进军美利坚作文组10月8日-狂狂

zhengping001UID: 2689322

scutgong
The parents do notunderstand their children as well today as parents understood their children 50years ago?
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The parents play an important role in the offspring's whole life. It isundeniable that the parents are the earlist teachers of their children.Considering the importance of the education fromparents, it is necessary for the parents to understand their children well.However, the situation is not optimistic. I agree with the claim that theparents do not understand their children as well today as parents undertoodtheir children 50 years ago.
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Nowadays, the parents fail to understand their children well because they haveless time to contact with their children. Although the development of scienceand technology has made our life more convenient and we become more efficient,people are getting busier. It is true that we are able to finish our work at(within or using) 8 hours, however, we should workin more spare time even holiday to get a career advancement. To adapt to thefierce competition, everyone should prepare well, otherwise, he will lose the competition(是否想说就会被淘汰，建议换用其他的表达). The direct effect of this is thedecrease of time spending with families（跟下一句是一个意思，可以合成一句话就可，让人觉得有点充字数）.As a result, compared with the families 50 years ago, parents has less time tocommunicate with their children and can not understand the offsprings better.（此段中的句子理由很牵强，句子连接不太畅通）.9 o2 \: i+ w$ \/ g- v" u（）
段与段之间缺少连接、承接。
# R' a' ?0 O  K' R5 {Theincrease of the generation gap is also negative to the understanding betweenthe parents and children. Children are exposed in a society with developedtechnology and diversed cultures. In contrast, their parents may still keep the old thinkings（outdated idea）. The difference of thecultural background could prevent the meaningful communication from two generations.For example, the Chinese children are fond of American music, Japanese suitsand Korean food and they may despise the life styles of their parents. Thecontact between the parents and children can hardly make sense and it lead tothe lack of understanding.(举例可以再详细点)
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- N! e. B4 N2 X( @Owing to theless time to communticate and increased generation gap, it is apparently thatthe parents could not understand thier children as well today as they did before. In order to develop a harmony infamilies and the development of the children, it is necessary for the profundunderstanding between each part.
全文观点虽然明确，也没有跑题，但理由太少且没有很强的说服力，MY能力有限只能看到如上的一些错误。

scutgongUID: 2564275

10月15日的作文


In order to derive a satisfying life in the world, one should work well for the society and get decent pay. Nowadays, it is a heated debate on the varied pays in different fields. Some argue that teachers should be paid as much as doctors, lawyer and business leader which all get high payment. As far as I am concerned, I strongly agree that teachers' salaries should be increased and it will be benefial for the whole society.

It is undeniable that teachers fail to get a decent pay in most of the places. Many reasons could be accounted for this phenomenon. At first, the role of education is underrated to a certain degree in some places. The career are not seen as important as other ones, such as doctors and lawyers. Moreover, although its long-time influence to the society, the education are not able to create direct economic benefits to the society. Compared to the employees in business and industrial fileds, the teaching process couldnot improve the economic in a short time. If this unhealthy trendency continues, more problems will be produced. So, it is time for us to recognize the importance of the teachers to our society and one good way is to raise the salaries of the teachers.

It is reasonable for teachers to get high wages because of its unparelled contribution to our society. For one thing, it is the teachers that teach the the knowledge to us. Without the help of teachers, it will be difficult for us to acquire knowledge to live in the society. The statistic data says that the most developed nations have the most excellent education system, which could demonstrate the benefits of educaition. For another, we are cultivated to be good persons when we receive the education. Some may think that the parents are their educators and teachers are less important. However, not all the parents are qualified as qualified and suitable eduacators. In this respect, it is teachers that help us to acquire knowledge and behave well.

Teachers will be inspired if they get the same pays as doctors, lawyer, and business leader. At first, teachers do not have to be distracted by other things, such as worrying about the high price housing. They will have more time and energy to concentrate on the teaching. In addition, they are more likey to impart more knowledge to the students, which is meaningful to the world. If teachers get higher pays, they will be more beneficial to the society.

Considering about the teachers's contributions to the society, it is reasonable to raise the payment of teachers. In a word, I strongly agree that teachers should get same pay as doctors, lawyers, and business leaders.

doubledianUID: 2661760

In order to derive a satisfying life in the world, one should work well for the society and get decent pay. Nowadays, it （这个地方用there好点吧）is a heated debate on the varied pays in different fields. Some argue that teachers should be paid as much as doctors, lawyer and business leader which all get high payment. As far as I am concerned, I strongly agree that teachers' salaries should be increased and it will be benefial（拼错了） for the whole society.: p1 V  q6 `! f% b! ^* U

It is undeniable that teachers fail to get a decent pay in most of the places. Many reasons could be accounted for this phenomenon. At first, the role of education is underrated to a certain degree in some places. The career are（前面都是career了这里还用are？） not seen as important as other ones, such as doctors and lawyers. Moreover, although its long-time （work）influence to the society, the education are not able to create direct economic benefits to the society. Compared to the employees in business and industrial fields, the teaching process couldnot（中间加个空格） improve the economic in a short time. If this unhealthy trendency （拼写）continues, more problems will be produced. So, it is time for us to recognize the importance of the（去掉） teachers to our society and one good way is to raise the salaries of the teachers.6 _" _( C3 k6 A0 O2 S
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It is reasonable for teachers to get high wages because of its unparelled （查不到这个词。。。）contribution to our society. For one thing, it is the teachers that teach the the （去掉）knowledge to us. Without the help of teachers, it will be difficult for us to acquire knowledge to live in the society. The statistic data says that the most developed nations have the most excellent education system, which could demonstrate the benefits of educaition（拼写） For another, we are cultivated to be good persons when we receive the education. Some may think that the parents are their educators and teachers are less important. However, not all the parents are qualified as qualified and suitable eduacators.（拼写） In this respect, it is teachers that help us to acquire knowledge and behave well.
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Teachers will be inspired if they get the same pays as doctors, lawyer, and business leader. At first, teachers do not have to be distracted by other things, such as worrying about the high price housing. They will have more time and energy to concentrate on the teaching. In addition, they are more likey（拼写） to impart more knowledge to the students, which is meaningful to the world. If teachers get higher pays, they will be more beneficial to the society.+ [" K2 c& C6 ]8 X' i+ u9 I, H- g* u

Considering about the teachers's（拼写） contributions to the society, it is reasonable to raise the payment of teachers. In a word, I strongly agree that teachers should get same pay as doctors, lawyers, and business leaders.
思路很清晰，论证很到位，感觉词汇量还是可以的，只是有些小错误，继续加油吧！

scutgongUID: 2564275

10月16日

Owing to the highly development of science and technology, people have the chance to enjoy the convenient and luxurious life. Whether people will have more leisure times, people's opinions are divergent. As far as I am concerned, I hold the idea that people will be more busier and have less leisure time in the following years.

People should take more responsiblies in order to perform well in the society. At first, some people take it for granted that the advanced technology lead to the increase of the efficiency, so people will spend less time on their work. However, the argument is questionable. Companies may hire fewer employees because of the efficiency improvement, but every staff are required to take a lot of responsibilities. Moreover, compared to the life in the past, everyone should take more roles in the society. For example, expect for the main work, people should be prepared well for other things, such as paying for all kinds of taxes, communicating with a large number of friends, even have to keep good relationships with the clients. So, more responsibilities will make people busier.

People have to give up more leisure in order to lead a decent life. Many people have the experience that life is much more stressful than ever before. First of all, it costs large number of money to enjoy modern convenience and luxriousness. People are accustomed to the modern life and they have to earn more money. One way to achieve it is to work more time and get higher pay. Secondly, the competition among people are becoming increasingly fierce. Everybody hopes to get career advancement, they have to spend more time on their works. Otherwise, they may even be fired. For instance, Korea is a developped country and people in Korea could have the high-quality life, but this life is at the expense of working more hours and giving up the holidays. In this respect, people will have less leisure if they want to live well.

In the following year, people will take more responsibilities and sacrifice more leisure time to live well in the society. To conclude, life will more stressful and people will have less leisure time. This trend will continue for many years.

beangtUID: 2691375

Owing to the highly development of science and technology, people have the chance to enjoy the convenient and luxurious life. Whether people will have more leisure times, people's opinions are divergent. As far as I am concerned, I hold the idea that people will be more busier(busier) and have less leisure time in the following years.


. Y7 j$ H) L6 A" F) {People should take more responsiblies(responsibilities) in order to perform well in the society. At first, some people take it for granted that the advanced technology lead to the increase of the efficiency, so people will spend less time on their work. (这句写得好~)However, the argument is questionable. Companies may hire fewer employees because of the efficiency improvement, but every staff are(is) required to take a lot of responsibilities. Moreover, compared to the life in the past, everyone should take more roles in the society. For example, expect for the main work, people should be prepared well(well-prepared) for other things, such as paying for all kinds of taxes, communicating with a large number of friends, even have to keep good relationships with the clients. So, more responsibilities will make people busier.

% ?' t. ~( i+ G% YPeople have to give up more leisure in order to lead a decent life. Many people have the experience that life is much more stressful than ever before. First of all, it costs large number of money to enjoy modern convenience and luxriousness(luxuriousness). People are accustomed to the modern life and they have to earn more money. One way to achieve it is to work more time(这个有点错误吧，看不出来) and get higher pay. Secondly, the competition(s) among people are becoming increasingly fierce. Everybody hopes to get career advancement,(;or.) they have to spend more time on their works. Otherwise, they may even be fired. For instance, Korea is a developped(developed) country and people in Korea could have the high-quality life, but this life is at the expense of working more hours and giving up the holidays. In this respect(situation), people will have less leisure if they want to live well.


2 q; n  }" {; |' HIn the following year, people will take more responsibilities and sacrifice more leisure time to live well in the society. To conclude, life will (be)more stressful and people will have less leisure time. This trend will continue for many years.
结构很漂亮，句式也用的不错。内容上，中间两段论述的两个理由也非常棒。除了小错误外，个人觉得无可挑剔了~

scutgongUID: 2564275

10.17 To truly understand world event, we should get our news from newspaper; television cannot provide enough information.(15:36-16:06)


Mass media helps us to recognize the world better by acquiring tons of information everyday. Television, as the main medium for us to get news and entertain, has become increasingly indispenable in our lives. Some people may argues that we do not have to browse news in newspapers because televisions have already provided enough information. As far as I am concerned, I hold the opposite opinion. To truly understand world event, we should both get our news from newspaper and television.

Televisions cannot bring the complete information to us, newspapers and other medias are necessary as well. Because of the limited time to broadcast large amounts of news, people are not able to get suffficient information to know the events. Most people may have the experience that it takes only several seconds to watch a piece of news on television. Televisions cannot spare enough time to cover the news to make it clear to people. In that case, newspapers are excellent complement for this. For example, we may notice the news about Irap Crisis on television and it is impossible for us to get the background from televisions, but a newpaper could help us to understand it well. What' more, words on newspaper are much deeper. So, only televisions couldnot help us to know the events well.

There are a number of problems of acquiring news on televisions. At first, news on television may have a lot of bias. Nowadays, most of the televions programs are supported by the private companies. It is not surprise that the companies may choose some news which is advantageous to them and discard the news which is not accordence with their profits. It results in that the news on televisions are one-side and people fail to understand the event well. For example, the Korea Broadcast Stations usually provide some news about the ugliness of other countries and most of these news are fake and unilateral.  What' more, in order to seize profits in this market oriented society, advertisements are largely appeared on television. Overfull commericial advertisement may prevent people from recognizing the world. In short, televisions usually fail to tell us the truth about the events, which is contradicted with the essence of news.

Although televisions could supply large amounts of information to us, it is not enough for us to understand the world events better. To conclude, newspapers and other medias will help us to know the event completely and deeply.

shirley072UID: 2712200

Mass media helps us to recognize the world better by acquiring (providing，主语是media) tons of information everyday. Television, as the main medium for us to get news and entertain, has become increasingly indispenable in our lives. Some people may argues that we do not have to browse news in newspapers because televisions have already provided enough information. As far as I am concerned, I hold the opposite opinion. To truly understand world event, we should both get our news from newspaper and television (恩，观点是两个都重要么？可是后来的论据都是倾向newspaper的呢).9 A3 e7 P3 Y" w8 ?+ t" K7 r! e
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Televisions cannot bring the complete information to us, newspapers and other medias are necessary as well（这里感觉像是在说newspaper是一个补充，而不是强调newspaper的优势）. Because of the limited time to broadcast large amounts of news, people are not able to get suffficient information to know the events.

个人认为文章的阐述部分非常好，切题，结构完整，例子充分，句子清晰~~~~
学习啦

fanfan0502UID: 2439300

Mass media helps us to recognize the world better by acquiring tons of information everyday. Television, as the main medium for us to get news and entertain
（entertainment）, has become increasingly indispensable in our lives. Some people may argues (argue) that we do not have to browse news in newspapers because televisions have already provided enough information. As far as I am concerned, I hold the opposite opinion. To truly understand world event, we should both get our news from newspaper and television. (we should get our news from both newspaper and TV.)

Televisions cannot bring the complete information to us, (少连词，比如so) newspapers and other medias (media的复数是mediae) are necessary as well. Because of the limited time to broadcast large amounts of news, people are not able to get sufficient information to know the events. Most people may have the experience that it takes only several seconds to watch a piece of news on television. Televisions cannot spare （我很喜欢这个词，用的好，学习~~）enough time to cover the news to make it clear to people. In that case, newspapers are (我怎么记得newspaper是不可数？是不是记错了？) excellent complement for this. For example, we may notice the news about Irap Crisis on television and it is impossible for us to get the background from televisions, but a newspaper could help us to understand it well. What' more, words on newspaper are much deeper. So, only televisions couldnot （好像cannot 要连起来写，但could not 要分开写）help us to know the events well.

There are a number of problems of （problem about ? 我也不确定啊）acquiring news on televisions. At first (First), news on television may have a lot of bias. Nowadays, most of the televisions programs are supported by the private companies. It is not surprise (surprising) that the companies may choose some news which is advantageous to them and discard the news which is not accordance with their profits. It results in that the news on televisions are (news…is)one-side and people fail to understand the event well. For example, the Korea Broadcast Stations usually provide some news about the ugliness of other countries and most of these news are fake and unilateral (news 单数).  What' more, in order to seize profits in this market oriented society （这个好）, advertisements are largely appeared on television. Overfull commercial advertisement may prevent people from recognizing the world. In short, televisions usually fail to tell us the truth about the events, which is contradicted with the essence of news.

Although televisions could supply large amounts of information to us, it is not enough for us to understand the world events better. To conclude, newspapers and other medias will help us to know the event completely and deeply.


楼主的第二个论据很好啊，我都没有想到这些~~而且一些词汇也比较好~~学习~~
个人感觉，可以单独列个小让步段，把首段开头的让步单列出来，效果可能更好呢~~
一起加油！

scutgongUID: 2564275

10.19 该重视学习concepts &ideas呢，还是重视学习facts呢？


Learning plays a vital role in our whole life. People are always searching for a method to study efficiently? Which one is more important, concepts and ideas or facts, people's opinions vary. Some hold the idea that it is easy for us to study if we have learnt the concepts and ideas behind the facts; while others think that learning the facts by heart demonstrates the true learning. As far as I am concerned, I agree that both of them are indispensable for us to study well.

In some cases, memorizing the facts are necessary for us to acquire knowledge. According to the investigations by scientist, a great amount of knowledge could be attributed to our memory. Some knowledge could be only achieve by learning the facts. All of us have the experience of reciting the multiplication table. If we fail to learn it first by memorizing it completely, it is impossible for us to finish a simple calculation, not to mention to develop the mathematics into other fields. What's more, if we ignore the study of facts, we may be trapped into confusion. For instance, for the studies of science, it is necessary for us to remember the fundamental scientific laws and equations first. So, we should attach importance to the facts.

In other cases, merely by learning the facts cannot work well. Some knowledge should best be get the concepts and ideas before achieving the facts. Concepts and ideas help us to comprehend the knowledge better. Take the study of periodic table in chemistry for example, it will be more effective if we learn the relationships and difference of elements other than just learn it by heart. Furthermore, too much facts will make us bored. As to the learning of philosophy and literature, the concepts and ideas seems much more interesting and easily to be accepted. In this respect, learning the concepts and ideas is also indispensable in some studies.

Overemphasizing either concepts and ideas or facts will be opposite to the true meaning of study. Too much emphasis on concepts and ideas may make us confused or even doubtful of useful knowledge; overestimate the role of learning facts might lose the interest of study. In a word, as to which one is more important depends on different subjects. In most of the cases, both ideas and facts should be regarded together.

skysunny2008UID: 2632579

Learning plays a vital role in our whole life. People are always searching for a method to study efficiently? (为啥用问号呢，嘿嘿)Which one is more important, concepts and ideas or facts,(?) people's opinions vary (+regarding to this controversial question)。Some hold the idea that it is easy for us to study if we have learnt the concepts and ideas behind the facts; while others think that learning the facts by heart demonstrates the true learning. As far as I am concerned, I agree (+with the view)that both of them are indispensable for us to study well.

In some cases, memorizing the facts are necessary for us to acquire knowledge. According to the investigations by scientist,(用的好！) a great amount of knowledge could be attributed to（contribute to ） our memory. Some knowledge could be only achieve (achieved) by learning the facts. All of us have the experience of reciting the multiplication table.（个人觉得这个例子用在这里不太恰当，不能说明facts有助于我们记忆） If we fail to learn it first by memorizing it completely, it is impossible for us to finish a simple calculation, not to mention to develop the mathematics into other fields. What's more, if we ignore the study of facts, we may be trapped into confusion. For instance, for the studies of science, it is necessary for us to remember the fundamental scientific laws and equations first. So, we should attach importance to the facts.

In other cases, merely by learning the facts cannot work well. Some knowledge should best be get the concepts and ideas before achieving the facts. Concepts and ideas help us to comprehend the knowledge better. Take the study of periodic table in chemistry for example, it will be more effective （+to memorize） if we learn the relationships and difference of elements (没有提concepts and idea..是不是应该改成concepts?) other than(rather than 笔误吧，嘿嘿) just learn it by heart. Furthermore, too much facts will make us bored. As to the learning of philosophy and literature, the concepts and ideas seems much more interesting and easily to be accepted. In this respect, learning the concepts and ideas is also indispensable in some studies.

Overemphasizing either concepts and ideas or facts will be opposite to the true meaning of study. Too much emphasis on concepts and ideas may make us confused or even doubtful of useful knowledge; overestimate the role of learning facts might lose the interest of study. In a word, as to which one is more important depends on different subjects. In most of the cases, both ideas and facts should be regarded together.（结尾写的非常好）
本文的主要缺点在于观点和例子有点脱节了，希望作者能改正，结尾还是接的非常好的，本人非常欣赏，再接再莅哦^^

针对不起，本来修改处都用的红色，结果年过来就没颜色了。。回复页面上的颜色有点不动。。真是抱歉！

skysunny2008UID: 2632579

Learning plays a vital role in our whole life. People are always searching for a method to study efficiently? (为啥用问号呢，嘿嘿)Which one is more important, concepts and ideas or facts,(?) people's opinions vary (+regarding to this controversial question)。Some hold the idea that it is easy for us to study if we have learnt the concepts and ideas behind the facts; while others think that learning the facts by heart demonstrates the true learning. As far as I am concerned, I agree (+with the view)that both of them are indispensable for us to study well.
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In some cases, memorizing the facts are necessary for us to acquire knowledge. According to the investigations by scientist,(用的好！) a great amount of knowledge could be attributed to（contribute to ） our memory. Some knowledge could be only achieve (achieved) by learning the facts. All of us have the experience of reciting the multiplication table.（个人觉得这个例子用在这里不太恰当，不能说明facts有助于我们记忆） If we fail to learn it first by memorizing it completely, it is impossible for us to finish a simple calculation, not to mention to develop the mathematics into other fields. What's more, if we ignore the study of facts, we may be trapped into confusion. For instance, for the studies of science, it is necessary for us to remember the fundamental scientific laws and equations first. So, we should attach importance to the facts. @& K7 f  d% O7 Q: X. G1 M: K
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In other cases, merely by learning the facts cannot work well. Some knowledge should best be get the concepts and ideas before achieving the facts. Concepts and ideas help us to comprehend the knowledge better. Take the study of periodic table in chemistry for example, it will be more effective （+to memorize） if we learn the relationships and difference of elements (没有提concepts and idea..是不是应该改成concepts?) other than(rather than 笔误吧，嘿嘿) just learn it by heart. Furthermore, too much facts will make us bored. As to the learning of philosophy and literature, the concepts and ideas seems much more interesting and easily to be accepted. In this respect, learning the concepts and ideas is also indispensable in some studies.+ |- L5 v' r- u. T$ [

Overemphasizing either concepts and ideas or facts will be opposite to the true meaning of study. Too much emphasis on concepts and ideas may make us confused or even doubtful of useful knowledge; overestimate the role of learning facts might lose the interest of study. In a word, as to which one is more important depends on different subjects. In most of the cases, both ideas and facts should be regarded together.（结尾写的非常好）
本文的主要缺点在于观点和例子有点脱节了，希望作者能改正，结尾还是接的非常好的，本人非常欣赏，再接再莅哦^^

shirley072UID: 2712200

Learning plays a vital role in ourwhole life. People are always searching for a method to study efficiently?Which one is more important, concepts and ideas or facts, people's opinionsvary. Some hold the idea that it is easy for us to study if we have learnt theconcepts and ideas behind the facts; while others think that learning the factsby heart demonstrates the true learning. As far as I am concerned, I agree thatboth of them are indispensable for us to study well. (我喜欢这个开篇~~~~)

In some cases, memorizing the factsare necessary for us to acquire knowledge. According to the investigations byscientist, a great amount of knowledge could be attributed to our memory(这句话是想说什么呢？). Some knowledge could be onlyachieve (commanded) by learning the facts. All of us have the experience ofreciting the multiplication table. If we fail to learn it first bymemorizing it completely, (这句话跟紧接着的比方？没有什么逻辑性呢)it is impossible for us to finish asimple calculation, not to mention to develop the mathematics into otherfields. What's more, if we ignore the study of facts, we may be trapped intoconfusion. For instance, for the studies of science, it is necessary for us toremember the fundamental scientific laws and equations first. So, we shouldattach importance to the facts.

In other cases, merely by learningthe facts cannot work well. Some knowledge should best be get the conceptsand ideas before achieving the facts(不太明白楼主想表达的意思，是说有些东东需要在给fact之前先提出concept？还是有了concept后才能明白fact？). Concepts and ideas help us to comprehend the knowledge better.Take the study of periodic table in chemistry for example, it will be moreeffective if we learn the relationships and difference of elements other thanjust learn it by heart. Furthermore (这里似乎不存在递进关系), too much facts will make usbored. As to the learning of philosophy and literature, the concepts and ideasseems much more interesting and easily to be accepted. In this respect,learning the concepts and ideas is also indispensable in some studies.(这里稍微有点含糊，主要是这个词indispensable，应该用类似第一段的用法)

Overemphasizing either concepts andideas or facts will be opposite to the true meaning of study. Too much emphasison concepts and ideas may make us confused or even doubtful of usefulknowledge; overestimate the role of learning facts might lose the interest ofstudy. In a word, as to which one is more important depends on differentsubjects. In most of the cases, both ideas and facts should be regardedtogether. (同样喜欢结尾~~~~)

scutgongUID: 2564275

People will spend less time in cooking and preparing food in 20 years later. Do you agree or disagree? (17:20-17:50)


The fast development of science and technology bring revolutionary progress of our society. Our lives become increasingly convenient no matter in any aspects. As to the topic that whether people will spend less time in cooking and preparing food in 20 years later,  people's opinions vary. As far as I am concerned, I prefer the view that technology will help us to spend less time in cooking and preparing food and people will have chance to enjoy healthy and nutrious.

It will be more convenient for people to buy clear and neat vegetables and meats. Preparing the food for dinner used to be a nightmare for housewives in the past. They had to buy dirty vegetables that should be washed, and meats that had to be sliced before the cooking. In order to keep the food clean, they had to spend a lot of time on it. However, nowadays, preparing the food is no longer to be tedious work. We may have several choice to prepare food, such as buy it in the supermarkets, order it from telephone, or even buy it through computer without going out, those transformations are unimaginable before. The housewives are able to save more time to do other meaningful things. In short, preparing food are becoming easier. It is a trend that people will spend less time in preparing food in 20 years later.

Cooking becomes much simpler as well with the help of advanced instrument in kitchen. In the past, cooking for a meal is not only tedious but also time-consuming. To cook a meal for a family, it took about 2 hours. The stoves and other kitchenwares were not efficient and unhealthy. What' more, the pollutions produced by the cooking was also boring. However, things are much different now. We could take advantage of high-tech kitchenwares, such as induction cooker, which is efficient and clean. The new technology not only facilities us to be more efficient, it also helps us to keep nutritions from losing. It is not doubt that cooking for a nutritious food will not be a hard job.

Compred to the past, the technology have helped us to spend less time in cooking and preparing food. I am sure that people will spend less time on these things in 20 years later.

shirley072UID: 2712200

The fast development of science andtechnology bring revolutionary progress of our society. Our lives becomeincreasingly convenient no matter in any aspects. As to the topic that whetherpeople will spend less time in cooking and preparing food in 20 yearslater, people's opinions vary. As far as I am concerned, I prefer the viewthat technology will help us to spend less time in cooking and preparing foodand people will have chance to enjoy healthy and nutrious (enjoy a healthy and nutritious life).

It will be more convenient forpeople to buy clear and neat vegetables and meats. Preparing the food fordinner used to be a nightmare for housewives in the past. They had to buy dirtyvegetables that should be washed, and meats that had to be sliced before thecooking. In order to keep (keep是保持吧？make) the food (food materials) clean, they had to spend a lot of time on it. However,nowadays, preparing the food is no longer to be tedious work. We may haveseveral choice to prepare food, such as buy it in the supermarkets, order itfrom telephone, or even buy (purchase) it through computer without going out, those transformations(conversions) are unimaginable before.(areunimaginable before是说的以前的我们不能想象的，但是意思表达貌似还不太到位)The housewives are able to save more time to do other meaningfulthings. In short, preparing food are (is，或者直接用becomes) becoming easier. It is atrend that people will spend less time in preparing food in 20 years later.

(On the other hand，或者用一个什么连系的词)Cooking becomes much simpler aswell with the help of advanced instrument in kitchen. In the past, cooking fora meal is not only tedious but also time-consuming. To cook a meal for afamily, it took about 2 hours(It takes about 2hours to…). The stoves and otherkitchenwares were not efficient and unhealthy (这句话的表达有误，至少不能说kinchenware不健康，可能要换一种结构，我想了半天也没有想出来。。). What' more, the pollutionsproduced by the cooking was also boring. However, things are much differentnow. We could take advantage of high-tech kitchenwares, such as inductioncooker, which is efficient and clean. The new technology not only facilities usto be more efficient (使我们更有效率？觉得有点模糊，具体在哪方面是不是应该说出来呢), it also helps us to keep(retain) nutritions from losing. Itis not doubt that cooking for a nutritious food will not be a hard job.

Compred to the past, the technologyhave helped us to spend less time in cooking and preparing food. I am sure thatpeople will spend less time on these things in 20 years later.(结尾没有写好哦，两句有点重复的感觉)

结构清晰，我是来学习滴~~~~

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10.21 有很多钱不工作的人都不快乐，你支持否

Nowdays, many people have a dream to earn a great amount of money without working. Although they  works very hard,  they achieve unsatisfactory salary. As the increasingly fierce competition in our society, this view will be more and more prevalent, especially for some young people with high ambition but less success. However, as far as I am concerned, I agree with the point that people who do not have to work but get higher pay are not happy.

People will be unhappy if they could not share the happiness derived by labor. As an old saying goes, labor makes happiness. It means that people acquire a lot of happiness through labor. The success of a thing will cheer people up. People might sometimes complain about their boring work. However, when people could touch the success of their work, they will be gratified because their labor finally get pay. Take my scientific examation for example, I get less pay but I have to spend day and night to get achievement. I feel comfortable about my job because I have a faith that I will succeed. I think I was the happiest at the moment that I was informed that my paper was accepted by leading journal. However, if people could get enough money without working, they have no opportunity to experience the delight gained by the labor. In this respest, labor could give happeniess to people.

The rich people without working may lose a lot of things beyond the money. For most of the people, money is not the most important things in the world, some others, such as health and love, should be come first. For the rich people, they may take it for granted that they could achieve everything with the money. So, at the same time, they may lose somethings which seem more necessary to be happy. For example, some millionaires may not have to work to earn their lives, but it is hardly for them to get true love. Some girls might want to marry them in order to share the luxurious lives. So, it is reasonable that they may feel depressed although they have enough money.

To get happy is crucial for everyone to meaningful live. Without the labor, it is impossible for people to enjoy the success of great labor. What' more, money may lose a lot of happiness because of their fortune. In conclude, those who don't have to work but are rich is hardly happy.