十月金秋第十一次作业

mantnkhUID: 2303879

交晚了;d:

A friend of yours has received some money  and plans  to use all of it either to go on vacation to buy a carYour friend has asked you for advice. Compare your friend's two choices and explain which one you think your friend should choose. Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.Sometimes there must be many choices to be chosen in your lifetime, and some are just hard to make a decision. Recently one of my friends has right face such a situation, to buy a car or to go on a vacation by using those money he received newly. But I say the two choices are both excellent as they have respective benefits for him. As for me, the former one has more advantage.

    Car, as the most popular and important vehicle in our city, is rather useful for such student who live far from our university as my friend. As I know, everyday he has to take one or more hour to get to our teaching building with riding his bike. That's so time-consuming! The finally exam is approaching nowadays, saving the time which wasted on road and putting much time on reviewing our material relate to exam seems much important than before. Moreover, it is pleasant to catch a wind with your friends, especially your girlfriend. You can go for a picnic to somewhere further than before, and if you like, travel to other country to experience various culture and diverse people.

Admittedly, hardly could we go to some none-road and remote place by car. Some intriguing tourist or country are so far that you can not go there by your car, my friend and I always be fascinated by the beautiful scenery of ocean, we imagined the to board a gorgeous ship, just the same as titanic, to enjoy the blue sky and expensive ocean. So my has already had the opportunity to fulfill his dream. With these money, he can enjoy a wonderful vocation.

   The two choice are both great, notwithstanding, he must make a decision. But I recommend him to buy a car with those money, we are still student deem study as our first mission, so a more convenient way to go school should be the right direction to him.

ensueUID: 2196590

Sometimes there must be many choices to be chosen in your lifetime, and some are just hard to make a decision. Recently one of my friends has right face such a situation, to buy a car or to go on a vacation by using those money he received newly. But I say the two choices are both excellent as they have respective benefits for him. As for me, the former one has more advantage.（第一句可以用简单句来引出话题，或者delete；最后两句可以用although的让步关系，表明although both A and B have their respective advantages, i take A as first choice, because...）

    Car, as the most popular and important vehicle in our city, is rather useful for such student who live far from our university as my friend. As I know, everyday he has to take one or more hour to get to our teaching building (with riding his bike--->by bike). That's so time-consuming! The finally exam is approaching nowadays, saving the time which wasted on road and putting much time on reviewing our material relate to exam seems much important than before. Moreover, it is pleasant to catch a wind with your friends, (especially your girlfriend--->especially your family感觉这样更好一点). You can go for a picnic to somewhere further than before, and if you like, travel to other country to experience various culture and diverse people.

Admittedly, hardly could we go to some none-road and remote places by car. Some intriguing tourists or countries are so far that you can not go there by your car, my friend and I always be fascinated by the beautiful scenery of ocean, we imagined the to board a gorgeous ship, just the same as titanic, to enjoy the blue sky and expensive ocean(mind the grammatical problem). So my friend has already had the opportunity to fulfill his dream. With these money, he can enjoy a wonderful (vocation-->vacation).

   The two choice are both great, notwithstanding, he must make a decision. But I recommend him to buy a car with those money, we are still student deem study as our first mission(grammatical problem), so a more convenient way to go school should be the right direction to him. (原文谈的不只go to school这个理由，所以在这里应该都总结到)

mantnkhUID: 2303879

谢谢这么细心的批改:loveliness:
真的这么多problems哈，shame-making..