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题目:ARGUMENT193 - The Department of Education in the state of Attra recommends that high school students be assigned homework every day. Yet a recent statewide survey of high school math and science teachers calls the usefulness of daily homework into question. In the district of Sanlee, 86 percent of the teachers reported assigning homework three to five times a week, whereas in the district of Marlee, less than 25 percent of the teachers reported assigning homework three to five times a week. Yet the students in Marlee earn better grades overall and are less likely to be required to repeat a year of school than are the students in Sanlee. Therefore, all teachers in our high schools should assign homework no more than twice a week, if at all.
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The argument concludes that all teachers in high school should assign homework no more than twice a week. The conclusion is based on the recent statewide survey. However, the conclusion lacks credibility for the problematic survey and the analogy method of the arguer.

First, the statewide survey of high school could not lend strong support to that the homework frequency relevant to the students’ performs. The survey only includes the math and science teachers, but fails to consider the teachers in other subjects. Therefore, many teachers were actually excluded from the survey. And the teachers the survey concluded are for the specific features of they subject. The situation in history and art subject may totally different form the science lesson.

Second, the arguer commits false analogy fallacy. Sanlee and Marlee are two areas. Are the two area and the students as well as teachers in two comparable? The situation in Sanlee may be very different form the Marlee. It is entirely the two area use different text books, have different education goals. The teaching skill in two areas may different. What is more, the fact students in Marlee earn better grades and less to be required to repeat a year is insufficient to conclude the Marlee students are better than Sanlee. Because the test standard in two area possibly different.  Besides, the grades is not to equal to the quality of teaching. The Marlee school's text examination is easier that Sanlee, for Marlee pay close attention to the all skill, rather than exam skill, of the students. In this situation, we cannot decide students in which area are better.

Third, the conclusion asserts all teachers in high school should assign homework no more than twice a week is groundless. The arguer provides no evidence to illustrate the specific frequency in the homework. Twice a week may fit some subjects such as math or science, but do not fit the other. If all teachers assign homework in this frequency, the results may be not desirable.

In sum the conclusion does not persuasive for the problematic analogy and survey method. To strength it, the arguer should provide more information about other subjects, and the details in two areas. In addition, the arguer should give more convincing evidence to show the difference of students' ability under different homework frequency.
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The argument concludes that all teachers in high school should assign homework no more than twice a week. The conclusion is based on the recent statewide survey. 是不是总结的太少,应该更具体点才好
However, the conclusion lacks credibility for the problematic survey and the analogy method of the arguer.

First, the statewide survey of high school could not lend strong support to that the homework frequency relevant to the students’ performs. The survey only includes the math and science teachers, but fails to consider the teachers in other subjects. Therefore, many teachers were actually excluded from the survey. And the teachers the survey concluded are for the specific features of theytheir subject. The situation in history and art  subject ,etc may totally different form the science lesson.

Second, the arguer commits false analogy fallacy.这句话也是孙远工具里的吧,很好,不过确实用烂了,好多人都喜欢Sanlee and Marlee are two areas. Are the two area and the students as well as teachers in two comparable?句子有问题,不过疑问句的形式,句型多变,出发点很好 The situation in Sanlee may be very different form the Marlee. It is entirely the two area use different text books, have different education goals. The teaching skill in two areas may different. What is more, the fact students in Marlee earn better grades and less to be required to repeat a year is insufficient to conclude the Marlee students are better than Sanlee. Because the test standard in two area possibly different.这部分是不是应该放到第一部分呢?最后我会详谈  Besides, the grades is not to equal to the quality of teaching. perhaps neededThe Marlee school's text examination is easier thatthan Sanlee, for Marlee pay close attention to the all skill, rather than exam skill, of the students. In this situation, we cannot decide students in which area are better.

Third, the conclusion asserts all teachers in high school should assign homework no more than twice a week is groundless. The arguer provides no evidence to illustrate the specific frequency in the homework. Twice a week may fit some subjects such as math or science, but do not fit the other. If all teachers assign homework in this frequency, the results may be not desirable.

In sum the conclusion does not persuasive for the problematic analogy and survey method. To strength it, the arguer should provide more information about other subjects, and the details in two areas. In addition, the arguer should give more convincing evidence to show the difference of students' ability under different homework frequency.这个结尾个人教喜欢,值得发扬光大,呵呵
逻辑上有个问题需要和楼主探讨下,就是观点顺序的问题:

虽然不知道楼主是按什么思路来布局的,我是这样认为的,先应该谈有很多其他因素决定学生的素质.(这个在你文章第一段就提到了,但并没有展开说.)我认为这个应该是前提条件,也就是说如果学生素质和留学人数不相关,那么即使能够证明少布置作业可以减少留级的人数,但是也无法证明可以同时提高学校教学质量.也就是把你的红色的部分放到第一段会更好.(不知道说清楚没有,汗)
然后才是布置作业可以减少留级的人数不具代表性等问题,这些都是在留级人数确实和学校教学质量相关的前提下的.

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