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发表于 2009-10-21 23:37:19 |显示全部楼层
10.21 有很多钱不工作的人都不快乐,你支持否
people who are very rich and do not work are not happy?
People in majority may have ever had a daydream that what we would do with a sum of money when we became a millionaire one day. Undoubtedly they will decide to give up work and enjoy the leisure time all day when tired of the fierce competitive working condition. Contrary to the idea of most people is my disagreement with the opinion that people will not happy even without shortage of money.
It is true that people owning a substantial amount of money could satisfy all their material needs which nowadays people are admiring of. What's more, some people put money as the most important thing in their life even superior to his work, and family members. Therefore, the so-called theory that people are considered as successful ones if they could earn enough money is untenable. However, as far as I am concerned, money is a must for basic living but will never be only thing of importance to me. People with enough money will unnecessarily happy when mentalism is taken into consideration which is more concerned to me. There are several reasons as follows.
People would like to be self-recognized during the periods of working. They want to make their capacities used in their work, in this way to demonstrate that they are useful and significant to others. That's why regular work staffs in a manufactory are still quite happy with mediate incoming. That's also why some Emperors in Chinese history are depressed all day despite of possessing unprecedured power and treasure.
People work because they are accustomed to the cooperative environment in the factory where they could talk and joke with each other. Working in this way to some extent shows their existence in the world especially to the elderly. A former manager who retired from a famous company might have a lot of money, but we could see from our society that they could not resist of the lonely life at home and are eager for continuing work in the company. They believe that working could make them happy.
In summary, for the reasons above, I want to make the conclusion that people are not necessarily happy without working even though they are quite rich. mental enjoyment currently become the first consideration when the material life standard is improved.



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10.22 The parents do not understand their children as well today as parents understood their children 50 years ago

Parents generally hold that current children are living a much happier life than them in the past. Therefore, they proudly claim that they care and understand their children more. Contrary to the idea of most parents is my agreement that parents do not understand their children as well today as parents understood their children 50 years ago.

It is true that children acquire more opportunities of better education which parents provide. Strictly comply with national policies, parents nowadays give fewer children than ever before. In this point, they could pay more attention to one or two children, while, parents 50 years ago with 3 or 4, or more kids, are unable to give their concern to each child. Currently, children accept board education, they learn all types of arts, such piano, painting, dancing and so on. It seems that kids get more parents attention. However, it does not, in any way mean that parents understand their children more. The opinion as below could support my statement.

Adults are more busy than ever before. Even though money are paid to children's education, children are unnecessarily understood by their children. Parents are suffering so huge pressure from high-paced societies that they could not spare enough time to communicate with their children. Thus, the situation that children are locked in home to do homework or watch TV by themselves and parents go out to work happens a lot. It is recently reported that present children as national future bone, have more psychological problems such as than that 50 years ago which strongly affect our social future.

On the other hand, children in present are exposed to all healthy and unhealthy information from TV and Internet. Children's thoughts are more likely to be out of parents' control. For example, children are fond of pop music and take it as a relaxed way, while old parents might consider that listening to it will harm affect their schooling. Children would like to browse the Internet which are flooded with rich information we could not get it from textbooks, however, parents could not feel at ease and allow them to use it often when take some negative information- porn movies and violent movie, as consideration.

In summary, for the reasons discussed above, I want to make the conclusion that parents are not understand children as well today as parents understood their children 50 years ago. we know that children's problems leave our parents more to be deserved. We also want decision maker of national department concerned  take steps to deal with them.

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10.22 The parents do not understand their children as well today as parents understood their children 50 years ago

Parents generally hold that current children are living a much happier life than them in the past. Therefore, they[新的句子里感觉they太多了] proudly claim that they care and understand their children more. Contrary to the idea of most parents is my agreement that parents do not understand their children as well today as parents understood their children 50 years ago,

It is true that children acquire more opportunities of better education which parents provide. Strictly comply with national policies, parents nowadays give fewer children than ever before. In this point, they could pay more attention to one or two children, while, parents 50 years ago with 3 or 4, or more kids, are unable to give their concern to each child. Currently, children accept board education, they learn all types of arts, such【as】 piano, painting, dancing and so on. It seems that kids get more parents attention. However, it does not, in any way mean that parents understand their children more. The opinion as below could support my statement.

Adults are more busy than ever before. Even though money are paid to children's education, children are unnecessarily understood by their children感觉比较绕,我都不行了,更不要说ets那帮孙子了 Parents are suffering so huge pressure from high-paced societies that they could not spare enough time to communicate with their children. Thus, the situation that children are locked in home to do homework or watch TV by themselves and parents go out to work happens a lot. It is recently reported that present children as national future bone【/】, have more psychological problems such as than that 50 years ago which strongly affect our social future.感觉在说现在的父母不会理解他们的孩子的* Y' {% g' P0 k1 Y

On the other hand, children in present are exposed to all healthy and unhealthy information【all the information no matter ...】 from TV and Internet. Children's thoughts are more likely to be out of parents' control. For example, children are fond of pop music and take it as a relaxed way, while old parents might consider that listening to it will harm[词性不对吧] affect their schooling. Children would like to browse the Internet which are flooded with rich information we could not get it from textbooks, however, parents could not feel at ease and allow them to use it often when take some negative information- porn movies and violent movie, as consideration

In summary, for the reasons discussed above, I want to make the conclusion that parents are not understand children as well today as parents understood their children 50 years ago. we know that children's problems leave our parents more to be deserved. We also want decision maker of national department concerned  take steps to deal with them.

不错不错,不过看了你的和小鸟同学的,发现你们的例子有惊人的相似之处,我在怀疑是不是我对题目的理解错了,写跑偏了。。。
你的作文挺有内容的,而且结构热非常好,向你学习!

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发表于 2009-10-23 23:48:40 |显示全部楼层
10.23 大学应不应该要求所有的学生都学习除了本国文化以外的文化?
" Mom, I don't like to learn the course of foreign history " said by me in my childhood. My mather explain to me how Learning foreign history and culture is necessary. Nowadays, I still strongly approve of mother's suggestion. With respect to university students who are considered as high-educated talent, they surely should grasp such kind of knowledge.

It is, to some extent, understandable that to master a foreign culture is useless when the following things are taken into consideration. Our own cultrue are rich and long-lasting, which might take us a whole life to study and master. However, personal time is precious and limitted, we have no time to grasp the knowledge of our own culture, no less than stduy oversea culture. In addition, essential for university students although knowing foreign culture is, it will has no practical benifits if we have no opportunity to go abroad or contact with foreigners.

Considerable although the reasons listed above is, it does not in any way mean that we should not study it at all. On the first hand, learning foreign culture is the mainstream due to the globalization. People make business or academic exchanges frequentely. For this points, we should at least know the foreign customs and etiquettes from study their culture. For example, we know Indian people will never eat bufflo which are thought as their spirit, and foreigners like to kiss or hug with each other when they meet which is also disunderstandale in traditinal culture. If we do not know this, we may irritate indians to invite them to eat beef and misunderstand foreigners when we know they like to kiss and huge with each othe at the first of sight.

On the other hand, comparing with foreign culture makes us learn our culture much better. It is alledged that we could learn a knowledge easily when we could distinguish the difference between two distinct things. In this way, it will easy to recite two differnt historical events happened in the same ages but differnt countries. What's more, we could absorb the merits of foreign culture and transplant the theories or spirits into our culture in order to make our society more harmony and peaceful. Take the conficius theory for example, many country just import this thought to their own country to educate their citizens.

In summary, from the reasons discussed above, I want to make the conclusion that we should learn some foreign culture, in the present, some remote primary and high school also should open this course to students, which need our state education system take steps to deal with.

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发表于 2009-10-25 23:14:42 |显示全部楼层
10.24 when relaxing, some people like to spend time alone. What's your opinion?

"I am so tired, please let me alone!" ,this sentence we could hear in our daily life a lot. It seems that people are more likely to relax themselves alone. Contrary to the opinion of most people is my disagreement idea that spending time with friends or family members could enable me to upload all my mental and physical problems.

It is true that spending time alone could provide our physic body a time to have a rest temperately. Our physical body working inceasely during day time should be slow down for a while in order to mend and refresh all our organs. Decreasing all activities is one of the best way to achieve this goal. The majority of people involving labor working are inclined to sleep in the weekend. For example, 10 years ago, I lived in my uncle' home. My uncle working in the factory as a professional skill worker was fond of sleeping all day, which made me unhappy because I had no one to talk about, you know, that's the limited chance I have to communicate with my uncle.

Considerable although the number of people choosing to rest alone is, I would like to relax myself with friends and family members. There are several reasons as follows. First of all, my favorite fond is to chat with best friends. In the present, I am occupied with English study. I am tired not because of physical but mental fatigue. Talking with friends makes me happy , and forget all the pain during the preparation of English examination. I like playing football together with friends. We cooperate with each other, and finally we celebrate when we win our opponents.  

On the other hand, absent from majority study group in my lab, I could get more information happened in the lab. For instance, I need to know what my supervisor is researching and how the experiments of my lab mates progress? All this information are valuable for me due to the reason that I could make a future plan and catch up with other lab mates after completing my English examination.

To sum up, considering personal body condition and situation, mental fatigue and researching program, I would like to chose to spend my leisure time together with others.

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发表于 2009-10-26 21:35:16 |显示全部楼层
4# sunliang3361

" Mom, I don't like to learn the course of foreign history " said by me in my childhood. My mather explain to me how Learning foreign history and culture is necessary. Nowadays, I still strongly approve of mother's suggestion. With respect to university students who are considered as high-educated talent, they surely should grasp such kind of knowledge.事例开头比较新颖
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It is, to some extent, understandable that to master a foreign culture is useless when the following things are taken into consideration. Our own cultrue are-is rich and long-lasting, which might takes us a whole life to study and master. However, personal time is precious and limitted, we have no time to grasp the knowledge of our own culture, no less than stduy oversea culture-不理解. In addition, essential for university students although knowing foreign culture is, it will has no practical benifits if we have no opportunity to go abroad or contact with foreigners.-为什么感觉好像你是否定这个观点的呢?
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Considerable although the reasons listed above is, -明白了it does not in any way mean that we should not study it at all. On the first hand, learning foreign culture is the mainstream -好词due to the globalization. People make business or academic exchanges-with foreigners frequentely. For this-these points, we should at least know the foreign customs and etiquettes from studying their culture. For example, we know Indian people will never eat bufflo which are thought as their spirit, and foreigners like to kiss or hug with each other when they meet which is also disunderstandale in traditinal culture. If we do not know this, we may irritate indians to invite them to eat beef and misunderstand foreigners when we know they like to kiss and huge with each othe at the first of sight.-好例子
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+ t0 Z( k+ T1 Q  L/ pOn the other hand, comparing with foreign culture makes us learn our culture much better. It is alledged that we could learn a knowledge easily when we could distinguish the difference between two distinct things. In this way, it will -be easy to recite two differnt historical events happened in the same ages but differnt countries. What's more, we could absorb the merits of foreign culture and transplant the theories or spirits into our culture in order to make our society more harmony and peaceful. Take the conficius-什么东东? theory for example, many country just import this thought to their own country to educate their citizens.
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" i+ b4 G0 G# A& N$ [In summary, from the reasons discussed above, I want to make the conclusion that we should learn some foreign culture, in the present, some remote primary and high school also should open this course to students, which need our state education system take steps to deal with。展望未来,很好的结尾
写得很有内容,比我的好多了,帮我看看吧,最近版主都不分配作文,我的作文都发霉了,没你写得好,请指教
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1014739-4-1.html

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发表于 2009-10-26 21:45:53 |显示全部楼层
5# sunliang3361
"I am so tired, please let me alone!" ,this sentence we could hear in our daily life a lot. It seems that people are more likely to relax themselves alone. Contrary to the opinion of most people is my disagreement idea that spending time with friends or family members could enable me to upload all my mental and physical problems.& j5 c" Q2 C8 x9 y' Q. ?. q
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It is true that spending time alone could provide our physic body a time to have a rest temperately. Our physical body working inceasely during day time should be slow down for a while in order to mend and refresh all our organs. Decreasing all activities is one of the best way to achieve this goal. The majority of people involving labor working are inclined to sleep in the weekend. For example, 10 years ago, I lived in my uncle's home. My uncle working in the factory as a professional skill worker was fond of sleeping all day, which made me unhappy because I had no one to talk about, you know,"I am so tired, please let me alone!" ,this sentence we could hear in our daily life a lot. It seems that people are more likely to relax themselves alone. Contrary to the opinion of most people is my disagreement idea that spending time with friends or family members could enable me to upload all my mental and physical problems.& j5 c" Q2 C8 x9 y' Q. ?. q
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It is true that spending time alone could provide our physic body a time to have a rest temperately. Our physical body working inceasely during day time should be slow down for a while in order to mend and refresh all our organs. Decreasing all activities is one of the best way to achieve this goal. The majority of people involving labor working are inclined to sleep in the weekend. For example, 10 years ago, I lived in my uncle' s home. My uncle working in the factory as a professional skill worker was fond of sleeping all day, which made me unhappy because I had no one to talk about, you know, -口语化that's the limited chance I have to communicate with my uncle.
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Considerable although the number of people choosing to rest alone is, I would like to relax myself with friends and family members. There are several reasons as follows. First of all, my favorite fond is to chat with best friends. In the present, I am occupied with English study. I am tired not because of physical but mental fatigue. Talking with friends makes me happy , and forget all the pain during the preparation of English examination. I like playing football together with friends. We cooperate with each other, and finally we celebrate when we win our opponents.  , }$ j) o9 R* J: S" G$ N
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On the other hand, absent from majority study group in my lab, I could not? get more information happened in the lab. For instance, I need to know what my supervisor is researching and how the experiments of my lab mates progress? All this information are valuable for me due to the reason that I could make a future plan and catch up with other lab mates after completing my English examination.! ]. L, K) X- e0 i: W4 B" o5 不太懂z7 f/ F

" K% N5 {0 I7 K7 f; oTo sum up, considering personal body condition and situation, mental fatigue and researching program, I would like to chose to spend my leisure time together with others. that's the limited chance I have to communicate with my uncle.
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Considerable although the number of people choosing to rest alone is, I would like to relax myself with friends and family members. There are several reasons as follows. First of all, my favorite fond is to chat with best friends. In the present, I am occupied with English study. I am tired not because of physical but mental fatigue. Talking with friends makes me happy , and forget all the pain during the preparation of English examination. I like playing football together with friends. We cooperate with each other, and finally we celebrate when we win our opponents.  , }$ j) o9 R* J: S" G$ N
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On the other hand, absent from majority study group in my lab, I could get more information happened in the lab. For instance, I need to know what my supervisor is researching and how the experiments of my lab mates progress? All this information are valuable for me due to the reason that I could make a future plan and catch up with other lab mates after completing my English examination.! ]. L, K) X- e0 i: W4 B" o5 z7 f/ F

" K% N5 {0 I7 K7 f; oTo sum up, considering personal body condition and situation, mental fatigue and researching program, I would like to chose to spend my leisure time together with others.

这篇没有上篇好,还是我没看明白?
去看看我的吧,嘻嘻

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发表于 2009-10-26 23:35:49 |显示全部楼层
好啊 呵呵  最近我的文章贴出来就乱码,,不知道什么原因 7# daisy840228

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发表于 2009-10-26 23:37:48 |显示全部楼层
10.26 In university students should take the history courses no matter what field they study.

The issue that university students should learn history courses or not is debated for decades. Nowadays, strategies in different university on this issue differ greatly. Contrary to the idea of some people is my disagreement opinion that we should take history courses no matter which major now you are studying.

Admittedly, learning history can not benefit us immediately due to the reason below. Students whose specialization is science and technology might believe history courses are not essential for the success of their future job. What their major obligation is to learn the latest theory and programmatic skills which can enable them to be specialized and professional in their job areas instead of wasting time in history learning.   

Considerable although the disadvantages of learning history are, it does not in any way mean that we could give up absorbing such precious experience and lessons. There are two main reasons as followings. On the first hand, we could avoid making the same mistake again and again by learning lessons from the history. Take the famous Great Depression happened in 1930S for example, government authorities nowadays could take preventative measures to stop or at least lessen the catastrophic consequence of economic crisis.

On the other hand, some historical documents are more irreplaceable than other material or sophisticated technology. For instance, in meteorology, scientist could take use of history documents of everyday weather condition to predict present and upcoming two or three days' weather. Even though the equipment used in weather forecast is improved and reliable, it will never replace the role of historical weather records. What's more, mastering a history could improve our literature achievement. Why we are different from regular people? I think it is because we know more about ourselves and our future and care more of our society, all this knowledge we could get from history courses.

To sum up, considering the merits of learning history, I want to make the conclusion that university students should take the history courses, and meanwhile, I want to recall all universities and colleges to open these courses in order to make students get a board education.

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发表于 2009-10-27 23:24:21 |显示全部楼层
10.27 Agree or disagree: The next twenty years from now on, students will not use printed books any more.

Modern technology facilitates our daily work and studies. Electronic books are gaining its popularity in universities. It seems that these new types of books are preferable to students. Contrary to the idea of most students is my disagreement opinion that electronic book will never replace printed books at least in twenty years.

It is true that computer-related books have several merits which traditional-type books are inferior to. For example, we will get rid of taking heavy books to study in classroom only if a small notebook computer is available. In addition, we could share the electronic textbooks with classmates by copying it from my computer. Considerable although the advantages of electronic books own, it does not, in any way, mean that students will not use printed books any more next twenty years from now on. There are several reasons as follows.

Firstly, computer based books are not good for our eyes. The radiation of computer will contribute to complex syndromes such as eye strains, rocky skin and other diseases. It is the computer that makes our school-aged children to be shortsightedness far ahead of their adulthood. It is the computer that makes our pretty female workers caught in the rocky skin condition due to a long-time facing computer. We could say anything but hate it.

Secondly, electronic books are quite relatively convenient and the equipment using to browse the books in it are also expensive. For instance, when we are on business on a remote village or on a field trip, electronic books are useless for the reason that no electricity are available there. With the respect to the equipment of electronic books, students came from lower social and economic classes of our society cannot afford to purchase a computer or computer-related products. These disadvantages limit the distribution of electronic books in the society. Finally, printed books are used for thousands of years, many famous and classic books are printed, I do not believe that it will disappear in a short time.

To sum up, taking the downsides of electronic books into consideration, I want to make the conclusion that printed books will lose its function in students at least in twenty years from now on. Only the disadvantages such as great threats of our physical health and high cost are solved does it will replace printed books possible.

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发表于 2009-10-29 23:22:47 |显示全部楼层
10.29 Modern society has become more complex, so it is essential for the young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

On account of modern technology and science, our society is becoming more and more complicated. The ability of planning and organization are desirable for future success in various fields. Coincident with the idea of most people is my great agreement with the idea that young people should develop the ability of planning and organization.

It is true that Modern society is unpredictable because many unknown factors will contribute to the final results. For example, If travelling with my family, we should consider a variety of things beforehand. We should book the plane or train tickets first, then we should register a travelling agent, finally we should chose a sunny day to enjoy the scenery. So complicated should we still need to plan on advance? Maybe we will end up with the same bad result ruining our enjoyment even if we plan it considerably.

However, it does not in any way mean that we should give up planning and organizing. There are several reasons. First of all, unprepared work will make things worse. We could image of the consequence if leaders in the manufactory do not make plans and distribute assignments to employees. All of them will lose their direction, therefore, maybe talk and do nothing about their job. Consequently, productivity of the company will get down significantly.

On the other hand, if we plan and organize our jobs carefully, we will be encouraged by small success, and then step by step, we will achieve our big goal eventually. Take the Olympic game in Beijing for example; if we will not plan and organize this big event ahead, we will not get a so successful one since this game came into being. During the preparation, not only weather condition but also small accidents are taken into consideration. It is the careful plan that makes sure all programs go smoothly.

To sum up, considering the advantage of developing the ability of planning and organization, I want to make the conclusion that young people are desirable to cultivate this abilities. Meanwhile, I want to appeal that authorities concerned should take proper steps to put this educational theory into high school and college.

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发表于 2009-10-30 18:54:32 |显示全部楼层
10.29 Modern society has become more complex, so it is essential for the young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

On account of modern technology and science, our society is becoming more and more complicated. The ability of planning and organization are desirable for future success in various fields. Coincident with the idea of most people is my great agreement with the idea that young people should develop the ability of planning and organization.

It is true that Modern society is unpredictable because many unknown factors will contribute to the final results. For example, If travelling with my family, we should consider a variety of things beforehand. We should book the plane or train tickets first, then we should register a travelling agent, finally we should chose a sunny day to enjoy the scenery. So complicated should we still need to plan on advance? Maybe we will end up with the same bad result ruining our enjoyment even if we plan it considerably.

However, it does not in any way mean that we should give up planning and organizing. There are several reasons. First of all, unprepared work will make things worse. We could image of the consequence if leaders in the manufactory do not make plans and distribute assignments to employees. All of them will lose their direction, therefore, maybe talk and do nothing about their job. Consequently, productivity of the company will get down significantly.

On the other hand, if we plan and organize our jobs carefully, we will be encouraged by small success, and then step by step, we will achieve our big goal eventually. Take the Olympic game in Beijing for example; if we will not plan and organize this big event ahead, we will not get a so successful one since this game came into being. During the preparation, not only weather condition but also small accidents are taken into consideration. It is the careful plan that makes sure all programs go smoothly.

To sum up, considering the advantage of developing the ability of planning and organization, I want to make the conclusion that young people are desirable to cultivate this abilities. Meanwhile, I want to appeal that authorities concerned should take proper steps to put this educational theory into high school and college.

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发表于 2009-10-31 18:19:14 |显示全部楼层
10.30 A university plans to develop a new research center in your country. Some people want a center for business research. Other people want a center for research in agriculture (farming). Which of these two kinds of research centers do you recommend for your country? Use specific reasons in your recommendation.

Nothing is more important than developing technology in order to improve our living standard. When it comes to contruct a business research center or an agriculture center, people's opinions extremely differ. Contrary with the idea of build a business research center is my disagreement with the statement that we should pay more attention to developping agriculture.

It is true that business promote our society a lot. We could see how prosperous the big cities like Shanghai and Beijing is. We could not emphasize the importance of business too much. It is business that increase the flow of commodities from one city to another. In this way, market in remote villeges are instimulated because their special products cheep and abundent there could be delivered to big cities and sold in much higher price. It is business that enabable the indurstrial products like TV, washmachines and refridges to transport to villeges. By doing so, people's life standard is improved a lot.

Considerable although the advantages of building a center for business enjoying are, it could not compete with the merits and biyao of developping agriculture when the following aspects are taken into consideration. First of all, The majority of population in our country is famer who depend on agriculture to lead their lives. Nowadays, the income gap between people in cities and people in town or villeges are increasing, which might result in a serious problem in future. Only developing agriculture can we improve the living standard of the whole society. However, building a agriculture center is esential to develop argriculture.

On the other hand, developing agriculture could promote people in town or villege to consume in big cities which also stimulate business development. When farmers benifit from high agriculture productivities, they will spend more money to purchase commercial products like computers and cars. Therefore, agriculture is the basic economy in own coutry that decide we have to put agriculture into the priority.

To sum up. considering the advantages of developing agriculture, we should build a research center for agriculture first. In the meanwhile, authorities concerned should take proper steps to carry out it immediately. In the present, agriculture leaves many things to be desirable.

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We can not emphasize the importance of college and university education in the role of our society anymore. The majority of people is eager to accept high-level education in order to get a good job or achieve their life goals finally. Contrary to the idea of most people is my strongly disagreement with the opinion that everyone have the opportunity to get college or university education.

It is true that a whole society college or university education will benifit the society a lot in various ascpects. If we could make this goal into real, every one will be well-disciplinsed, there will be no one to violate rules and laws, and people will live peacefully and happily. In addition, it seems that we are entitled with the equal chance to get college or university education since we all pay tax to government who will take use all of this money- national finance, to develop education of colleges and universities.

However, it does not anyway mean, in my opion, that every one should be allowed to accept college or university education when the following respects are taken into consideration. First, not all students have a genuine interest of studying or doing research. If we just allow all students to flood with our compus, you could image what a bad situation it might be.  There are students sleeping in the class, fighting on the playground, or arguing in the libary, which a good student will be shamed of. These will really destroy good study or academic atmosphere in universities.

On the other hand, there is a limitation of teaching facilities or staffs in university. If we put all students, no matter of their academic performance, into the compus, many people will can not enjoy their opportunities to communicate with their teachers which will improve their understanding of class knowlege greatly. Also, they may be excluded of the lab equipments which are limited as result of too many students. All of which mentioned above will indisputably affect the qualities of our education in university. However, if we just focus our money and energy on the excellent students, the situation will be reserved.

To sum up, considering the reasons discussed above, I want to make the conclusion that only excellent students should have chance to get college or university education. And only in this way will students value their chance more and become useful ones in future.

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We can not emphasize the importance ofcollege and university education in the role of our society anymore. Themajority of people is (are) eager to accepthigh-level education in order to get a good job or achieve their life goalsfinally. Contrary to the idea of most people is my strongly disagreement withthe opinion that everyone have the opportunity (opportunities)to get college or university education.
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It is true that a whole society college or universityeducation will benifit (benefit) thesociety a lot in various ascpects (aspects). Ifwe could make this goal into real (becoming true,不过还得觉得此句,ifthe goal becomes true), every one will be well-disciplinsed, there will be no one to violate rulesand laws, and people will live peacefully and happily. In addition, it seemsthat we are entitled with the equal chance to get college or universityeducation since we all pay tax to government who will take use all of thismoney- national finance, to develop education of colleges and universities.(在第一段让步,语言、语法、词性上还要再扣扣)
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/ I0 \# l4 f! k+ F  ^$V" GHowever, it does not anyway mean, in my opion (opinion), that every one should be allowed to accept collegeor university education when the following respects(aspects) are taken into consideration. First,not all students have a genuine interest of studying or doing research. If wejust allow all students to flood with our compus (campus),you could image what a bad situation it might be.  There are (so many) students sleeping in the class (这也太绝对了吧,应该有个修饰词,不是所有的学生都这样), fighting on theplayground, or arguing in the libary (library),which a good student will be shamed of. These will really destroy good study oracademic atmosphere in universities. Y

! g8 T2 u0 l! W; wOn the otherhand, there is a limitation of teaching facilities or staffs in university. Ifwe put all students, no matter of their academic performance, into the compus (campus), many people will can not enjoy theiropportunities to communicate with their teachers which will improve theirunderstanding of class knowlege (knowledge) greatly.Also, they may be excluded of the lab equipments which are limited as result oftoo many students. All of which mentioned above will indisputably affect thequalities of our education in university. However, if we just focus our moneyand energy on the excellent students, the situation will be reserved.


6 O, ~% ~( r9 {1 k3 d' rTo sumup, considering the reasons discussed above, I want to make the conclusion thatonly excellent students should have chance to get college or universityeducation. And only in this way will students value their chance more andbecome useful ones in future.
总评:观点明确,有些语法错误,还有词性运用不是很恰当,不过字数还是很多的,帮我回改哦

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