impulse周四作业， 有拍必回！~

gabby19832004UID: 2461820

It is better to work for a large company than for a small company（周四作业）

Recently, after the fulfillment of industrialization of our society, people are forced to encounter a variety of problems. Among these, one is the way you pick your job, that is, given a choice between a large company and a small one, which one do you prefer? Personally, I inclined to pick the latter.

First of all, a small company creates a loose environment in which one could fully perform his or herself. In order to maximize profit, small companies usually tend to hire fewer employees. In this situation, each member has to take full responsibilities. And their work abilities are therefore largely enhanced by such complete and sometimes overweighted workloads. Large companies, to the contrary, provide modest job responsibilities for each position. For this sake, stuff working in large companies would never step up to the plate and take their full swings. Consequently, their career have been put into a stalemate, which to some extent-- an end.

Secondly, if I picked small company, I can get more choices for myself. The number of small companies is totally surpass that of the large companies. This choice enables me to select a job that I favored most among thousands upon thousands job openings.

Thirdly,I choose small company as a priority because it make me feel less stressful. It is good for my mental health. Many people have a keen appetite for positions in large companies, multinational corporations to be specifically, because of the generous payments, inspiring bonus, and promising pensions they offered. As a matter of fact, it is not unusual that they have hundreds of candidates compete for one position in large companies. I am a mighty girl, yet this kind of competition could do nothing but only contributes to aggravate the strain of my mental effort. I cannot even bear a quick thought of that situation. It makes me feel exhausted.

By and large, despite the appealing treatment provided by large companies, I prefer small companies for their opportunities for personal development, comfortable working ambiance and so on.

迷茫者UID: 2514662

语言上我就不献丑了  有的话也是一些粗心的小错误,拉到WORD上 一看就知道了
当然这篇作文还是在6分的档次上

有2个地方值得注意~~~~
1,由于美国人的思维很具体化(不想中国那么抽象)  如果一点理由提出后没有太多的分析 他们会觉得没有说服力~ ~虽然中国人认为有重有轻 可能会更好点~~但可能他门不怎么想~~~~所以从这方面来说~~~3段的 篇章差距不要太大~~~(第2个论点短了)
2,还是跟美国人思维具体有关~~~~他们都希望能有具体事列 来证明论点~~不要空谈 将大一对相似的理由~~~~~~~
其实这方面 我们可以走捷径~~~比如~~加个for example,  if one person........等等标志一下
想你的第3个论点~~~~就举了你自己的列子 虽然篇幅很少 很看起来 有理有据了  现在第一个论点 就感觉都在说理 缺少类似标
志着 列子的词语

再次强调 你的作文 已经到了很高的水准~~~补充这些~只希望有所帮助

作文还是在5.5以上的档次上

19811010316UID: 2220703

Recently, after the fulfillment of industrialization of our society, people are forced to encounter a variety of problems. Among these, one is the way you pick your job, that is, given a choice between a large company and a small one, which one do you prefer? Personally, I inclined to pick the latter.

First of all, a small company creates a loose environment in which one could fully perform his or herself. In order to maximize profit, small companies usually tend to hire fewer employees. In this situation, each member has to take full responsibilities. And their work abilities are, therefore, largely enhanced by such complete and sometimes overweighted workloads. Large companies, to the contrary, provide modest job responsibilities for each position. For this sake, stuff working in large companies would never step up to the plate and take their full swings. Consequently, their career have been put into a stalemate, which to some extent-- an end.

Secondly, if I picked small company, I can get more choices for myself. The number of small companies is totally surpass that of the large companies. This choice enables me to select a job that I favored most among thousands upon thousands job openings.(好像很少看范文用I的阿。)

Thirdly,I choose small company as a priority because it make me feel less stressful. It is good for my mental health. Many people have a keen appetite（a intense aspiration） for positions in large companies, multinational corporations, to be specifically, because of the generous payments, inspiring bonus, and promising(fascinating/attractive) pensions they offered. As a matter of fact, it is not unusual that they have hundreds of candidates compete for one position in large companies. I am a mighty girl, yet this kind of competition could do nothing but only contributes to aggravate(contribute to aggravating) the strain of my mental effort. I cannot even bear a quick thought(elusive) of that situation. It makes me feel exhausted.

By and large, despite the appealing treatment provided by large companies, I prefer small companies for their opportunities for personal development, comfortable working ambiance and so on.

写得很好。很流畅。

学习了。

你很有实力。

好好练，应该30没问题。

kturyUID: 2274868

楼主的作文读起来感觉就顺畅，收获了几个好用的词汇
有时间的话帮我看看作文的，现在感觉很迷茫，不知道怎么写好了。

https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=864399&extra=page%3D1

[ 本帖最后由 ktury 于 2008-8-1 20:13 编辑 ]