标题: hcp4715 Daily writing home work [打印本页] 作者: hcp4715 时间: 2011-2-28 19:07:35 标题: hcp4715 Daily writing home work
TPO5 综合写作
The instructor mainly tells us that thethree theory provided by the passage is not well-supported by evidence, thoughthey sould plausible.
First,
the hypothesis that the Chaco structure were purely residential was lackof enough support. Even the Chaco house appear striking similiar to the"apartement buildings"at Taos, New Mexico, there is not evidence showthat there were many people lived in that big houses.There are only severalfire left in the Chaco house, but if these structures are used to resident,there should be hundreds of them. thus ,this theory is unconvincing.
The second theory that Chaco structureswere used for storing is lack of evidence too. If these houses are used tostore grain maize, there must be something related to maize left in the insideof the houses. However, historians did not find any clues about it. What'smore, storehouse of maize should be built near the farm, but there structuresare not so near.
Third, ceremonial-center-theory alsorefused by available evidences. the finding of many broken pots were used aseivdence to support this idea, nonotheless, these pots were find with manyother trashes discarded by people. It is also possible that the pots are onlyordinary trash, instead of from festive meals.
独立作文
Do you agree or disagree followingstatement? it is better to make friends with intelligent people than withpeople who have a good sense of humor.
I personally disagree with the point thatit is better to make friends with intelligent people than with people who havea good sense of humor because being intelligent and humorous are not mutuallyexclusive and one person could be both intelligent and have a good sense ofhumor.
First, having a good sense of humor itselfis a indicator of intelligence. Humor is essentially using a easy or funny wayto express an otherwise obscure or difficult idea, thus to be humorous you needhave a different perspective to view things and use a words or sentence thatcould make people laugh, both of these ability are important component ofintelligence. Therefore, make friends with peopl have good sense of humor issuperior to make friends with those who are intelligent but boring.
In addition, with a friend who could makeyou laugh all the time will difinitely give you a lot of good time. When youare happy and share you archivement with him/her, by turnning it even morefunny s/he would implicit tell you never be too proud to ignore the details;While you have a bad time and complain to him/her, s/he could give you atotally different viewpoint from which you could see the positive side of thosethings, at same time s/he may also make you mood turn better and help you findsoluations through amusing words, that is both comforting and useful, at leastfor me. In contrast, if your friend is some who are smart but lack sense ofhumor, you will find that you can only discuss problem with s/he rationally butnever being comforted emotionally, thus you could not feel suppport from s/he.
In sum, I prefer make friend with peoplewho have a good sense of humor, for they are both smart and funny. Withhumorous friends around, I could be more positive and enjoyed life more.作者: candis712 时间: 2011-3-1 16:47:40
In the passage, critics doubt the accuracy Chevalier's memoir because they thought that Chevalier distorted or even created many events to make his memoir more attractive. However, the speaker give more evidences to show that the memoir wrote by Chevalier is quit reliable.
First, Critics used the eivdence that Chevalier borrowed considerable amount of money to prove that Chevalier is not rich. However, the speaker demostrates that Chevalier could not be poor for he did spend a lot of money on parties and gambling. And he borrowed money because at that time you can't exchange your property for money immediately, so it was entirely possible that Chevalier borrow cash from others before the hishis own arrived.
When it comes to these conversations between Chevalier and Voltaire, the critics doubt that he can not possibly capture these conversations accurately after so many years. However, the speaker pointed out the Chevalier had taken notes every time he finished talk with Voltaire. And there are also proof that when he wrote his memoir, Chevalier often checked his notebooks. so we can trust the accuracy of this part of his Chevalier.
What more, Chevalier's claim that he escape from Venice prison is reliable as well. Critics argued that Chevalier had many politicians as friends who might have bribed the jailers to free him. However, there are many prisoners who have even more powerful friend did not get out of the prison. soSo it is unlikely that Chevalier was brought out by his friends. In addition, there are official document records that the prison's ceiling was repaired once, and the time was exactly after Chevalier escaped from there. itIt is entirely possible that they were to fix the hole made by Chevalier.
So, given these details and evidence, the speaker re-assurespeaker re-assures the reliability of Chevalier's memoir, and refused the critics' doubt.
独立作文
Nowadays each group member get same grade(grade (mark), Isis it a good method to evaluate students to give the same grades to all the members of who do the same project together. What do you think of the way of evaluation?
It is a long debated problem that whether should wewe should give same grades to all the members who do the same project as a group. Some claim that credit all the members the same is the best way to bolster the efficencyefficiency of the group as whole; while others argue that this will riseraise the problem of freeridersfree riders. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the later point.
First and foremost, Givinggiving a same grade(grade (mark) to all group members produces aan unfair situation: those who contribute more than others were not being rewarded while free-riders get pay-off too.Intoo. In any circumstance, the contributions made by each membersmember could not be totally equal,equal; someone may do a larger part of the project while others do a smaller one. If we give them without difference, this will definitely disencouragediscourage the main contributor(s), makes them be less willing to work hard in future.
Second, reward all the group members would actually encourage free-riders. In other words, those who do nothing at all also get the same grade as those who have worked hard. Historically,oneHistorically, one of the most problems that affect the cooperation in a group is the free-rider dilemma. Once people find that they could possibllypossibly get reward without any cost, the selfishness instinct deep in our mind will drive us to decrease our contribution to the group, so would other people. Thus the cooperation level between the members will decline. In the end, the group will not be able to finish it project.
To solve this problem, I prefer to give the grade according to each and every one's contribtuioncontribution to the project. In other words, those who work harder and do more jobs will get higher grade, while those who make less contributions will get lower grade. In this way, we create a fair measurement of each member's performance. The differentiated grades would remind members that they should be more engaged in project and cooperation with others more often. And therefore improve the performance of the group as a whole.作者: Ivan1989 时间: 2011-3-2 08:12:42
In the passage, critics doubt the accuracy of Chevalier's memoir because they thought that Chevalier distorted or even created many events to make his memoir more attractive. However, the speaker give more evidences to show that the memoir wrote by Chevalier is quit reliable./ D4 V" e9 r& b M, _, w第一段总结的挺好
- b) _2 q% A% r& ]8 XFirst, Critics used the eivdence that Chevalier borrowed considerable amount of money to prove that Chevalier is not rich. However, the speaker demostrates that Chevalier could not be poor for he did spend a lot of money on parties and gambling. And he borrowed money because at that time you can't exchange your property for money immediately, so it was entirely possible that Chevalier borrow cash from others before the hishis own arrived.
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1 y; ]# ?( |' g4 tWhen it comes to these conversations between Chevalier and Voltaire, the critics doubt that he can not possibly capture these conversations accurately after so many years. However, the speaker pointed（时态统一） out the Chevalier had taken notes every time he finished talk with Voltaire. And there are also proof that when he wrote his memoir, Chevalier often checked his notebooks. so we can trust the accuracy of this part of his Chevalier." y! B5 S7 k' M% X2 `& G0 i
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What more, Chevalier's claim that he escape from Venice prison is reliable as well. Critics argued that Chevalier had many politicians as friends who might have bribed the jailers to free him. However, there are many prisoners who have even more powerful friend（s） did not get out of the prison.So it is unlikely that Chevalier was brought out by his friends. In addition, there are official document records that the prison's ceiling was repaired once, and the time was exactly after Chevalier escaped from there. It is entirely possible that they were to fix the hole made by Chevalier.* Q J9 N8 T+ A0 ?, L/ u$ X
; A: T% p- Q( ?- C" Z& |So, given these details and evidence, the speaker re-assures the reliability of Chevalier's memoir, and refused the critics' doubt.(细节都很准确，很好啊)作者: Go2011Go 时间: 2011-3-2 11:51:44
Nowadays each group member get same grade(grade (mark), Isis it a good method to evaluate students to give the same grades to all the members of who do the same project together. What do you think of the way of evaluation?7 Q: R& a5 [/ P
) ^! P$ _: y; b" V$ BIt is a long debated problem that whether should we give same grades to all the members who do the same project as a group. Some claim that credit all the members the same is the best way to bolster the efficency of the group as whole(觉得怪怪的); while others argue that this will raise the problem of free riders. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the later point.) v7 T6 V- F2 s! }' a. w
+ n5 C: q* G6 E. J' `- v/ pFirst and foremost, Giving a same grade(grade (mark) to all group members produces an unfair situation: those who contribute more than others were not being rewarded while free-riders get pay-off too. In any circumstance, the contributions made by each member could not be exactly equal; someone may do a larger part of the project while others do a smaller one. If we give them without difference, this will definitely discourage the main contributor(s), makes them be less willing to work hard in future.7 U; C+ J# u+ @
' @) i4 F; k1 B* @7 D: L USecond, reward (to ) all the group members would actually encourage free-riders. In other words, those who do nothing at all also get the same grade as those who have worked hard. Historically, one of the most (缺少形容词吧)problems that affect the cooperation in a group is the free-rider dilemma.(没有体现出两难啊) Once people find that they could possiblly get reward without any cost, the selfishness instinct deep in our mind will drive us to decrease our contribution to the group, so would other people. Thus the cooperation level between the members will decline.（不明白具体的意思） In the end, the group will not be able to finish its project.(感觉这一段是上面一段的极端情况，开头可以不用second，Moreover会好一些)
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. M4 n4 k: |" J- j& h' b) zTo solve this problem, I prefer to give the grade according to each and every one's contribtuion to the project. In other words, those who work harder and do more jobs will get higher grade, while those who make less contributions will get lower grade. In this way, we create a fair measurement of each member's performance. The differentiated grades would remind members that they should be more engaged in project and cooperation with others more often. And therefore improve the performance of the group as a whole.
TPO 10综合
The passage cites three evidences to provethat the decline of sea otter alone the western coast of North America iscaused by pollution. However, the speakerdoesn't agree with this statement and gives more convincingevidences to support the point that the real reason is predation.
To begin with, the speak says that there isno dead sea otter's body have been found along the beach, contradict with thenotion that pollution caused death of sea otter. If as the passage claims, thesea otter are affected by the polluted water and can not immune to infectionany more, then there must be a lot of them died and with their body foamedalong the beach.
In addition, the decrease of the amount ofother sea mammals gives no support to the notion the sea otter was killed bypollution indirectly. Because after humans’ hunting activities on the sea, theamount of whale declined. Thus the orca do nothave enough prey, as a result, it turns to smaller mammals such as sea sealsand sea lions for food. This change causes other sea mammals become less.
It is clearer when it come to the unevenpattern of otter decline. In contrast to the pollution theory states, thepredatory theory could illustrate it better. For the location where otterdecline is exactly where the orca could access. Because orca is very big, itcan only predate at location where the water is deep, at those shallow areathey can't access, otter's population is fairlystable.
Do you agree or disagreewith the following statement? A job with more vacation time but a low salary isbetter than a job with a high salary but less vacation time.
People always have different opinions whenit comes to how balance salary and vacation timein selecting job. Some may claim more vacation represents more degree offreedom and therefore is better, while others prefer high salary for it meansbetter living condition. From my point of view, high salary with less vacationis a better way to utilize my time.
First and foremost, higher salary means youhave spend more time to your work and contribute more to the society. As asocial animal, we human beings are never born to just for ourselves. Instead weshould consider the community, the society and the world we live in. OnlyThrough hard working could we contribute our own energy to a bigger group, of course, this is companied with higherpay-offs. So, if and only if I spend enough timeon working than that I used to leisure, I feel peace in my mind.
We also can not ignore another critical problem we should face as an adult: provide a better live condition to ourfamily and ourselves. In this highlycommercialized society, you have to pay more in order to higher return andother give more to your parents, kids and spouse. In thiscase, get a job with high salary but nonetheless with less vacation time is theoptimal choice.
Last but not least, Working is another kindof enjoying. As the mature of free market, we all could select a job based onour own passion and love. Thus we are actually not working but having fun ifour job is exactly the one we dreamed of. For example, If I become a cognitivepsychologist as I am dreaming in future, I would most likely work long time andhave high pay-offs, I don't care how much the vacation time will be, for I willbe have vacation everyday as I doing psychological studies.
Though vacation timeis an important factor in job selection,I personally prefer a highly paid job with less vacation time based on threereasons I listed above.作者: hcp4715 时间: 2011-3-2 20:28:50
修改
The passage cites three evidences to prove that the decline of sea otter alone（along） the western coast of North America is caused by pollution. However, the speaker doesn't agree with this statement and gives more convincing evidences to support the point that the real reason is predation. (总结的很好)
To begin with, the speak says that there is no dead sea otter's body have been found along the beach, （which）contradict(s) with the notion that pollution caused death of sea otter. If as the passage claims, thesea otter are affected by the polluted water and can not immune to infection any more, then there must be a lot of them died and with their body foamed along(不明白这个词组) the beach.
In addition, the decrease of the amount ofother sea mammals gives no support to the notion the sea otter was killed bypollution indirectly.（开头很好） Because after humans’ hunting activities on the sea, the amount of whale declined. Thus the orca do not have enough prey, as a result, it turns to smaller mammals such as sea sealsand sea lions for food. This change causes other sea mammals become less.
It is clearer when it come to the unevenpattern of otter decline（有点突兀 what is clearer?）. In contrast to the pollution theory states, thepredatory theory could illustrate it better. For the location where otterdecline is exactly where the orca could access. Because orca is very big, itcan only predate at location where the water is deep, at those shallow areathey can't access, otter's population is fairlystable.
要点都很准确！很好！作者: Go2011Go 时间: 2011-3-3 11:35:59
修改
People always have different opinions when it comes to how （to） balance salary and vacation time (when) selecting job. Some may claim more vacation represents more degree of freedom and therefore is better, while others prefer high salary, for it means better living condition. From my point of view, high salary with less vacationis a better way to utilize my time.(观点明确)
First and foremost, higher salary means you have spen(t) more time to your work and contribute more to the society. As a social animal,(animal这个形容不好) we human beings are never born to just for ourselves. Instead we should consider the community, the society and the world we live in. Only through hard work could we contribute our own energy to a bigger group, of course, this is companied with higherpay-offs. So, if and only if I spend enough time on working than that I used to leisure, I feel peace in my mind.
We also can not ignore another critical problem we should face as an adult: provide a better live condition to our family and ourselves. In this highlycommercialized society, you have to pay more in order to higher return and other give more to your parents, kids and spouse（这句话逻辑不是很理解）. In thiscase, get a job with high salary but nonetheless with less vacation time is theoptimal choice.
Last but not least, Working is another kindof enjoying. As the mature of free market, we all could select a job based onour own passion and love（自由市场真的可以带来这样的效果吗？）. Thus we are actually not working but having fun ifour job is exactly the one we dreamed of. For example, If I become a cognitivepsychologist as I am dreaming in future, I would most likely work long time andhave high pay-offs, I don't care how much the vacation time will be, for I willbe have vacation everyday as I doing psychological studies.
Though vacation timeis an important factor in job selection,I personally prefer a highly paid job with less vacation time based on threereasons I listed above.
观点很明确，论证很清楚，虽然有的因果关系我不是太理解，总之，很好从作者: hcp4715 时间: 2011-3-3 11:52:13
本帖最后由 hcp4715 于 2011-3-3 17:34 编辑
3.3 号 作业 见 附件（已有红色为我的拼写错误部分，呵呵）
TPO 11 综合 （独立作文在后面贴着）
By citing data from a recent study, which demostrates that young people are reading less literature than before, the passage argues this trend is damage for culture in general. However, the speaker cast doubt on this negative conclusion by refusing all three reasons the passage uses.
First, the speaker points out that there are many other kinds of books that also are intellectual stimulation, thus disapproves the claim that nothing else provides the same benefits intellectually as literature does. For example, the scientific books, history books and so forth also provide good materials for people to exercise their imagination and enhance their logical thinking.
Further more, the speaker argues that reading other kinds of books and turning to other kinds of art form does not necessarily mean the decline of cultural standard of readers. This trend just represents the changing forms of arts. Through viewing great movies and listening to masterpieces of music, we can learn a lot, even more from purely reading literiture.
Last but not least, though the speaker admits that it is difficult for writers currently, she also pinpoint the key factor that makes people reluctant to read literiture: they are to obscure to understand. In addition, the writers before our time were not necessarily receiving much better treat as well.
In sum, the speaker states that the passage's claim is implausible as it seems given the reasons given above.
独立写作
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? ”"The best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teachers' salaries'.
There are always debates on how to improve the quality of education given by teachers. Someone, from a purely economical view, argue that just inscrease salaries will make teachers do their best. However, others people, including me, strongly against this over-simplified solution. Instead, they proposed a comprehensive way to improve the educational quality.
First, the claim that rising salaries will improve teachers' performance over-estimates the importance of money. Numerous psychological and behavioral studies have shown that money, as a kind of external reward, is never the most powerful incentive for most of us. Once we have enough wealth to satisfy our basic demand, we begin to pursue other more meaningful goals, such as self-fulfillment, especially for those who have accepted higher education. When this principle is applied to teachers, we have no reason to doubt it won't, simply give more money to them in order to make them perform better seems ridiculous.
Even we assume that higher salaries will drive teachers to perform better, it is still open to question whether this kind of improvement is only performance-oriented or true improvement of education quality. In other words, it is probably that teachers might just teach that knowledge that would appear in future examination. In this case, the rising of salaries backfires and actually lower the quality of education.
Instead of simply increase salaries of teachers, we should take a coordinative approach to bolster quality of education. For instance, knowing that internal motivations are crucial, we should find way to associate the quality of education given by a teacher to his/her internal motives, such as feeling of achievement. Further, we could try to give teacher more opportunities to exert their own strong points in his class and thus increase his love of teaching. Together, these solutions may be better than simply adding salaries.
Improving the quality of education is a complex problem and many factor play a role in teacher's instruction. Accordingly, we should take all these factors into account and take a comprehensive approach instead of simply raising teachers' salaries.作者: sEven_zh 时间: 2011-3-3 16:39:27
The speaker doubts the claim of the passage that the recent appeared professionally painted portrait was Jane Austen's by refuting all three reasons given in the passage.
First, the speaker points out that it had been 70 years after Austen' death in 1882, when Austen's family claimed to recognize that portrait. Thus, at that time the Austen family members had not even seen Austen, so their claim that the subject of the full-length portrait was Austen is open to question.
Second, the speaker argues that the Austen family is a big one and there were many teenage girls when Austen was young. So that we can not make sure that the person in Cassandra’s sketch is Jane Austen. Actually there is expert state that the sketch is about one of Jane's relative, instead of Jane. Therefore, even there are much resemblance between the full-length portrait and the sketch, we can't conclude that the portrait is Jane's.
Third, the passageassumes that the portrait is by Ozias Humphrey, who was most like the professional that Austen family would hire, and therefore could be Jane's. However, as the speaker points out, this statement is based solely on the style. What's more, based on recently evidence, during the time of Humphrey was active; Jane is not a teenager but about 27 years old. Thus this evidence gives no support to the conclusion that the full-length portrait is an authentic one of Jane Austen.
Do you agree with the following statement? For future career success, is relate well to other people more important than studying hard at school?
With limited time to allocate, students always struggle to keep a balance between making friends and learning. Take the future career in consideration; I personally prefer to keep a good relationship with other people for this will play a bigger role in future success.
To begin with, I'd like to argue that making friends with others is a crucial ability in our future career. After all, it is the people that you will deal with when you go to work, if you could relate to people around you well, you can't even keep you position, let alone make progress and succeed. I have a friend who could not deal with the interpersonal relationship well when he was in school. After he graduated and entered a company, he could not handle that with his boss; as a result he was fired.
Second, having a good relationship in school will help you a lot in your future career. Because the friends you made in school would most likely to be helpful when you work. There are plenty examples that the good friends at university then become the most successful partners in business. Such as the founder of New Orient School, a training company in China, become extremely success in this industry with the help of many of friends he made at Peking University.
Last but not least, studying hard without a good relationship with other makes it very hard for others to recognize your achievement and your capacity. We all know that in this highly competitive world, everyone should show his/her best side to other to gain recognition. Thus, if we spend all our time in learning but ignore people around us, we could probably been ignored by them and lost the opportunities to further strength our capacity.
Take all factors into account, I strongly agree that relate well to other people is far more important than studying hard when we are students.作者: Go2011Go 时间: 2011-3-5 17:11:05
TPO13
The speaker strongly disagrees with thestatement made by the passage that commercial trade of fossils influences bothscientists and the public negatively. To support her argument, the speakergives three lines of reasoning.
First, the speaker points out that thepublic actually benefit from the sale of fossils, instead of suffers as thepassage claims. Because there are high degree of publicity of fossils duringthe process to sale them, the folks could view them many times even withoutcharge. What more, the fossils in museums and laboratories are rarely allowedto be viewed by publics.
Also, the speaker argues that commercialtrade never decreases the scientists' chance to access to the most importantfossils. The speaker points out one important fact that every important fossilneed to be identified by scientists, therefore, scientists could get everydetail of a private collection and get the first hand data before the own makesure to buy it.
Third, the speaker refutes that thecommercial fossil collectors destroy valuable scientific evidence by comparingit to what the universities and research institutions’' misdeed. Though thecommercial collectors might destroy some subtle clues and ignore how fossilslie in the ground or the smaller fossils surround big ones, at least they makemany discoveries, unlike the universities who just let the fossils buried underearth, which waste the value of the fossils even more.
独立作文
Do you agree with thefollowing statement? People should work quickly and risk making mistakes orshould work slowly and make sure that everything is correct?
Given the limited resources and theimperfect information-processing system of human brain, we should make atrade-off between accuracy and speed when we deal with tough problems. Throughin many cases a hand of mistakes are acceptable, I still believe that peopleshould work slowly to make sure that everything is correct.
First and foremost, under manycircumstances, a tiny error could result disastrous consequences. History hasgiven us numerous lectures on this problem; almost every catastrophe in humansociety is originated from a very obscure mistake. Take a recently fire inShanghai for example, this brutal fire had kill almost 80 people and destroy awhole building. When people investigate the case and found that it began withan occasional misdeed. If everyone in that building did everything correctly,this kind of tragedy could be avoided.
Second, doing everything accurately is alsocrucial for our personal study. As a student, know exactly how this kind ofworking style influences our grade. I still remember clearly once I wrote a 6in a mathematic examination where I should write an 8, as a result I lost thechance to be the No.1. In other subjects such as English, physics, etc., doingeverything correctly is equal important.
Last but not least, making sure thateverything is correct could help us achieve to success in future career. Thereis a famous saying that details determine everything, this saying perfectlyillustrate what role details play in our career. Every aspect of our behavior,our language could change other's impression of us. There is a classic exampledemonstrate the power of details: one famous company organized an interview andmany graduates go to the interview and was refused, but one young succeeded.When the young man asked the interviewer why they gave him the position, theofficial said: because you pick up the paper in the corner and put it into thedustbin!
In sum, in all aspect of our life, workingslowly but accurately is superior to working quickly but making mistakes.作者: beangt 时间: 2011-3-6 10:20:32
独立写作
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? ”"The best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teachers' salaries'.
There are always debates on how to improve the quality of education given by teachers. Someone, from a purely economical view, argue that just inscrease（increasing/ to increase） salaries will make teachers do their best. However, other people, including me, strongly against this over-simplified solution（这个词挺好的~）. Instead, they proposed a comprehensive way to improve the educational quality.
First, the claim that rising salaries will improve teachers' performance over-estimates the importance of money. Numerous psychological and behavioral studies have shown that money, as a kind of external reward, is never the most powerful incentive for most of us. Once we have enough wealth to satisfy our basic demand, we begin to pursue other more meaningful goals, such as self-fulfillment, especially for those who have accepted higher education. When this principle is applied to teachers, we have no reason to doubt
that simply giving more money to them in order to make them perform better seems ridiculous.(貌似是语法错误吧？这一句看不太懂)
Even we assume that higher salaries will drive teachers to perform better, it is still open to question whether this kind of improvement is only performance-oriented or true improvement of education quality. In other words, it is probably that teachers might just teach (the) knowledge that would appear in future examination. In this case, the rising of salaries backfires and actually lower the quality of education.(好像这一段后面解释的表现不太符合performance-oriented吧？这个performance-oriented的含义有些含糊，过于抽象)
Instead of simply increase salaries of teachers, we should take a coordinative approach to bolster quality of education. For instance, knowing that internal motivations are crucial, we should find way to associate the quality of education given by a teacher to his/her internal motives, such as feeling of achievement. Further, we could try to give teacher more opportunities to exert their own strong points in his class and thus increase his love of teaching. Together, these solutions may be better than simply adding salaries.
Improving the quality of education is a complex problem and many factor play a role in teacher's instruction. Accordingly, we should take all these factors into account and take a comprehensive approach instead of simply raising teachers' salaries.
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第二段结尾原句是这样的： When this principle is applied to teachers, we have no reason to doubt it won't, simply give more money to them in order to make them perform better seems ridiculous.
呵呵作者: beangt 时间: 2011-3-6 20:20:55
3.5综合修改，来晚了，不好意思
TPO13
The speaker strongly disagrees with the statement made by the passage that commercial trade of fossils influences bothscientists and the public negatively. To support her argument, the speakergives three lines of reasoning.
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这句话好像和听力里不一致，听力说的是As a result, and library cannot routinely buy interesting fossils and display them to the public. 意思是说public school的fossil是从commercial 那买的。
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Third, the speaker refutes that the commercial fossil collectors destroy valuable scientific evidence by comparing it to what the universities and research institutions’' misdeed. Though the commercial collectors might destroy some subtle clues and ignore how fossils lie in the ground or the smaller fossils surround big ones, at least they make many discoveries, unlike the universities who just let the fossils buried underearth, which waste the value of the fossils even more.
哇，这一段听的相当全啊~赞！
TPO 14综合
First, the speaker points out that thoughremoving the dead trees quickly provides more space for new trees, this doesn'tnecessarily mean it create a good condition for the growth of new trees. Infact, the composition of dead trees gives many nutrients for the soil andtherefore provides a good condition for new trees. Moving all these dead treesno doubt decrease the quality of the soil, this makes it harder for therecovery of the forest.
Second, the speaker argues that thedecaying wood not only gives a suitable habitat for insect, but moreimportantly it brings many benefits for the forest. For example, there would bemore birds because of the increased insects, which is essential for the forestin the long run.
Third, the speaker points out that theeconomic benefits mentioned in the passage is short-sight. Salvage loggingcould cost a lot from a long-term perspective. For example, the equipment madeof wood from salvage logging usually need higher price to maintain. What more,the job provided by the salvage logging is temporary and couldn't create jobsas the passage claims.
独立作文
Do you agree or disagreewith the following statement? Advertising is the main cause of unhealthy eatinghabits？
Nowadays, one problem that many parentsworried most is the healthy of their kids, because those young children indulgein junk food and ignore the importance of health diet. For the food child loveto eat are extensively advertised, thus many people conclude that it is theadvertising that result in the unhealthy eating habits. However, as far as I amconcerned, unhealthy eating habit is cause by many factors and the fundamentalreason is the instinct our ancients evolved from evolutionary history.
To begin with, I'd like to point out thatadvertising can not explain all the unhealthy eating habits. One obvious factis not all children who expose to advertising form junk food; this indicatesthat commercial alone can determine the eating habits. Psychological studieshave shown that many other factors such as loneliness, lacking social supportor insufficient education and guidance together decide the probability of theformation of unhealthy eating habit. A well educated kid never eat unhealthilyis a good example of this point.
What more, even we assume that advertisingdo tempt children to eat those food. However, we still can not identify it asthe main reason. As I mentioned above, there are many other factors alsoinvolved in. So the relationship between advertising and unhealthy eatinghabits is superficial but never reveals the real reason. Thus, thoughadvertising and unhealthy eating appears together, we can not make cause-effectinterference based on concurrence, there could be other reasons cause both ofthem, such as technology advancement make it easy to advertise and eat to makejunk food.
Third, under all these factors , the innatepreference for high fat food we involved from evolutionary history is the mostpowerful drive. The most important feature of unhealthy eating is theunbalanced intake of fat and other nutrients such as vegetables. This istotally reasonable under the circumstance where fat is rare and vegetable issufficient. That’s the environment our ancients lived in. Today, our environmentchanged, but our preference for food change for more slowly. In this case, weare vulnerable to the high fat food and advertising.
In conclusion, I don't think advertising isthe main cause of unhealthy eating habit, instead I believe the lag between thechange of our preference and our environment is the underlying mechanism.作者: 笑会计 时间: 2011-3-8 21:38:04
综合：
开头不要写个开头段吗？
First, the speaker points out that though removing the dead trees quickly provides more space for new trees, this doesn'tnecessarily mean it create a good condition for the growth of new trees. Infact, the composition of dead trees gives many nutrients for the soil andtherefore provides a good condition for new trees. Moving all these dead treesno doubt decrease the quality of the soil, this（which） makes it harder for therecovery of the forest.
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写得挺好的，不过最后一点信息不太准~加油~作者: july07 时间: 2011-3-9 02:34:10
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, |% e: @# X! O- `8 K6 PDo you agree or disagreewith the following statement? Advertising is the main cause of unhealthy eatinghabits？
/Nowadays, one problem that many parentsworried most is the healthy of their kids, because those young children indulgein junk food and ignore the importance of health diet. For the food child loveto eat are extensively advertised, thus many people conclude that it is theadvertising that result in the unhealthy eating habits. However, as far as I amconcerned, unhealthy eating habit is cause by many factors and the fundamentalreason is the instinct our ancients evolved from evolutionary history.: c- y2 V3 W4 [* X% o
* ]4 h2 e. a* X0 g# p2 ]) J- Y7 fTo begin with, I'd like to point out that advertising can not explain all the unhealthy eating habits. One obvious fact is not all children who expose to advertising form junk food; this indicates that commercial alone can determine the eating habits. 这句话 不是很理解..跟下面一句有联系吗？Psychological studieshave shown that many other factors such as loneliness, lacking social supportor insufficient education and guidance together decide the probability of theformation of unhealthy eating habit. A well educated kid never eat unhealthilyis a good example of this point.
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What more, even we assume that advertisingdo tempt children to eat those food. However, we still can not identify it asthe main reason. As I mentioned above, there are many other factors alsoinvolved in. So the relationship between advertising and unhealthy eatinghabits is superficial but never reveals the real reason. Thus, thoughadvertising and unhealthy eating appears together, we can not make cause-effectinterference based on concurrence, there could be other reasons cause both ofthem, such as technology advancement make it easy to advertise and eat to makejunk food.
- Third, under all these factors , the innatepreference for high fat food we involved from evolutionary history is the mostpowerful drive. The most important feature of unhealthy eating is theunbalanced intake of fat and other nutrients such as vegetables. This istotally reasonable under the circumstance where fat is rare and vegetable issufficient. That’s the environment our ancients lived in. Today, our environmentchanged, but our preference for food change for more slowly. In this case, weare vulnerable to the high fat food and advertising.
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In conclusion, I don't think advertising isthe main cause of unhealthy eating habit, instead I believe the lag between thechange of our preference and our environment is the underlying mechanism
首先 不得不说的是 作者作文 能补个空格吗..好多 都忘了打空格了 在者 感觉 每段 都说的不是很清楚。。也许你说的观点 我没看懂... 感觉有点乱 说的 上句和下句 没有明显的转折..
结尾 好象点题点的也很模糊 说的错误的 请谅解...作者: hcp4715 时间: 2011-3-9 12:16:11
As the development of economy, the ability to manage money playplays a crucial role in our family and our own life. Therefore people who wish their children could have a better financial state wondering about teach children how to manage money at young age.这句有点看不懂 As far as I am concerned, I can't agree with this statement anymore.
First of all, the habits of young child have a profound influence on their behavior when they are adult我觉得when they get older…. Numerous studies have shown that the early experience strongly affect, even determine, the behavior pattern学习了 of their adult life. Thus we should learn the right way to deal with out financial issue and form a good habit when we were young. In this case we could adapt to the increasing complicated financial problems.
Second, the bad habits, such as impulsive shopping, are extreme difficult to change once are formed. Thus it is very important for parent to direct children from the bad way of consuming, otherwise this kind of behavior will prevent children learn how to manage money. I would take my friend Tom as an example. When we were young and have no idea about saving money and rational shopping, we almost wanted to buy everything that we saw. As a result he used out我觉得是use up money very quickly. After that he would call home and ask more money, his parent didn’t realize it was a problem and indulged him. Certainly, he never has the chance to know how to consume rationally. Now he always complain to me that he run out of money because he bought a lot of things that turned out to be useless.
Third, managemanaging money is not so easy, it is easier to begin when we do not have so much.语法
加个连接词 As we have more and more choices and deal with more and more financial issues, the money management becomes a very complicated skill. If we do not start from the easiest thing such as make the sheet about our incomes and spending, we would be overwhelmed when we face all these problems at the beginning. Thus it is the perfect period to learn how to manage money at a young age because at that time we didn't have much to manage. As we grow up, our ability to manage money increase as the money we dealdealed with increase gradually.
Given the importance of financial skills, we should take the advantage of young age of children and let them learn how to manage money whenever they could understand the concept of money.作者: hcp4715 时间: 2011-3-12 14:37:35
42#Go2011Go你说不理解的那句我想表达的意思是：
历史是建构起来的因此是充满了歪曲和想像成分的（history is constructed and thus full of distortionsand inventions）
不知道我想表达的和我表达的是不是同一个意思作者: 伶女 时间: 2011-3-13 18:35:48
3.12 revised作者: hcp4715 时间: 2011-3-14 11:47:15
3.14号 独立：[attach]162430[/attach]
PS：开始列大纲的时候居然看错了题目，以为是shopping abroad or in their own country.....后来开始写的时候才发现是made in their own country....所以杯具了。。
３.１５号独立作文
Do you agree or disagree with the followingstatement? People would be happier if they had fewer possessions
In a world where materials and money becomethe center of everyone's life, many people are addicted to the pursuit of possessionsand finally feel depressed after their possession increased. Thus many peoplepropose that the less we have, the happier we would be. However, based aobjective approach to this problem, I believe that people should first haveenough possessions to make sure they have a decent life; after that, they donot need more possessions anymore, otherwise, the possessions bring more distressthan happiness.
First of all, if you do not have enoughpossessions to meet you basic need, then you would feel happier if you couldhave more. This is a practical law and applied to most of us. I would take myfamily as an example. My family was very poor and in need of many possessionswhen I was very young. We didn't have bicycles--which was the maintransportation that time--when we visited our relatives, all four of us had tosleep together in winter because we did not have enough quilt. During that timemy parents quarreled a lot when they found they could not do something becauseof the situation. However, several year later, my dad went out and started hisown business, my family's possession increased, followed by the laughter amongmy parents.
However, once you have already leaded adecent life, then, may be you would be happier if you have fewer possessionsfor two reasons. On one hand, you can enjoy your life without being worriedabout the possessions’ you have. When you have many possessions, you have to dothe maintenance work to make sure well function well. For instance, when I wasat college, I brought several pair of sneakers a year. To keep these shoesneat, I spent much time on them and that made me very tired. However, myroommate who limited his shoes in two pair had very good time for he did notneed deal with that problem.
On the other hand, you could have more timeto explore the spirit world. After all, human need the spirit work to make themmore human. Thus you could read more books, watch more movies or appreciatefine art. My roommate who did not have so many shoes to wash could enjoy amovie when I was busy and worried to keep my shoes tide.
In a nutshell, we would be happier if youhave more possessions to ensure our basic needs are satisfied. Once we haveenough to live in this world decently, the fewer we have, the happier we wouldbe.
[作者: sEven_zh 时间: 2011-3-15 18:35:43
It is only worth watching movies that can teach us something about real life, agree or disagree？
As there are more and more movies on the market, we would lose ourselves if we do not have certain criteria. Some people state that we should only watch movies that can teach us something about real life. However, in my point of view, this criterion is oversimplified过于简单？不太明白在用这个表达什么？ and thus unconvincing用这个词在这里又是什么. Movies, as a form of arts, have many functions; we should evaluate them by different standards under different circumstance.
I am not denying the value of those movies that educate us. Actually I love those movies very much because they give us many useful tips for our everyday life and make our life easy. However, the educational value of movies is not contradicted with other values such as entertainment and inspiration of imagination.反驳地很好
I believe that movies that make us laugh and relax worth our attention because the primary function of movies is entertainment. After all, most of us go to theater not to be educated but to enjoy their spare time. For instance, after one week's hard study, I would like to choose a movie that could make me relax and get rid of the exhaust. Listen to the funny line and 前面动词是listen to额exaggerated facial expressions could make me bring me to a light atmosphere and have a rest. 顺便可以说为了下一次的工作做准备 因为足够的放松才能够更好让工作效率更高
Also, we could choose a movie because of its imagination. Since most of us live in an ordinary world without too much surprise and extraordinary things. Watching those fascinating movies, such as science fiction, would stimulate our imagination and keepmake our spirit transcend the limitation of everyday life. For instance, the Matrix, a classic sci-fi别缩写, brings me a lot of imagination about the robots and the artificial intelligence.觉得可以继续推，说stimulate你的imagination以后又是什么影响到你的生活工作学习了
In a nutshell, I admit educational values is of importance, However, I also value other kind of functions of movies, such as entertainment and stimulation of imagination.
Do you agree or disagreewith the following statement? Does advice given by older people more valuablethan from people at your age?
Given the limited resources and imperfectinformation-processing system of humanbrain, no one could solve all the problems s/he faces. Therefore we should takesuggestions from other. However, there is a debate in this situation. Somepeople argue that the advices from older people are more valuable. However,based on my experience, I believe that the advices from different people willbe most valuable only under certain circumstances.
First of all, I prefer to turn to my peersfor help when I want to know what happen recently and what is the mostpopular thingsthe most popular things are currently.Obviously, people at my age are more open to new things and have better skillsto get the latest information and trends around the world. For instance, Ialways ask one of my best friends, who is at my age, about what kind of musicto listen to, because he is a big musical fan and track the newest songs. Andhe will recommend me the most classic or most popular songs which are verycool. However, when I talk with my friends who are older than me, they have noidea about these songs, let alone give me advices.
However, when it comesto making important decisions in my life, I would ask people who have moreexperience than me for suggestion. After all, people who older than me alwayshave better understanding of society and life, sometime they may experience theprocesses that we are going to undertake. A good example is that when I was notsure about what to do to prepare my material to apply a school in a foreigncountry, I asked for help from my friend Xiang, who is a Ph. D candidate in a prestigiousinstitution in Europe. Because he had applied and know the details andpotential traps, his advices give me great help.
Also, when I had to solve the problems inmy study, I would listen to both of my peers and teachers. In this way, I couldget more information and get a whole picture of my subject. When want to designmy own experiment to investigate a interesting subject, I first asked myteacher about the research's significance and the general direction, for theyhave much broader horizon and know whether my research proposal could makecontribution to our knowledge or not. Then I discussed with my peers who couldhelp figure out details and how to conduct the experiment step by step.Together with the suggestions from both of my teachers and my peers, I solvedall the problems I encountered and finished it.
In sum, when we can not solve the problemsby ourselves, the advices given by others always help because they may providea differentperspective and help us to reframe the problems, thus give us insights and makeus find an optimalsolution.作者: Coryan 时间: 2011-3-17 22:16:21
62#Go2011Go Do you agree with the following statement? High school students should take a course on basic economics.
Personally, I believe that high school students should take a course on basic economics for its important role(s) in our future life. After all, we live in a commercialized world in which everyone could not[nonperson,会不会简洁点？呵呵] avoid the economics[economic] problems, thus learn[ing] some basic economics is necessary. What’s more, given that high school students already have learnt some related knowledge, it is possible for them to learn basic economics well.
层次比较清晰
Everyone knows the importance of economics in our life, but not everyone knows exactly what economics is. Why? Because many of us do not have the chances to learn the basic courses of economics. In this case, I would like to say that the high school students should grasp the chance to learn some fundamental concepts and principles[of economics]. It will benefit them a lot. Just take the tax as an example, as a citizen, we all have to pay tax in order to support [guarantee]the regular function of government [function well 删掉，好像有点不通] and maintain the public facility. However, there are many cases in which people do not actually know how much they have paid, whether the current tax system is reasonable and [according to你是要表达符合法律的公正吗？我觉得用agree with更好，呵呵] agree with the law of justice, let alone fighting for their own rights. If, however, we have been educated in basic economics, the situation will be different [很不错的表达]and we will be able to think critically and not be fooled by government.
Some people may say: the economics is too difficult for high school students to master. I admit that economics is not so easy for？ its theories and statistics. However, the knowledge have been learnt by high school students enable them to master the basic economics well. 跟前面的意思有点脱节During the high school, most students have a very solid foundation on mathematics and related field, with these knowledge, they could understand those basic concepts such as the costs, pay-off etc[easily加个副词可能会好一些]. What more, the historical knowledge would also help high school students to understand the development of economics and help they figure out why free-market is the best strategy and monopoly is necessary in some critical [particular会好些吗？]areas.
Equipped with basic economic knowledge, student would not only have the chance to manage their own financial problems well--because they know the relationship between income and expenditure; they could also have a better understanding of society and be a more responsible citizen in future, because most social relationships, such as social class, politic issues, are essentially economical problems. Thus, I strongly agree with the statement.
总体感觉你的基础很不错的，层次很分明，语言表达也很到位，我只是尽最大努力提一些小的建议，呵呵….作者: feifeionly 时间: 2011-3-19 08:52:03