1.23 作业

ivybettyUID: 2328308

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to make friends with intelligent people than with people who have a good sense of humor.

To choose friends people certainly rely on what they care about or what friends can bring to them. Some like friends who are intelligent, but others might like people who have a good sense of humor. I think both intelligence and humor are the most important merits friends should have. But if I had to make a choice, I would like to make friends with people who have a good sense of humor rather than people who are intelligent.

One is people who have a good sense of humor always can bring you a relaxed, comfortable, flexible relationship and with this relationship you always keep a happy mood to face ups and downs in the life. Just like when you came across some hardship in work or study, you talked to your friends who had a good sense of humor can always help you relieve your stress through their wonderful jokes and their optmistic attitude towards eveything.

Additionally, people who have a good sense of humor must be the persons who are intelligent too. When they delivered a joyful story or made a funny gesture, and then easily manipulated atmosphere around them, you would find out how intelligent they are. Like in business area, a sucessful boss are always humorous and intelligent. But at the same time, people who are smart might never be humorous. Most of time samrt people focus on things and want to find an easy shortcut to crack problem happened to them, and they might not notice the happy experience of process, even though they still accomplish whatever they want, they just lose opptunity to feel colorful lives.

In sum, I prefer to make friends with fun people than to make friends with samrt person. But don't make me wrong, I don't mean that intelligent people are not good for me and I certainly know both intelligent persons and humorous persons can enrich my life and broaden my view.

shirley072UID: 2712200

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eddie23508okUID: 2281260

1.23 作业

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to make friends with intelligent people than with people who have a good sense of humor.# A5 P* j$ D: T% S To choose friends people certainly rely on (不是依靠吧，应该说consider) what they care about or what friends can bring to them. Some like friends who are intelligent, but (while) others might like people who have a good sense of humor. I think both intelligence and humor are the most important merits friends should have. But if I had to make a choice, I would like to make friends with people who have a good sense of humor rather than people who are intelligent. (第一段简洁，观点明确，不错) One is (that) people who have a good sense of humor always can bring you a relaxed, comfortable, flexible relationship and with this relationship you always keep a happy mood to face ups and downs in the life. Just like when you came (这里为什么要用过去时？是虚拟语气吗？可是为什么要用虚拟语气呢？) across some hardship in work or study, you talked (虚拟语气？过去时？) to your friends who had (同理) a good sense of humor can always help you relieve your stress through their wonderful jokes and their optmistic attitude towards eveything. Additionally, people who have a good sense of humor must be the persons who are intelligent too. When they delivered (过去式？虚拟？) a joyful story or made (同前问？) a funny gesture, and then easily manipulated (同前问) atmosphere around them, you would find out how intelligent they are. Like in business area, a sucessful boss are always humorous and intelligent. But at the same time, people who are smart might never be humorous. Most of time samrt (smart)people focus on things and want to find an (a) easy shortcut to crack problem happened (happening) to them, and they might not notice the happy experience of process, even though they still accomplish whatever they want, they just lose opptunity to feel colorful lives.(最后Most.....lives这一句貌似有点离题) In sum, I prefer to make friends with fun people than to make friends with samrt (smart) person. But don't make me wrong (make sb wrong？有这个词组？), I don't mean that intelligent people are not good for me and I certainly know both intelligent persons and humorous persons can enrich my life and broaden my view.(个人感觉这句有点多余，作为最后一句，应该照应第一段的TS, 而不应该在这里打圆场，显然这个圆场文中并没有说明，T的作文不就是要表明自己的观点吗？) 陈述不错，观点也很不错，语言功底也不错。文章是一篇很好的文章。问题一：感觉稍微少点例子；问题二：LZ貌似使用了过多的虚拟语态，其实很多时候没有必要使用虚拟语态吧。 加油。

ivybettyUID: 2328308

1.24作业
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students would receive a better, effective education if they were required to attend classes for 11 months of a year.

Even though most of people believe that hardworking can help to talented person, I disagree about this. So I opposite the idea that students should study longer to recieve a better, effective education. Good education does not mean to be time-based studying.

First of all, a better education need lots of resources, like skillful teachers, multiple equipments and diligent students, etc. So period of study time is not the only reason to improve good education. Look at top 100 universities in the world, nearly all of them sited at metropolis and have great professors, top-level laboray and smartest students. At the same time every university have at least both winter and summer breaks.Normally it lasts more than 3 months a year. Can we say these campus did not bring an effecient and significant education? I think nobody would support this view.

Additionally, a magnificient training program needs entertainments too. Every person has their won limitation of duration of time. As for me, I can not keep studying for 11 months a year. My thoughts would be drained after 11-month coaching, because too many things were crammed into my head and I would have no attitude or affection to learn any more.In chinese old saying "Haste makes waste." Everything in the world have their own rules, if we disobey these rules, we will take more time to achieve what we want. Like studying a longer time doesn't necessarily lead to a awosome education.

At last, a lasting period of studying do promote learning result, but if people just spend as much as time to study, how can we say this kind of education is effective or efficient? As my understanding a good education must be as effective and efficient as possible. So that is why I don't believe long period studying could help building a strong education.

In sum, I don't think students would gain a better, effective education if they are studying 11 months a year. I do agree time is one of issue but it is not all of matters.

ivybettyUID: 2328308

3# eddie23508ok

Thanks a lot! I will work harder.

ivybettyUID: 2328308

1.25作业
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It’s better to use own knowledge and experience to solve question, or ask other people for advice.

Everybody comes across emergencies each day. What they use to solve these questions? Some people like ask other people help, and some people tend to solve problems by themselves. I firmly assent to crack down problems by myself instead of ask assistance. There are my explanantion below.

First of all, nobody knows you better than yourself, so when something happened to you. It is only you who can find out real issue behind problems. Like when you apply for an foreign university to study, you will go to ask people who had been abroad or go to some website which had lots of formers' expereince. But sooner or later you will find out nobody is exactly your situation. So better to choose your own way to get it done.

Additionally, to handle questions by yourself is the most efficient way. In daily life, people come across all kinds of issues every second, and they should study help themselves out. If each time things come up, you always keep waiting for a solution from your friends or family it would be a tragedy of your life. Because people like you are very similar as parasite, at the same time most of time are wasted in waiting. Therefore to learn help yourslef is to save time.

Lastly, It would have no regret in future, if you dealt with things by your own judgement. Just like one of my friends broke up with her boyfriend recently, and all of friends worried about her a lot. We Know she is sad and miserable. But none of us can help her about that, because we can not imagine nor put our feet in her shoes. That is why we just choose to be supportive around and let her figure out her own way to go through sadness. whatever decisions she make she will not regret in future.

In sum, I prefer to solve questions by myself. Becasue it is a wise, efficient and suitable way to handle problems.

eddie23508okUID: 2281260

1.24作业
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students would receive a better, effective education if they were required to attend classes for 11 months of a year.



Even though most of people believe that hardworking can help to talented person, I disagree about (with) this. So I opposite the idea that students should study longer to recieve (receive) a better, effective education. Good education does not mean to be time-based studying. (继续简洁有力的开头，特别最后一句话，点明观点，我喜欢)

First of all, a better education need (needs) lots of resources, like skillful teachers, multiple equipments and diligent students, etc. So period of study time is not the only reason to improve (attain) good education. Look at top 100 universities in the world, nearly all of them (are) sited at metropolis and have great professors, top-level laboray (laboratories) and smartest students. At the same time every university have at least both winter and summer breaks.Normally it lasts more than 3 months a year. Can we say these campus did not bring an effecient and significant education? I think nobody would support this view.(I don't think anybody would support this view.) (第二段观点有点模糊)

Additionally, a magnificient (stricktly requiring) training program needs entertainments too. Every person has their won (own) limitation of duration of time (for study). As for me, I can not keep studying for 11 months a year. My thoughts would be drained after 11-month coaching (classes), because too many things were (are) crammed (squeezed) into my head and I would have no attitude or affection (interest or pay no concentration) to learn any more.In chinese (There is an) old saying "Haste makes waste." Everything in the world have their own rules, if we disobey these rules, we will take more time to achieve what we want. Like studying a longer time doesn't necessarily lead to a awosome (qualified) education.

At last, a lasting period of studying do promote learning result, but if people just spend as much as time to study, how can we say (judge) this kind of education is effective or efficient? As my understanding a good education must be as effective and efficient as possible. So that is why I don't believe long period studying could help building a strong (excellent) education.

In sum, I don't think students would gain a better, effective education if they are studying 11 months a year. I do agree time is one of issue (issues) but it is not all of (the) matters.

论点，陈述方式，语句方面均无太大问题（长短句结合得很好），另外LZ表达方式的多样性也很值得学习，写作所涉及词汇量也非常丰富，但是有一点，对有些词的掌握个人感觉不是非常到位；另外建议一下，写完不妨粘贴到word里面修改一下拼写错误。加油。
PS：我在国外，跟国内有时差，所以相对于国内时间，我修改作文的时间可能稍微晚一些，请见谅。

ivybettyUID: 2328308

感谢认真批阅

ivybettyUID: 2328308

1.26 作业
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People spend more time on personal enjoyment rather than what they should do.

Do people spend more time on personal enjoyment rather then what they should do? I think the answer depends on different persons and different situations. Some people like more entertainment. Some people like to focus on their own interests and devote themselves to the things they need to get done. That is why I stand against that people spend more time on private joyful time rather than what they should get done.

On one side some people like enjoyment more. Like people work in amateur and sports area. Their daily lives are to sing songs, dance or play all kinds of balls. They certainly prefer their enjoyment to must-do things. Like some famous actors or actresses will delay their marriage and some of them may never get married nor have a kid. In their opinion what they should do is less important than what they enjoyed.

On the other side some people only concentrate on things they should do. Like scientists work in different areas. They might never go to some bar or club for entertainment. Most of their time they spend in the labs or libraries, and they know there are thousands of questions ahead waiting for them to explore. That is why they would like to take time to things they need get done rather than have entertainment.

In sum, whether is to spend more time on entertainment or to spend more time on needy things? It is really a personal answer according to different situations. That is why I oppose that people should have more entertainment instead of do things which they need do.

Jessie28UID: 2754605

1.25作业
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It’s better to use own knowledge and experience to solve question, or ask other people for advice.

Everybody comes across emergencies each day. What they use to solve these questions? Some people like ask（asking）other people（to） help, and some people tend to solve problems by themselves. I firmly assent to crack down(这个词用的好) problems by myself instead of ask(asking) assistance. There are my explanantion(s) below.
First of all, nobody knows you better than yourself, so when something happened to you. It is only you who can find out real issue behind problems（你觉得用the problem怎么样？）. Like when you apply for an（a) foreign university to study, you will go to(不懂，可以直接用will吗？) ask people who had been abroad or go to（用browse如何？） some website which had lots of formers' expereince. But sooner or later you will find out nobody is exactly in（加个in好不好？不然这句话变成 nobody is ur situation，会有点奇怪） your situation. So better to choose your own way to get it done.（这句话好！！！）

Additionally, to handle questions by yourself is the most efficient way. In daily life, people come across all kinds of issues every second, and they should study help themselves out. If each time things come up, you always keep waiting for a solution from your friends or family it would be a tragedy of your life. Because people like you are very similar as parasite, at the same time （，）most of time are wasted in waiting. Therefore to learn help（ing） yourslef is to save time.（这段写得好！！！）
Lastly, It would have no regret in future, if you dealt （deal）with things by your own judgement. Just like one of my friends broke up with her boyfriend recently, and all of （her）friends worried about her a lot. We Know（knew） she is （was）sad and miserable. But none of us can（could） help her about that, because we can（could） not imagine nor（or） put our feet in her shoes. That is why we just choose to be supportive around and let her figure out her own way to go through sadness. whatever decisions she make she will not regret in future.
In sum, I prefer to solve questions by myself. Becasue it is a wise, efficient and suitable way to handle problems.（这句好写得好）

楼主论点清楚，论据有力。用词用句非常好，值得我学习
有一些语法小错误，希望注意一下，呵呵
有个问题想请教，写托福的作文，只能坚定地站在一个立场吗？能不能另一面又稍稍说一下？
互相帮助，互相学习！！！

lxg198607UID: 2564115

Do people spend more time on personal enjoyment rather then what they should do? I think the answer depends on different persons and different situations. Some people like more entertainment. Some people like to focus on their own interests and devote themselves to the things they need to get done. That is why I stand against that people spend more time on private joyful time rather than what they should get done.+ p! I) N* n; }) u- [

On one side some people like enjoyment more. Like people work in amateur and sports area. Their daily lives are to sing songs, dance or play all kinds of balls.（这句话有点不对吧，可改为they lives are full of songs, dances and all kinds of balls） They certainly prefer their enjoyment to must-do things. Like some famous actors or actresses will delay their marriage and some of them may never get married nor have a kid.（这个例子不太恰当吧，孩子和结婚不一定是他们应该做的是吧，也可能就是他们想做的事） In their opinion what they should do is less important than what they enjoyed.' W* o4 W* C. Z- q

On the other side some people only concentrate on things they should do. Like(such as) scientists work in different areas. They might never go to some bar or club for entertainment. Most of their time they spend in the labs or libraries, and they know there are thousands of questions ahead waiting for them to explore(这句写的不错). That is why they would like to take time to things （好像没这个用法吧）they need get done rather than have entertainment.5 P4 g* q" _- l" Q
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In sum, whether is to spend more time on entertainment or to spend more time on needy things? It is really a personal answer according to different situations.（两句之间没有因果关系啊） That is why I oppose that people should have more entertainment instead of do things which they need do.            
suggestions : 这边文章长句写的不错，但是结论不清楚，我并不知道你到底支持还是反对，且论点并没有论据支持，只是正反面各打了50大板。   本人水平也不高，以上只是拙见，希望共同加油。

ivybettyUID: 2328308

1.27作业
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.

With the develpment of our modern society, people's living conditions keep improving everyday. Government's focus certainly impel these changes.At prensent, what sould government concentrate on more, arts or athletics? I would say both of them are the same important. So I totally stand against that government should spend more money on arts instead of athletics.And I firmly support that government should invest the same to both.My reasons as following:

One, arts is as important as athletics in people's daily lives. Our country has a magnificent long history, and "qin,qi,shu,hua" namely"lyre-playing, chess, calligraphy and painting" could not be seprated from daily life. Arts is an unsplit part of our lives. At the same time, sports are essential to our lives too. If we want to keep healthy, we should exercises more. And exercises can help people relax and bring them happiness.That is why both arts and athletics are the equal vital for us.

On the other side, sometimes arts and atheltics mixed together and can not be splited. We all enjoyed watching Olympic Games. When we watch eurythymcs, water ballet, figure skating, and so on. It is not only an atheltics competition, but it is also a beautifal physique art. How can we seprate arts from athletics at times like this? I remebered durng 29-round Olympic Games ceremony in Beijing we provided a singnigicant arts show ring before athletics started. The whole world was impressed by Chinese arts and later on Chinese athletes. So we can not simply keep arts and athletics apart.

All in all, I exactly agree that government should put same efforts on both arts and athletics.

shirley072UID: 2712200

With the develpment of our modern society, people's living conditions keep improving everyday. Government's focus certainly impel these changes (我觉得不能直译，推动变化是什么意思呢？). At prensent, what sould government concentrate on more, arts or athletics? I would say both of them are the same important. So I totally stand against that government should spend more money on arts instead of athletics.And I firmly support that government should invest the same to both.My reasons as following（缺少谓语吧，Here are my reasons.）:6 f# e



One, arts is as important as athletics in people's daily lives. Our country has a magnificent long history, and "qin,qi,shu,hua" namely"lyre-playing, chess, calligraphy and painting" could not be seprated from daily life. Arts is an unsplit part of our lives. At the same time, sports are essential to our lives too. If we want to keep healthy, we should exercises more. And exercises can help people relax and bring them happiness.That is why both arts and athletics are the equal vital for us.2 ]& D: b/ A. x2 @% w
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On the other side, sometimes arts and atheltics mixed together and can not be splited. We all enjoyed watching Olympic Games. When we watch eurythymcs, water ballet, figure skating, and so on (when后面的那个从句呢？). It is not only an atheltics competition, but it is also a beautifal physique art. How can we seprate arts from athletics at times like this? I remebered durng 29-round Olympic Games ceremony in Beijing we provided a singnigicant arts show ring before athletics started. The whole world was impressed by Chinese arts and later on Chinese athletes. So we can not simply keep arts and athletics apart.

All in all, I exactly agree that government should put same efforts on both arts and athletics.

单词拼写错误很多呢，这个可以自己改
总体来说一下吧，主要是这个题目我是觉得非常难写，所以我自己都有点晕，也说不出来什么。。。主要的感觉就是楼主写的很浅，特别是第一个论据，感觉就是点到为止，没有什么展开的讨论，就说了两者跟我们很相关，每个两句话就结束了。我觉得貌似不够呢
第二个呢，我就不知道怎么判断了，我觉得楼主没有写出government的感受，就是说虽然两者是分不开的，但是能说明什么呢？分不开就说明政府要在上面投一样多的钱么？我觉得要说出来既然两者分不开，那么政府在艺术上投钱的时候相当于也在往运动上面投钱，但是呢对于这个论据是不是很强我就没有把握了
结论一段，很少，没有对文章进行总结