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Although schools can get people educated in order to help country's development, I don't agree that it is the most important factor for country developing.

First, not all education were at school and school can not guarantee great leaders. Besides, improving school costs much but cannot be paid in near future. It could be important investment but not effective for today.

Second, if a country is very poor, people usually need to use their limited resource to get the most profit. Therefore they need a strong and efficient leadership to give them a direction for development. A powerful local government can help to improve not only public education, but also create work opportunities, call for investment and so on. If their leadership work well, paid back can be seen soon.

As a result, I cannot deny that improving schools acts an important role at country's development. But I strongly believe that government's leadership should be the most important role for country development.

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自己写着写着都觉得理亏。但一开始下笔时候决定写反面，所以只好硬着头皮往上兑。。。。

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发表于 2010-5-12 15:48:53 |只看该作者

tgbzsq 5.12 修改 5.11

Although schools can get people educated in order to help country's development, I don't agree that it is the most important factor for country developing.

First, not all education were done at schools and schools can not guarantee making students great leaders. Besides, improving school costs much but cannot be paid back in near future. It could be important investment but not effective for today.

Second, if a country is very poor, people usually need to use their limited resource to get the most profit. Therefore they need a strong and efficient leadership to give them a direction for development. A powerful local government can help to improve not only public education, but also create working/ jobopportunities, call for investment and so on. If their leadership works well, paid back 呃这个地方读起来怪怪的是就是想说 profits?can be seen soon.

As a result, I cannot deny that improving schools acts an important role at -> character incountry's development. But I strongly believe that government's leadership should be 应该是plays吧the most important role for -> incountry development.

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发表于 2010-5-12 20:24:58 |只看该作者

5.12 by yixin5690
lz下次加油啊！

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why?
because we can.

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本帖最后由 annskya 于 2010-5-12 22:05 编辑

谢谢！！！

我加油。。。。。。（泪）

5。12 writing

Nowadays, not a few people have unhealthy eating habits. Adverting was blamed for this. However, is it the only cause for the increasing problem? Can we blame that advertising is the only main cause?

Eating habits' forming can back to their early ages. As a baby, you didn't have many choices. Obviously, you were not influenced by advertising, as you could not even understand a word. Before you had you own opinions and prefers, your parents arranged everything including your meals for you. If mama cooks, mama influences. We can never underestimate family's influence here.

Besides family, culture can also play a big role on eating habits. For example, in the west, fries and hamburger can be main dishes. But in the east, like Japan and China, people eat rise more. Imaging that you were an American who moved to Japan. If the only food you can find there were rise and fish, what do you do? Eat or not? It's a question. Whatever you choose finally, the annoying feeling you felt on this moment, is exactly the reflection of culture's influence. Farther more, education, personal financial condition, even local environments can be main characters on this subject.

Here I also want to point out that the varieties of people. Advertising can be flooded in cities but how about remote rural places? Don't people there have eating problems? Even in cities, not every single person watches TV and suffer on Internet. We cannot deny the existence for people who are not accessing to advertisements. If they had unhealthy eating habits, then what are the reasons?

Therefore, advertising can be a main cause, but it is difficult to assert that it is the ONLY main cause of the unhealthy eating habits. Furthermore, for some people, it could not even be a cause at all.

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发表于 2010-5-13 20:48:06 |只看该作者

Nowadays, not a few people have unhealthy eating habits. Adverting was(is) blamed for this. However, is it the only cause for the increasing problem? Can we blame(say) that advertising is the only main cause?

Eating habits' forming(formation) can(goes) back to their(删除) early ages（age）. As a baby, you didn't have many choices. Obviously, you were not influenced by advertising, as you could not even understand a word. Before you had you（your） own opinions and prefers（preferences）, your parents arranged everything including your meals for you. If mama cooks, mama influences. We can never underestimate family's influence here.

Besides family, culture can also play a big role on eating habits. For example, in the west, fries and hamburger(hamburgers) can be main dishes. But in the east, like Japan and China, people eat rise(rice) more. Imaging(Imagine) that you were an American who moved to Japan. If the only food(foods) you can find there were rise(rice) and fish, what do you do? Eat or not? It's a question. Whatever you choose finally, the annoying feeling you felt on(at) this moment, (删除)is exactly the reflection of culture's influence. Farther（Further） more, education, personal financial condition, even local environments can be main characters(influences) on this subject.

Here I also want to point out that the（换成different) varieties of people （exist）. Advertising can be flooded in cities but how about remote rural places? Don't people there have eating problems? Even in cities, not every single person watches TV and suffer(surfs) on (the) Internet. We cannot deny the existence (of problems)for people who are not accessing(have no access) to advertisements. If they had(have) unhealthy eating habits, then what are the reasons?

Therefore, advertising can be a main cause, but it is difficult to assert that it is the ONLY main cause of the(删除) unhealthy eating habits. Furthermore, for some people, it could not even be a cause at all.

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