进军美利坚作文-miaz/lupisces

lupiscesUID: 2231942

呵呵，这篇我写的很难受。。。

那个攀比的我还特意Google了一下，发现都用compare的时候，我很无语。。。

反正作文就是很烦我

ly8768UID: 2452066

13# lupisces


Nowadays, there is a debate on whether it is important to have rules about the types of clothing that people are allowed to work and school. There are many people holding different reasons for their choices(这句不怎么好). In my opinion, I prefer to have rules that regulate the clothing in the workplace and school.

In the first place, people wearing uniforms look more formal when they are at work(in work place，后面又有个when). When clients enter the company, they may regard the staff as more professional and the whole workplace seems to be in harmony(和谐？). Besides, researches have found that people wearing proper uniforms show more sense of responsibility and are more likely to devote themselves to work, improving the production in the end. However, if the staffs all wear clothes of their own, not only the uniformity of the company will be lost but also the company can not benefit the boost of production. In addition, it is polite to dress formally and makeup when being with the clients. Therefore, wearing the allowed clothes is essential for many corporations.

这段挺好

Furthermore, allowing people, especially students, to wear clothing of their own is always creating a phenomenon that they compare their clothing with one anther(another). This phenomenon is now popular within numerous schools and some workplace and then results in more students paying more attention to fashion, to brands and even to premiums, distracting their concern on study that should have been the focus. Poor students may be laughed at and even be humiliated due to their appearance(这个理由，好像不是很通吧，校服还交钱呢). With the development of economy, the gap between the rich and the poor will be further widened. As a result, it will strengthen the tension between the two groups of students, which will do great harm to the future of our next generation.

Admittedly, we all know that it’s not necessary for all workers to wear uniforms, such as engineers who stay at offices most of the day and others who work at home. However, after weighing the pros and cons on rules about uniforms, the outcome will be obvious that taking on uniforms will eliminate so many problems that can eventually make our offices and schools more harmonious(这段算结尾吗)


如果没写结尾的话还是写个结尾吧。结构挺好的，语句也都通顺。

lupiscesUID: 2231942

Government should pay more attention on health care issues than on environmental issues
In recent year, there is a hot debate in nearly every country that is whether the national government should pay more attention on health care for its citizens than on the environment issues. People with different backgrounds express varying opinions. However, as far as I am concerned, I think the government should concentrate more on the environmental issues. I can present my reasons as below.

To begin with, the environment problems are getting more and more severe in the past few years. As we can see from the mass media, the nature feathers on our planet are disappearing rapidly because of our doing. I bet that no body will deny that it is after the industrialization that the environmental problems occur more frequently. The green house effect makes the global warming, causing pole-ice to melt and more floods to invade the coasts. The volcanoes are erupting more frequently. More and more animals and plants are extinct in threatening speed. All these conditions are there for a reason: we ask for too many resources from the nature and then pollute or even destroy the original harmony of the planet. Therefore, it is our responsibility to solve the problem and to pay off what we’ve borrowed in order to exist.

Furthermore, the nature is revenging towards our greedy behavior. I believe that we all are impressive of the following scenes on our televisions or computer screens- the earthquakes in our country that destroyed the whole town and took away numerous lives, the tsunami in Indonesia that swallowed thousands of human-beings and all other kinds of nature disasters happened in the decades. When we are contemplating the reasons behind these catastrophes, we have to admit that it is us who create these problems. The nature is just warning us that it is powerful enough to ruin the civilization we have built if we keep on our misdeeds.

Admittedly, the health care is a very important issue in every nation. However, the natural disasters will result in more hazardous consequences in a very short time if we still treat the earth as we have done in the past decades.

Taking all considerations I make and weighing the pros and cons of the two issues, I am more confident to conclude that the environmental issue should take priority over the health care issues in the government agenda.

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joyceliuUID: 2477232

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Inrecent year, there is a hot debate in nearly every country that iswhether the national government should pay more attention on healthcare for its citizens than on the environment issues. People withdifferent backgrounds express varying opinions. However, as far as I amconcerned, I think the government should concentrate more on theenvironmental issues. I can present my reasons as below.- O  }; r- V" q4 a

3 i/ E8 x! U, R' j( W  F! a5 MTobegin with, the environment problems are getting more and more severein the past few years. As we can see from the mass media, the naturefeathers(natural features) on our planet are disappearing rapidly because of our doing(behaviors). Ibet that no body will deny that it is after the industrialization thatthe environmental problems occur more frequently(it is result from the industralization which caused the enviromental problems to occur more frequently). The green houseeffect makes the global warming, causing pole-ice to melt and morefloods to invade the coasts. The volcanoes are erupting morefrequently. More and more( a growing number of ) animals and plants are extinct in threateningspeed( face the threat of extinction). All these conditions are there for a reason: we ask for too manyresources from the nature and then pollute or even destroy the originalharmony of the planet(ecosystem). Therefore, it is our responsibility to solve theproblem and to pay off what we’ve borrowed in order to exist(survive).
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5 F7 u" k# h! T7 [( ^5 r0 OFurthermore,the nature is revenging towards our greedy behavior. I believe that weall are impressive of the following scenes on our televisions orcomputer screens- the earthquakes in our country that destroyed thewhole town and took away numerous lives, the tsunami in Indonesia thatswallowed thousands of human-beings and all other kinds of naturedisasters happened in the (past)decades. When we are contemplating thereasons behind these catastrophes, we have to admit that it is us whocreate these problems. The nature is just warning us that it ispowerful enough to ruin the civilization we have built if we keep onour misdeeds( if we continuce to do as our prefrence, it will eventually leads to the destroy of the whole human civilization). ! y; P- T& e, O; F; D, |

# @4 ?3 c1 v" ?* C+ d& C- qAdmittedly,the health care is a very important issue in every nation. However, thenatural disasters will result in more hazardous consequences in a veryshort time if we still treat the earth as we have done in the pastdecades.
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Taking all considerations I make and weighing the pros and cons of thetwo issues, I am more confident to conclude that the environmentalissue should take priority over the health care issues in thegovernment agenda.+ O% {& O2 G3 b0 u8 |% k
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happyzhengangUID: 2502624

10.6作文修改 by happyzhengang（sunshine）

In recent year(years), there is a hot debate in nearly every country that iswhether the national government should pay more attention on health care forits citizens than on the environment issues(issue 去掉，跟前面的hot debate重复). People with different backgrounds expressvarying opinions. However, as far as I am concerned, I think the governmentshould concentrate more on the environmental issues. I can present my reasonsas below. 这样的开头显得中规中矩，我不建议这样开头，虽然既凑字数又好些~~

To begin with, the environment problems are getting more and more severe in thepast few years(few decades). Aswe can see(as we have saw) fromthe mass media, the nature feathers on our planet are disappearing rapidlybecause of our doing(our doing 也太中式了吧). I bet that no body will deny that it is afterthe industrialization that the environmental problems occur more frequently(it is the industrialization that results ~~~). The green house effect makes the globalwarming, causing pole-ice to melt(用 melting吧，毕竟已经在融化了) and morefloods to invade the coasts. The volcanoes are erupting(erupts) more frequently. More and more animals and plants are extinct(此处应该用主动式) in threatening speed. All these conditions are there for a reason(这句话感觉有问题，中式): we ask fortoo many resources from the nature and then pollute or even destroy theoriginal harmony of the planet. Therefore, it is our responsibility to solvethe problem and to pay off what we’ve borrowed in order to exist. (本段例证还不错，但是需要注意一下语言)

Furthermore, the nature is revenging towards our greedy behavior. I believethat we all are impressive of the following scenes on our televisions orcomputer screens- the earthquakes in our country that destroyed the whole townand took away numerous lives, the tsunami in Indonesia that swallowed thousandsof human-beings and all other kinds of nature disasters happened in thedecades. When we are contemplating the reasons behind these catastrophes, wehave to admit that it is us who create these problems. The nature is justwarning us that it is powerful enough to ruin the civilization we have built ifwe keep on our misdeeds.本段写的很不错，像是推敲过后的作品

Admittedly, the health care is a very important issue in every nation. However,the natural disasters will result in more hazardous consequences in a veryshort time if we still treat the earth as we have done in the past decades. - U% f" ^1 z1 R% ?6 n; z3 E

Taking all considerations I make and weighing the pros and cons of the twoissues, I am more confident to conclude that the environmental issue shouldtake priority over the health care issues in the government agenda.

本作文题目应该属于对比型，读完文章感觉有些头重脚轻的感觉，不是很平衡，其它部分都还好，拙见~~

lupiscesUID: 2231942

Technology cause children show less creative than they were in past.

Along with the development of the modern technology, some people argue that the advanced technology makes the children less creative compared to children in the past. However, as far as I am concerned, people holding this point of view are presenting something without sufficient proof.

To begin with, children in the 20th century have more access towards the latest technology. They can even get the information immediately after it is published through the powerful mass media. After seeing so much exciting inventions, they come up numerous ideas, some of which are really enlightening though they seem weird to the adults. For instance, the internet offers the children more information they are interested in. They can get what they want by just key in some words in the on-line retrieval service directly and rapidly. Once exposed to more news of their interests, they will show more interests or even devote the field, which in turn speed up their creative process. Therefore, it is obvious that their creativity benefits from the modern technology.

Furthermore, it is almost a common idea that children today are more clever or pre-mature than children in the past. As we can find in the newspapers or television that there are so many teenager- CEOs earning millions of dollars every year in our society, they are genius in certain field and soon start a business to develop their gifts. A recent research shows us that this phenomenon is closely related to the development of the science and technology in a certain country, that is, the more advanced the technology is in a nation, the more such genius are there.

Admittedly, the modern technology does have some bad impact on children, such as indulging in the computer games and then neglecting all the homework and assignments. However, we should view things more completely, which means that the other positive influence should be considered and may even take precedence after we weigh the advantages and disadvantages of a certain product.

To sum up, I can’t agree with the statement that the advanced technology make the children less creative compared to children in the past. It is too imprudent for us to conclude that because of some side effects it has brought.


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感觉越写越无语。。

karen_0315UID: 2590040

Along with the developmentof the modern technology, some people argue that the advanced technology makes the（可以去掉） children lesscreative compared to（with, compare to 是比作的意思，compare with 才是比较的意思） children
in（都可以去掉，和前面重复） the past.However, as far as I am concerned, people holding this point of view arepresenting something without sufficient proof.+ a% O# }, G& i2 }/ N: i) Y
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To begin with, children in the 20th century havemore access towards the latest technology. They can even get the informationimmediately after it is published through the powerful mass media. After seeingso much exciting inventions, they come up numerous ideas, some of which arereally enlightening though they seem weird to the adults. For instance, theinternet offers the（同样去掉，并没有具体指代） children more information they are interestedin. They can get what they want by just key in some words in the on-line（online） retrievalservice directly and rapidly. Once exposed tomore news of their interests, they will show moreinterests or even devote to the field, which in turn speed up their creative process.Therefore, it is obvious that their creativity benefits from the moderntechnology.' X6 n! x#V0 D+ I' k, u, ~' B" L/ Z
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Furthermore, it is almosta common idea that children today are more clever or pre-mature (premature) than children in (还是和前面重复啰嗦的，可以直接说) the past. As we can find in the newspapers or television thatthere are so many teenager- CEOs earning millions of dollars every year in oursociety, they are genius in certain field and soon start a business to developtheir gifts. A recent research shows us that this phenomenon is closely relatedto the development of the science and technology in a certain country, that is,the more advanced the technology is in a nation, the more such genius arethere..J  a# P, s, k  K6 x2 D8 u
最后那个research引用的很好
Admittedly, the modern technology does have some bad impact onchildren, such as indulging in the computer games and then neglecting all thehomework and assignments. However, we should view things more completely, whichmeans that the other positive influence should be considered and may even takeprecedence after we weigh the advantages and disadvantages of a certainproduct.

To sum up, I can’t agree with the statement thatthe advanced technology make the children less creative compared to children inthe past. It is too imprudent for us to conclude that because of some sideeffects it has brought.

点评：结构很好，语言很好，例子很好，总体来说都很好的，非常清晰。

karen_0315UID: 2590040

不知道为什么弄了几次颜色都没上去:L

LRXSSUID: 2695903

Technology cause children show less creative than they were in past.

Along with the development of the modern technology, some people argue that the advanced technology makes the children less creative compared to with children 用 that  避免重复 in the past. However, as far as I am concerned, people holding this point of view are presenting something without sufficient proof.: {" z- q% J# m
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To begin with, children in the 20th century have more access towards the latest technology. They can even get the information immediately after it is published through the powerful mass media. After seeing so much exciting inventions, they come up numerous ideas, some of which are really enlightening though they seem weird to the adults. For instance, the internet offers the children more information they are interested in. They can get what they want by just keying in some words in the on-line retrieval 补偿 用在这里是什么意思？service directly and rapidly. Once exposed to more news of their interests, they will show more interests or even devote to he field, which in turn speeds up their creative process. Therefore, it is obvious that their creativity benefits from the modern technology.; S  G! I+ E! b! f! b

Furthermore, it is almost a common idea 用consensus 好些 感觉that children today are more clever or pre-mature than children in the past. As we can find in the newspapers or television that there are so many teenager- CEOs earning millions of dollars every year in our society, they are genius in certain fields and soon start a business to develop their gifts. A recent research shows us that this phenomenon is closely related to the development of the science and technology in a certain country, that is, the more advanced the technology is in a nation, the more such genius are there.; @" f. K) l# B; Z/ r; l3 X- N

Admittedly, the modern technology does have some bad impact on children, such as indulging in the computer games and then neglecting all the homework and assignments. However, we should view things more completely, which means that the other positive influence should be considered and may even take precedence after we weigh好 the advantages and disadvantages of a certain product.
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To sum up, I can’t agree with the statement that the advanced technology make the children less creative compared to children in the past. It is too imprudent for us to conclude that because of some side effects it has brought.

总体来说  不错了思路清晰 语句流畅 注意些  句子太长 不好  

lupiscesUID: 2231942

你同不同意现在的人们没有以前friendly了？

Are people today less friendly than people in the past? There are many people offering answers opposite to one another. While to me, my answer is emphatic no. Though the lives people lead today is largely different from those people live in the past, it is still hardly reasonable for us to contend that people today are less friendly.

To begin with, along the development of economy, the way people live and work is varying to a great degree from ancient people. For example, more and more people now set up a goal of making money to enjoy a better life. Then we can see numerous diligent workers in various fields. As a result, more time is spent on working and inevitably less time is spent on communication among family, friends and neighbors, which was so common in the past that there exists a saying that the neighbor knows you better even than your family does. However, talking or chatting less does not necessarily mean people around you are treating you unfriendly.

Furthermore, as far as I know, people today show more concern to the people around them or even around the world. Since the nature is revenging towards our behavior of depleting its resources, we meet much more disasters nowadays than people in the past. What do we find through these sufferings? Researches shows that people today show more sympathy when others are in trouble. They donate money or other physical objects to people who underwent misfortunes, such as earthquakes, floods, tsunamis and any other forms of destructions to their home even if the victims are on the opposite side of the world. In addition, after the communication revolution, people today are exposed to so many differing cultures through the mass media so they can understand more easily about the position or feeling of others and then show more respect. Therefore, how can we say we are less friendly than our ancestors?

Admittedly, we are always too busy to say Hi to our neighbors today or to share our feelings with friends. However, it has nothing to do with our friendliness, which is a psychological term rather than a behavioral one.

To sum up, I think it is gratuitous to draw such a conclusion that people today are less friendly than people in the past.


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怎么就过不了400.。。

lupiscesUID: 2231942

Do you agree or disagree: people should live in the city or country all life instead of moving to another place.

I think few people will agree that they should live in a certain place all life. Instead, people will say that they have the right to stay or move at their will. There is no legal binding about this issue. It all depends on the choice we make. As far as I am concerned, moving to a new place will benefit us in many ways.

Leaving the hometown may be a big challenge for most of us when we are just the age of finishing high school study. In your hometown, there are so many things you have feelings or connections to them, no matter like or hate, your best friends who have been with you for many years and your families who have taken care of you for tens of years. However, none of them will company you for your entire life. And when leaving for a new place means lots of chances and opportunities, you should go for a better life. Taking myself for example, I have got a good job with a decent pay in a city which there’s very few things familiar to me. However, if I chose to stay in my birthplace, I may just take a comfortable position with little possibility of promotion.

Maybe chances to succeed are not your goal but settling in a new place may still excite you. It is known that people are fond of better things and want to enjoy a more pleasant life so most of us would like to stay in a more comfortable environment where the air is fresher, trees greener and life easier, especially for the senior. Numerous researches tell us that a more pleasant surrounding will not only benefit the health of our body but also enhance our emotion in a positive way. To young adults, moving to a totally strange place also means a new start of their life. They can forget the past misfortunes and face the future with a light heart. For me, I make more friends in a new city while I think I will just play with old friends if I stay.

Admittedly, some people regard staying at their hometown as a better choice for reasons I mentioned above. It’s not a big deal because they have the freedom to choose their style of living. Nonetheless, I still encourage people to have a change, which will make your life less plain and more interesting.

To sum up, now that no restriction requires residing in one place all life, there is no need to confine the territory for people. We are all entitled to change and changing a living place may be a good way to start.

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发现不用模板写的字数多一些。。。

LRXSSUID: 2695903

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Admittedly, some people regard staying at their hometown as a better choice for reasons I mentioned above. It’s not a big deal because they have the freedom to choose their style of living. Nonetheless, I still encourage people to have a change, which will make your life less plain and more interesting.

To sum up, now that no restriction requires residing in one place all life, there is no need to confine the territory for people. We are all entitled to change and changing a living place may be a good way to start.  I$ x" [, h) U3

lupiscesUID: 2231942

The parents do not understand their children as well today as parents understand their children 50 years ago.

Nowadays, many children are complaining that their parents can not understand them, not only their ways of speaking but also their feelings. In the mean time, parents express their opinions that they do not even understand what their children are doing. Obviously, the gap between parents and children today are much wider than the gap 50 years ago. I have several reasons to explain the phenomenon.

In the modern society, parents are under great pressure from work. It is known that the competition today is much fiercer than 50 years ago so people have to make every effort to maintain their job or pursue improvement in order to enhance the living standard. As a result, parents can spare very little time to be with their children, which was common in the past when family members were always having some fun together. On the other side, the children today are also facing competitions which are much harsher than children were before. We have to study till mid-night to finish tons of homework and other assignments because most of us are eager to enroll in a famous college or get an offer from fortune 500 companies after graduation. Under so many pressures, how can we spend much time communicating with our parents?

Furthermore, the quality of life is increasing just as the pace of life is. Most of children today can enjoy vast choices of entertainment, which means that they will stay with their latest toys or equipments rather than their parents even when they are free. For instance, through internet, we can make friends all over the world, study more different culture, or just play various on-line games, all of which seems more interesting than chatting with parents. Exposure to all these new technologies make modern children pre-mature compared to children 50 year ago. However, most parents fail to see this characteristic change. Thus, more children choose to keep secrets instead of sharing with their “inconsiderate” parents.

Admittedly, there must be some parents who understand their children well. However, when we look around our friends and classmate, thoughtful parents are rare in our perspective.

Taking all considerations I made above, I am more confident to say that parents today do not understand us as well as parents 50 years ago.

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fish1044UID: 2190500

    Nowadays, many children are complaining that their parents can not understand them, not only their ways of speaking but also their feelings. In the mean time, parents express their opinions that they do not even understand what their children are doing. Obviously, the gap between parents and children today are much wider than the gap 50 years ago. I have several reasons to explain the phenomenon.（开头很精彩，简单明了，直奔主题）4 w: _, o# C, Q9 ?
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    In the modern society, parents are under great pressure from work. It is known that the competition today is much fiercer than 50 years ago so people have to make every effort to maintain their job or pursue improvement in order to enhance the living standard. As a result, parents can spare very little time to be with their children, which（这个which应该只能指代children吧） was common in the past when family members were always having some（这里some不需要） fun together. On the other side, the children today are also facing competitions which are much harsher（这个词用的好） than children were （facing，harsher是用来形容competition的）before. We have to study till mid-night to finish tons of homework and other assignments because most of us are eager to enroll in a famous college or get an offer from fortune 500 companies after graduation. Under so many pressures, how can we spend much time communicating with our parents?
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    Furthermore, the quality of life is increasing just as the pace of life is. Most of children today can enjoy vast choices of entertainment, which means that they will stay with their latest toys or equipments rather than their parents even when they are free（多选择不代表他们一定经常跟自己玩具一起）. For instance, through internet, we can make friends all over the world, study more different culture, or just play various on-line games, all of which seems more interesting than chatting with parents. Exposure to all these new technologies make modern children pre-mature compared to children 50 year ago. However, most parents fail to see this characteristic change. Thus, more children choose to keep secrets instead of sharing with their “inconsiderate” parents.2 s8 h& \; X6 b: j, f  B


Admittedly, there must be some parents who understand their children well. However, when we look around our friends and classmate, thoughtful parents are rare in our perspective.（这一段单出来，很奇怪啊） : ~% ^. C2 i5 j& |- ~


Taking all considerations I made above, I am more confident to say that parents today do not understand us as well as parents 50 years ago.

文章写的很不错。观点鲜明，表达清晰，结构紧凑，向你学习了。

spyUID: 2295035

Nowadays, many children are complaining that their parents can not understand them, not only their ways of speaking but also their feelings. In the mean time, parents express their opinions that they do not even understand what their children are doing. Obviously, the gap between parents and children today are much wider than the gap 50 years ago. I have several reasons to explain the phenomenon.

In the modern society, parents are under great pressure from work. It is known that the competition today is much fiercer than 50 years ago so people have to make every effort to maintain their job（s） or pursue improvement in order to enhance the living standard. As a result, parents can spare very little time to be with their children, which was common in the past when family members were always having some(some多余) fun together. On the other side, the children today are also facing competitions which are much harsher than children were before（比较对象不一致）. We have to study till mid-night to finish tons of homework and other assignments because most of us are eager to enroll in a famous college or get an offer from fortune 500 companies after graduation. Under so many pressures, how can we spend much time communicating with our parents?

Furthermore, the quality of life is increasing just as the pace of life is. Most of children today can enjoy vast choices of entertainment, which means that they will stay with their latest toys or equipments rather than their parents even when they are free. For instance, through internet, we can make friends all over the world, study more different culture, or just play various on-line games, all of which seems more interesting than chatting with parents. Exposure to all these new technologies make modern children pre-mature compared to children 50 year ago. However, most parents fail to see this characteristic change. Thus, more children choose to keep secrets instead of sharing with their “inconsiderate” parents.

Admittedly, there must be some parents who understand their children well. However, when we look around our friends and classmate, thoughtful parents are rare in our perspective.

Taking all considerations I made above, I am more confident to say that parents today do not understand us as well as parents 50 years ago.

写的相当好，逻辑清晰，语言简洁生动，两个论点都围绕主题，我要学习学习