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The lecture questions about the statement in the passage that the person in the portrait is Jane Austen by several reasons.
First of all, the passage uses the evidence that the Austen's family admitted the people in the portrait is the author and gave permission to use the portrait in 1882 to support that it is author's portrait. But the lecture contend that in 1882, Jane Austen have been dead for more than seventy years. None of the Austen's family member actually sees Jane Austen himself. The family's admitting is not convincing.
The passage also shows the evidence that the face in the portrait clearly resembles the one in sketch, which depicts Austen to approve the portrait is depicting Jane Austen. However, lecture argues that Austen's family is large, which means Jane Austen have many family member whose face resembles the one in sketch.
Finally, the passage regards the portrait as a production of Ozias Humphrey. But the lecture point it out that it is not intelligent to judge the portrait's painter only by its style. What's more, one part of the portrait is sold by William Len, who only sold that stuff when Jane Austen was 27 years old.
The lecture argues all the three evidence of passage, and indicts that the depicting people in portrait can not be Jane Austen.
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The lecture questions about the statement in the passage that the person in the portrait is Jane Austen by several reasons.（开头很简洁清晰！）

First of all, the passage uses the evidence that the Austen's family admitted the people in the portrait is the author(Jane，消除歧义) and gave permission to use the portrait in 1882 to support that it is author's portrait. But the lecture contends that in 1882, Jane Austen have been dead for more than seventy years. None of the Austen's family member actually sees Jane Austen himself（人家是女滴！）. The family's admitting is not convincing.

The passage also shows the evidence that the face in the portrait clearly resembles the one in sketch, which depicts Austen to approve the portrait is depicting Jane Austen. However, lecture argues that Austen's family is large, which means Jane Austen have many family members whose face resembles the one in sketch. (细节不够，如果能写出Cousin or cousin’s daughters 这些细节就更好了)

Finally, the passage regards the portrait as a production of Ozias Humphrey. But the lecture point it out that it is not intelligent to judge the portrait's painter only by its style. What's more, one part of the portrait（canvas on which the portrait was painted） is sold by William Len, who only sold that stuff when Jane Austen was 27 years old.
（这里的点抓的很准！我第一遍都没有听出来。）

The lecture argues all the three evidence of passage, and indicts that the depicting people in portrait can not be Jane Austen.

总：点抓的很准，用词很丰富，表述的很简洁，很不错！加油！

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The speaker refutes the reading about rejecting sell fossils to private ownership by providing drastically contrary evidences regarding the effect of public interest, science research, and destroying scientific evidence.

First, the speaker argues that selling fossils to private ownership will not lead to a decline in public interest in fossils, as the reading says. Because the growth of fossils’ business has inspired people's interest about fossil, which leads to more fossils have been unearthed. Furthermore, public can also buy the fossils rather than waiting for the donating.

In addition, the speaker argues that the significance and the value of a fossil are substantiated only by scientific experts of fossil. Because all the fossils should be testify by the scientist, none of the important fossil can be missed out from the scientists. moreover, the growth of the number of unearthed fossils fosters the chance of crucial discovery.

Lastly, although commercial fossil collectors sometime destroy valuable scientific evidence associated with the fossils they unearth, as the reading argues, the increasing of fossils business also raises the number of unearthed fossils. The fossils are definitely more significant than the evidence and records.

In conclusion, the speaker contends that selling fossils to private has more advantages than disadvantages.

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The lecture questions about the statement in the passage that the person in the portrait is Jane Austen by several reasons开头很酷啊很简洁，直接点题

First of all, the passage uses the evidence that the Austen's family admitted the people in the portrait is the author and gave permission to use the portrait in 1882 to support that it is author's个人比较喜欢用名字说而且说作家记得用writer,author是特指某本书的作者。首句稍长 portrait. But the lecture contend that in 1882, Jane Austen have been dead 额。。死了不用这个时态 for more than seventy years. None of the Austen's family member actually sees觉得saw好点 Jane Austen himself. The family's admitting is not convincing

The passage also shows the evidence that the face in the portrait clearly resembles the one in sketch, which depicts Austen to approve the portrait is depicting Jane Austen. However, lecture argues that Austen's family is large, which means Jane Austen have many family member whose face resembles the one in sketch。可以多说些细节啥的，也许是他亲戚之类的云云

Finally, the passage regards the portrait as a production of Ozias Humphrey. But用But最好是连接2个句子所以however or on the contrary 也不错的 the lecture points it out that it is not intelligent to judge the portrait's painter only by its style. What's more, one part of the portrait is sold by William Len, who only sold that stuff when Jane Austen was 27 years old.这段我听的和理解的有出入

The lecture argues all the three evidence of passage, and indicts that the depicting people in portrait can not be Jane Austen.
写的很精悍的很酷没有多余的话而且没模板痕迹。赞原创。如果细节多些会增加篇幅，小语法点注意。加油。。不好意思才改

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The speaker refutes the reading about rejecting sell fossils to private ownership貌似是所有权的意思，这里用owners 或许更好，下同 by providing drastically contrary evidences regarding the effect of public interest, science research, and destroying scientific evidence.开头无模板痕迹，简洁，赞～ q' `4 c+ {/ O
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Firstly, the speaker argues that selling fossils to private ownership will not lead to a decline in public interest in fossils, as the reading says. Because the growth of fossils’ business has inspired people's interest about fossil赞细节！这点我听错了，sigh……which leads to more fossils have been to be unearthed. Furthermore, public can also buy the fossils rather than waiting for the donating. / H9 g- I" [# Z/ A7 L

In addition, the speaker argues that the significance and the value of a fossil are substantiated only by scientific experts of fossil. Because all the fossils should be testify by the scientist, none of the important fossils can be missed out from the scientists. moreover, the growth of the number of unearthed fossils fosters the chance of crucial discovery.3 v3 E9 a2 G9 K. n8 o

Lastly,Finally, although commercial fossil collectors sometimes destroy valuable scientific evidence associated with the fossils they unearth, as the reading argues, the increasing of fossils business also raises the number of unearthed fossils. The fossils are definitely more significant than the evidence and records.
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In conclusion, the speaker contends that selling fossils to private has more advantages than disadvantages.

细节较全面，无模板痕迹，赞～建议多写一些听力中的内容，以防丢失得分点。
ps：不好意思，改晚了


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The speaker questions the benefits of salvage logging by providing contrary evidence regarding the situation of forest recovering, insect's value and economic benefits.
The speaker points out that although salvage logging can help forest areas recover form the disaster, it also remove the nutrition of the forest, which also harm to the growth of the forest.
In addition, the speaker challenges the result of reducing insects due to salvage logging.  Decaying wood is a highly suitable habitat for insects, so removing dead trees would definitely minimize the number of insect, which may lead to infestation do harm to forest. However, the insects also are food of bird and other species. Without the insect, the forest would die out soon, since the ecological condition of the forest appears unbalanced.
At last, the speaker contends that the economic benefits of salvage logging may be small, and temporary. Since the demand and use of the wood of damaged trees is limited, salvage logging's economic benefit. What's more, since the probability of the forest fire is small and the worker usually not a local resident, the work opportunity increased by salvage logging is tiny.
按着时间模考写出来的（拼写错误还是用word改了）。。。。感觉很多地方听到了手不够快就忘记了。。。
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The speaker revises the statement presented in the reading material. He is of the view that offering four-day option to employees would not definitively benefit the whole economy, individual company, or individuals who take the option.

First of all, the speaker contradicts the issue of shortened workweek and hiring new employees would increase company profits. She says that because increasing the number of employees would force the company spend more money on training system, health and housing social-insurance, office space, computer and so on. So hiring more staff will result in additional cost compare to former company's cost.

In addition, the speaker points out that unemployment rates would not reduce. Since the companies would not like to increase their costs of hiring new stuff. they would force the four-day employees to work overtime and hope that four-day employees can finish five-day employees' work.


At last, the speaker says that the statement that employees' quality of their lives could improve, since they have more self-control time is questionable. The four-day employees are risky. As the companies targeting at making profits, the four-day employees' probability of losing the job is more than those who choose work five days. Furthermore, the promoting and raising money chance of four-day employees also decrease. Thus, the quality of employees' lives could not be improved.

In conclusion, there are no sufficient evidence to support that offering four-day option would benefit the society, companies or employees.

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First of all, the lecture points out thatcommunal online encyclopedias can correct the mistakes easily and timely.Contrary to the belief in the passage that the traditional encyclopedias arewritten by experts who fluent in academic rigor have less errors and morevalue, the speaker indicts that traditional encyclopedias also have errands andit might cost several decades to revise them.

Second, the lecture presents some policy toprotect the accurate and correct entry. For instance, the communal onlineencyclopedias set some entries at a obvious format, which no one can changethese entries. This methods not only can effectively protects the hackers orvandals to fabricate, delete and corrupt information, but also tells user whereis showing the academic or orthodox information. In addition, the onlineencyclopedias hire the special editor to change the wrong information.

The last but not the least, the speakerssays that the online encyclopedias rank their topics on the interest of mostpeople, which is useful and scientific to most of the reader comparing to thetraditional encyclopedias' information determining only by the academic scholar.
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This lecture refutes the passage in threeaspects to illustrate that United States companies do the same in order toreceive ecocertification.


First of all, the speaker mentions theAmerican consumers do not treat every advertising at the same level. They paymore attention to the label which established by the independent agency, suchas the international organization issuing certifications to wood companies.Therefore, the "ecocertified" wood is favorable and the organizationis trust worth.


Second, although consumers, in fact, careabout the price as mentioned in the passage, the price only have an obviouseffect when one products much higher or lower than the other one. However, thelecture points out that the price variation due to the certification is lessthan fifty percent. So the consumer will consider other factors instead ofprice. The buyer might consider the environment and buy the friend toenvironment product. As a result more people will prefer to buy the productwith the certification.


Finally, the speaker expresses thatAmerican wood businesses consider the foreign market too. Instead only caresabout the market in the United States, the American wood companies pay aattention in foreign competition. Since if the foreign wood companies have abetter sales and lower costs, it might probate catch up with the Americancompanies or even win the United Sates market.