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When refers to a specific nation, many aspects of that nation will come to us spontaneously, complexion, language, custom, costume, and unavoidably, rituals and ceremonies. There is no doubt that they all help define a particular culture. Thus, the disappearance of rituals and ceremonies is just one of the reasons that are responsible for the declined cultural identity.
Rituals and ceremonies as a component of present culture will definitely help define a culture. What is culture? How to define it exactly? I suppose that is not easy question for everyone to answer, nor will we discuss it today. But there do exist many kinds of obvious phenomenon that comprise the definition. For instance, we need not to go very far to compare the differences between traditional Chinese wedding ceremony and that of western countries. The most important procedure in the former ritual is that the husband and wife will do three obeisances to the god, their parents and to each other, which reflects the value system of Chinese: you should thank god first, then pay respect to your parents. They are the people who give you a happy marriage, and at last you bow to your spouse to wish for a life-long happiness. By contrast, in the latter one, the only thing you need to do is to vow to your spouse, to swear that you will never betray him/her, no matter poor or wealthy, no matter how bitter you will experience, you will always love him/her till the day you pass away. To show your commitment, you accept the ring on your finger, from then on, you should be responsible for her/him all your life. Then we can conclude that, western people only regard marriage as their personal things. The huge gap between these two value systems can be attributed to the distinct ideologies in different cultures, that is the reason why rituals and ceremonies help define a culture.
On the other hand, without rituals or ceremonies people will lose a very important part in their culture, hence their cultural identity will be undermined. As most of rituals and ceremonies are handed down from one generation to another, in some sense, they represent the root of a nation, a culture--- no matter they are related to religions or people’s daily lives. Can you imagine western people without Christmas? What will then be? What they lose is not only a festival, but rather, a sense of belonging, belonging to that religion, or specifically, their nation and family. Unfortunately, our rituals and ceremonies are diminishing nowadays. Thanks to globalization, many traditional ceremonies disappeared. And some of the remains are more and more westernized. One day, there may be a possibility that all the people around the world will hold their weddings in church. Under this circumstance, how many people will remember their original wedding ceremonies? If all the rituals and ceremonies are gone, will their cultures alive? If the culture does not exist, how can a nation survive, let alone thrive.
Meanwhile, there are many other factors that will undercut people’s sense of who they are. After all, culture is a complex which is not formed in one day. We should protect all facets of culture to maintain our unique cultural integrity. Language, custom, food, even dialect and folk art are precious treasures to every culture. If any one of them is spoiled, gradually then, people will suffer from their diminishing sense of belonging.
To sum up, rituals and ceremonies do help us define a culture, and the disappearance of them will make people feel the sense of loss. As considering the complexity of culture, we should not ignore the diminution of many other factors, which will similarly influence the integrity of culture.

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发表于 2005-7-25 11:23:48 |只看该作者

我来也！

你的某些语言好“闪光”啊,hehe~我要好好学习一下;)
我只是把想到的说给你听听，先看看吧
When refers to a specific nation, many aspects of that nation will come to us spontaneously, complexion, language, custom, costume, and unavoidably, rituals and ceremonies. There is no doubt that they all help define a particular culture. Thus, the disappearance of rituals and ceremonies is just one of the reasons that are responsible for the declined cultural identity.
Rituals and ceremonies as a component of present culture will definitely help define a culture. What is culture? How to define it exactly? I suppose that is not easy question for everyone to answer, nor will we discuss it today. 这段话似乎对承上启下没有什么明显的作用啊？~和上下文联系也不太紧密……But there do exist many kinds of obvious phenomenon that comprise the definition. For instance, we need not to go very far to compare the differences between traditional Chinese wedding ceremony and that of western countries. The most important procedure in the former ritual is that the husband and wife will do three obeisances to the god, their parents and to each other, which reflects the value system of Chinese: you should thank god first, then pay respect to your parents. They are the people who give you a happy marriage, and at last you bow to your spouse to wish for a life-long happiness. By contrast, in the latter one, the only thing you need to do is to vow to your spouse, to swear that you will never betray him/her, no matter poor or wealthy,no matter啰嗦了点吧how bitter you will experience不知你这么表达是不是对,不过我想可以说what tribulation you may get through, you will always love him/her till the day you pass away. To show your commitment, you accept the ring on your finger, from then on, you should be responsible for her/him--your mate all your life. Then we can conclude that, western people only regard marriage as their personal things. The huge gap between these two value systems can be attributed to the distinct ideologies in different cultures,连词 that is the reason why rituals and ceremonies help define a culture.
On the other hand, without rituals or ceremonies people will lose a very important part in their culture, hence their cultural identity will be undermined. As most of rituals and ceremonies are handed down from one generation to another, in some sense, they represent the root of a nation, a culture--- no matter they are related to religions or people’s daily lives. Can you imagine western people without Christmas? What will then be? What they lose is not only a festival, but rather, a sense of belonging, belonging to that religion, or specifically, their nation and family. Unfortunately, our rituals and ceremonies are diminishing nowadays. Thanks to globalization,感觉是很褒义的，用在这里不太恰当吧？！ many traditional ceremonies disappeared. And some of the remains are more and more westernized. 前面并没有铺垫是对国内情况的叙述啊，全球都西化？听起来有点奇怪哦~~One day, there may be a possibility that all the people around the world will hold their weddings in church. Under this circumstance, how many people will remember their original wedding ceremonies? If all the rituals and ceremonies are gone, will their cultures alive? If the culture does not exist, how can a nation survive, let alone thrive.
Meanwhile, there are many other factors that will undercut people’s sense of who they are. After all, culture is a complex which is not formed in one day. We should protect all facets of culture to maintain our unique cultural integrity. Language, custom, food, even dialect and folk art are precious treasures to every culture. If any one of them is spoiled, gradually then, people will suffer from their diminishing sense of belonging.
To sum up, rituals and ceremonies do help us define a culture, and the disappearance of them will make people feel the sense of loss. As considering the complexity of culture, we should not ignore the diminution of many other factors, which will similarly influence the integrity of culture.总体来说都是偏重对r和c作用的描述，后面只对其他因素作了显得稍有仓促的总结，结尾似乎又把两者并重的提出来，感觉不太搭，但似乎又提不出好建议，你自己看看吧，呵呵

就这么多啦，又什么要讨论的再发给我哦~
有空拍拍我哦，我们写的是同样的issue题目;P谢谢啦！

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发表于 2005-7-25 23:19:20 |只看该作者

谢谢你的修改！还是受了不少启发，最后写的是有点仓促了，再改改

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发表于 2005-7-25 23:51:23 |只看该作者

呵呵，不客，有空也帮我忙啊，又写a76~~~
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感觉你的语言很流畅啊~~~

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发表于 2005-7-26 00:02:45 |只看该作者

占座~明天帖意见~
写过这篇，但一直没有修改，督促自己修改这篇

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发表于 2005-7-26 19:48:23 |只看该作者

When refers to a specific nation, many aspects of that nation will come to us spontaneously, complexion, language, custom, costume, and unavoidably, rituals and ceremonies.语法有问题，省略的时候前后两分句的主语应该是一致的！ There is no doubt that they all help define a particular culture. Thus, the disappearance of rituals and ceremonies is just one of the reasons that are responsible for the declined cultural identity.

Rituals and ceremonies as a component复数 of present culture will definitely help define a culture. What is culture? How to define it exactly? I suppose that is not an easy question for everyone to answer, nor will we discuss it today.个人觉得这种写法不好，既然没法定义，最好不要说 But there do exist many kinds of obvious phenomenon that comprise the definition. For instance, we need not to go very far to compare the differences between traditional Chinese wedding ceremony and that of western countries. The most important procedure in the former ritual is that the husband and wife will do three obeisances to the god, their parents and to each other, which reflects the value system of Chinese: you should thank god first, then pay respect to your parents. They are the people who give you a happy marriage, and at last you bow to your spouse to wish for a life-long happiness. By contrast, in the latter one, the only thing you need to do is to vow to your spouse, to swear that you will never betray him/her, no matter poor or wealthy, no matter how bitter you will experience, you will always love him/her till the day you pass away. To show your commitment, you accept the ring on your finger, from then on, you should be responsible for her/him all your life. Then we can conclude that, western people only regard marriage as their personal things. The huge gap between these two value systems can be attributed to the distinct ideologies in different cultures, that is the reason why rituals and ceremonies help define a culture. 建议举例子的时候不要用you,your这样的词汇

On the other hand, without rituals or ceremonies people will lose a very important part in their culture, hence their cultural identity will be undermined. As most of rituals and ceremonies are handed down from one generation to another, in some sense, they represent the root of a nation, a culture--- no matter they are related to religions or people’s daily lives. Can you imagine western people without Christmas? What will then be? What they lose is not only a festival, but rather, a sense of belonging, belonging to that religion, or specifically, their nation and family.

Unfortunately, our rituals and ceremonies are diminishing nowadays. Thanks to globalization, many traditional ceremonies disappeared.应该是unfortunately的感觉，不应该用thanks to吧 And some of the remains are more and more westernized如果说西化的话，最好限定一下，in China. One day, there may be a possibility that all the people around the world will hold their weddings in church还是那句话，你怎么知道别的地方的仪式都西化了呢. Under this circumstance, how many people will remember their original wedding ceremonies? If all the rituals and ceremonies are gone, will their cultures alive?需要你来回答啊,你也说了仪式只是文化的一部分，然而这里好像又是说全部？？ If the culture does not exist, how can a nation survive, let alone thrive.

Meanwhile, there are many other factors that will undercut people’s sense of who they are. After all, culture is a complex which is not formed in one day. We should protect all facets of culture to maintain our unique cultural integrity. Language, custom, food, even dialect and folk art are precious treasures to every culture. If any one of them is spoiled, gradually then, people will suffer from their diminishing sense of belonging.这个总结不好，你这段的意思是不仅ritual没了会削弱我们的自我意识，别的没了也会削弱，我觉得不如改成没有rituals的话，我们的自我意识不会削弱应为还有别的

To sum up, rituals and ceremonies do help us define a culture, and the disappearance of them will make people feel the sense of loss. As considering the complexity of culture, we should not ignore the diminution of many other factors, which will similarly influence the integrity of culture.

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