. The need to find a way to aid them self-control and reduce stress tends to be more and more obvious. Without doubt, watching funny movies is a method with many advantages, namely it can save money and time as you can just watch them at home. A vivid example can be found from one of my neighbors. She works quiet---拼写 hard as she wants to buy a house in this city. In consequence换个词哈，前面用过, sometimes she needs to work until midnight. And at weekend, she merely goes outside while she stays at home to watch funny movies as she thinks it can bring her some entertainment and help her make a positive preparation for a new week. Our society abounds with these examples.我觉得你这段论证需要电影放松论证的很好，但是例子觉得偏了，我觉得例子的重点在于funny movies比那种serious movies更怎样减压了，重点应该落回在movie，而你的例子还在论证前提，就是生活紧张需要减压。

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Furthermore, entertainment movies are suitable for the whole family watching them. It is manifest that nowadays people become busier and busier. There is very little time they can leave for their families. Moreover, when they have some spare time, they also need to use this period of time to rest. As a consequence, watching entertainment movies is an advantageous choice because people can spend this time with their families to enjoy the family time and also they can have a good rest at the same time. Cite my own experience as an example. My father is a lawyer, He is quiet busy and has a little time to spend with us. So, once he has some spare time, he will take my mother and I go to the theater to watch some funny movies. We all enjoy this happy and laughing time.问题跟上面类似，还有一个问题是，我觉得在前面这两点论证的时候对比太少了，虽然你下面有过度段，但是你整体都缺少对比。



Admittedly, some serious movies can lead people to have a deeper thinking.  From some movies which introduce some disasters such as 2012 and the day after tomorrow, it will give warnings to human beings. We think over what we did to nature and avoid some same mistakes owing to watching these serious movies.觉得这个让步段相当唐突，因为不切题。
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Judging from all evidence above, we may safely arrive a conclusion that it's better to watch entertainment movies. Though the benefits that serious movies bring about is considerable, it cannot compete with the advantages that entertainment movies lead to, when the functions of releasing pressure and staying with family are taking into account. With respect to the benefits that serious movie bringing about; I deem that if we have enough time, we can watch both of them which will improve this situation.

语言很好，学习个~~论证建议再斟酌下哈。我自己也是写了很久写不出来。一家之言~1

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受03之托的，看了一下真是不错，很难得的，加油撒

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26# nathanyc
谢谢nathan 和03~~

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According to the local media (Where exactly is YOUR 'local'? XD), nowadays many defects but in advertisements these products look really effective have been disclosed (I'm basically not getting this sentence at all. It seems to be a random assemble of two sentences: 'nowadays many defects have been disclosed' and 'in advertisements these products look really effective'.). As a result, the issue whether advertisements can make products seem better than they are sparks a heated discussion. Someone who objects to this opinion believes that people have already known that producers will use some methods to make their products look better, so they don’t believe them. Nonetheless, as far as I am concerned, I agree with this statement because of the advanced technology and the effect of famous super stars.

To begin with, with the development of technology, increasing numbers of methods can be used to make their (Whose?) products look better in the advertisements. In the modern society, the most frequent way by which we can see the advertisements is through television, in which we can't see the products by ourselves. In consequence, it provides the producers a chance to hide the defects with some special technology (This seems to imply that if you're able to see the actual products by yourselves, you'll be able to see the defects - I would pretty much doubt this. It'd be safer to say that TV ads make it HARDER to see defects.). Cite my own experience as an example. When I was at in high school, there were many whelks (You probably got this word through some online dictionary - but this is a medical term. The common meaning of 'whelk' is the edible French snail. The common word for that condition on your face is 'pimple', or 'acne'.) on my face and I needed to find a way to make them disappear. One day, I just saw some advertisements on the television which were introducing a product to solve this problem; they showed two pictures to display the effect of their products. When I saw this (If you used 'advertisements', then be consistent with the plural forms.), I really believed their products were effective in this field, but actually, it (Again, you were using 'products'.) was not. They just used the technology--Photoshop to make the consumers believe them. Our society abounds with these examples as the media can offer an opportunity for producers to use the advertisements to hide the defects (That example you gave is not really about a 'defect', which normally refers to a mechnical or electrical glitch. The kind of advertisements you have cited should be said to 'exaggerate their products' effectiveness' rather than to 'hide defects'.).

Furthermore, nowadays, clearly, (When you have three single words separated by commas, it's often a sign of an unorganized sentence.) the effect of super stars in the advertisements is pretty common. Many people, especially teenagers, are just going after their idols especially teenagers. It is obviously that super stars have a deep influence on people in the society. Precisely, their actions and words have the power which can to lead people to do something. When they use some products or say that some brands or products are effective, most people will believe that and have the same opinion with them. According to the statistics, the research (Which statistics and which research? Even if you do want to put in fake data, at least cite some reasonable sources.) shows that super stars can facilitate the producers (I finally realized that you have been using 'producers' to mean 'manufacturers'.) to sell more products, namely 30% (So every single product's sale will go up exactly 30% under the influence of a super star? That's the kind of fake data that is too generalized to be true.). A vivid example can be found from a brand of sugar (You could at least say '..a brand of sugar in my country', so that your example's validity is not floating in the thin air. Again, fake data and fake examples are extremely easy to detect for a seasoned reader: they tend to be very repetitive and do not provide many details other than those that are directly related to the topic in discussion, and whatever details they do provide tend to be very obscure.) : after they hire a super star to represent their products, an increasing number people start to consume their products as consumers think their products are of with better quality.

Admittedly, the individuals (Who?) have already known that some methods in advertisements and cheated by some producers (This is not a complete sentence.). For instance, nowadays, just few people will believe what they see from the contrast photos? as they have already known the Photoshop. Some lies will make the consumers cannot believe them and don't not think their products are better than others. (Such uses of negatives on verbs are very awkward to read. You should use direct negative verbs like 'distrust', or move the negative away from the verb like 'think their products are not better than others', as much as possible.)

Judging from all evidences offered, we may safely arrive at a conclusion that advertisements can make their products look better. Moreover, I deem that the producers should improve the quality of their products and use some advertisements to promote sales at the same time, which can finally increase their sales for a long time. (The question is not asking you about how to increase sales 'for a long time'. I understand you're trying to 升华, but to think that 升华 will make your essay appear deeper and more mature is a misconcept, because you'll never have the time or space to elaborate on your 升华 and illustrate your point well. An unillustrated and hurried point is no point at all, therefore this 升华 effectively amounts to nothing. Instead, it shows that you have no firm grasp on the actual question.)

总结：

这位童鞋你的语法，尤其是句法，要好好注意一下。句子写得很散，而且词序的使用非常中式，请多考虑句子的组织以提高流畅度。另外一个就是举例方面，考官一般不会管你的例子真假，但假例子因为有时它的问题不是假，是空，在内容上如果和你的topic没有太大的区别，在语言能力方面会让你受到限制。具体说就是像第二个论点（Furthermore那段）的那种，你翻来覆去就是在说product, sell, super star，前面论述的关键字是这些，例子的关键字还是这些，所以一看就是空例子，效果和没有例子一样。。其实如果题目没有特别叫你use specific examples的话，你索性连例子都可以不举的，这样的空例子举起来的效果还不如不举。所以就是要注意让自己的文章要一直言之有物。

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Do you agree or disagree that scientists should be responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries?
Nowadays, it is obviously that technology plays an increasingly crucial role in the development of society. At the same time, what new technology brings out can be divided as positive and negative part. The issue of whether scientists should be responsible for the negative impacts of their discoveries has sparked a heated discussion. As far as I am concerned, we cannot attribute the detrimental part to scientists.

To begin with, from my perspective, the negative effects of some inventions should be owing to the person who uses it rather than inventers. Scientists who invent their discoveries is out of positive hope, they don't want to harm anything but provide a simple method for people to deal with something. Moreover, the detrimental influence is not exerting by scientists but the person who use it such as manufacturers. With retrospect to history, in the industrial age, Watt, who improved the functions of steam engine, just wanted to provide people more effective machines and help them to live a better life. However, the manufactures used these advanced machines to make a large profit while effective measures should be taken before things get worse be them to protect the environment .It is manifest that if manufacturers take some actions to control contaminated materials which were emitted from steam engine, the Thames in UK wouldn't be so polluted. Our society abounds with these examples. The merchants and manufacturers utilize these new technologies in a wrong way and don't spend any money to control the negative parts.

Furthermore, the consequence of scientists is responsible for the negative effects of their discoveries are horrible. Imagine that if we attribute the negative part to scientists and blame them, who will invent or discover new things for us which will be so much conveniences for our life? There is no denying that everything has two sides and there is not such a thing with perfect functions. If we ask our scientists with this requirement, it is so tough for them to work and will decrease their will or even push them to give up inventing or discovering something new.

Judging from all evidences above, we may safely arrive at a conclusion that we cannot complain about out scientists due to the negative impacts of their discoveries. With respect to these drawbacks, I deem that we should encourage and provide better working conditions for scientists .At the mean time, we should make more laws and regulations to control the actions of manufacturers and teach them how to use the new technology correctly.

第二个分论点实在想不出例子了，那位筒子能帮我想一个.........

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