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3.9

Do you agree ordisagree with the following statement? Teacher should or not talkingtheir social or political views to student in the class.

In my opinion,teachers can talk about their point of view towards social issues. It can helptheir students to broad interests and knowledge. However, they don’t have to dothat. I will use my own experience and real-world examples to illustrate it.

When I was inGrade 9, I rarely read news but gossips about those singers and actors. Once,my teacher talked about economic crisis to us in class. I was so interested init and though a lot after class. I asked my father how it formed and why it occurred.I knew various perspectives that different countries deal with it. I wasattracted by economics. Now I become a Grade 11 student who chooses Economicsto study and always get good score. I think this is mainly because at thattime, my teacher introduced a new world to me through his speech about socialand political views to us. Teachers should teach children ways to think.

However, I thinkteachers don’t have to do so since students have rights to accept or refuseteachers’ opinions. Take North Korea as a typical example. Citizens there areforced to accept such views that North Korea is the strongest country in theworld and other countries are poor and need their help. Every teacher teachesthis kind of views to every primary student. They cannot refuse it and finallybelieve it’s true. Thus, I can deduce that if teacher have to spread theirideas to students, a poor country which doesn’t have a high economic growth anddevelopment because of the improper education may appears.

From theexamples above, I’d like to say that teachers can talk about their political orsocial views to students but they don’t have to do so since it may lead to apoor education and weird culture. More importantly, teachers should focus onteaching children how to think about the world.

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3.10 独立
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people should try different job before they decide which job or career they will do in the long term.

I strongly agree with the statement that youth should try various careers before they decide a job in the long term. To me, this job must be what I am good at and more importantly, it should be what I love or interested in. Many young people decide their career right after graduation an always regret and want another job many years later.

Long time must be taken to get a best choice. For instance, before a company launches a new product, it will do lots of research and examination in order to make the product perfectly meets consumers’ needs and wants. Similarly, a career is always a new beginning of youth. The future lives will be totally different from their school lives and just like a new product. They act like a leader of a company but make decisions for themselves. In order to be responsible for them, they should try different jobs just like do many surveys.

If they decide it right after graduation, I’d like to say that most of them will regret since many friends claim their career to me. Mary works as a teacher in a primary school. She once told me that this job nearly drives her to mad. Little children who are below ten years old are always very noisy in class. She has to shout at them but after a few minutes they still get noisy. It’s hard for them to accept 1 plus 1 equals 2 and this is incredible in her mind. After 2 years, she changed her job which she has considered about for a long time. A few days earlier, we met each other on the street and she looked very happy and no longer worried about her career.

All in all, I think a good choice needs a lot of time for many tries. And if people decide it fast so that they choose a job that they don’t like or interested in, they will probably regret and change the job finally as what Mary did.

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3.10 综合
TPO 17
The issue that reading passage and lecture are discussing about is factors that will reduce population of birds. The professor holds an opposite opinion to what author says.

At first, the writer writes that increasing human populations and settlements will make birds have fewer areas to live. However, the professor claims that urban cities actually increase places for other creatures. The population of some animals is increasing dramatically in fact. For instance, we can see pigeons on the streets.

Moreover, the article stresses that agricultural activities will also destroy birds' habitats. But the lecture states that the truth in the United States is that less land are used for agriculture because farmers are using new type of crops which can be more productive. It will produce more in less area of land and may use less time to grow. Then the concerns about the decreasing areas for birds to live are nonsense!

Furthermore, the professor casts doubt on the writer that using chemical pesticides isn’t one of the most harmful ways that will significantly let birds' reproductions to decline. She says that people are now aware of this problem and two changes are already made to improve this situation. The first one is that new harmless pesticides are developed. Not many birds will die then. The second one which is more important and significant is that new kind of crops which is not attractive to insects is created. Then pesticides will no longer require and it becomes safe for birds to eat crops.

In conclusion, increasing human populations, agricultural development and pesticide uses don't attribute to the decline of the number of birds. The professor in the lecture totally disagrees with the writer in the reading material.

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3.9 revised

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The issue that reading passage and lecture are (is) discussing about is whether somefactors will reduce population of birds. The professor holds an opposite opinion to what author(passage) says.

At first, the writer writes that increasing human populations and settlements will make birds have fewer areas to live. However, the professor claims that urban cities actually increase places for other creatures. The population of some animals is increasing dramatically in fact. For instance, we can see pigeons on the streets.0 g! v( p# T& a- K2 E1 B+ _
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Moreover, the article stresses that agricultural activities will also destroy birds' habitats. But the lecture states that the truth in the United States is that less land are used for agriculture because farmers are using new type of crops which can be more productive. It will produce more in less area of land and may use less time to grow(这一句好像没有). Then the concerns about the decreasing areas for birds to live are nonsense!7 O; d, ~0 z7 B8 g# y3 l
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Furthermore, the professor casts doubt on the writer that using chemical pesticides isn’t one of the most harmful ways that will significantly let birds' reproductions to decline. She says that people are now aware of this problem and two changes are already made to improve this situation. The first one is that new harmless pesticides are developed. Not many birds will die then. The second one which is more important and significant is that new kind of crops which is not attractive to insects is created. Then pesticides will no longer be required and it becomes safe for birds to eat crops.

In conclusion, increasing human populations, agricultural development and pesticide uses don't attribute to the decline of the number of birds. The professor in the lecture totally disagrees with the writer in the reading material.
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people should try different job before they decide which job or career they will do in the long term.

I strongly agree with the statement that youth should try various careers before they decide a job in the long term. To me,（一般用for me吧？） this job must be what I am good at and more importantly, it should be what I love or interested in. Many young people decide（是不是可以用choose或select） their career right after graduation an always regret and want another job many years later.

Long time must be taken to get a best choice. For instance, before a company launches a new product, it will do lots of research and examination in order to make the product perfectly meets (meet) consumers’ needs and wants. Similarly, a career is always a new beginning of youth. The future lives will be totally different from their school lives and just like a new product. They act like a leader of a company but make decisions for themselves. In order to be responsible for them, they should try different jobs just like do many surveys.(感觉这么写有点奇怪): \: r4 ]9 I# v4 N3 m% c

If they decide it right after graduation, I’d like to say that most of them will regret since many friends claim their career （careers） to me（什么意思，没明白）. Mary works as a teacher in a primary school. She once told me that this job nearly drives（driven） her to mad. Little children who are below ten years old are always very noisy in class. She has to shout at them but after a few minutes they still get noisy. It’s hard for them to accept 1 plus 1 equals 2 and this is incredible in her mind. After 2 years, she changed her job which she has considered about for a long time. A few days earlier, we met each other on the street and she looked very happy and no longer worried about her career. (这个例子是不是可以优化一下。说孩子们很吵，正好她是一个不能忍受吵闹的人，否则感觉说孩子们吵和主题联系不是很紧。还有可以说她的新工作符合她。个人观点)

All in all, I think a good choice needs a lot of time for many tries(这个表达感觉不地道，是不是可以写people usually take a long time and try many times before they can make a good choice). And if people decide it fast so that they choose a job that they don’t like or interested in, they will probably regret and change the job finally as what Mary did.

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发表于 2011-3-11 12:54:51 |只看该作者

原来你就是夜's Kim啊。。。居然是3月10号新注册的账号。。。汗~你也要二战么？加油额。

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当最该相信的事物也背叛以后，我的精神将寄托给何方！2011.8.8

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7.13 综合 TPO3
The author of the article wrote that the paint of a woman was not painted by Rembrandt for three reasons. However, the professor in the lecture challenged writer’s ideas from these three aspects and showed that the painting was indeed painted from Rembrandt.
At first, the passage listed that the way the women dressed was strange which contradicted Rembrandt’s characteristic that he was very cared about details. But the professor pointed out that by using X-ray, people found out that some fore color which was not part of the original painting was on the work. The possible reason for this is someone wanted to make it more valuable.
Secondly, professor disagreed with inconsistency of light and shadow asserted by the writer based on the above discovery. People also find that on the original painting panel, there was realistic light shadow while the woman was wearing a light color clause. Then this consistency well fit in the statement that “Rembrandt is a master of painting light and shadow.”
Furthermore, the listening material talked about the wood panel which consists of glued wooden debris. According to the foundation that someone added something on the panel, people can easily find out that the wood panel was enlarged. Then probable explanation for it may be larger panel can be more valuable since it seemed grand.
Thus, the professor totally disagreed with what the article said about reasons why this painting didn’t belong to Rembrandt. She focused on the three perspective to clearly show her thoughts that Rembrandt was the creator of this painting.

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7.13独立
Which is better, challenging plans about one's future or practical plans about one's future?

In my opinion, I’d like to choose to set a practical plan about my future since challenging plans can always make me less self-confident and practical ones are flexible when I meet conflicting schedules.

In both short-term and long-term, practical plans are useful and can encourage me to accomplish it efficiently. A typical example is setting study plans for English exams. In short-term, for example, in a period of ten days, since a lot of vocabulary cannot be remembered, I’d reject challenging plans like memorizing 2000 words since I will not be confident enough to trust myself if I cannot reach my target. In this case, I definitely prefer to do some practices which are similar to real exams. In long-term, for instance, in a semester, because I used to examine the percentage of the whole work that I’ve accomplished, if I cannot do well as I supposed to do, I also lose much confidence.

Additionally, practical plans are flexible which means that I can change part of my plan or make a compromise when I meet conflicting schedules. Such experience always exists in my daily life. For example, I planned to do physical exercise at night which may spend me about 2 hours. However, my mother told me that I had to have a dinner with one of her friends’ family in the evening, so I have not enough time to complete my exercise. At this time, I can have various options such as doing the practice in the afternoon or adding complementary exercise in the following days. If I have a challenging plan, no spare time can be left for me to make some changes to the plan or have a break.

For the reasons I listed above, compared to challenging plans which always take me a lot of time and need plenty of work, I prefer to set a practical one for myself. From one side, it can encourage me to be self-confident and finally accomplish the supposed work. Form another side, it can be flexible and allow me to have some spare time to relax.

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7.13独立Which is better, challenging plans about one's future or practical plans about one's future? , W' d! z. G9 w$ g+ w7 C+ u2 U* l" Y3 D, `In my opinion, I’d like to choose to set a practical plan about my future since challenging plans can always make me less self-confident and practical ones are flexible when I meet conflicting schedules(这边要表达的是challenging plan由于比较有挑战性，所以相对的schedule比较紧张，不利于调整，而practical plan的schedule就没这么紧张，因此方便调整。是这个意思么，开始没太理解practical跟flexible之间的关系，觉得应该再表达的清楚点，比如说下challenging plan的日程比较紧。不然给人感觉就是challenging plan-> unconfident, practical plan-> flexible in schedule感觉逻辑有点跳跃，因为practical plan不完全等同于relaxed plan).% h% ?. Z3 s1 m2 r+ D3 W()()()1 H/ w:In both short-term and long-term, practical plans are useful and can encourage me to accomplish it efficiently. A typical example is setting study plans for English exams. In short-term, for example, in a period of ten days, since a lot of vocabulary cannot be remembered, I’d reject challenging plans like memorizing 2000 words since I will not be confident enough to trust myself if I cannot reach my target. In this case, I definitely prefer to do some practices which are similar to real exams. In long-term, for instance, in a semester（这里in long-term和in a semester一起用总觉的有点别扭，上面也是一样。或许可以这样： As a long-term example, in a semester....）, because I am used to examine the percentage of the whole work that I’ve accomplished, if I cannot do well as I supposed to do, I also lose much confidence.（这段感觉语言上不太顺畅，可能是时间关系吧。）7 l z: |1 Y5 eAdditionally, practical plans are flexible which means that I can change part of my plan or make a compromise when I meet conflicting schedules. Such experience always exists in my daily life. For example, I planned to do physical exercise at night which may spend me about 2 hours. However, my mother told me that I had to have a dinner with one of her friends’ family in the evening, so I have not enough time to complete my exercise. At this time, I can have various options such as doing the practice in the afternoon or adding complementary exercise in the following days. If I have a challenging plan, no spare time can be left for me to make some changes to the plan or have a break.（这段感觉挺好的）For the reasons I listed above, compared to challenging plans which always take me a lot of time and need plenty of work, I prefer to set a practical one for myself. From one side, it can encourage me to be self-confident and finally accomplish the supposed work. From another side, it can be flexible and allow me to have some spare time to relax.

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欢迎来改我的作文~

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In my opinion, I’d like to choose to set a practical plan about myfuture since challenging plans can always make me less self-confidentand practical ones are flexible when I meet conflicting schedules.- j( U& w/ v% f B' k6 F$ o! j5 m

9 x& j' A5 }7 I3 FIn bothshort-term and long-term(short-term, long-term都是形容词吧，后面得价个名词), practical plans are useful and can encourageme to accomplish it efficiently. A typical example is setting studyplans for English exams. In short-term, for example, in a period of tendays, since a lot of vocabulary cannot be remembered, I’d rejectchallenging plans like memorizing 2000 words since I will not beconfident enough to trust myself if I cannot reach my target. In thiscase, I definitely prefer to do some practices which are similar toreal exams. In long-term, for instance, in a semester, because I usedto examine the percentage of the whole work that I’ve accomplished, ifI cannot do well as I supposed to do, I also lose much confidence." g/ _7 Q/ \) T+ p) X& w4 C! s( o
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Additionally, practical plans are flexible which means that I canchange part of my plan or make a compromise when I meet conflictingschedules. (我理解Challenging plans好像也可以根据日程调整)Such experience always exists in my daily life. For example,I planned to do physical exercise at night which may spend me about 2hours. However, my mother told me that I had to have a dinner with oneof her friends’ family in the evening, so I have not enough time tocomplete my exercise. At this time, I can have various options such asdoing the practice in the afternoon or adding complementary exercise inthe following days. If I have a challenging plan, no spare time can beleft for me to make some changes to the plan or have a break.
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& R- \0 v" G0 F7 G% K4 S: O0 g" m# P- ?Forthe reasons I listed above, compared to challenging plans which alwaystake me a lot of time and need plenty of work, I prefer to set apractical one for myself. From one side, it can encourage me to beself-confident and finally accomplish the supposed work. Form anotherside, it can be flexible and allow me to have some spare time to relax.

文章完全从个人经验出发。这样写的好处是读起来比较生动。但这么写也让人感觉抽象推理方面稍显不足。论证上基本采用分论点+个人例子的方式，但在二者之间是否可以考虑加一些过渡性的语言，或解释性的语言，变成分论点+对分论点的说明/支持分论点的原因+例证的形式能更好一些。一点个人看法，楼主参考

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谢谢修改。话说。应该是from long-term perspective我想起来了= =

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