加入小组。。恳求大家猛拍。。进步就是王道.。

zhengping001UID: 2689322

21. In general, peopleare living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specificreasons and details to develop your essay.
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Every person today can tell the obvious phenomenonthat people are living longer than ever before. The reasons behind (多余) areso numerous and I will illustrate some major ones as follows.
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Firstly, the improvement of our food is the keyfactor. Today, we can eat a variety of # C7 b) P+ X1 B  y2 N8 A
kinds of(a variety of 与kindsof 有重复) food (表种类时应用foods),such as vegetables (vegetable), fruits and so on, which can provide morenutrition to us compared with(前面有一个more,这里用than就行了) what our ancestors had in the past can do. Take the basic material water (the basic resource such as water) as an example. My grandfather told me that people at that(指代不明,有点chinglish) time usually just drunk water from the river. Although it wasclean and less polluted, the germs and poisonous bacteria in it(多余) are not beneficial to health. On the contrary,the spring water that we drink today is produced after (by) aseries of purifying procedures and all are marked with the expiration date tokeep the quality.(整段只出现了notbeneficial to health这一点与健康有关的句子，而并没有讨论与人的寿命增长之间的关系，缺少详细描述). . E4 y9 ~  U% R$ d+ X.Q9 m; c
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(another) Equally(感觉很怪，仔细确定一下) important factor as food is the decrease of the work burden(the reduction ofthe labor pressures). In the past,without trucks, cell phones and computers, people needed to do it with hand(s) and body(多余了), lotsof labor work was the most obvious（这句想说什么呢？）. But now,with the trucks, constructor(workers) only need to control the driving wheel, withthe computer, engineers just need to sit in the office designing the product(这句还要再确定一下). Inaddition, people today have (are) moreintention (attention) to keephealthy because of the decrease of labor work, gyms all around the city can tell that(and building many gymsin the cities).
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Finally, the peaceful living(多余) society and advanced civilization are alsoconducing to people's lives. Wars and revolutions(不是所有的革命都是有害的，如industrial revolution) brought lots of disasters and loss to human society, everyaspects of human life was affected(这句话要仔细再确定一下). Today, we canlive in a peaceful world without wars and fighting, everybody tries tocontribute our world which in turn makes it much suitable for us to live ourlives. # {) J&N! q6 u) |5 y" q

) X* k. q: O2 H$ e6 c; MThe reasons mentioned above are just the major ones, thereare lots of other factors work together to tell us the truth that we are havinga better life today.
总评：一个很明显的问题，作者没有围绕lifespan or people’s living longer now来写，只写了对betterlife，这是偏题了。第二是错误比较多，其实有些难句长句可以用简单句短句来写，长难句越多，出错的机率就越大。以上所评全部出自zhengping。由于水平有限，评的不好或评错的地方请告诉我，一起讨论学习。

karen_0315UID: 2590040

In the lecture, the speaker mainly asserts that prescribed fire is a（an） effective, necessary way and is beneficial to residents by listing three opposite reasons, challenging what was stated in the reading passage that prescribed burning is irrational.

To begin with, prescribed fire, according to the speaker, in some areas, can reduce logs and piled-up fallen leaves which otherwise will become more and more as the decay slows. It can also help the forest to absorb more nutrition and to receive more sunlight through the gaps of a thinner forest. （高人啊，听力这么好~我只听到了只言片语根本不知道具体意思是什么！）The chance of having a wild fire also will be decreased, which cannot be achieved by disking. This perspective differs from what is maintained in the reading passage that prescribed fire will result in air pollution and disking should be adopted.

Furthermore, the speaker goes on to point out that prescribed fire has already been conducted for a long time and proved to be safer. With the professional training and the exact location of time and place, prescribed fire acts as a much better way to benefit the ecological balance. This is the second point used by the speaker to cast（我从来不会用的动词） doubts on the writer's viewpoint that prescribed fire induce（也是我从来不会用的动词）s unpredicted dangers to human people（我真的只见过human，human being， beings， 和people，这种搭配没有见过）.

Finally, the speaker opposes the writer's point by emphasizing that prescribed fire cost less money and damage（damage前面是跟cost吗？不对哦~要不做动词接一个宾语，要不在前面再加一个合适的动词~） compared with the loss caused by the wild fire. He also points out the expense used for watering the wildfire can be ten times more than that put on prescribed fire. This contradicts what is stated in the reading that prescribed fire requires huge money including competent persons.

In sum, the points asserted by the speaker are totally different from the sides presented in the reading passage.

写的不错，很多好词，听力也好，听的很细。学习~

wzbonjourUID: 2556861

Nowadays, some people hold the opinion that young people enjoy life better than older people, but others have a negative attitude. As far as I am concerned, I strongly support this statement. My arguments for this point are listed as follows.

  First and foremost, the popular culture has had a profound impact on young people. My brother Tom is just an excellent instance. He can simply spend all his salary on purchasing something desired (such as a luxurious meal, an advanced computer, etc), rather than something required. Compare to young people, older people are, generally speaking, conservative and conventional. They may keep deliberating for long before doing something risky. So thoughtful are they that a lot of fun and frolic of life is bereaved by their prudency and caution.

  In the second place, the vitality and vigor as an invaluable asset owned by young people presents them an excellent capacity of enjoying, last week my classmates and I climbed a dwarf mountain close to our school, while I was stepping on the top of the mountain, I suddenly recalled that my grandfather was also in favor of climbing when he was young. Today, he can only sprawl on a sofa and keep peering at television. With the advent of aging, his radius of activity has been confined in about 500 meters long from our house. The aging has relentlessly shattered his dream of "enjoying life".

  Last but not least, a tremendous responsibility toward family, which is a common beleif for the society as a whole, pressured on older people makes it difficult for them to enjoy life regardless of their family. As for young people, they seldom need to think about their responsibility toward their family, so they can simply enjoy life better.

  Taking all these factors into deliberation, we can smoothly draw the conclusion that young people enjoy life better than older people.




2006 02 03 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people enjoy life better than older people. Use reasons and specific examples to explain your opinion.


我个人觉得写的还不错，字数314，这是我写的第三篇习作
我12月5日考
帮忙拍，谢谢

liuhui3713UID: 2439675

小弟今晚写的，请指点。

The lecture complete casts doubt on the points those reading passage demonstrates. According ro the lecturer, the hydrogen-based fuel-cell engine can also bring negative effect on our lives. However, it is the belief in the passage that the replacement for the automobile’s main source of power can really takes great advantages on the automobile industry.


First of all, the reading passage believes that Petroleum being used by internal-combustion is an ignited resource while the hydrogen is easily available. In contrast the speaker argues that it is not easy to obtain the hydrogen. In order to get hydrogen we need to purify the liquid water. And this technology requires high could environment which is can be done within the laboratory. It is not an easy method to purify the hydrogen. So the lecturer totally disagrees with the viewpoint made in the passage.

And then, the passage points out that using hydrogen-based fuel cells can eliminate the world’s pollution problems. While the speaker convinces that making purification of the hydrogen can also bring environmental problem which is heavier than the burning oil brings. Because during the purification of the hydrogen, we still need to combusted many resources such coal, and oil. It is contradicting what is stated in the reading material.

Finally, the point in the passage that the professor stated by saying that it is an expensive method to make a fuel-cell engine. That results from that the necessary mental are not cheap to obtain. A common plastic using in the material of fuel can not sustain the dramatic chemical reflection in it. This point refutes the point that the passage demonstrates.

So the contents in the reading passage are totally jeopardized by the speaker and the speaker has totally different ideas on the topic made in the reading.

2009年6月27日
For future career success, is relating well to other people more important than studying hard at school?

Every one in the world wants to be successful in the future career even in their childhood. There must be some significant factors among the way to success. Some people think that it is very important to get along very well with other people who can give us great help on based on that success is component of not only one’s industry but also other people’s hand. As far as I am concerned, there is no doubt that studying hard at school is more important for the future career success and my viewpoint are listed as follows.

First of all, studying hard at school gives us a better opportunity to assimilate much knowledge which could make our future work smoothly. As we know that, in this competitive world, it is necessary to master the knowledge in all kinds of areas to deal with the tough situation we encounter in the process of being successful. When something happens to us, we can gather all the brain and take consideration from all aspects which can eliminate some unnecessary mistakes. Thus, we can benefit from our previous studying hard at school.

In addition, at school studying hard make us develop a perseverance personality which is essential for us the pursue success in future career. Knowledge and technology are very difficult to the greener to acquire and master in the beginning school work. When we encounter some tough tasks, the only thing for a success individual is to try our best to figure the reason and results and persist to the end. During many experiences of doing that, we develop a personality that whatever the task is hard, we can never give it up. While we encounter the same situation in the future career, we will follow what we do before.

Admittedly, other people can really give us much help not only in the daily life but also in the future career. Some thing may be not easy to one individual. If we work together with other people, every thing seems not harder than we can imagine. Whereas the positive influence of other people take to us may be not highly superior to the hard school studying by ourselves when taking all aspects into consideration.

To sum up, from what I have discussed above, we can easily conclude that studying hard at school not only brings much knowledge but also fosters perseverance personality to us, which is essential to a successful individual. Therefore, I strongly think studying hard at school plays a more significant role than other people did in the future career success.

paddyhyUID: 202095

11-09作业-独立写作

72. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Grades (marks) encourage students to learn. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.


When it comes to the issue that whether grades can encourage students to learn or not, some people holds the view that grades, to some extent, can lead the education to be a short-cut to nothing but high scores. While others think it is beneficial for students to do better in their study jobs. As far as I am concerned, I think grades, as the demonstration of endeavor, can serve as a standard measurement to evaluate students’ academic level, and finally stimulate them to learn more and learn better..

To begin with, grades act as the demonstration of students' effort spent on study all over the schools in the world. Examination, as a way to select best students, has been conducted for a long time and it still works well, even though causes some problems. No body can deny the fact that grades show at least several aspects of students' behavior in school. It is the demonstration of their hard working. Imagining a school without exams, students would lose their passion to study and have no pressure at all. Under this circumstance, how can universities select the best students from high school? More and more unfair procedures will occur. So grades are essential for students to focus on their study job and set up a pacific goal and also important for universities to choose whom they should offer their admissions and scholarships.

Furthermore, grades can not only help students themselves to review their study work timely but also provide teachers a concrete standard to evaluate every individual student’s ability and weak point. Facing to the mistakes made in the exam, students can master the knowledge more solidly and cultivate some spiritual merits such as carefulness and calmness. A high-score student will become more confident and have more courage to get a better score. By analyzing examination reports, teachers can become more familiar with every individual student’s advantage and weak points. Better procedures and methods will be adopted to improve students’ study jobs, in this point, they will learn better.

Finally, I want to say that grades, in most circumstances, serve as a key point for employers to hire the students who just graduated from school. For lacking of specific experiences, students who just left campus only can use their GPA as a weapon to fight for a good job. The higher grade they have, the more opportunities they will have. So in order to get a good job, students will try to learn better.

From the reasons mentioned above, grades, as the proof of students' behavior in studying can promote their study motivations, although today, it also causes some problems like some schools cut the sports time and let students learning academic causes all the week.



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paddyhyUID: 202095

11-10-120（6）
The reading passage states that the reasons for cottage industry to be replaced by factory industry are as follows: the advances of technology, legal protection system and decrease of cost. But the lecture opposites these reasons also by listing three reasons.

To begin with, the advances in technology, according to the speaker, were not the major cause. Because what capitalists concern most were workers. The more workers they have the more profits they can get. What's more, steam machine at that time were still at the experimental stage， the operated machine emerged later than the factory industry. This perspective differs from what is stated in the reading passage that the advancement of technology including the steam machines accelerate the replacement.

Furthermore, the speaker goes on to point that a stronger legal protection could not definitely promote the change. Because other places in Europe that adopting the same system didn't lead to the transition. This is the second point used by the speaker to cast doubts on the writer's viewpoints that the protection system's functions lead to the change.

Finally, the speaker opposes the writer's point by emphasizing that the factory cottage actually may require more costs such as the money spent on buildings, landscape and supervisors. This contradicts what is stated in the reading that the factory cottage could save the money for distributing materials and the following organizations of high efficient team workers also save the cost.

In sum, the points asserted by the speaker are totally different from the ideas presented in the reading passage.

paddyhyUID: 202095

11-11独立写作哦
When it comes to the issue that government should focus more on natural environment than economic development, people from different background insist different views. As far as I am concerned, I tend to say our government should not only develop the economy, but also protect our natural environment. Without the prosperity of either of them, there is no society can develop very well.
To begin with, our natural environment is our big home, governments act like the parent, it is their responsibility to lead all the citizens to protect our living surroundings. Take the pollution problem as an example, government should adopt efficient procedures to prevent them from deteriorating. More funds should be distributed on the scientific research to accelerate the development of more environmental energies and products. Nobody has the power as government to control and adjust the specific situation. When it comes to some natural areas, some related policies should be conducted strictly as we should refuse some developed countries’ invest on building more chemical factories.  
Furthermore, economic development also has the same importance as the natural environment. Economic development serves as a base for other development. Without a stable economic income, more and more crime and violence would emerge, which can lead to some disasters to our natural environment and social civilization. So government should stimulate the speed of economy, especially in the global economic recession period, provide more job opportunities and always concern the basic needs of people.  
Finally, striking a balance between the natural and economic development will be beneficial to our next generations. We should leave a beautiful environment and highly developed economy for our children.  
In sum, the natural environment and economic development act as twin ideas in our society, none of them could win over each other. So our government should focus on both of them, strike a balance between them and finally accelerate the stable development of human civilization.

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