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发表于 2005-8-12 20:53:54 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
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Such nonmainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits play a vital role in society by satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science.

论点:同意作者的观点。尽管科学技术很发达,但仍有很多问题还没有办法用科学来证明的,此时,非主流的理念就起到了相当大的作用。而且非主流还可以从精神上给人安慰,激励等等。
一、在过去,这些非主流起着非常重要的作用
二、非主流在现在同样起着重要的作用
三、非主流领域还在一定程度上给人们慰籍和鼓励,为整个社会的稳定和发展做出贡献
四、非主流也起着负面的影响
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I agree the speaker's assertion that nonmainstream areas act an important role in today's world. Although the science developing is so quickly and many questions that are unknown in the past have been solved, there are also many problems that are not explained now. At this time, the nonmainstram areas show up their significant function on both mainstream areas developing and citizen's lives.

It is absolutely that today's nonmainstream areas played as a central role in the old times. First, it is contribute to establishing a ideology system for people to think, despite of whether it is correct. Those methods helped ancestor to think about the world by a systematic way. Second, those nonmainstream areas which are mainstreams in old times contributed too many efforts to develop economy and stabilize countries. The contribution made in those fields cannot be ignored by us. With more and more problems solved by science today, the frame of those areas had been covered, however, had not been forget.

The nonmainstream areas also play an important role today by analyze ideologies occurred in the past and now. The nonmainstreams today are the procedure and foundation of today's mainstreams. It is because the old people point out an opinion  that stimulated the latter to suspect it and many of the scientists, including most famous and outstanding, are believing those nonmainstreams given them power of courage and confidences. For instance, a famous example that Copernicus' sun-central theory beat Ptolemy's earth-central theory, both of which are not the nonmainstream theories today, led people to think which the central of the universe is. It is no doubt that the Ptolemy's theory brought about Corpernicus' theory, further led today's mainstream-astronomy. The fact that nonmainstreams brought mainstreams in the past can be continually used now, for the nonmainstreams can brought many unforeseen and unique thinking way and inspiration to today's researches which are aiming to solve those unknown problems. Therefore, the contributions made on today's mainstreams are significant,

The nonmainstreams can also make many positive affect on today's daily lives such as giving people comfort and courage. A very typical example is the way nonmainstreams explain death. The two sayings, “a person will go to the heaven after death if he does good things than bad, on the contrary, he will go down to hell" derived in western world, and "Putting down the knife becomes Buddha setting up" originated in China, showing that nonmainstreams are leading people to do good things, which benefit our society. Another example is a short story that many people know. One day, a burger met a fortune-teller when he tried to steal something. The fortune-teller did not tell the police, by contrary, he told the young man that if he can obtain one dollar by a people today, he may become a millionaire within 10 years. This prediction had come true. The kernel of this story is not to discuss whether fortune-teller really knows the future, but the positive affect on the young man. The nonmainstreams, like astrology and fortune-telling give people hopes when they fail and help them to claim up along the mountain with believing.

However, nonmainstreams may also do positive effect on the society, especially those territories founded on them which cause panic and destroy peace of the world. Those functions of nonmainstreams should be eliminated without doubt. Moreover, although nonmainstreams play such an important role, most of them will extinct with further sharply development in science.

To sum up, with rapid technology development in science, nonmainstreams areas, such as astrology, fortune-telling, psychic and paranormal pursuits, have been replaced by mainstreams. However, their functions on developing the science and stabilizing the society are also very important.

我觉得例子没找好。。有点偏。。希望给点意见!!!求砖~~

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The dispute about what role and how the non-mainstream areas, such as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits, plays in today's society lasts so long. I concede that those areas still play some roles now, but I do not agree with the speaker's assertion that they play certain vital roles.

No one can deny that those non-mainstream areas contributed so much to the ancient society and some of the contributions are still useful today. Although non-mainstreams, most of which are not correct as we see today, they bring ancestors the way and system to thought and to solve their curious problems. They are, in some extent, satisfied ancestors curiosities and demands to acknowledge the world. Additionally, those non-mainstreams often play an important role to help rulers establishing, managing, stabilizing and developing their countries. Many historical reports can prove that many people who want to turn over a dynasty would turn to astrology, fortune-telling, for example, to convince common people to help them. Moreover, many things commonly used today were reformed based on those non-mainstreams' invention. Such as the calendar, whose forerunner was invented based on ancient research of astrology.

With increasing in people's curiosities and demands for unknown areas, the non-mainstreams can not satisfy people and the flaw-full non-mainstreams was suspected by more and more people. Gradually, a completely new system-science- had founded, which can satisfy people's needs in much larger spectrum. Science gives us more credible, authentic and rational way to acknowledge our world, and becoming the ruler and basis of today's world.

Now, in the science-rule world, non-mainstreams also play some roles such as comfort painful people and encourage disappointed ones. First, non-mainstreams, like paranormal pursuits, can give the people who lost parents, close friends, or true lovers comfort and ease themselves by considering that they can talk to the dead person. Second, fortune-telling can sometimes courage and give hopes to disappointed person, like the one who face bankruptcy, by telling them that everything will become alright in the future. All above-mentioned can prove the function non-mainstreams acted.

Admittedly, those non-mainstreams have something to do with today's society, however, we should have a clear view point that the role non-mainstreams played today is quite different from that of the past: people in the past consider the non-mainstreams as truth and correct ones that they believe in them, while people nowadays just consider them as a carrier to shift the choose and decision burdens which are caused by today's serious competitions and hard pressures. Rational people will not rely on those non-mainstreams but take on responsibilities to their actions.

It is surely that non-mainstreams cannot take place of science. For one thing, non-mainstreams may sometimes do harm to people. Those who run after non-mainstreams and over-believing them would lost their intellect and fighting will and cause distort in mental and severities which may damage the world. For another, the non-mainstreams which were based on unverified predictions are no longer believed simply by modern people most of who believe in science as it is based on credible, reliable and verified researches.

To sum up, unless science developed to the degree that can solve all the problems given by people and satisfy people's needs, such non-mainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits will not disappear completely. However, the functions that those non-mainstreams act nowadays are not that vital as speaker asserts. Moreover, the role of those non-mainstreams will be famed away by science.

跟之前的观点不同了。。。。
希望大家给点意见!!!


又来了。。。偶滴第三遍了。。
针对上面的小改了一下,主要是根据po的建议。
The dispute about what role the non-mainstream areas, such as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits, play in today's society lasts long. I concede that those areas still play some roles now, but their functions are not as such significant as the speaker asserts.

No one can deny that those non-mainstream areas contributed so much to the ancient society and some of the contributions are still useful today. Although non-mainstreams, most of which are not correct as we see today, they bring ancestors the way to thought and to solve their curious problems. They are, in some extent, satisfied ancestors curiosities and demands to acknowledge the world. Additionally, those non-mainstreams often play an important role to help rulers establishing, managing, stabilizing and developing their countries. Many historical reports can prove that many people who want to turn over a dynasty would turn to astrology, fortune-telling, for example, to convince common people to help them. Moreover, many things commonly used today were reformed based on those non-mainstreams' invention. Such as the calendar, whose forerunner was invented based on ancient research of astrology.

Now, in the science-rule world, non-mainstreams also play some roles such as comfort painful people and encourage disappointed ones. First, non-mainstreams, like paranormal pursuits, can give the people who lost parents, close friends, or true lovers comfort and ease themselves by considering that they can talk to the dead person. Second, fortune-telling can sometimes courage and give hopes to disappointed person, like the one who face bankruptcy, by telling them that everything will become alright in the future. All above-mentioned can prove the function non-mainstreams acted.

Admittedly, those non-mainstreams have something to do with today's society, however, we should have a clear view point that the role non-mainstreams played today is quite different from that of the past: people in the past consider the non-mainstreams as truth and correct ones that they believe in them, while people nowadays just consider them as a carrier to shift the choose and decision burdens which are caused by today's serious competitions and hard pressures. Rational people will not rely on those non-mainstreams but take on responsibilities to their actions.

With increasing in people's curiosities and demands for unknown areas, the non-mainstreams can not satisfy people and the problematic non-mainstreams was suspected by more and more people. Gradually, a completely new system-science- had founded, which can satisfy people's needs in much larger spectrum. Science gives us more credible, authentic and rational way to acknowledge our world, and becoming the ruler and basis of today's world. Moreover, it is surely that non-mainstreams cannot take place of science. For one thing, non-mainstreams may sometimes do harm to people. Those who run after non-mainstreams and over-believing them would lost their intellect and fighting will and cause distort in mental and severities which may damage the world. For another, the non-mainstreams which were based on unverified predictions are no longer believed simply by modern people most of who believe in science as it is based on credible, reliable and verified researches.

To sum up, unless science developed to the degree that can solve all the problems given by people and satisfy people's needs, such non-mainstream areas of inquiry as astrology, fortune-telling, and psychic and paranormal pursuits will not disappear completely. However, the functions that those non-mainstreams act nowadays are not that vital as speaker asserts. Moreover, the role of those non-mainstreams will be famed away by science.


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发表于 2005-8-13 10:24:13 |只看该作者
I agree the speaker's assertion that nonmainstream areas act an important role in today's world. Although the science developing is so quickly and many questions that are unknown in the past have been solved, there are also many problems that are not explained now. At this time, the nonmainstram areas show up their significant function on both mainstream areas developing and citizen's lives.

It is absolutely that today's nonmainstream areashave ever played as played as a central role in the old times. First, it is contribute to establishing aan ideology system for people to think, despite of whether it is correct. Those methods helped ancestor to think about the world by a systematic way. Second, those nonmainstream areas which are mainstreams in old times contributed too应该去掉too否则是否定 many efforts to develop economy and stabilize countries. The contribution made in those fields cannot be ignored by us. With more and more problems solved by science today, the frame of those areas had been covered, however, had not been forgetfogotten.

The nonmainstream areas also play an important role today by analyze ideologies occurred in the past and now. The nonmainstreams today are the procedure and foundation of today's mainstreams. It is because the old people point out an opinion  that stimulated the latter to suspect it and many of the scientists, including most famous and outstanding, are believing those nonmainstreams given them power of courage and confidences. For instance, a famous example that Copernicus' sun-central theory beat Ptolemy's earth-central theory, both of which are not the nonmainstream theories today, led people to think which the central of the universe is. It is no doubt that the Ptolemy's theory brought about Corpernicus' theory, further led today's mainstream-astronomy. The fact that nonmainstreams brought mainstreams in the past can be continually used now, for the nonmainstreams can brought many unforeseen and unique thinking way and inspiration to today's researches which are aiming to solve those unknown problems. Therefore, the contributions made on today's mainstreams are significant,

The nonmainstreams can also make many positive affect on today's daily lives such as giving people comfort and courage. A very typical example is the way nonmainstreams explain death. The two sayings, “a person will go to the heaven after death if he does good things than bad, on the contrary, he will go down to hell" derived in western world, and "Putting down the knife becomes Buddha setting up" originated in China, showing that nonmainstreams are leading people to do good things, which benefit our society. Another example is a short story that many people know. One day, a burger met a fortune-teller when he tried to steal something. The fortune-teller did not tell the police, by contrary, he told the young man that if he can obtain one dollar by a people today, he may become a millionaire within 10 years. This prediction had come true. The kernel of this story is not to discuss whether fortune-teller really knows the future, but the positive affect on the young man. The nonmainstreams, like astrology and fortune-telling give people hopes when they fail and help them to claim up along the mountain with believing.

However, nonmainstreams may also do positive effect on the society, especially those territories founded on them which cause panic and destroy peace of the world. Those functions of nonmainstreams should be eliminated without doubt. Moreover, although nonmainstreams play such an important role, most of them will extinct with further sharply development in science.

To sum up, with rapid technology development in science, nonmainstreams areas, such as astrology, fortune-telling, psychic and paranormal pursuits, have been replaced by mainstreams. However, their functions on developing the science and stabilizing the society are also very important.

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发表于 2005-8-13 10:26:31 |只看该作者
日历根据星象研究的来得,这个例子可能好一点

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发表于 2005-8-13 10:27:59 |只看该作者
o   不错不错 我怎么没想到阿
谢谢
那楼上觉得还有什么要加强的??
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发表于 2005-8-13 10:30:17 |只看该作者
还有就是topic sentence 最好用多种方式,比如倒装啊,什么的

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发表于 2005-8-13 10:31:01 |只看该作者
已经很好了,加油

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谢谢哈
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发表于 2005-8-13 10:56:04 |只看该作者
我还是觉得有点跑题了。。。。。。。
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发表于 2005-8-13 11:12:55 |只看该作者
我觉得可以啊?好像没有跑啊,继续努力

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发表于 2005-8-13 11:34:56 |只看该作者
我可能要砸几块砖了
1. 语法错误和语言问题不少,希望能仔细检查后再发上来
2. 觉得您对题目的理解有偏差,这个statement的意思的主语应该是占星术,占卜未来和通灵这些非主流的领域(您似乎把它广义化为非科学,所以看您的文章里涉及到了宗教的例子,觉得不妥)
3. 关于托勒米的例子。占星术,占卜未来和通灵这些非主流的领域应该是 古往今来都是非主流的,即使在古希腊,主流也应该是哲学(科学的前身,基于非常朴素的观察),托勒米错误的理解是由于技术限制造成的,例子用的不对
4。astrology是占星术的意思,没有astronomy的意思(古英语有,现在废除),日历史古代的观察家用长时间的观测后发现规律然后总结出来的,而不是在给人算命的过程中总结出来的,所以那个例子也不好
5。我自己列的一个提纲,不管是否有用,权当做一个参考
非主流的这些领域确实在满足无法由主流科学解决的问题上起到了一定的作用,但他的作用被作者夸大了,主流科学仍然起着关键的作用

以非主流可以满足人们对未来确定事物的好奇与渴望

过分看重非主流会产生不好的后果

科学,作为一种对理性的探索,才是推动社会前进的根本。他在社会中起了非常重要的作用

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发表于 2005-8-13 12:31:24 |只看该作者
恩  楼上的2、3、4点我也是同样的感觉,可是写的时候没分清概念,我觉得很难写,楼上写了可以给我看看阿
楼上的提纲是大驳小同型的,我的是大同小驳。
谢谢阿
我还是觉得很难写。。。。。。。
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发表于 2005-8-13 12:38:43 |只看该作者
这么多人看了
我就不浪费资源了
等你下一篇

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呵呵 好 先谢谢了
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发表于 2005-8-13 12:50:51 |只看该作者
你写的是限时作文吗?字好多的说
如果不是限时的话,应该多琢磨一下思路把
毕竟考察的是思想
我现在还在列提纲,只写了一篇,路漫漫。。。。。
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