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发表于 2005-8-25 21:38:28 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

Issue34:
Instead of requiring students to take courses in a variety of disciplines—that is, courses ranging from the arts and the humanities to the physical and biological sciences—colleges and universities should allow students to enroll only in those courses that will help prepare them for jobs in their chosen fields. Such concentration is necessary in today's increasingly work-oriented society.

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1.表明观点,不同意此说法
2. 教育：只从培养人“做事，干活，挣钱”的角度着眼，而不注重教人如何“生活、为人”，做一个全面的、完整的人，这样的教育已经不能承担起全面育人的重任了。
3．高技能、高收入而、低追求、低人格”等畸形现象owe to it
4.承认参加单一领域短时期有益
5.总结,重复我的观点

With an attendant rise of social competence, and appearance of college students being unemployment just after graduation, more and more people, like speaker, contend that university students should only study what will be beneficial to their future jobs, rather than a large range of subjects. While I partly agree that it is useful to increase the employment in the short run, the potential harm it can inflict on the misleading education purpose and the student will far outweight its benefits.

To begin with, we should make clear what is the purpose of structors setting a curriculum which includes art, humanities, and physical sciences. The motives touch on the goal of eduction-cultivating a full-scale man. According to Marx and many other philosophers, what does "full-scale" mean to the modern people is not just passing all the tests or haing the ability to do everyting, let along getting one or two skills to make a living. All metioned above are merely the extreme state of human being's pragmatism. The real full-scale man is the one who own basic knowledge, develop all-side charicteristics, and has the capablity of creativity. Only through various disciplines can a student meet such kind of requirement.

Equally important, both the educatee and sociey can get the get benefits from different fields. Without the course of art, the students will lack the eyes to find beauty, without the course of humanities like philosophy, the students will lose the oppurtunity to talk with ideologist, without courses of physical and biological sciences, let alone engineering students, the art ones will also miss one door to the storehouse of knowledge. In fact, many abnormal phenomena in westen countris expose that although people have a affluent life, they cannot get spirit satisfaction. High skill,high income but low pursue,low personality are largely due to overemphasize single course taking. In short, enroll diversified course is the first step for the student to succeed in work in long run.

Admittedly, studying the course related to students' future job can do some help for them to some extend. In some circumstance, students can have more time and energy contibute to the field they major in. And few would disagree that they may get advantages in job marketing after their first year greduatin, compared with other students who deal with course like that. Aside form its untility in the short run, howerer, the results it will bring about is undoutfully catastrophic.

In sum, while utilitarian course may have created a better job opportunity for the student, various course holds more promise for students in every aspect.

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发表于 2005-8-25 21:39:33 |只看该作者

1 the purpose of education
As the master of our university once said,” The aim of education is to teach the knowledge, especially a way of thinking and questioning. We encourages students to think, to discover, to doubt or even object , so that they can get knowledge or even create knowledge through the possession of education.”
在澳大利亚工作时，发现他们的小学、中学和大学都不设政治课，也不设德育课，却都有法律知识课。他们说，政治是少数政治家的事情，而守法则是每个公民的义务，是必须具备的基本道德修养。至于平等待人、爱人助人、遵守社会公德和团队精神等，是层次更高的道德，学校没有硬性的规定，但在发生问题时，老师，不管是教什么课的老师，都会作解释和教育工作，帮助学生提高道德素养。只有在个别培养高级人才的私立贵族学校，如堪培拉文法学校，才设立专门的道德和礼仪课程，对学生有严格的要求。欧洲也是这样。记得几年前，一个国家，有一个小姑娘，才4岁。一天，她打电话给警察，说她姥姥欺负她了。警察风风火火赶到那里，她说：姥姥做的布丁难吃极了，而姥姥却坚持让她吃下去。警察耐心地做了工作，才让这位小姑娘勉强吃了布丁。

2.the role of teacher
教师道德对学生的健康成长起着奠基作用教师道德对学生健康成长的作用，不仅表现在对学生良好道德品质的培养上，还表现在对学生知识的增长、智能的发展、良好习惯的形成、身体素质的完善上。教师道德对学生的健康成长起着奠基作用，具体体现在热爱学生上。热爱学生是教师道德的核心。教师热爱学生表现在对学生的学习、思想和身体的全面关心上，处处想学生之所想，帮学生之所难，做他们的贴心人。教师对学生的热爱，是一种巨大的教育力量。教师只有热爱学生，才能教育好学生，搭起师生之间感情的桥梁，使学生乐意接近教师，愿意接受教师的教育，才能使教育发挥最大限度的作用。

3.whether teacher should get salary out of the acedemic field
我认为教师之所以是人类灵魂德工程师，是因为他们面对的是一群无知可爱的孩子。但是，教师也是一种工作，就像其他有工作的人一样，一但这份工作的收入不可以养家糊口的话，教师也有权利放弃这个工作去找更好的工作，竞争是强烈的，各行各业都在竞争，难道教育业就不能竞争吗？如果长期不注意教师的生活保障的话，那么有可能在若干年以后，就没有人再做教师这个职业了！强烈呼吁社会各界关注教师的生活，教师也要吃饭！
只有真正当过老师的人才会体会到现今老师的酸甜苦辣麻,特别是从事基础教育一线工作的老师,他们的辛苦与清贫,别的行业的人是无法体验的,而这仅仅是自身职业的压力,更别说外界对他们的指指点点了,很多新闻媒体对教育,对学校的报道真的过火,大有以点代面,以偏概全的势头,只要有一桩或几桩事,便会直指整个教育行业,整个教师队伍.说真心话教师队伍整体是高素质的,在其他行业无法想象的清贫与辛苦下仍然艰守岗位,其他人能作到的有几个?!

bt!!!!!!
106. "All students should be required to take at least one course in ethics, even if taking the course means a decreased emphasis on academic subjects."
首先，ethics必要。因为它关系到如何使用technology的问题，如现在炒得比较热的cloning, abortion, biochemical weapon问题等等，要维护和平与文明，sustainable development, ethics方面的教育都不容忽视
但是，把ethics作为course有一些问题：比如应该教授什么课？会不会给学生增加负担？通过这些ethics课程，学生们到底有多少收获？这些都有待于进一步探讨

同意楼上106的看法，教授ethics要考虑的问题很多
寄托家园首先是应该教授什么ethics,应该教授主流文化的ethics,忽略非主流文化的？或者应该开很多不同的ethics课程让学生选修？topic说take at least one course in ethics，如果学生选其中一门，会不会造成ethics上的差异？而且ethics也是在不断变化的，教授ethics会不会束缚学生的思想？

至于even if taking the course means a decreased emphasis on academic subjects. 当然是最好不要decrease emphasis，如果有更好的途径解决，可以不必采取授课的形式：
比如，家庭和community承担起教育ethics的责任
学校也可以请道德高尚的名人来讲座，用生动的事实说话效果可能好的多。

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发表于 2005-8-25 22:56:15 |只看该作者

感觉你的作文进步的好快!!!

先占各位子,明天帮你改吧.今天眼睛好疼5555

1.表明观点,不同意此说法
2. 教育：只从培养人“做事，干活，挣钱”的角度着眼，而不注重教人如何“生活、为人”，做一个全面的、完整的人，这样的教育已经不能承担起全面育人的重任了。
3．高技能、高收入而、低追求、低人格”等畸形现象owe to it
4.承认参加单一领域短时期有益
5.总结,重复我的观点

With an attendant rise of social competence, and appearance of college students being unemployment just after graduation, more and more people, like speaker, contend that university students should only study what will be beneficial to their future jobs, rather than a large range of subjects. (这句话好长,可适当缩短一点)While I partly agree that it is useful to increase the employment in the short run, the potential harm it can inflict on the misleading education purpose and the student will far outweight its benefits.(思路很好,保持!)

To begin with, we should make clear what is the purpose of structors setting a curriculum(就是curriculum design) which includes art, humanities, and physical sciences. The motives touch on the goal of eduction-cultivating a full-scale(well-rounded?) man. According to Marx and many other philosophers, what does "full-scale" mean to the modern people is not just passing all the tests or haing the ability to do everyting, let along getting one or two skills to make a living.(我觉得说个具体的事例会更丰满一些) All metioned above are merely the extreme state of human being's pragmatism. The real full-scale man is the one who own basic knowledge, develop all-side charicteristics, and has the capablity of creativity. Only through various disciplines can a student meet such kind of requirement.

Equally important, both the educatee and sociey can get the get benefits from different fields. Without the course of art, the students will lack the eyes to(有点中国话的味道:)) find beauty, without the course of humanities like philosophy, the students will lose the oppurtunity to talk with ideologist, without courses of physical and biological sciences, let alone engineering students, the art ones will also miss one door to the storehouse of knowledge(这个排比用的不错). In fact, many abnormal phenomena in westen countris expose that although people have a affluent life, they cannot get spirit(spiritual) satisfaction. High skill,high income but low pursue,low(illed) personality are largely due to overemphasize single course taking. In short, enroll diversified course is the first step for the student to succeed in work in long run.(能否具体给个例子?)
Admittedly, studying the course related to students' future job can do some help for them to some(有点重复,可否换个词?) extend. In some circumstance, students can have more time and energy contibute to the field they major in. And few would disagree that they may get(have比较好吧?) advantages in job marketing after their first year greduatin, compared with other students who deal with course like that. Aside form its untility in the short run, howerer, the results it will bring about is undoutfully catastrophic(这个词是不是有点重了?).

In sum, while utilitarian course may have created a better job opportunity for the student, various course holds more promise for students in every aspect.(结尾感觉有点仓促)

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发表于 2005-8-25 23:05:51 |只看该作者

先谢了!

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发表于 2005-8-25 23:43:09 |只看该作者

With an attendant rise of social competence, and appearance of college students being unemployment just after graduation, more and more people, like speaker, contend that university students should only study what will be beneficial to their future jobs, rather than a large range of subjects. While I partly agree that it is useful to increase the employment in the short run, the potential harm it can inflict on the misleading education purpose and the student will far outweight its benefits.

To begin with, we should make clear what is the purpose of structors (educators?) setting a curriculum which includes art, humanities, and physical sciences. The motives touch on the goal of eduction(education)-cultivating a full-scale man. According to Marx and many other philosophers, what does "full-scale"(可能well cultivated比较好吧) mean to the modern people is not just passing all the tests or haing(?) the ability to do everyting (everything), let along getting one or two skills to make a living. All metioned (mention) above are merely the extreme state of human being's pragmatism. The real full-scale man is the one who own basic knowledge, develop all-side charicteristics (characteristics), and has the capablity (capabilities) of creativity. Only through various disciplines can a student meet such kind of requirement. 其实可以举几个实际点的例子的，现在文章总体字数有点不大够，比如举个Bill Gates 的例子，他既会编程，又会搞经营，结果弄出个Microsoft来了，还有许多大师都是多才多艺，以上只是个人观点，仅贡参考

Equally important, both the educatee and sociey can get the get benefits from different fields. 好像后来的文字没有说明具体损失了那些benefits，只是精神空虚而已，西方人首先强调的是物质，然后才是精神Without the course of art, the students will lack the eyes to find beauty, without the course of humanities like philosophy, the students will lose the oppurtunity to talk with ideologist, without courses of physical and biological sciences, let alone engineering students, the art ones will also miss one door to the storehouse of knowledge. In fact, many abnormal phenomena in westen countris expose that although people have a affluent life, they cannot get spirit satisfaction. High skill,high income but low pursue,low personality are largely due to overemphasize single course taking. In short, enroll diversified course is the first step for the student to succeed in work in long run. 个人认为你可以这样安排：举个例子：把基础理论学习可以指导专业课学习，比如学习calculus可以指导macro economics, 学了economics又可以指导更与实际相关的管理方面的课程，所以离不开基础课，离开了基础课，就会导致bra, bra, bra……的严重后果，最后影响社会正常发展，比如什么经济建设之类的。感觉这一段也是需要很大充实的
Admittedly, studying the course related to students' future job can do some help for them to some extend. In some circumstance, students can have more time and energy contibute to the field they major in. And few would disagree that they may get advantages in job marketing after their first year greduatin, compared with other students who deal with course like that. Aside form its untility in the short run, howerer, the results it will bring about is undoutfully catastrophic.

In sum, while utilitarian course may have created a better job opportunity for the student, various course holds more promise for students in every aspect.

你的总体思路很正确，先个人，在社会，再admittedly，我想这应该是一个比较正规的套路吧？

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发表于 2005-8-26 03:59:40 |只看该作者

思路很好，但是的确全文感觉论据比较单一，一直在说理，LZ不是附了资料吗，怎么没有裁出例证的论据呢，
另外，个人认为more and more 是一个不怎么优美的词组，其实少用的好。一点意见啊，很晚了，来不及细评了，逻辑上自己比较差的说，555
看我这篇，写得不知所云的issue11
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=326610

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发表于 2005-8-27 07:30:57 |只看该作者

With an attendant 什么意思 rise of social competence, and appearance of college students being unemployment just after graduation, more and more people, like speaker, contend that university students should only study what will be beneficial to their future jobs, rather than a large range of subjects. While I partly agree that it is useful to increase the employment in the short run, the potential harm it can inflict on the misleading education purpose and the student will far outweight its benefits.开头不错不过能简练一点最好

To begin with, we should make clear what is the purpose of structors setting a curriculum which includes including从句能不用最好不用art, humanities, and physical sciences. The motives touch on 看不太明白什么意思the goal of eduction-cultivating a full-scale man. According to Marx and many other philosophers, what does "full-scale" mean to the modern people is not just passing all the tests or haing having？the ability to do everyting, let along getting one or two skills to make a living exclusively . All metioned above are merely the extreme state of human being's pragmatism. The real full-scale man is the one who own basic knowledge, develop all-side charicteristics, and has the capablity of creativity. Only through various disciplines can a student meet such kind of requirement.这段还不错。。。

Equally important, both the educatee and sociey can get the get benefits from different fields. Without the course of art, the students will lack the eyes to find beauty, without the course of humanities like philosophy, the students will lose the oppurtunity to talk with ideologist, without courses of physical and biological sciences, let alone 这个短语好象用的不对吧engineering students, the art ones 这是什么？will also miss one door to the storehouse of knowledge.后半句感觉很别扭。。而且有中式英语的感觉。还有对社会的好处也好象没有说 In fact, many abnormal phenomena 举出1。2个才有说服力in westen countris expose that although people have a affluent life, they cannot get spirit形容词形式 satisfaction. High advancedskill,high income but low pursue词性。。。,low personality are largely due to overemphasize single course taking. In short, enroll diversified course is the first step for the student to succeed in work in long run.没有明显的说出来对学生和对社会的好处

Admittedly, studying the course related to students' future job can do some help for them 太简单的句子了。。。 to some extend. In some circumstance, students can have more time and energy contibute to the field they major in. And few would disagree that they may get advantages in job marketing after their first year greduatin这是什么？, compared with other students who deal with course like that. Aside form its untility ？？in the short run, howerer, the results it will bring about is undoutfully catastrophic.最后一句最好不要放到让步段里

In sum, while utilitarian course may have created a better job opportunity for the student, various course holds more promise for students in every aspect.、

论证还不错。。。不过总是在泛泛的说理。。没有例证使说服力不够强

有时间看看我的11
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=326803
还有最好和大家步调一致

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