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发表于 2011-3-18 18:18:24 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

Do you agree or disagree with the following statements?universities should give the same amount of money to the sports’ activities as they give to their university libraries.

With each passing day,the universities always spend a large amount of money on libraries.However,in my opinion,it's also very essential to focus on the sport's activities,which contributes to the students's health,improves the students' ability of teamwork,a result that the same money should be paid to the sports' activities.My points will be justified as follows.
The point of pinnacle importance for my preference on the students' health.The students' sports' activeites will enable the students to take more exercise at the leisure time which will be of health for the students.For example,with the heavy load of the study,students usually keep seated in the long run in the classrooms or libraries,a result that back and neck pain has been popular/prevailing amid the students.Then the sports' activity will change the status,stimulating students to get up and to take more exercise.On the other hand,as the Chinese saying goes:"a physical health is an important prerequisite for mental heath and academic achievement ”a physically fit student body will in turn improve the efficiency of the study.
With the first point stands the second demonstrating ability of the teamwork.As we all known the sports' activity in the university ,such as basketball,football and vollyball,usually require the teamwork,which lead to the improvement of ability of the teamwork.AYOU Daily,the chinese most famous magazine ,found through the investigation that, the students who used to take part in the sports'activities are more successful in cooperation with others than the ones who not.
Considering the long-term benefits of the sports' activities,enough investment should be paid to the spots' activities.The goal of every university should be to have well and enough equipments the students need.In order to be more convinient to take exercise.The larger the student body,the more adequete equipments the universities should provide.On the other hand,well-trained instructors are also essential,who maitain the equipments and oganize the students to take sports'activities.All of above ask for a large amount of money.
Hence,the same money should be gave to the sports' activities as the libraries.

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发表于 2011-3-19 12:13:20 |只看该作者

2# chenyyalex 谢谢啊，求改无门呢，我去占了个座，啥事能分到组呢？

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发表于 2011-3-23 22:04:55 |只看该作者

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do you agree or disagree that past people are more friendly than they are today

will you gave a hand to an old lady who lies on the ground,do you know your neighbor who lives besides you, will you smile to the people who you don't know at all ,maybe your answers are yes,however,the sad news is that 80 percent of people will say no. it's a fact that people don't want to acknowledge that past people are more friendly than they are today.while,it's worthy to mention it that the law and competitive maket are in charge of the fact .
with the development of society ,the law has become a crucial standard to measure what's wrong and right ,and the case which is judged by the court also has affected the social morilaty deeply,which directly impacts the people's attitude to the things and people around them.for instance, do you read the news which has been reported largely by the mass medium,there're two students who are awarded by the local government,the reason whereby which the government reward them is that the young give a favor to an old lady who lies on the ground.at first ,i have to adknowledge,the news surprised me.it's ridiculous ,isn't it?if in the past,i'll bet you'll say it's too normal to mention it ,then when it comes to now,it becomes a glory by which people can be rewarded by the government.however,the trasition can't come without any reasons.several years ago ,the same behavior with the two young's occured on a man ,then opposite to being rewarded ,the man was judged to pay for the medical fee for the old lady,because the old lady charged the man of tripping up her,such a result that almost no people dare help the person lying on the ground.
with the social morilaty stands the increasingly competitive market being responsible for the less-friendly of the contemporary people,the increasingly market more or less add the pressure to the contemporary people, which leads to the high speedy pace of life ,a result that there have no extra time and energy being left,and no more attention being paid to others,a fitting illustration to this is that now a lot of young people won't give their seat to an old man on the public bus voluntarily . in fact,it can be understood,it's hard to imagine that after a whole day's paintaking work ,with the exhausted body,you are still capable to pay attention to the old man who has no seat.on the other hand,with the competitive market, comes the expanding pressure which contributes to the nervous and negative emotion,more frown takes place the smile on people's face,a result that now people become less friendly than others,at least,people look like grow less friendly than before.

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