Issue103 同主题，还有一周，互拍~

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Issue103  
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作者：even     共用时间：45分18秒     498 words
从2005年7月5日14时22分到2005年7月5日15时45分
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The study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives.
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Where does the value of the study of history lie? The speaker asserts that history has value only when things that are relevant to our daily lives are concerned. However, the contention is too pigeon-headed to be persuasive. Instead, not only are historical things related to our lives valuable, but those seemingly irrelevant or even obsolete things also bear much significance.

Admittedly, it is reasonable for us to grant value to those things that we can benefit directly from history, which more often than not have applications in our daily life. Teenagers might enjoy reading historical books or watching epic movies as they find their role models among famous historical figures, which usually were heroes with strong will and charming charisma. Similarly, some people find value in studying history by learning from the ancient wisdom, which were usually recorded through speeches and compositions. There are still others, who study history to learn the pitfalls and hazards that are coming in their way, and try to avoid or overcome them by lessons drawn from ancient stories.  In this sense, history enlightens our thoughts, provides us with strength and conviction and guides us along our way.

However, besides the day-to-day illumination and motivations, history also contributes to our societies in a more significant way. Through scrutiny of the winding course of history, we learn about the truth that is hidden behind its holy veil.  From the outbreaks of wars, we came to realize the value of peace and stability; from the contamination of water and air, as well as the extinction of many species, we understood that we must protect our environment instead of over-exploiting the resources; from the prevalence of fatal diseases, we recognized technology as a two-edged sword and learned to put more emphasis on the proper use of it. In a word, it is the pains we suffered in the past that revealed the essence of our society and our co-existence with the nature.  Though these hard days are gone, we should bear the lesson that we learned in mind so as to prevent them from recurring in the future.

In addition, historic heritages like old buildings or ancient form of art should be preserved for they were the witness of the evolution of human civilization. Some might argue that as we don't live in these old architectures nor wear ancient costumes now, they don't have any value to us from any perspective. However, how can we measure the value of these heritages out of practicality? Old buildings recall our memories of the past and old clothes and music exhibit to us the old conventions and way of living, which can not be substituted or forgotten at any cost.

In the final analysis, while I concede that the study of history finds some of its value to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives, it bears much more significance by enlightening and guiding our society as well as preserving the old way of life.

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呵呵，又是我来试着互拍一下
Where does the value of the study of history lie? The speaker asserts that history has value only when things that are relevant to our daily lives are concerned. However, the contention is too pigeon-headed to be persuasive. Instead, not only are historical things related to our lives valuable, but those seemingly irrelevant or even obsolete things also bear much significance.这段很精致了，改不出什么了

Admittedly, it is reasonable for us to grant value to those things that we can benefit directly from history, which more often than not have applications in our daily life. Teenagers might enjoy reading historical books or watching epic movies as they find their role models among famous historical figures, which usually were heroes with strong will and charming charisma（这里连用两个同根词，感觉有点重复）. Similarly, some people find value in studying history by learning from the ancient wisdom, which were usually recorded through speeches and compositions. There are still others, who study history to learn the pitfalls and hazards that are coming in their way, and try to avoid or overcome them by lessons drawn from ancient stories.  In this sense, history enlightens our thoughts, provides us with strength and conviction and guides us along our way.（这段很漂亮的论述，几个方面都讲到了）

However, besides the day-to-day illumination and motivations, history also contributes to our societies in a more significant way. Through scrutiny of the winding course of history, we learn about the truth that is（that is 可以去掉吧，好象能简洁一点） hidden behind its holy veil.  From the outbreaks of wars, we came to realize the value of peace and stability; from the contamination of water and air, as well as the extinction of many species, we understood that we must protect our environment instead of over-exploiting the resources; from the prevalence of fatal diseases, we recognized technology as a two-edged sword and learned to put more emphasis on the proper use of it（这个例子的逻辑好象有点问题，技术应用和流行病很难直接想到关系）. In a word, it is the pains we suffered in the past that revealed the essence of our society and our co-existence with the nature.  Though these hard days are gone, we should bear the lesson that we learned in mind so as to prevent them from recurring in the future.
（这段好象是要讲认识历史上的错误，避免新的错误，这个观点可以在开头的时候提一下可能会明确一点）

In addition, historic heritages like old buildings or ancient form of art should be preserved for they were（好象用are会好一点） the witness of the evolution of human civilization. Some might argue that as we don't live in these old architectures nor wear ancient costumes now, they don't have any value to us from any perspective. However, how can we measure the value of these heritages out of practicality? Old buildings recall our memories of the past and old clothes and music exhibit to us the old conventions and way of living, which can not be substituted or forgotten at any cost.（也可以从美学价值和文化理解上说，而且最好指出，研究历史和这些遗产是等同的，否则感觉不够严密）

In the final analysis, while I concede that the study of history finds some of its value to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives, it bears much more significance by enlightening and guiding our society as well as preserving the old way of life. （这里用让步语气，可能不如用递进来的好，因为与daily life有关的历史研究价值是很值得承认的）

还是觉得文章的语言很流畅，内容也很充实，逻辑上没问题。如果还要改进的话，我觉得每段的头尾点一下观点，或者强调一下逻辑关系，可能会好一点。

最后还是要请你互拍，我的的文章
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=312434
谢了！

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谢谢！周末没怎么上，刚看到你的回拍，马上回！