=七月流火=小组第4次小组作业 issue 17 by maggiegu1019

maggiegu1019UID: 2683879

TOPIC: ISSUE17 - "There are two types of laws: just and unjust. Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and, even more importantly, to disobey and resist unjust laws."
WORDS: 503
TIME: 00:44:47
DATE: 2009-8-26 17:04:02

Somebody maintains that the individuals in the society has a accountability to distinguish the just laws and unjust laws, and obey the just ones . In some occasion ,it is sounds reasonable. Nevertheless, under most circumstances, we have no choices since that are the laws which is the representation and guarantee of our contemporary civilization.


Defining
the ''just and unjust" is a complicated and tough mission for each of us ,for the reason that the definition varies from diversified individuals, who
enjoy different backgrounds, traditions ,values and society status. It is "just" to somebody, while when it comes to a different person there will be another story. For instance ,before the civil war the white farmer's in south American were allowed to own black people as slaves, which not only give privileges to white people but also forfeited the human rights of black people. To this law, the white people may consider that it is just ,and the black people will side on the opposite.

Laws are the basic principles and criterions of our contemporary society since the dawn of our civilization. It symbolized the culture of our society and considered as the inevitable episode of our civilization, what is more, it serves as the embodiment of human creativity. A society without laws is unimaginable cruel and dark. Even, on certain occasion, the law is contradicted with our moral standards, there still exists no excuse for disobeying the law. A case in point is the case of O. J. Simpson. Though he was claimed innocent by the lawyers employed for his defense and the immunity to the guilt of murdering justified by the jury, he was labeled as a murdered by the majority of the public. To make the public stable and smooth, the President Clinton claimed that no matter whether the trial is in accordance with the reality, it is made by our laws, which is second to none in our society.

Admittedly, there do exists some laws is in accordance with our society for the reason that they do not advance with times. If the laws do not advance with our civilization and boom, there will run a risk of driving our society to a dead end. The Abraham Lincoln is considered as one of the greatest leader in the history for leading the triumph of the Civil War and emancipating the African Americans and slaves. The abolition of the law serves as a catalyst to accomplish a great nation in the world now, in where the freedom and liberty is highly approved and respected by all the people.

In this sense, undoubted it is a responsibility of everybody to obey the laws, though some laws do conceive certain flaws and should be refined, it can not be considered as the excuse for somebody to violate the laws. To make our society stable and prosperity, the laws should be refined as the development and civilization, by virtue of which will bring benefits to both individuals and the society as a whole.

ianking7368UID: 2655993

我来谈谈看法吧，我觉得能在45分钟内写出这样的文章已经很好了。
只是在思路上有一个建议： 各段之间缺乏逻辑连接关系。
可以这样说： 第二段谈 关于正义不正义是很难定义的， 所以， 在第三段里写人们不能因为所谓法律不正义而反对它， 原因是。。。 然后，第四段说， 尽管我们不能不遵守法律，但法律也要更具时代的变化而改变。
各段之间加上几句表示关系的话， 这样文章的逻辑会更清楚一些。

这只是个人观点，请多包涵
加油：）

1# maggiegu1019

dongzhi428UID: 2556730

TOPIC: ARGUMENT17 - The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Walnut Grove town newspaper.

"Walnut Grove's town council has advocated switching from EZ Disposal (which has had the contract for trash collection services in Walnut Grove for the past ten years) to ABC Waste, because EZ recently raised its monthly fee from $2,000 to $2,500 a month, whereas ABC's fee is still $2,000. But the town council is mistaken; we should continue using EZ. EZ collects trash twice a week, while ABC collects only once. Moreover, EZ-which, like ABC, currently has a fleet of 20 trucks-has ordered additional trucks. Finally, EZ provides exceptional service: 80 percent of respondents to last year's town survey agreed that they were 'satisfied' with EZ's performance."
WORDS: 522
TIME: 00:30:00
DATE: 2009-8-26 11:15:32

Resting on insufficient evidence of the EZ has a better service, supposing that the more expensive the better service, then synthesizing the two assumptions together with a survey provided by EZ, the arguer recommends that the EZ Disposal should be still used while not ABC Waste. The argument is fraught with vague, oversimplified and unwarranted assumptions.开头简洁, 我用的是复杂开头目的是顺一下各个缺陷 可参考我的8.27的作业

In the first place, the insufficient evidence provided in the argument fails to lend a solid validate .No evidence provided in the argument can support that the EZ Disposal is better than ABC Waste. EZ Disposal clean twice a week does not mean a better choice for the reason that the waste in the town may be not numerous to a point where cleaning twice is necessary. May be just one time per week to collect the waste is enough. The 20 trucks and ordered additional trucks provided to suppose that EZ Disposal is a proper choice for our town, while it unreasonable. Since no evidence show how many cars the ABC company has, even the amount of EZ cars is really larger than that of ABC Waste, it does not mean a better service, may be the EZ's business is covered the city while ABC is only a town company which only take charge the business in our town. Perhaps the EZ has 20 cars while only used for our town, in contrast the ABC has two trucks totally and both the two trucks are used to serve our town. In that, the arguer cannot draw a conclusion that the EZ Disposal is better than ABC Waste.

In the second place, the argument commits a fallacy of casual relationship. The lower in price cannot(这个毛病一定要改) be considered as the prerequisite(好大的词 不知道这么用好不好呵呵) to worse services. There exists no direct relationship between the two elements. There exists a possibility that the EZ Disposal increase their fees only for the reason that they are lacking of competition and consider they themselves are already committed and accepted by the local people. Besides, perhaps the ABC is a company newly running, to share market the ABC offer better service with lower price. Therefore, this assumption provided by the arguer is not convincing. 这段论点我觉有误,作者没有说因为价格高所以好,或者我漏读了?你再回去看看然后告诉我。


In the third place, the argument rests
(单三也是我的大问题)on an unscientific, unwarranted survey. Therefore, the result will be inaccurate and open to question. The arguer considers EZ provide exceptional service, while nothing about ABC Waste is presented. Maybe ABC also has these services, which are even better and broader than EZ Disposal. The arguer do not show what questions were asked in the survey than we cannot evaluate what is the 'satisfied' means, maybe the questions are nothing about their service. It is still possible that the respondents of the EZ are not random selection and the amount of respondents is not large enough, in this sense the result will be lacking of statistical significant and unconvincing.


As it stands, the argument is not well reasoned .To make it logically acceptable, more evidence should be presented to demonstrate the EZ do provide better service than ABC Waste and the extra 500 dollars is valuable for a better service.
字数有点多 真的是在30分写完的么?我觉得留点时间给检查比较好 我顶多写到400字呵呵惭愧~~~



TOPIC: ISSUE17 - "There are two types of laws: just and unjust. Every individual in a society has a responsibility to obey just laws and, even more importantly, to disobey and resist unjust laws."
WORDS: 503
TIME: 00:44:47
DATE: 2009-8-26 17:04:02

Somebody maintains that the individuals in the society has a accountability to distinguish the just laws and unjust laws, and obey the just ones. In some occasion, it is sounds reasonable. Nevertheless, under most circumstances, we have no choices since that are the laws, which is the representation and guarantee of our contemporary civilization.


Defining the ''just and unjust" is a complicated and tough mission for each of us, for the reason that the definition varies from diversified individuals, who enjoy different backgrounds, traditions, values and society status. It is "just" to somebody, while when it comes to a different person there will be another story. For instance, before the civil war the white farmer's in South American这个应该是南美的意思吧 不过好象也对
were allowed to own black people as slaves, which not only give privileges to white people but also forfeited the human rights of black people. To this law, the white people may consider that it is just, and the black people will side on the opposite.

Laws are the basic principles and criterions of our contemporary society since the dawn of our civilization. It symbolized the culture of our society and considered as the inevitable episode of our civilization,
what is more, it serves as the embodiment of human creativity. A society without laws is unimaginable cruel and dark. Even, on certain occasion, the law is contradicted with our moral standards, there still exists no excuse for disobeying the law. A case in point is the case of O. J. Simpson. Though he was claimed innocent by the lawyers employed for his defense and the immunity to the guilt of murdering justified by the jury, he was labeled as a murdered by the majority of the public. To make the public stable and smooth, the President Clinton claimed that no matter whether the trial is in accordance with the reality, it is made by our laws, which is second to none in our society.

Admittedly, there do exists some laws is in accordance with our society for the reason that they do not advance with times. If the laws do not advance with our civilization and boom, there will run a risk of driving our society to a dead end. The Abraham Lincoln is considered as one of the greatest leader in the history for leading the triumph of the Civil War and emancipating the African Americans and slaves. The abolition of the law serves as a catalyst to accomplish a great nation in the world now, in where the freedom and liberty is highly approved and respected by all the people.

In this sense, undoubted it is a responsibility of everybody to obey the laws, though some laws do conceive certain flaws and should be refined, it cannot be considered as the excuse for somebody to violate the laws. To make our society stable and prosperity, the laws should be refined as the development and civilization, by virtue of which will bring benefits to both individuals and the society as a whole.

写的很好了 敬佩ing
不要给自己太大压力了呵呵~ 时间紧张就不细分析 我觉得你的文章拿到平均4分没有任何问题,因为我在冲4(相当远那) 也不好多加评论 继续努力吧哈哈

maggiegu1019UID: 2683879

3# dongzhi428

Walnut Grove's town council has advocated switching from EZ Disposal (which has had the contract for trash collection services in Walnut Grove for the past ten years) to ABC Waste, because EZ recently raised its monthly fee from $2,000 to $2,500 a month, whereas ABC's fee is still $2,000.

这句话就是说因为ABC 便宜所以选择了ABC,而题目作者认为应该选EZ。一下解释的一系列里有都是证明多花的500刀是值得的，多花500刀服务就好~~~· 而我们的观点是要证明作者的观点是错误的， 基于此我提出，不一定花钱越多服务越好~~~你认为我这个解释可行么？？

maggiegu1019UID: 2683879

2# ianking7368
谢谢，你说的有理，各段之间有点脱节，我去攒点句型，弥补一下:)