7.27 小野 作文

cairen1986UID: 2599310

        In a modern society, people could face a question what have cause unhealthy eating habiting. Many people could agree advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habit. However, others could disagree with such cause and they could claim living habits is very important cause to generate such unhealthy eating habits. Different people could have different reasons to answer such question because different personal type, different emotion and experience about eating habits could make people hold different judge. In my opinion, it is very complex to find the cause of unhealthy eating habits not only advertises but also other reasons. My reasons are as fellows:
     To begin with, we should not deny the function of advertising that could be very important cause to make people keep unhealthy eating habits. As we known, people could be richer than before and they are willing spend much money to improve their diet. At the time, they could get much information about diet from advertising about food. However, many advertises could have much partial to improve the amount of the products and ignore the right function of the products. Under this advertising propagandizing, people may be easy to come into be unhealthy eating habits. For example, people could eat much more fat food because some advertise could be claimed such food with much nutrition. What's worse, eating much such food could make people be fit or high blood pressure. So such mistake from advertising is very important reason to make people have bad eating habit.
       Secondly, there are many self-reasons from people to stimulate people to develop into bad eating habit.For example, some would like sleep in order to ignore the time of having meal, which could make people have bad law of eating. Bad law of eating is very dangerous for people to keep healthy body. For another example, many could not like to do exercise in their live, which could indirectly influence people have good eating habit to live. Such reasons could be from people themselves and influence much for people to keep healthy eating habit.
      Finally, we should make complete view to analysis the reasons that make people hold unhealthy eating habit instead of ignoring one and emphasizing on others. As we known, one thing happen is not simple reason to explain, which could be in many complex reasons that commonly work result. People hold unhealthy eating habit, which also have much more complex reasons. For example, there may be some reasons from society. Because of high rhythm of living in our society, people could have little time to eat and they must eat fast to save time.
Such eating fast is very bad at their body. So such reasons we should think about to analysis the cause of unhealthy eating habit.
      From what has been discussed above, we may come to the conclusion that there are many causes to result in people holding unhealthy eating habit. Not only could advertises make some stimulating reasons, but also people themselves and our society give much important reasons. We could not doubt the function of advertises making people keep unhealthy eating habit, what's more, we should see the other reasons that could have much important facts for unhealthy eating habit. Therefore, I think it is very complex reasons to make people form unhealthy eating habit.

layla1989UID: 2832481

改好了~~

cairen1986UID: 2599310

2# layla1989    楼主，指正的很仔细，学习了！

shengzhi86UID: 2757306

In a modern society, people could face a question what have cause（has caused） unhealthy eating habiting. Many people could（删掉，或改为may） agree advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habit. However, others could disagree with such cause and they could claim living habits is very important cause to generate such unhealthy eating habits. Different people could have different reasons to answer such a question because different personal type（types）, different emotion and experience about eating habits could make people hold different judge. In my opinion, it is very complex to find the cause of unhealthy eating habits not only advertises but also other reasons. My reasons are as fellows:
/ D8 B6 `' b/ ~6 g. `     To begin with, we should not deny the function of advertising that could be very important cause to make people keep unhealthy eating habits. As we known, people could be richer than before and they are willing spend much money to improve their diet. At the time, they could get much information about diet from advertising about food. However, many advertises could have much partial to improve the amount of the products and ignore the right function of the products. Under this advertising propagandizing, people may be easy to come into be unhealthy eating habits. For example, people could eat much more fat food because some advertise could be claimed such food with much nutrition. What's worse, eating much such food could make people be fit or high blood pressure. So such mistake from advertising is very important reason to make people have bad eating habit.; e6 u& O9 B( [! ^
       Secondly, there are many self-reasons from people to stimulate people to develop into bad eating habit.For example, some would like sleep in order to ignore the time of having meal, which could make people have bad law of eating. Bad law of eating is very dangerous for people to keep healthy body. For another example, many could not like to do exercise in their live, which could indirectly influence people have good eating habit to live. Such reasons could be from people themselves and influence much for people to keep healthy eating habit.
4 ~& z) n' [$ W! A  K' O( s      Finally, we should make complete view to analysis the reasons that make people hold unhealthy eating habit instead of ignoring one and emphasizing on others. As we known, one thing happen is not simple reason to explain, which could be in many complex reasons that commonly work result. People hold unhealthy eating habit, which also have much more complex reasons. For example, there may be some reasons from society. Because of high rhythm of living in our society, people could have little time to eat and they must eat fast to save time.
$ o2 n9 B  v4 _. R. I, M6 e, ASuch eating fast is very bad at their body. So such reasons we should think about to analysis the cause of unhealthy eating habit.1 W8 ?6 ^% `! ?" N2 i
      From what has been discussed above, we may come to the conclusion that there are many causes to result in people holding unhealthy eating habit. Not only could advertises make some stimulating reasons, but also people themselves and our society give much important reasons. We could not doubt the function of advertises making people keep unhealthy eating habit, what's more, we should see the other reasons that could have much important facts for unhealthy eating habit. Therefore, I think it is very complex（重复出现，换个词） reasons to make people form unhealthy eating habit.


总体讲：思路清晰，比较不错，避免同词重复出现多次，如could，且could使用多次有误。

cairen1986UID: 2599310

7.29 小野 作文作业

longxue26UID: 2687755

改好了

加油!

别忘了帮我看看我的作文哈

kunterUID: 2687844

改好了  楼主加油

cairen1986UID: 2599310

7.31 小野 作文作业 欢迎指正

cairen1986UID: 2599310

8.3日的 作文作业 欢迎指正啊

joy1025UID: 2760517

谢谢小野的批改，加油↖(^ω^)↗

cairen1986UID: 2599310

8月5日 作文 cairen1986

gougouhencaiUID: 2778821

小小修改一下

niunianUID: 2864048

8.5  加油

我请教一下，你的word一打开就是修改的模式，这是怎么设置的呢

gougouhencaiUID: 2778821

你砸不拍我呢

gougouhencaiUID: 2778821

你咋不给别人改作文昵？