issue48 熊熊组作业--互拍！

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提纲：agree
首先，要承认领导的不可替代性以及所起的决定性因素
但是，人民才是历史的真正缔造者
并且，正是人民这个大背景大环境让领导们茁壮成长，汲取思想与力量
shy,为啥一限时我就慌了捏， 写完了改着改着反到有了点灵感，晕，越来越没自信了，一周内能提高多少还...

According to the study of history, the speaker claims that the most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the elites, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten. On the contrary, some people would argue that it is opposite. On a balance, I would side with the former opinion.

Admittedly, the famous few, usually the leader in the determinate events and trends, plays a important role in it since he or she can call on the majority to take arms fighting for the freedom, the rights for themselves. Accordingly, quite a lot can be found in the long term history, such as Martin Luther King, one of the greatest leaders fighting for the injustice treatment for black people, cannot be replaced or ignored owning to his efforts contributed to it and his significant merits. He roused the public concern over this affair and organized the miserable people to fight against the privilege and to win their deserved fair judgment. None can imagine to what degree the history would be halted if he does not stand up bravely and arouse the public.

Yet, careful examination will reveal that, the majority is the real engine promoting the significant events and trends in history. They are aware of that they are nobody in the history, and willing to follow the leaders and struggle against the reverse power violently without any hesitancy, sticking to deep belief of the truth and unshakable desire to live free and make their children a better life. In other words, they are the main force to guarantee the success of the fight, and the real maker of the history. Without them, no leader could gain their fame, let alone the triumphant bloom.

The majority, on the other hand, taking in these meaningful things should not be ignored on the ground of their function serving as the abundant resource of the elites. Granted that the few elites indeed shows a seemingly more responsibility in these events, however, unless there are quite a lot people to influence them, they and they ideas might nevertheless remained ineffective at all. To take it further, it is the majority, actually, feed the famous few which makes them should be respect as the factor of more importance.

To conclude, both the famous few and groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten are important in the long term history, since they are both the makers of the history. Moreover, the leaders are oriented from the large part of majority, who give them the support, the power, and the confident to strive, to survive, and to make success in the history. Thus, I may consider that they are the main force to make the events and trends possible.

foreveraUID：202035

According to the study of history, the speaker claims that the most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the elites, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten.最好不要把原题目照抄上去 On the contrary, some people would argue that it is opposite. On a balance, I would side with the former opinion.感觉开头写的不够出彩,还有很大提高的余地.

Admittedly, the famous few, usually the leader in the determinate events and trends, plays a important role in it since he or she can call on the majority to take arms fighting for the freedom, the rights for themselves. 并不是所有的event都是要fight的吧Accordingly, quite a lot can be found in the long term history, such as Martin Luther King, one of the greatest leaders fighting foragainst the injustice treatment for black people, cannot be replaced or ignored owning to his efforts contributed to it and his significant merits. He roused the public concern over this affair and organized the miserable people to fight against the privilege and to win their deserved fair judgment. None can imagine to what degree the history would be halted if he does not stand up bravely and arouse the public.例子举的很不错

Yet, careful examination analysis好一点?will reveal that, the majority is the real engine promoting the significant events and trends in history. They are aware of that they are nobody in the history这句没有看明白啥意思, and willing to follow the leaders and struggle against the reverse power violently 感情色彩不太对吧without any      hesitancy, sticking to deep belief of the truth and unshakable desire to live free and make their children a better life. 这句够长的...In other words, they are the main force to guarantee the success of the fight, and the real maker of the history. Without them, no leader could gain their fame, let alone the triumphant bloom.

The majority, on the other hand, taking in these meaningful things should not be ignored on the ground of their function serving as the abundant resource of the elites. Granted that the few elites indeed shows a seemingly more responsibility in these events, however, unless there are quite a lot people to influence them, they and they theirideas might nevertheless remained ineffective at all. To take it further, it is the majority, actually, feed the famous few which makes them should be respect as the factor of more importance. 这段写的很不错....值得俺去学习学习

To conclude, both the famous few and groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten are important in the long term history, since they are both the makers of the history. Moreover, the leaders are oriented from the large part of majority, who give them the support, the power, and the confident to strive, to survive, and to make success in the history. Thus, I may consider that they are the main force to make the events and trends possible. 结尾好象长了一点吧...有好多语言都可以放到主体部分的,有好多人说俺的结尾太短,论述的不够彻底,不过个人以为结尾就应该非常的简洁,用最少的文字把全文概括一下,你认为呢?期待讨论....


俺的issue48
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=315677

foreveraUID：202035

To purple:
其实这几篇文章我都没有限时,一般都要1个半小时左右才能搞定,有的时候会更长,不过我很晚才考,限时的任务还不着急(不过大都是俺熬夜完了,特困但是睡不着的情况,思维比较迟钝),而且写的时候我也用了好多次kingsoft xdict,虽然好多是查单词的拼写,(俺的拼写的确成问题),不过也查到了好多很有用的词,也有人建议过不要用金山,不过我觉得查到好词然后记住还是有很帮助的,一般大牛们的文章最明显的特征就是用词BT的准确. 俺还达不到那种准确到另人发指+恶心的程度...哈哈
其实开头也就是俺给自己总结的一个摸版,其实也是根据孙远那本书的指导才搞出来的,个人以为这个摸版基本上什么题目都能通吃了....HOHO...你也可以根据那些大牛们的经验自己总结出来.
还有俺特别注意文章的整体结构和段内结构,以及承接问题,段与段的联系,句与句的联系,还有这些与中心的联系.不过最近的几篇由于都是几乎昏迷状态,在这方面也难免出错....哎...

还有审题的时候一定要注意对核心词的深入研究,要把它的意思都抠出来......最近发现我们组里有几篇文章就是有这个毛病,虽然没有看到你犯,不过也是提个醒.

还有...还有...还有啥呢.....还有就是一些个人习惯, 受一个xdf作文老师的影响,特别喜欢用长句,把一些意思都合并到一个句子中...不过n个人说过俺这种长句不好....5555 另外俺对虚拟语气特别喜欢,那些表示推测之类的意思就想用上.....HOHO

也就大概这些了....HOHO...希望对你能有帮助....


哎....作文关好过....那verbal怎么办啊.....天那!!!!

foreveraUID：202035

还有Moreover, as types of the ordinary people, the leaders embody public identities of the very group.的意思是:作为普通民众的代表,那些领导者能够很好的体现这个群体的特点.