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Nowadays, with the rapid development of modern transportation facilities, people are becoming more and more likely not to confine themselves in a certain location. So there’s a general controversy on whether people should live in the city or country all life instead of moving to another place. Well, in my perspective, instead of sticking to one place, moving to another place will certainly do us some good in some aspects.
To begin with, moving to another city could broaden your horizon and give you more chances both on your work and on your life. For instance, if you go to a different place, you can be aware of the place and become familiar with the people there. So you will gain more knowledge and make many new friends there, which could assist you in your future career. In addition, in contrary to the previous environment may seem boring to you, a bran-new circumstance will infuse you with more ambition and inspiration, which will give you a new start in life.
Secondly, moving to another place can improve my capability of managing my personal affairs. Take my experience as an example. I haven’t left my hometown before I go for my college education. So, while I’m involved in all kinds of things when I was a freshman, I became totally frustrated. Actually, I just had the kind of emotion that I was not capable to handle the circumstance. As a result, I didn’t wangt to be on my campus at that time. Comparatively speaking, those students who have been to many places and live on their own, they will be quite familiar with those affairs and not have many problems.
In sum, as illustrated above, moving to another place does do us a lot of benefits. It’s high time that we moved to other places and enjoy a different life.

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Nowadays, with the rapid development of modern transportation facilities, people are becoming more and more likely not to confine themselves in a certain location(貌似第一句话没什么因果联系啊). So there’s a general controversy on whether people should live in the city or country all life instead of moving to another place. Well, in my perspective, instead of sticking to one place, moving to another place will certainly do us some good in some aspects.  l2
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To begin with, moving to another city could broaden your horizon and give you more chances both on your work and on your life. For instance, if you go to a different place, you can be aware of the place and become familiar with the people there. So you will gain more knowledge and make many new friends there, which could assist you in your future career. In addition, in contrary to the previous environment （差个which/that）may seem boring to you, a bran-new circumstance will infuse you with more ambition and inspiration, which will give you a new start in life.7 {9 v% }9 ^6 z9 s

Secondly, moving to another place can improve my capability of managing my personal affairs. Take my experience as an example. I haven’t left my hometown before I go for my college education. So, while I’m involved in all kinds of things when I was a freshman, I became totally frustrated. Actually, I just had the kind of emotion that I was not capable to handle the circumstance. As a result, I didn’t wangt to be on my campus at that time. Comparatively speaking, （差个to）those students who have been to many places and live on their own, they will be quite familiar with those affairs and not have many problems. % s, D# n: X% }0 G0 R) G# b

In sum, as illustrated above, moving to another place does do us a lot of benefits. It’s high time that we moved to other places and enjoy a different life. 6 C( K& `' B7 p' J# g6

没什么大问题啊，很流畅，不过看起来字数好像少了点
文章很formal ，格式是标准的，呵呵