ISSUE154 熊熊小组作业～

foreveraUID：202035

占个座,晚上睡醒了马上来看，困死了......:o

duckyl35UID：201612

呵呵，你应该很适合在USA 生活嘞～时差！！黑白颠倒咯～～嘎嘎～

yurong84UID：2120087

154"Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools. Education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators."
提纲：
1部分同意作者观点，提出三者结合更有益教育的发展；
2强调professional educators的重要性，是教育不可缺少的一部分；
3父母对孩子的教育同样重要，父母从小对子女的成长就是无形的影响，父母了解孩子的兴趣爱好，有益于孩子的教育；
4社会的重要性同样不可忽视，社会的发展决定教育的取向，社会和教育是相互促进的关系；
5重申观点，三者相互合作；


Education is an important part of the development of society, the speaker claims that both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools, because the education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators. To some extent, I agree with the speaker, but in my point of view the three aspects should cooperate well, which is beneficial to the education greatly(转折没有在后半句中得到体现).

In the first place, the professional educator is a vital part of the education. When we go to the elementary school, teachers direct us to build the found of the knowledge, which is useful for our future study. Even the most basic knowledge given by teacher needs special arrangement such as what kind of knowledge is proper to children, how the children can accept the knowledge well and so on, let alone the higher education which is more professional. When we go to the university, we would receive the more difficult theories, formulas, all those curriculums should be directed by professional teachers, they can provide us with more and more information about the subject we majored, and the most important aspect is that when we undertake an experiment to some new field, those professional educators can inform us some valuable experience, which is significant for the new research, that is to say, the professional educators can help us a lot in the study of special knowledge. Thus, in our educational system, the professional educator is significant for us.

In addition not only the professional educators but also the parents are important to education. As every one known, education involves several parts such as professional knowledge, social moral, responsibility and so on. As common sense tells us, the most representative characteristic of children is imitation. When we are little boys or little girls, we do not know what is right or what is wrong, then the parents’ words and behaviors become the target of our imitation, they become our samples. From parents’ direction we can tell apart what is right and what is wrong(重复，换个说法), all these become（come） into being during our childhood. Apparently, parents are our teachers. When we go to school, parents still have important meaning to us. Because they understand us clearly, no matter what we think or want, they can give us more efficient（也不一定） advice to our study, they can help us to confirm our specialty(这一点不错！), which is important for our future study. So we can not neglect the function of our parents in education.

Last but not least, community also influences the education. What is the ultimate destination for our education? We all know that this destination is the contribution to our society. We should use the knowledge we have possessed to develop the society. So the education has the relationship with community directly（has a direct relationship with commnity好点）. The development of the society is rapidly, it needs different knowledge, then we have so many fields to research（这并不意味着公众参与了教育啊，你说呢）. On the contrast, the education also provokes the development of the society. Every new discovery and invention is beneficial to our society, no matter technology, economy, literature and so on（你的这句要说明什么？！education 还是the development of science？而且有点绝对化了）. So the education and community interacts each other. If we want to accelerate the speed of development ether in society or education, the two parts should establish a kind of cooperation.

To sum up, no matter parents, communities or professional educators, they all have relationship with education. The most effective way to establish a healthy educational environment is the proper cooperation among these three aspects.


你的想法不错，分别论述的也满到位
不过怎样体现你的那个cooperation？
缺乏一些反面的论断，说明不合作的后果
最最关键的是（我个人认为）题目说的是参与到local school的教育中
而不仅仅是家长、社会公众对学生施加影响

不过偶在这点上也没论述清楚:L
大家可以讨论讨论！！
欢迎来拍我的ISSUE154：

foreveraUID：202035

呵呵...晚上看东西比较安静....

foreveraUID：202035

Education is an important part of the development of society, the speaker claims that both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools, because the education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators. To some extent, I agree with the speaker, but in my point of view the three aspects should cooperate well, which is beneficial to the education greatly.唯一一点缺点就是自己看法的那一部分,特别是反对author的意见,应该用更多笔墨.而叙述author的看法中那些自己不太支持的一代而过就可以了.

In the first place, the professional educator is a vital part of the education. When we go to the elementary school, teachers direct us to build the found fundamentof the knowledge, which is useful for our future study. Even the most basic knowledge given by teachers needs special arrangement such as what kind of knowledge is proper to children, how the children can accept the knowledge well and so on, let alone the higher education which is more professional. When we go to the university, we would receive the more difficult theories, formulas, all those curriculums should be directed by professional teachers, they can provide us more and more information about the subject we majored 后面是不是应该有个in呢?我也记不太清了.., and the most important aspect is that when we undertake an experiment to some new field, those professional educators can inform us some valuable experience, which is significant for the new research, that is to say, the professional educators can help us a lot in the study of special knowledge. Thus, in our educational system, the professional educator is significant for us.这一段条理还比较清晰,语言也有所进步,不过适当加入一些抽象一点的分析和总结会比全段都是在写教育的过程好一些吧.比如说" Educators often give us keys to the gate of knowledge palace",这种点睛的句子才是出彩的地方.

In addition not only the professional educators but also the parents are important to education. As every one known known to everyone, education involves several parts such as professional knowledge, social moral, responsibility and so on. 缺少点过渡句As common sense tells us, the most representative characteristic of children is imitation. When we are little boys or little girls, we do not know what is right or what is wrong, then the parents’ words and behaviors become the target of our imitation, they become our samples. From parents’ direction we can tell apart what is right and what is wrong distinguish beauties from evils, all these become into being during our childhood. Apparently, parents are our teachers. When we go to school, parents still have important meaning 这个词不太恰当to us. Because they understand us clearly, no matter what we think or want, they can give us more efficient advice to our study, they can help us to confirm our specialty, which is important for our future study. So we can not neglect the function of our parents in education.这段总体来说还不错,一些词的运用和句子的连接还应注意.

Last but not least, community also influences the education. What is the ultimate destination for our education? We all know that this destination is the contribution to our society. 什么意思哦,又没有看明白,难道是"教育的作用是服务社会?"那destination这个词用的就不好了. We should use the knowledge we have possessed to develop the society. So the education has the relationship with community directly. The development of the society is rapidly, it needs different knowledge, then we have so many fields to research. On the contrast in return, the education also provokes evokesthe development of the society. Every new discovery and invention is beneficial to our society, no matter technology, economy, literature and so on. So the education and community interacts each other. If we want to accelerate the speed of development ether in society or education, the two parts should establish a kind of cooperation.
重点应该论述社会对教育的作用,这段论证中心不够明确,应注意.
To sum up, no matter parents, communities or professional educators, they all have relationship with education. The most effective way to establish a healthy educational environment is the proper cooperation among these three aspects.



总的来说条理还比较清晰,不过最好多加入一点句式的变换,还有长句虽然不能太长太多，但是也最好都是短句.

俺的issue48
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=315677