10.21进军美利坚作文组

LeviathaZUID: 2456472

不好意思交晚了，辛苦批改的同学了：D


10.21 有很多钱不工作的人都不快乐，你支持否

Is it happy for the person who owns a lot of money and does not need to work? Actually, the answer varies from person to person depending on the particular attitude towards life. In my opinion, although owning much money and no pressure from work are really a dream for almost all the people, they finally will find this situation is unpleasing thing because they lost the pursuit for new things, and the power to fight against plights.

Firstly, I should define that what means happy life. If we think the happy is a relaxing life without pressure, rich life but no need to work can really makes us happy. We could do not worry about being late for work sleeping till midday; we could travel around the world without pressure; we could buy many thing we want without squaring the money. Therefore, such life is just the life almost all of us dream about.

However, if I content that the happy means realize one's self-fulfillment, the situation would become the opposite.

Such happy life which I mentioned above would make our desire lost its meaning. Often, making money is a way for us to get a better life. If we own a lot of money, we could buy something that we couldn't afford before. For instance, women always find their wardrobe lacking of a new dress, and they want to go shopping to fill such scarcity. But what should they do if they do not have enough money to buy the dress they want? Most people might work hard trying to get more salary. Finally, they use the money that they make a great effort to get buying the favorite dress; they will feel happy at this moment. What would the same situation happened in a woman with much money? She can easily get the dress making no effort to work. It is so easy that she would lose the desire for the new clothes to the contrary. In short, working hard and getting more money is actually a way to happy life.

daisy840228UID: 2684617

Is it happy for the person who owns a lot of money and does not need to work? Actually, the answer varies from person to person depending on the particular attitude towards life. －开头用得狠漂亮In my opinion, although owning much money and no pressure from work are really a dream for almost all the people, they finally will －will finally find this situation is unpleasing thing because they lost－lose the pursuit for new things, and the power to fight against plights.

Firstly, I should define that what means happy life. If we think the happy is a relaxing life without pressure, rich life but no need to work can really makes us happy. We could do not worry about being late for work sleeping till midday; we could travel around the world without pressure; we could buy many thing－s we want without squaring the money. Therefore, such life is just the life almost all of us dream about.* J  t0 i# |+ e( |0 j

However, if I content that the happy means realize－realizing one's self-fulfillment, the situation would become the opposite.
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Such happy life which I mentioned above would make our desire lost its meaning. Often, making money is a way for us to get a better life. If we own a lot of money, we could buy something that we couldn't afford before. For instance, women always find their wardrobe lacking of a new dress, and they want to go shopping to fill such scarcity. But what should they do if they do not have enough money to buy the dress they want? Most people might work hard trying to get more salary. Finally, they use the money that they make a great effort to get buying the favorite dress; they will feel happy at this moment. What would the same situation happened in a woman with much money? She can easily get the dress making no effort to work. It is so easy that she would lose the desire for the new clothes to the contrary. In short, working hard and getting more money is actually a way to happy life
－哈，我不知道我看完了。有时候不知道要表现什么，到最后好不容易知道你想说什么了就嘎然而止。我觉得在一个例子上花太多功夫了会把观众陷入。可以再简练些。
lose the pursuit for new things, and the power to fight against plights.开头这样我以为结尾也是两个呢。。。

daisy840228UID: 2684617

晕，在word上精心设计的红子怎么总是体现不出来

LeviathaZUID: 2456472

3# daisy840228
我是打算写两个的，但是时间来不及了……

LeviathaZUID: 2456472

3# daisy840228

是带‘-’的内容么，我好像能辨认出来：D

fish1044UID: 2190500

    Is it happy for the person who owns a lot of money and does not need to work? Actually, the answer varies from person to person depending on the particular attitude towards life. In my opinion, although owning much money and no pressure from work are really a dream for almost all the people, they finally will(will finally) find (out that) this situation is an unpleasing thing because they lost the pursuit for new things, and the power to fight against plights." z- _, c1 w/ C, l% w/ G


Firstly, I should define that what means happy life(happy life means). If we think the(删掉) happy is a relaxing life without pressure, rich life but no need to work can really makes us happy. We could do not worry about being late for work while sleeping till midday; we could travel around the world without pressure; we could buy many thing we want without squaring the money. Therefore, such life is just the life almost all of us dream about.
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However, if I content that the(删掉) happy means realize(realing) one's self-fulfillment, the situation would become the opposite.
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9 C8 n, Q. _( [2 I/ `Such happy life which I mentioned above would make our desire lost its meaning. Often, making money is a way for us to get a better life. If we own a lot of money, we could buy something that we couldn't afford before. For instance, women always find their wardrobe lacking of a new dress, and they want to go shopping to fill such scarcity. But what should they do if they do not have enough money to buy the dress they want? Most people might work hard trying to get more salary. Finally, they use the money that they make a（by） great effort to get buying(buy) the favorite dress; they will feel happy at this moment. What would the same situation happened in a woman with much money? She can easily get the dress making no effort to work(without any effort). It is so easy that she would lose the desire for the new clothes to the contrary. In short, working hard and getting more money is actually a way to happy life.

你的文章里有还是很充分的，但是结构还不是很清晰，有点中文作文的意思。
你文章也写得不错。加油！