进军美利坚作文 by晗

karen_0315UID: 2590040

1027作文作业
While some people assert that the next 20 years, students will not use printed books any more, I still hold my opinion that text books cannot be replaced by digital techniques, such as computers and EBooks.  
First of all, the assertion above is too absolute that overlooks the unbalanced economics of the whole world. Admittedly, in many countries and regions new technologies have been generally used in education. For instance, multimedia techniques are used to illustrate the abstract biology definition, and video documents usually help students understand the process of history. Although the advantages of none-printed books are countless, we cannot be blind to the fact that the development of economic in the whole world is not balance. That means when developed countries' children can enjoy their new approach of study, on the other hand, many poor places' children don't have access to it. Meanwhile, the gap between developed regions and lagged regions is growing. Twenty years seems to be a long time for individuals, however, put it into the whole society, it is just like tiny dust in the cosmos, so small and negligible. Twenty years cannot change the condition of the global tremendously. Therefore, the poor regions cannot afford expensive new education techniques still hardly can pay for them that time. Thus, printed books as the cheap and efficient way of education will still place the domain role, and the prediction of the assertion is invalid.
Secondly, printed books themselves outweigh new means of study such as computer and internet based study, so it is impossible for text books to disappear in such short two decades. The advantages of text books are numerous and the chief one could be the authority. Text books are usually edited by education professionals for hundreds of times who cautiously pick up essence in academic fields. On the contrary, new technology methods are not as authority as printed books. EBooks and internet-based texts are always edited by individuals, although have sparkled ideas, still cannot compete with printed books. Hence, it is ridiculous to say printed books will be disappeared in latest twenty years because they are still the most powerful source of education.

To sum up, I cannot agree with the claim like printed book will diminish in few decades and the reasons above clearly approve my notion. No matter present or years ago, the fundamental role of printed books in education won't be replaced.

melody106UID: 2559573

While some people assert that the next 20 years, students will not use printed books any more, I still hold my opinion that text books cannot be replaced by digital techniques, such as computers and EBooks.  

First of all, the assertion above is too absolute that （少了从句主语it）overlooks the unbalanced economics（这个词是经济学的意思哦，可以用development保险些） of the whole world. Admittedly, in many countries and regions new technologies have been generally used in education. For instance, multimedia techniques are used to illustrate the abstract biology definition, and video documents usually help students understand the process of history. Although the advantages of none-printed books are countless, we cannot be blind to the fact that the development of economic（economy） in the whole world is not balance（换词unequal）. That means when developed countries' children can enjoy their new approach of study, on the other hand前面用when状语从句，on the other hand 是个连接词，要跟两个完整句子, many poor places' children don't have access to it. Meanwhile, the gap between developed regions and lagged regions is growing. Twenty years seems to be a long time for individuals, however, put it into the whole society, it is just like tiny dust in the cosmos, so small and negligible. Twenty years cannot change the condition of the global tremendously. Therefore, the poor regions （which）cannot afford expensive new education techniques still hardly can pay for them that time. Thus, printed books as the cheap and efficient way of education will still place（play！） the domain（domain是个名词，应用dominant） role, and the prediction of the assertion is invalid（这个词用得不好，并非无效，而是实现的可能性不大）. Secondly, printed books themselves outweigh new means of study such as computer and internet based study, so it is impossible for text books to disappear in such short two decades. The advantages of text books are numerous and the chief one could be the authority. Text books are usually edited by education professionals for hundreds of times who这半句另起一句比较好，并非句子越长越好的。 cautiously pick up essence in academic fields. On the contrary, new technology methods are not as authority as printed books. EBooks and internet-based texts are always edited by individuals, although没主语了又 ，而且这句也另起吧have sparkled ideas, still cannot compete with printed books. Hence, it is ridiculous to say printed books will be disappeared in latest过去的二十年？ twenty years because they are still the most powerful source of education.
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To sum up, I cannot agree with the claim like printed book will diminish in few decades and the reasons above clearly approve my notion. No matter present or years ago（later）, the fundamental role of printed books in education won't be replaced.
结构不错，第二点开头观点句感觉不鲜明，使用了不少高级词汇，但是同时也有不少语法问题，多些多读慢慢就好了，加油啊！

soarer0474UID: 2665789

While some people assert that the next 20 years,
students will not use printed books any more, （句号）I still hold my opinion that text books cannot be replaced by digital techniques, such as computers and EBooks.  
2 J& m( J! G0 V7 L" Q. mFirst of all, the assertion above is too absolute that overlooks the unbalanced economics of the whole world. Admittedly, in many countries and regions new technologies have been generally used in education. For instance, multimedia techniques are used to illustrate the abstract biology definition, and video documents usually help students understand the process of history. (这一句写的不错)Although the advantages of none-printed books are countless, we cannot be blind to the fact that the development of economic in the whole world is not balance（balanced）. That means when developed countries' children can enjoy their new approach of study, on the other hand, many poor places' children don't have access to it. Meanwhile, the gap between developed regions and lagged regions is growing. Twenty years seems to be a long time for individuals, however, put it into the whole society(是不是有主语垂悬的问题？), it is just like tiny dust in the cosmos, so small and negligible. Twenty years cannot change the condition of the global tremendously. Therefore, the poor regions cannot afford expensive new education techniques still hardly can pay for them(?) that time. Thus, printed books as the cheap and efficient way of education will still place(play) the domain（dominating?） role, and the prediction of the assertion(prediction assertion是不是其实是一个意思) is invalid. 9 q  ?) \8 z2 q4 [$ h
Secondly, printed books themselves outweigh new means of study such as computer and internet based study, so it is impossible for text books to disappear in such short two decades. The advantages of text books are numerous and the chief one could be the authority. Text books are usually edited by education professionals for hundreds of times who cautiously pick up essence in academic fields. On the contrary, new technology methods are not as authority as printed books. EBooks and internet-based texts are always edited by individuals, although have sparkled ideas, still cannot compete with printed books. Hence, it is ridiculous to say printed books will be disappeared in latest twenty years because they are still the most powerful source of education.
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To sum up, I cannot agree with the claim like printed book will diminish in few decades and the reasons above clearly approve my notion. No matter present or years ago(later), the fundamental role of printed books in education won't be replaced.

总体感觉用词挺好的，结构也不错，而且开门见山，直入主题，挺好的。
只是有些语法上的小毛病，注意一下应该就好了。

zhengping001UID: 2689322

1026作文
10.26 In university students should take the history courses no matter what field they study.

I completely agree with the claim above that history should be widely educated in university（universities） no matter what majors students are. It is because history education plays a significant role in following parts. （开头很简洁，观点很明确）

First of all, history study is an irreplaceable approach of socialization, that is, students gain patriotism from history documents. What is the goal of study, or going to university? The common reasons are getting knowledge, getting competitiveness in fierce job market and having more salary. Whatever your reason is, the undoubted ultimate goal is to construct our nation, making it stronger and more capable. However, no matter how excellent a student is, without a patriotic heart, he/she will make no contribution even does harm to his/her country. Thus, the primary quality of talents is to love their own country. History education, in this respect, makes essential effects. By informing the great works of their ancestors and glorious defenses, students can usually set up honors of their ancestors and own countries. Accordingly, this kind of honor will inspire them to make contributions to their beloved country mother and be proud of their activities for building the better society. History study can lead students to patriotism, which is the important part of socialization. In this way, history education helps socialization.（此段出现很多精彩的句子、句式，可见作者的功底不一般）

Secondly, history study can teach us the ability of foreknowledge. It is often too late to cope with things when it has really happened. Then people always look forward the capacity of anticipation and what people usually blind to is（be） history study can help us anticipation. The trends of things are usually regular, but often with a long period, longer than individual's (individual) life. As a result, it is hard for people to observe and summarize the principles of development. On the other hand, history documents always do a big favor. Studying the relation between causes and effects, scientists can summarize the general principles of specific things. Therefore, the similar occurrences could be foreseen their results and adverse ones could be stifled. For individuals, they can also get benefits from history study. For instance, biographies are always top books in sales for people indeed learn (learning) good qualities from great people. In China, almost everyone has read the biography of Chairman Mao, from the book people not only know modern histories but also emulate good characteristics of him, such as bravery, diligence and resistance. The ability of foreknowledge is necessary of success in future career, and history can inform us such ability.（作者换词能力很强啊，例子也很经典）

Additionally, under the pressure of professional study, history courses could give students a chance to relax due to history just like story telling. It is a really wonderful thing to learn knowledge when hearing interesting stories. So why don't college students take their history classes with countless benefits? In my point of view, history courses should be required in universities.
总评：错误很少，此文可当例文使用，学习了。

karen_0315UID: 2590040

1028作文作业
The only effective way to encourage energy conservation is y increasing prices of gasoline and electricity.

The assertion above is so absolute that I cannot agree with it, due to it overemphasizes the effects of prices of gasoline and electricity, meanwhile it overlooks other effective ways to encourage energy conservation.

The influence of price is not as effective as mentioned above. Admittedly, economic pressure will limit their consumption of gasoline and electricity. However, deep down, in consumers' minds, the value of energy cost doesn't change at all. In a short time, people have to force the finance pressure to restrain their energy using; on the other hand, in long term, once government loosens their economic principle, people will bound to waste energy. Also, price cannot repress all the people, especially the rich who spend more energy and have money to afford it. Additionally, the claim limits "energy" in the extent of gasoline and electricity, which largely ignored other kinds of essential energy, such as water and fuel. Thus, increasing prices of gasoline is not as effective as what describes above.

One useful way to encourage energy conservation, in my point of view, is education. By affect the notions of the whole society, education changes the habits of people thoroughly and effectively. There are several ways to educate public the new way of living: firstly, on campus, teachers can inform students the benefits of conservation and the harm of waste; secondly, in society, mass medium should bear the responsibility of spread the ideas to the whole society, articles to save energy should be published and programs about conservation should be made. There is no doubt that education approaches above will eventually replace people's traditional ideas into the correct new ones. Instead of suppressing people with financial policy, which easily spell complains, teaching people the new style of life, on the other hand, help form conservation habits in a mild and acceptable way. This kind of habit will pass down from generation to generation which will change the whole world effectively.

What's more, policies and laws are also vital to encourage energy conservation. By legislating related policies and laws, people will undoubtedly aware of their behaviors purposely when using energy which directly contributes to the conservation.

To sum up, I oppose the opinion that increasing prices of gasoline and electricity is the only way to encourage energy conservation. Because prices cannot fundamentally alter the situation and there are more effective methods like education and legislations.

karen_0315UID: 2590040

10.29 Modern society has become more complex, so it is essential for the young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

Admittedly, technology has changed our life tremendously in every aspect. Modern society is becoming more and more complex due to the high speed development. Under this situation, some people raise a opinion that it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize. Well, personally, I totally agree with such notion because both in daily lives and study lives, it is important for youth to possess such capacity.

There is no denying that technology has made our life complicated and without cautious design it is hard for people to gain an effective life. Take our daily life as an example. The moment we get up means the beginning of the whole busy day. Students have to take classes at daytime and prepare their plenty amount of homework when they come back home. However, with the development of science, people know much more than our ancestors; therefore, more knowledge we have to pick up than before, mathematics, arts, history, chemistry and so on. At the same time, our textbooks are thicker and thicker. When they feel tired, it is indispensible to squeeze some time to relax, as the old saying "all work and no play make Jack a dull boy." How can people manage such amount of things effectively, to gain a high mark and have a good play? All young people need is the ability of plan and organize, to manage their study life and relax time effectively. It is a good idea to make schedules, such as how long to do homework and what time is game time. Although the society is becoming more and more complex, with the help of plan and organization, life still will be valuable.

What's more, such ability like plan and organization will benefit youth future success. A growing number of people have realized the importance of children's early education to their future life. It has been emphasized by experts that the habits children have formed will affect all their life. It is widely accepted that delicate plan directly contribute to the success of people, which also should be accentuated by parents. It's not hard to imagine a child who has the habit of making schedules will also carefully plan when he is working. Consequently, he will easily have access to success, due to he has a correct arrangement.

In my point of view, careful plan and organization ability should be cultivated for children, which will help them deal with their busy affairs and also contribute to their future success.

taoyukun-daidaiUID: 2657922

The only effective way to encourage energy conservation is y increasing prices of gasoline and electricity.
The assertion above is so absolute that I cannot agree with it有点中文的感觉, due to it overemphasizes the effects of prices of gasoline and electricity, meanwhile it overlooks other effective ways to encourage energy conservation.2 P/ c$ f% }; g5 l5 D" `

The influence of price is not as effective as mentioned above. Admittedly, economic pressure will limit their consumption of gasoline and electricity. However, deep down, in consumers' minds, the value of energy cost doesn't change at all. In a short time, people have to force the finance pressure to restrain their energy using; on the other hand, in long term, once government loosens their economic principle, people will bound to waste energy. 为何这样假设？有点不理解和文章的逻辑Also, price cannot repress all the people, especially the rich who spend more energy and have money to afford it这个观点好. Additionally, the claim limits "energy" in the extent of gasoline and electricity, which largely ignored other kinds of essential energy, such as water and fuel. Thus, increasing prices of gasoline is not as effective as what describes above.
One useful way to encourage energy conservation, in my point of view, is education. By affect the notions of the whole society, education changes the habits of people thoroughly and effectively. There are several ways to educate public the new way of living: firstly, on campus, teachers can inform students the benefits of conservation and the harm of waste; secondly, in society, mass medium should bear the responsibility of spread the ideas to the whole society, articles to save energy should be published and programs about conservation should be made. There is no doubt that education approaches above will eventually replace people's traditional ideas into the correct new ones. Instead of suppressing people with financial policy, which easily spell complains, teaching people the new style of life, on the other hand, help form conservation habits in a mild and acceptable way. This kind of habit will pass down from generation to generation which will change the whole world effectively感觉这个education说的有点空，没什么细节的例子支撑. 8 m8 U, q" e, P/ ?0 o: ]$ |& G

What's more, policies and laws are also vital to （sth）encourage energy conservation. By legislating related policies and laws, people will undoubtedly aware of their behaviors purposely when using energy which directly contributes to the conservation.

To sum up, I oppose the opinion that increasing prices of gasoline and electricity is the only way to encourage energy conservation. Because prices cannot fundamentally alter the situation and there are more effective methods like education and legislations.

总体来看写的还行，但是我实在看不出来这三个大观点是什么逻辑顺序，而且需要适当的例子支撑~

karen_0315UID: 2590040

11.02作文
With the development of society, there are more and mroe people realizing the importance of parents in educating their children. Accordingly, there comes an assertion that parents are best teachers to their children. Admittedly, parents play a vital part in their children's education life. Yet it is still unfair to say all the parents are best teachers due to many of them don't have qualified knowledge and some of them don't have high moral standard.
Many parents, especially in developing countries, had little education because they were too poor to afford tuition fee and most of them didn't have the conscious about how important knowledge is. For example, in China, particular in rural areas, where people live on farming, a few number of people learnt knowledge at school and countless of them are illiterates. Thus, these parents cannot teach their children necessary science and arts. What's worse, in their concept, education even cannot compare with skilled farming, which result in people there neglect study from generation to generation. This example illustrates that parents who lack abundant knowledge cannot be good teachers and those who have inferior thoughts even do harm to their children's study.  
In addition, not all parents own moral standards. In modern society, a growing number of people believe that despite of knowledge, real education also should include moral study. Indeed,  without a high level of moral, a genius could contribute little to our society. However, some adults don't possess proper behaviors and civilized verbal. These adults, most of them have become parents, are not qualified to be a teacher, due to good teachers are usually moral examples to their students. Thus, without high moral standards, parents cannot be called good teachers.
To sum up, it is unfair to conclusion all parents are best teachers. The assertion above have overlooked the facts that not all parents possess rich knowledge and proper behaviors to be exemplar to their children.

canlanxingkongUID: 2623477

With the development of society, there are more and mroe (more)people realizing the importance of parents in educating their children. Accordingly, there comes an assertion that parents are best teachers to their children. Admittedly, parents play a vital part in their children's education life. Yet it is still unfair to say all the parents are best teachers due to many of them don't have qualified knowledge and some of them don't have high moral standard. (这个句子and前后可以合为一个句子)
Many parents, especially in developing countries, had little education (experience )because they were too poor to afford tuition fee and most of them didn't have the conscious about how important knowledge is. For example, in China, particular in rural areas, where people live on farming, a few number of people learnt knowledge at school and countless of them are illiterates. Thus, these parents cannot teach their children necessary science and arts (knowledge). What's worse, in their concept, education even cannot compare with skilled farming, which result in people there neglect study from generation to generation. This example illustrates that parents who lack abundant knowledge cannot be good teachers and those who have inferior thoughts even do harm to their children's study(这句的主语换一下，改为想法对儿童有害比较好).  , 例子不错，很具体
In addition, not all parents own moral standards. In modern society, a growing number of people believe that despite of knowledge, real education also should include moral study. Indeed,  without a high level of moral, a genius could contribute little to our society. However, some adults don't possess proper behaviors and civilized verbal. These adults, most of them have become parents,（ who） are not qualified to be a（去掉） teachers, due to good teachers are usually moral examples to their students. Thus, without high moral standards, parents cannot be called good teachers.
To sum up, it is unfair to conclusion all parents are best teachers. The assertion above have overlooked the facts that not all parents possess rich knowledge and proper behaviors to be exemplar to their children.
整体感觉陈述和例子配合比较好，陈述的也很到位，我们努力在句子表达上在努力，继续加油

brass20yUID: 2454121

With the development of society, there are more and mroe people realizing the importance of parents in educating their children. Accordingly, there comes an assertion that parents are best teachers to their children. Admittedly, parents play a vital part in their children's education life(in their children’s education). Yet it is still unfair(unfair不好，我觉得precise, correct都准确些，再斟酌下) to say all the parents are best teachers due to(due to不大接从句的吧,不想用because应该用for/as) many of them don't have qualified knowledge(qualified不能修饰knowledge吧，改成many of them aren’t qualified to teach others…) and some of them don't have high moral standard.

Many parents, especially in developing countries, had little education(我觉得应该用was well educated或took/experienced little education) because they were too poor to afford tuition fee and most of them didn't have the conscious(adj) about how important knowledge is. For example, in China, particular(particularly?) in rural areas, where people live on farming, a few(few?) number of people learnt knowledge at school and countless of(请确认countless of可用于可数) them are illiterates. Thus, these parents cannot teach their children necessary(是不是改成basic/fundamental更好？) science(scientific knowledge?) and arts. What's worse, in their concept(没这说法吧？不如改成for them或in their view), education even cannot compare with skilled farming(这句我觉得chiglish了，改成education is even far less important than skilled farming), which result(s) in people there neglect(ing?) study from generation to generation(这句我觉得换成cause+从句更好吧). This example illustrates that parents who lack abundant knowledge cannot be good teachers and those who have inferior thoughts(为啥不改成whose inferior thoughts,更简洁) even do harm to their children's study.

In addition, not all parents own(我觉得直接说have,没见过own这样用的) moral standards. In modern society, a growing number of people believe that despite of knowledge(尽管不准确吧，用besides?), real education also should include moral study. Indeed, without a high level of moral, a genius could contribute little to our society. However, some adults don't possess proper behaviors(我觉得这句比较怪，我可能会写成some adults behaves in improper/wrong ways) and civilized verbal(啥意思？). These adults, most of them have become parents(不能这么用同位语吧，改成most of whom have become parents), are not qualified to be a teacher, due to good teachers are usually moral examples(role model地道一些) to their students. Thus, without high moral standards, parents cannot be called(consider/regard as?) good teachers. (总体觉得这段牵强，moral和knowledge之间没必然联系啊！比如without a high level of moral, a genius could contribute little to our society，历史上有很多case是科学家的私生活糜烂，很难说high level moral leads to high contribution

To sum up, it is unfair to conclusion(reach a conclusion) all parents are best teachers. The assertion above have(has) overlooked the facts that not all parents possess rich knowledge and proper behaviors to be exemplar to their children(这句后半有点怪，我也不大会改).

karen_0315UID: 2590040

40# brass20y 点评的很好，基本都点对了，第二段讲的是知识之外的道德教育，不是道德和知识的关系，是教育和道德的关系。
谢谢啦~

karen_0315UID: 2590040

今天有写综合写作的题目，但是没有存，为了证明我真的写了这个事实，在这里占个楼先，虽然没有实质的内容。

karen_0315UID: 2590040

1005作文

11.5 Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to develop your essay.

There are two methods of study: one is self-learning and the other is taught by teachers. There is always a controversy on which method of learning is more effective. While people are arguing about benefits of each approach, I hold the opinion that it depends on the ability of individuals, that is, due to different capacities, everyone has its specific effective way to learn. And for me, I believe that my best way to learn is study with the proper guidance from good teachers. Because my knowledge and ability is limited and some bad habits also force me to do so.

Firstly, good teachers can give us useful advice to lead our study and answer our questions of our unknown area. Some students prefer to study all by themselves which they think is much effective. Only if they know the correct way to study and the right way to solve problem can this assumption happen. However, I am not such student who knows well on how to make study effective and make knowledge more valuable. Under such condition, a teacher can help me learn better. For example, when I was in high school, until my high school teacher Mr. Lu taught me some tips about learning English I used to know nothing about how to improve my listening and speaking skills. With his help, I learnt useful methods and then put into practice. As a result, I finally got a big progress at the end of that semester. Without his advice, there would not have my progress.

Additionally, it is also impossible to learn something new without necessary backgrounds, which can be offered by teachers. If we learn a new subject, like chemistry, it is easy to get puzzled because of lack of required knowledge. Yet, our teachers have abundant professional knowledge can always answer our questions and explain abstract concepts in an easy way. Admittedly, it is possible for people to study themselves only under the condition they know all about primary knowledge of that area. But without such wealthy knowledge, I still need the guidance of teachers.

What's more, teachers can help us overcome some bad habits. There is no doubt that immature youths have negative characteristics, such as lazy and irresponsible which is required by self-study. However, without supervisors, few would succeed in study. In this situation, teachers as supervisors are needed. They use the methods, such as homework and asking questions on class, forcing us to learn new things and review old ones and therefore help us remember useful knowledge. Thus, teachers can lead us study effectively.

To sum up, I think study under the guidance of teachers is better for me. Since teachers can teach me valuable methods and answer all my questions, I can learn much effectively than by self-study.

karen_0315UID: 2590040

1105综合写作
In the lecture, the professor refutes the statement that "swamp gas" is more likely the cause of the fireball explosion rather than an asteroid as claimed at the reading passage. The professor uses the three pieces of evidence to support her opinion.

Firstly, lack of evidence to show asteroid exploded above Tunguska is not necessary to rebut such possibility. In fact, it happened nineteen years ago before scientists went to research. It is largely possible that any trace has been destroyed during the long time by the environment. On the contrary, scientists went to the place to find evidence in Canada explosion as soon as possible. So it is unfair to say asteroid explosion never happened.

Secondly, it may not have a crater although explosion occurred. It is very possible that asteroid has hit rocks in a low atmosphere and get crashed before reaching earth, If so, it could not have huge crater in Tunguska. Hence, the conclusion of the passage is unwarranted.

Lately, it is asteroid rather than swamp gas that caused the absenter of destruction which is found in the research. And if it is swamp gas collapsing contributed to the fireball, it would not concentrate on spot.

To sum up, the delayed research of traces, the possibility that asteroid exploded in a near earth atmosphere and the evidence of absenter of destruction indicate the conclusion of reading passage is invalid.

shirley072UID: 2712200

There are two methods of study: oneis self-learning and the other is taught by teachers. There is always acontroversy on which method of learning is more effective. While people arearguing about benefits of each approach, I hold the opinion that it depends onthe ability of individuals, that is, due to different capacities, everyone hasits specific effective way to learn. And for me, I believe that my best way tolearn is study with the proper guidance from good teachers. Because myknowledge and ability is limited and some bad habits also force me to do so(这句话我读得不是很明白：因为我的知识和能力比较局限并且一些坏习惯迫使我去？). : H: w+ X0z:

Firstly, good teachers can give ususeful advice to lead (换个词吧，instruct orguide) our study and answer our questionsof our unknown area(觉得可以去掉，question就是我们不知道的东东么). Some students prefer to study all by themselves which theythink is much effective. Only if they know the correct way to study and theright way to solve problem can this assumption happen. However, I am not suchstudent who knows well on how to make study effective and make knowledgemore valuable
(使知识更有价值？要不换一下句式直接说 expand knowledge). Under suchcondition, a teacher can help me learn better. For example, when I was in highschool, until my high school teacher Mr. Lu taught me some tips about learningEnglish I used to know nothing about how to improve my listening and speakingskills. With his help, I learnt useful methods and then put into practice. As aresult, I finally got a big progress at the end of that semester. Withouthis advice, there would not have my progress. (我是不是可以理解为倒装强调，但有时候读起来觉得有点别扭，比如说这句，当然这个是个人意见)

Additionally, it is also impossibleto learn something new without necessary backgrounds (这个比较突兀，因为句子里没有给出“我们”之类的，那是指的什么没有背景？),
which can be offered by teachers. If we learn a new subject,like chemistry, it is easy to get puzzled because of lack of requiredknowledge. Yet, our teachers have abundant professional knowledge canalways answer our questions and explain abstract concepts in an easy way (句子结构不对，直接说our teachers withabundant…can…). Admittedly, it is possible forpeople to study themselves (?) only under the condition they know all about primary knowledgeof that area. But without such wealthy knowledge, I still need the guidance ofteachers.

What's more, teachers can help us overcome(drop) somebad habits. There is no doubt that immature youths have negativecharacteristics, such as lazy and irresponsible which is required byself-study. However, without supervisors, few would succeed in study. In thissituation, teachers as supervisors are needed. They use the methods, such ashomework and asking questions on class, forcing us to learn new things andreview old ones and therefore help us remember useful knowledge. Thus, teacherscan lead us study effectively.

To sum up, I think study under theguidance of teachers is better for me. Since teachers can teach me valuablemethods and answer all my questions, I can learn much effectively than byself-study.

论证还不错，但是句子的结构以及应用还要加强哦：）