1006G prettywraith备考日记——胜利在于坚持

prettywraithUID：197049

Becaue of enjoy the movie, Sherlock Holmes, I have enough time to finish yesterday job. Therefore, I must do two topic's comments in today.
And I find I need spend more time in reciting words in future.


Comments (2010-01-22):
In this essay, there are numerous good sentences worthy of remembering. To recite the whole passage is a nice choice. Author uses simple words to illustrate the relationship between conformity and individuality clearly. And with quoting many famous people's adage, author makes his essay more powerful. For the conformity and individuality this old topic, like the freedom and restriction, they had been debated in thousands years. But author argues this topic thoroughly, and make me think deeply. Especially, he give us some useful suggestion to deal with the problem of "conformity or individuality" in real life.

However, there is still one key point, how to balance conformity with individuality, which author only mentions it with few words. In this passage, he only advises us to question others, question our own, and dare to be different. Admittedly, facing this difficult problem, this essay is too short to analyze further. Moreover, there is not one general answer to tell people how to manipulate the relationship between conformity and individuality. At times, how to balance the problem is more likely an art. Actually, everyone has their own tricks to harmonize his life in this contradiction. This passage may only bring people one well beginning. Thinking by yourself, there will be more distinct picture in your mind.

Wrong Spelling：
Balance
blance
Passage
pasage
Admittedly
Adimittedly

prettywraithUID：197049

Only finish half of task on the present day. I spend several hours in fixing the computer's problems and other trivialities. Put on steam now!
Here is one comment waiting for me.

Comments (2010-01-23):

Another essay related with finance, it is one of my favorites. About Barack Obama's new plan stirs up a fierce debate in American, while the Dow Jones Indexes lost/fell 5 percent in two days. Investors, who afraid the profit decline of banks, sell out numerous financial stocks. Perhaps, the Wall Street's leaders actively attack the stock market to express their angry for the new policies. As author's assertion, indeed, it is unfair that government bailed out banks with taxpayers' money, while those banks pay their high level managers and employees with generous bonus. But, is Mr. Obama's plan effective to reform the financial system health? Author insists building a half-way house is better way to solve the current problem. Honestly, I do not understand the half-way house clearly in the passage. But, I concede Mr. Obama's new policies would be not valid as expect, and he might need a revision.

Wrong Spelling：
Financial     finacial

prettywraithUID：197049

Comments (2010-01-24&25):
It seems a popular topic in current time, and I have read one article "Women and Work", one week ago. In this open rebuttal remarks, Ms. Neil disagrees with women in the developed world have never had it so good. In contrast with Ms. Neil's disagreement, Mr. Donkin insists women in the developed countries have never had it so good, though there are still deficiencies in women's rights. They all provide sufficient evidence to support their standpoints, while the moderator's remarks make the whole discussion clearly and forward in right direction.

About this rebuttal topic, it is too complicated to say absolute "yes" or "no". But, only for this rebuttal remarks, in my view, Mr. Donkin's assertion is more convincing than Ms. Neil's. Firstly, there are two restricting implications in the proposition: the first one is in the developed country; another one is the comparison of women's status between last and today. Yet, in this passage, Ms. Neil seems to ignore the restrictions of the topic. Thus, her evidence and examples look less powerful than Mr. Donkin's. Additionally, as I know, some examples, which Ms. Neil has shown us, are not real. For example, Ms. Neil said Ms. Clinton and Ms. Palin are slighted by many men or their assessments. Actually, as politicians, whatever who are male or female, they always have to face all kinds of criticism and even citizen's calumniations. Do not forget, George W. Bush has been satirized as the president with the lowest IQ (intelligence quotient) among presidents in American history. Even, someone had said he looks like a monkey. If these sharp assessments should be considered to discrimination? I do not think so. Moreover, even if some men still discriminate against women, the discrimination is becoming less and less in past decades. I have to say the women's status has become better now. About Ms. Neil's another example, women's right to abortion care, honestly, I have little knowledge about that. Therefore, it is hard for me to say if it is persuasive/cogent one.

Before finishing my comments, I want to say there are still many examples to imply this topic it is not easy to say "Yes" or "No" simply. By common sense, human's society had been matriarchal clan society/matriarchy era in history. This case implies women in developed countries have ever had it so good and even better.

Wrong Spelling：
Country  contry
comparison  comparsion
know    konw
example  exmaple
discriminate   descriminate

prettywraithUID：197049

Comments (2010-01-26):
The author grants a humorous subject, The Fat Plateau, to the article. At first glance, I hardly understand its meaning. After finishing the passage, I feel both the topic and contents are interesting. Perhaps, it is a serious topic in American. After all, a vast majority of American people are suffering from overweight, and federal health-care system must pay more dollars for their medical bills. From the author's view, though America’s obesity rate has changed little in the past decade, there still exists harmful effect on the American health care system and the next generation. Therefore, it is urgent issue need the government take a further action. And the author also shows us several solutions to the problem, which may not work effectively. As one cosmopolitan, I have one suggestion. In developing countries and least developed country, I believe most of people do not endure the pain of overweight, and even some of them are suffering from hunger because of foods shortage. I advise American should share their junk foods with those hungry people. As a result of this action, there will be low obesity rate in America, less burden on the health-care system, and a decreasing number of hungry people.

Wrong Spelling：
problem  porblem
because  becasue

prettywraithUID：197049

Comments (2010-01-27):
This passage introduces one trend of health care in future. Under the help of information industry, medicine is experiencing one digital revolution. Though I have never seen how the new information technology serves people's health in real life, I can imagine this revolution is convenient and useful for patients. Certainly, as the author has said, this progress will cost a lot of money. Who afford this expense is a huge question in the face of research institutions. Perhaps, this is not a big deal for rich counties. But most of counties in the world cannot bear the burden of the effective health care, and even their citizens cannot have the least medical services. Admittedly, if these obstacles would be overcome, our health care system will provide patients cheaper and more efficient medical treatment. This case will be like the personal computer's application. At beginning, few people or few institutions can afford for the expensive machine. With the development of technology, today, we can owe one computer with low costs, and enjoy many benefits brought by computers. Thus, that medicine goes digital may be not far away from our life.

Wrong Spelling：
convenient  convient
technology   techonlogy
benefit      benifit

prettywraithUID：197049

最近颈椎不太好，好几天都没怎么好好学，今天开始补这两天落下的comments。

Comments (2010-02-02):
Little knowledge about law in my mind, thus it is necessary to learn some substantial knowledge of law for preparing the topic of analytical writing. This passage tells us why we need law in our life, why we can endure the widen authority of government. Although its title is "Las vs. Morality", author has written a few words about morality. Obviously, he pays more attention to illustrate the law. In author's view, law seems one efficient tool to balance relationship between the individuality and the collectivity. Under the law, every people can get the relative fair, and everyone can be treated the same, without regard to religion, color, national origin, and other special attributes. As a matter of fact, this is always a dilemma that law protects all people's rights. Taking the author's examples to clarify, "Maybe some should and some should not smoke. Maybe some should and some should not go to church. Maybe some should and others should not paint certain kinds of pictures or play certain sports or purchase SUVs or talk with the animals.", we hardly say whether we need the law to intervene these details or not. Certainly, law is necessary for people. But what is the morality? May be I can find answer in other essays.


Wrong Spelling：
individuality individulity
examples  exmaples
dilemma   delimma

prettywraithUID：197049

Comments (2010-02-01):
It is famous address in American history, and I try to finish the whole passage. But I fail. After reading thousands words, I have lost in the Emerson's speeches. At last, I have to find the Chinese version of this address to read. Even if read in Chinese, this address also is hard to understand for me. Fortunately, I can catch the main ideas of Emerson's speeches. Certainly, the translating version is so brilliant that I almost lost descriptive words. And I found there is still a huge gap between my Chinese level and English level.

The American Scholar plays a important role in the academic or intellectual development, and it is still meaningful for the current world. Especially, in my eyes, most of scholars in China should read this address. Emerson stated three aspects of how to be one qualified scholar and how to set up the independent American literary, culture and academia. The first aspect is "The first in time and the first in importance of the influences upon the mind is that of Nature" ; the second is "The next great influence into the spirit of the scholar is the mind of the Past"; the third is " Action is with the scholar subordinate, but it is essential". Emerson's address is filled with humanistic care, and he cares more for human nature and creativity.

Comments (2010-02-03):
In this passage, author tells us that bigger languages are also simpler ones. As the title of this passage, the key point is also obscure for me. Under the help of author's example, I catch the main idea of this passage. Author insists the language is bigger, the language is less redundant. And he also asserts all languages have become simpler over time. Then why languages would become complex at all? Author also gives the answers. Accurately, we should call them hypotheses: the first is the different needs of child and adult learners; the second is complex morphology improves economy and clarity of expression; the last one is smaller language groups more faithfully transmit the grammar to their children, redunancy and all, even if it has no use.

Wrong Spelling：
redundancy
redunancy

Comments (2010-02-04):
In this passage, one famous business case has been introduced. For Apple, it is indeed an old classic, whether the star is Mac or iPhone. Though I do not have an opportunity to buy one iPhone, I am always interested in Apple's products. Their fashionable outlook and terrific customers' experience attracts me so much. But, Apple possesses little market, though owes creative products. I am curious why Apple does not success in business as in techonolgy. This passage shows me some reasons, though it may too concise to illustrate more details about Apple's strategies. Certainly, Apple has begun to realize its problem for competing with other powerful competitors. Hope Apple to do another good job not only leads the high technology but also holds more market share.

Wrong Spelling：
technology
techonolgy

prettywraithUID：197049

开来拉下的不少啊，该加油了！

Comments (2010-02-05,06):
This essay looks like one campaign denunciation for political purpose. But, I concede author's essay is persuasive and analyze deeply about the bottom of "broken society". After reading this passage, I have open eyes on society problems. Author insists citizens have a hallucination about their society. Actually the whole society is healthier than the politicians imagine. In his eyes, the substantial reasons of "broken society" are due to the increasing of unemployment rate and the failing of education. Moreover, powerful media such as internet, broadcast and TV make every news spread as soon as possible. One bad event influences people only in local society, but it will be known by each person in modern society. Thus, more people feel unsafe now.   

From my perspective, granting author's data true, I do not think parents or voters overreact to the slight decline of "broken society". By common sense, society has advanced for a big step in past decades. Under the help of high technique or modern management, social improvements are better than before. But this case does not mean there is no corrupt morality. Perhaps, voters think worse morality than before. And the existing social improvements are not the excuse that government evades their duties.

Wrong Spelling：
campaign  campagin
analyze  analytize
hallucination  halluciation
actually  acutally
management  managment



Comments (2010-02-11):
The world has been changed thoroughly by internet, and so does the net generation. My first time hear about "the net generation" this term. And even I never realize I am counted the net generation before reminding by this essay. It is interesting that people care more at the net generation. From my perspective, generation gap has existed for a long time. Even if there are no internet, as one result of development, there still have many differences between our grandpa and us. Admittedly, internet or web extends the gap among different generations. Internet makes us receive more information, more interaction with others, and more convenient communication. Author's optimistic attitude for the net generation is reasonable. But, as I known, some youngsters indeed are bad at communicating, socially inept, indifferent to the needs of others and even addict internet world. Certainly, it is unreasonable to complain the internet for these sad things. After all, internet is only a tool. How it serves for us is decided by how we used it.

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thoroughly  throughtly
exist   exsit
grandpa  granpa
convenient  convinient
youngster   yongesters

prettywraithUID：197049

回家了上网不太方便，不过也好不用总上网闲逛了。天天对着电脑学习，加油！

Comments (2010-02-15):
It is a rush time after disasters have befallen in the somewhere. People with sympathy begin to pay more attention on helping the victims, while volunteers, donation, The Red Cross and relief agencies pour into the disaster area. "How do good well?" The author reminds us. On the one hand, he shows us some failed examples of helping victims. I am astonished that someone have donated Viagra and Santa suits to victims. Perhaps, this is an extreme example to illustrate someone how do good badly. On the other hand, he teaches us how to deal with this situation in future. I concede author's assertion that you donate the money and leave the rest to professionals, if you want to do some helps for victims. Certainly, if you have some basic knowledge and ensure you can do some helps, you could apply work for some relief agencies with permit. At least, people should not make some trouble to help victims or delay others to save victims' life.

Wrong Spelling：
sympathy  sympanthy
volunteer  voluteer
agency   angency

Comments (2010-02-12):
This is an essay related with Greek fiscal and political crisis, which can be treated as an example for ISSUE170 something about welfare. Confused with some obscure words, I spend one hour to read this passage.

Recently, Greek fiscal crisis almost becomes the hottest topic in media. As the origin of western civilization, each year, Greece attracts many visitors. Every time people talk about Olympic Games, they all will mention about Greece. Moreover, in my eyes, most of European countries are wealthier than China. At least, their citizens are happier than Chinese. After reading this passage, I found I only guess rightly in half. Though Greece is counted as a developed country, it still has the serous bribe problems. Corruption in civil servants leads to that more people evade the tax by taking bribes. Thus government hardly collects enough money through tax, while it has a heavy welfare burden. Thus, suffering from heavy fiscal deficits for a long time, under the pressure from European Union partners and worst riots, Greece has to deal with its fiscal problems. From author's perspective, Greece seems not to overcome this crisis only by its own efforts. Certainly, the quality of Greek life is better than Chinese.

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waste
wates
visitor
vistor
Olympic
Olymplics
develop
develp
perspective
perpective
servant
servent

Comments (2010-01-30, 31):
As let one poor people judge which rich people is more wealthier, it is awkward for a Chinese to judge whose holidays are more reasonable. Some of them do not have jobs but have plentiful time, and they do not have enough money to travel. Some of them with nice pay have little time to have good rest, and even they need to spend their additional none-work time in working. Thus, most of Chinese people always have little chance to enjoy their holidays. But holidays are necessary part for our life. If we have opportunities to pick up this part, which types of holiday is better?

The professionals complaint the European holidays are too long with lower quality, while some Americans admire their neighbors have more time to enjoy the life. From my perspective, in different age, people should have different holidays. For instance, when I am young and I just begin my career, I need less holiday time, because I look forward to earning more money and improving working skills. In this way, the young people could set up a solid foundation for future life whether in personal finance or career. When I am becoming older, I hope I can have more time to enjoy the life with family like the current European holidays. In old age, perhaps, I have enough money for the rest of life or I am rich. Following the growing of age, I need more rest and more time with family. After all, old people have less energy than the young people to work. Thus, I think we should make different holidays plan for the different age people.

Wrong Spelling:
whose
whoes
complaint compaint
neighbor
neigbor