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本帖最后由 lyn12180021 于 2012-2-3 21:57 编辑

1. Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate
vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people.
Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim
River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by
boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely
Palean.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how
the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
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The argument is well-presented but not completely persuasive as it stands. The author concludes that the so-called
Palean baskets, which archaeologists also found in Lithos, were not uniquely Palean, which is supported by no boats
found around the Brim River where only boats could cross. However, the evidence is problematic. First, the current
status of the river might be not the same with the original; in addition, the boat could not be the unique way;
moreover, archaeologist do not find boats, which does not mean that there were really no boats. I will discuss
each of matters in turn.

At the beginning, even if the Brim River is deep and broad nowadays, the author too hasty to conclude that it
could be the same with prehistoric. The author does not account for the possibility that prehistoric Brim River is
either shallow or narrow so that the ancient Paleans could easily take the Palean boats across the river without
boats. Or even perhaps there was a road over past and through thousands of years of geological and climate
change it becomes such a Brim River, therefore ancient Paleans could walk to Lithos with such Palean baskets.
Unless the author could convince me that these possibilities are unlikely, I cannot accept the author's conclusion
the prehistoric Brim River was deep and broad.

Furthermore, even if the prehistoric Brim River was deep and broad, the Paleans baskets could use various
methods to get across the river other than boats. Perhaps the ancient Palean could swim across the river.
Or perhaps the ancient Palean could put large numbers of Palean baskets on the water, and then these Palean
baskets could drift across the Brim River by flowing. Without ruling out of other possible methods, the author cannot
confidently assure that boats are the only way.

In addition, even if the unique possibility that the ancient Paleans has across the Brim River is by boats, the author
cannot justifiably confirm that there are no boats so that the ancient Palean did not across the Brim River. In relying
on the lack of physical evidence, such as boats, the author overlook the possibility that the used boats have been
crashed by rushing river, or perhaps the boats have sink into the bottom of the river and the archaeologies do not
completely search for it. Thus, without ruling out these alternative explanations for the disappearance of these boats,
the author cannot conclude that the ancient Paleans have not crossed the river.

Finally, Even though the basket found by archaologist was not brought to Lithos by the ancient Paleans, the author
overlooks other possible factors, such as by the Paleans descendants or other people. The author did not evaluate
the age of the Palean basket, thus, the Palean is also possibly made by the ancient Paleans and taken to Lithos by
others including Paleans' descendant or others. For that matter, the author cannot nagate that the Paleans baskets
is only belong to the ancient Paleans.

To sum up, the author's conclusion that the Palean baskets is not uniquely Palean is not well supposed as it stand.
To bolster it, the author must provide more evidence, such as the evaluation of the age of the Palean baskets and
investigating the real landscape of prehistoric village of Palea. To better assess the problem, i would also need to
know the legacy system of Pale.
=========采用让步，将各个问题串联起来1.时间推广 2.Ignorance 3.证据没有找到不代表证据不存在 4，其他可能

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