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7.10Many teachers assign homework to students every day. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

When I am in high school, I spend every night to finish my updating homework. I was confused that I hardly had time to hang out with my parents and friends, also had no time to develop my interests which may be harm to my future. Personally speaking, I have three arguments to cast doubt on the statement that teacher should assign homework to students every day.
First of all, students are not made of iron which means they need rest from daily hard work. According to a survey conducted by experts, more than 85.4 percents of high school students sleep less than 5 hours, which may cause the descent of speed of response and harm for thinking ability.
So more homework leads to less sleeping time and then cause obstacle of learning and then teacher may assign more and more homework. This is a vicious circle.
Furthermore, there's another fact that deserve some words here. Every students have their own interests besides the subjects they study at school, such as painting, singing, dancing and playing chess. There maybe some students have the talent and interests of painting, but the have to finish their homework first which leave no time for enjoying Van Gogh's impressive oil painting.
Last but not least, quantity does not mean efficiency. There are countless exercise for homework, students only needed to take the essence of them instead finish all of them which is impossible. For instance, if students can finish basic exercise well then teacher should give them advance exercise instead of same level homework every day. So doing same level exercises every day may be less efficient than doing different level exercises very other day.
Taking account of all the facts, we can safely draw the conclusion that it is not necessary and wise that teachers assign homeworks to students every day for rest , interests and efficiency.

第一次发帖，请大家多多指教。水平很菜，大家多多拍砖！我能顶得住。

leiqin1521UID: 2735936

When I am in high school, I spend every night to finish my updating homework. (不清楚这里该用什么句型？一般过去时还是？？)I was confused that I hardly had time to hang out with my parents and friends, also had no time to develop my interests which may be harm to my future(这个兴趣爱好应该是对你将来有好处的，good for my future). Personally speaking, I have three arguments to cast doubt on the statement that teacher should assign homework to students every day.

词汇句型都很好啊，简明扼要，那个updating用的很好。

First of all, students are not made of iron which means they need rest from daily hard work（study会不会更贴切？）. According to a survey conducted by experts, more than 85.4 percents of high school students sleep less than 5 hours（a day）, which may cause the descent of speed of response（reaction speed） and harm for thinking ability. cSo more homework leads to less sleeping time and then cause obstacle of learning and then teacher may assign more and more homework. This is a vicious circle.(老师布置更多作业这句，之前可以来个过度，这样就不会太突兀，比如可以说一般情况下，作业做得越不好，老师会给更多的homework以提高学生的能力，这样将使得学生的休息时间更少，会比较完整的扣住中心)

对不起，对词的搭配不过关，你自己可以订正哦。另外，整段大部分都是小观点，且逻辑性很强。注意要紧扣need more rest的中心

Furthermore, there's another fact that deserve （单数）some words here. Every students （单数）have their own interests besides the subjects they study at school, such as painting, singing, dancing and playing chess. There maybe some students have the talent and interests of painting, but the（they） have to finish their homework first which leave no time for enjoying Van Gogh's impressive oil painting。

很好。个人觉得在很好Furthermore之后就紧跟自己的分论点，简短的，然后展开。

Last but not least, quantity does not mean efficiency. There are countless exercise（复数） for homework, students only needed to take the essence of them instead finish all of them which is impossible.（这里可以说老师应该布置那些最重要的知识点和精华的内容给学生当作业，强调老师应该，这样和题目更相符） For instance, if students can finish basic exercise well then teacher should give them advance exercise instead of same level homework every day. So doing same level exercises every day may be less efficient than doing different level exercises very other day（这两句和你的分论点quantity does not mean efficiency关系不是很密切，可以放在最后作为让步句）

Taking account of all the facts, we can safely draw the conclusion that it is not necessary and wise that teachers assign homeworks （单数）to students every day for rest , interests and efficiency.
这一段不错，没问题。

觉得你的语言功底不错，用词组句，过渡都不错，值得学习！需要多在组织上花点时间，一定会突飞猛进的！
第一次写已经很不错了，一起加油啊！

水平有限，评的不好见谅。

zmselfnatureUID: 2466965

7.10号修改by随风，见附件

哦，关于如何传附件，我听说是要发一定量的帖子后才会有这个功能，这个在高级功能里，最左下角有个'添加附件的按钮‘点击后上传附件就可以了哈！

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4# zmselfnature
谢谢修改和建议！

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7.13 作业
Topic：It’s better to watch serious movies that help people think than to watch movies that could amuse and entertain people
There are many kinds of movies, serious movie, action movie ,romance, comedy and so on. When I was a child, I prefer comedy than serious movie for its entertainment. As I am growing, I found that watching serious movie not only amuse people but also leave people serious subject that require deep thinking.
The most important reason of my argument is that we learn deep meaning of life showed by directors in the serious movies. A good serious movie makes a positive contribution to our altitude toward life. For instance, The Pursuit of Happyness teach me that never give up pursuing happiness and chasing dream and the happiness is in the process of your pursuit. Very time when I feel frustrated , the line "it is an i in happiness, no y in happiness."encourage me to move on. So I always get energy and motivation for life from serious movies.
Furthermore, there is no truth in the idea that people can not have fun when they watching serious movie. We may not have as loud laughter as we are involved in a comedy when we watching a serious movie, however, we may feel content deep in ourselves' heart for the happy ending or main character's struggle for life. In a word, we get two benefits from one thing ,which is entertainment and education function when we watching serious movie.
Comedy , though, may amuse and entertain people that are tied of daily work, there maybe a better way to relax and have some fun. Comedy make people totally relax so that people sitting into a comfortable sofa , grabbing much chips or a can of coke. That is a very bad way to relax which may cause people getting fat and lead to serious disease.
As far as I am concerned, the original mean of movie is to express thoughts of life or the world as well as having fun. From the previous arguments as I mentioned, we may safely draw the conclusion that it has more benefits to watch serious movie that help people to think than watch movies amuse and entertain people.

leiqin1521UID: 2735936

There are many kinds of movies, serious movie, action movie, romance, comedy and so on. When I was a child, I prefer comedy than serious movie for its entertainment. As I am growing, I found that watching serious movie not only amuse people but also leave people serious subject that require deep thinking.

看完笑笑的再看你的觉得舒服多了：）不过本来写的就比较舒服。不错！

The most important reason of my argument is that we learn deep meaning of life showed by directors in the serious movies. A good serious movie makes a positive contribution to our altitude（attitude） toward life（这里不能只说good serious movie，不然就使另一部分的serious movie看似不能起到这样的作用。可以说serious movies often/ always make）. For instance, The Pursuit of Happyness teaches me that never give up pursuing happiness and chasing dream and the happiness is in the process of your pursuit. Very （Every）time when I feel frustrated , the line "it is an i in happiness, no y in happiness." encourage me to move on. So I always get energy and motivation for life from serious movies.

这个例子很生动，让人记忆深刻。这是你的有点，记得上次的作文，你的例子就很好。。。

Furthermore, there is no truth in the idea that people can not have fun when they watching serious movie. We may not have as loud laughter as we are involved in a comedy when we watching a serious movie, however, we may feel content deep in ourselves' heart for the happy ending or main character's struggle for life. In a word, we get two benefits from one thing ,which is entertainment and education function when we watching serious movie.这句表达值得学习

这个分论点说的很好啊，如果同样能举个例子就更好。



Comedy , though, may amuse and entertain people that are tied（tired） of daily work, there maybe a better way to relax and have some fun. Comedy make people totally relax so that people sitting into a comfortable sofa , grabbing much chips or a can of coke. That is a very bad way to relax which may cause people getting fat and lead to serious disease.

这一段不评，因为我也不知道好不好，也许是精彩，只是我没有见过这样的写法，还是请教高人给你看看吧，有了结果告诉我啊！！！！！

As far as I am concerned, the original mean of movie is to express thoughts of life or the world as well as having fun. From the previous arguments as I mentioned, we may safely draw the conclusion that it has more benefits to watch serious movie that help people to think than watch movies amuse and entertain people.

Fine

小X第二次改你的作文。是篇不错的作文，需要改进的写在上面了，继续！

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7# leiqin1521
恩，谢谢修改！
倒数第二段我是想写个让步段，因为想不到什么正面的理由了。

zenglingyuanUID: 2773905

不好意思昨天一天都去实践去了 现在才打上来
Topic：It’s better to watch serious movies that help people think than to watch movies that could amuse and entertain people
There are many kinds of movies, serious movie, action movie ,romance, comedy and so on. When I was a child, I prefer comedy than serious movie for its entertainment. As I am growing, I found that watching serious movie not only amuse people but also leave people serious subject that require deep thinking. （开篇用具体例子很好 但还是明确提出你的观点最好 下面你要说的到底是哪种）The most important reason of my argument is that we learn deep meaning of life showed by directors in the serious movies. A good serious movie makes a positive contribution to our altitude toward life. For instance, The Pursuit of Happyness（我也很喜欢这部片子，不过这算serious movies 吗 我不确定） teach me that（缺陈分 宾语从句要完整）you should never give up pursuing happiness and chasing dream and(which) the happiness is in the process of your pursuit. Very time(?) when I feel frustrated , the line "it is an i in happiness, no y in happiness."没怎么看懂encourage me to move on. So I always get energy and motivation for life from serious movies
Furthermore, there is no truth in the idea that people can not have fun when they watching serious movie. We may not have as loud laughter as we are involved in a comedy when we watching a serious movie, however, we may feel content deeply in ourselves' heart for the happy ending or main character's struggle for life. In a word, we get two benefits from one thing ,which is  (have )entertainment and education function when we watching serious movie.
Comedy , though, may amuse and entertain people that are （?没懂，可以用from）tied of daily work, there maybe a better way to relax and have some fun. Comedy make people totally relax so that people sitting into a comfortable sofa , grabbing much chips or（drink） a can of coke. That is a very bad way to relax which may cause people getting fat and lead to serious disease.让步 不错
As far as I am concerned, the original mean of movie is to express thoughts of life or the world as well as having fun. From the previous arguments as I mentioned, we may safely draw the conclusion that it has more benefits to watch serious movie that help people to think than watch movies amuse and entertain people.
不错基本都没有错，但注意下句子的完整 结构很清晰 加油！

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期待你的宝贵意见
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10# zenglingyuan
对不起，改晚了！真不好意思！

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7.15people should live in the city or country all life instead of moving to another place.
In the time of quickened urbanization process, a majority of youngster leave for big and prosperous city to earn money support themselves. They want the pursuit of new experience, however , they ignore that new cities mean strangeness, struggles and a mount of cost.
First and foremost, life in a familiar city is more easier and convenient than it is in a strange city. There are some thing you should foresee. When at the first step into a new city , you are isolated with local citizens because of the dialect. It hampers you getting into the city. For instance, even in a international modern city like Shanghai, there is dialect everywhere---conversation between citizens, commercial advertisements in subway and shopping mall---- which confuse foreigners. You, whereas , can understand every conversation, every advertisement, even every joke in familiar city, which enable you to have an access to sense of belonging.
Furthermore, there is nobody can help you when you are in a dilemma in a new city for strangeness. Every thing depends on yourself struggles. It is a strenuous mission to find a new job in a strange place , in addition, competing with local citizens who have stable apartment after all. In a new city, you have to start at bottom place of every thing, an apartment,a job, friends and even style of life. Sometimes, change is not always good. It require hard work.
Additionally, moving to a new place is also a financially burden. Once moving to a new place , people have to find an apartment to live, which require a lot of money deriving from a new job. Also, departed with parents and friends, you have to spend extra money connecting with them in a regular time. While, in the familiar place you have a stable job and apartment, which cost a little. Most important thing is you have more time spending with parents and friends.
Personally speaking, with convenience , coziness and economical cost, why should we move to another place to live all life?

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In the time of quickened urbanization process, a majority of youngster leave for big and prosperous city to earn money （to）support themselves. They want the pursuit of new experience, however , they ignore that new cities mean strangeness, struggles and a mount of cost. # |. p# k4 y) I - y9 X  m; X First and foremost, life in a familiar city is more easier and convenient than it is in a strange city. There are some things you should foresee. When at the first step into a new city , you are isolated with local citizens because of the dialect. It hampers you getting into the city. For instance, even in a international modern city like Shanghai, there is dialect everywhere---conversation between citizens, commercial advertisements in subway and shopping mall---- which confuse foreigners. You, whereas , can understand every conversation, every advertisement, even every joke in familiar city, which enable you to have an access to sense of belonging. Furthermore, there is nobody that can help you when you are in a dilemma in a new city for strangeness. Every thing depends on yourself struggles. It is a strenuous mission to find a new job in a strange place , in addition, competing with local citizens who have stable apartment after all. In a new city, you have to start at bottom place of every thing, an apartment,a job, friends and even style of life. Sometimes, change is not always good. It require hard work.# _5 [2 _4 o7 ?  K. |$ ^# B( t Additionally, moving to a new place is also a financially (finanical)burden. Once moving to a new place , people have to find an apartment to live, which requires a lot of money deriving from a new job. Also, departed with parents and friends, you have to spend extra money connecting with them in a regular time. While, in the familiar place you have a stable job and apartment, which cost a little. Most important thing is you have more time spending with parents and friends./ O: c0 z9 n) a4 s  |, f Personally speaking, with convenience , coziness and economical cost, why should we move to another place to live all life?

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7.17All students should be required to take basic science classes even if they are not this major.
Obviously science has been firmly rooted in modern people's daily life. All products of high technology that we rely on are based on basic science. So I am always amazed that people approve the absurd idea which indicate that not all students should be required to take basic science classed.The reasons are listed as following.
To begin with, if it were not for basic science, people might be more and more foolish. It is the basic science that enable people to have an access to the natural rules. For instance, in ancient times, our ancestors feared for nature. Every time when the solar eclipse happened, our ancestors all cried for the disappearance of great sun because they thought it was a giant dog in the sky who eat the sun. As the science showed ,solar eclipse is merely a normal science phenomenon. Even in modern times, some elders may be deceived by simple scientific tricks because of lake of basic science knowledge. In shot, knowing some basic science is one of the qualities that most intelligent creature in the world should require.
The second reason is as equal important as the first one. Learning basic science is more than acquiring basic knowledge about natural rules. It also trains students to gain a more rational and more diverse way to solve problems that confronted in the future. Students major in liberal arts, such as literature, history and art, maybe sensitive and emotional, however, after learning science they may become rational and justice. It is good for their development in every aspects.
Furthermore, the world is a whole, so every aspect is connected to each other. Naturally, science can not be separated from other majors. To some extent , learning basic science can inspire the inspiration of students majored in liberal art. For example, development of optics is the main reason of the appearance of impressionism.
To sum up, it has more advantages than disadvantages that all students should be required to take basic science classes even if they are not this major.

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不好意思，这两天太忙，一直没改，先mark一下，争取今天晚上或者明天白天改。