[1010G]【决战2010备考日志】by TEAR(xingfuhbj) ------BE MY OWN GOD

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1 MAY:
today I finish the DEBATE, from 8:20am --8:20pm. Almost exhausted.
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... mp;page=1&extra
But I still insist on finishing analysis the ARGUMENT that should write today, the outlined has done, so I just have to write it tomorrow.

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2  MAY:
今天早上莫名7点钟就毫无睡意的醒了~
吃了个早饭后,想着早上记忆力好,就开始坐在电脑前看精华帖~
本来是怀着异常愧疚的心情看的~(以为自己基本没看过~)
后来发现其实还是看过蛮多了的~ 而且有些觉着现在看也没啥用~
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印象比较深的主要是以下几个帖子:

1.我看AW为什么低！:https://bbs.gter.net/thread-783960-1-1.html
第一个 逻辑 666版版之前说过(如果没记错人的话~)
第二个 连词过多.这个我还没怎么理解~先记着~当然有人能指点下更好~
第三个 滥用which,who  这个问题我应该没有吧~希望没有吧~ 以后多注意注意~
第四个  滥用长句子. 这个问题蛮早就意识到了~所以应该没啥这方面的问题吧~不过还是复制一下觉得比较重要的内容

“【更新一下，ETS 绝对官方说的，作文错误，我就截取其中的句子部分。
too many passive sentences.
too many long sentences
too many short sentences
ton many sentences beginning with coordinating conjunctions

段落部分
Does each of your main ideas begin with a topic sentence.由此可见第一句话必须写啥
use your topic sentence to prepare the reader for understanding what is written in the essay.
use topic sentences to connect two paragraphs or two main ideas.

有些朋友可能见过。这个绝对是ETS 官方的，我在考GRE之前要是看见就好了。

此外，字数绝对不是王道】”
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2.Saavedro简谈如何有效提升GRE-AW写作语言表达：https://bbs.gter.net/thread-918693-1-1.html
别的不说了~主要比较感兴趣的是 汉译英练习  

“【教材：推荐一本书和一部资料：《GRE北美官方范文》（北美范文），带有中英文双解的ISSUE和ARGUMENT的题库（XDF黄皮系列书和网上的资料也可）。 注意：北美范文这本书在整个GRE-AW备考中要慎重使用。现在中国考生GRE-AW分数偏低，除了语言不过关以外，再有就是抄袭和雷同兼死板八股化十分严重。而这种现象的出现和这本书可以说有着莫大的关联。因此笔者建议北美范文这本书还是要买的，但是只能用来练习语言表达能力，千万不能用于思路开拓和作文破题审题写作模式等等方面。而真正这方面的东西，还有赖于大家自己积极的发挥主观能动性吧，ETS总喜欢原创且新颖的东西。不过要为北美范文澄清的是：它对于语言表达能力培养提升还是大有裨益的，笔者当时写作造句能力提升60%就有赖于对于这本书使用。

   方法：练习ISSUE部分的范文文章即可。以此书的开始的前30篇ISSUE文章为纲要进行训练。首先在你的计算机中GRE写作资料中建立一个文件夹，名为：北美范文汉译英练习。
   具体操作方法为每天至少练习2篇ISSUE文章的汉译英练习，每篇文章独立一个txt文档文件。打开你的北美范文，然后翻到后面中文翻译的地方，看一句中文，然后做汉译英的翻译练习，将你翻译的结果打字到文档文件里保存，当一个段落或者一篇文章翻译完后，仔细对照原文。这时候你会发现你翻译的和英文原文有很大的不同，这里面包括词汇和句式的差异等等。这时候你要注意，原文中使用好的词汇和表达方式你都要统统的以其所在分句的形式抄在一个本子上（中英文都要抄上），然后每天没事的时候就看着你抄写的中文再次回想对应的英文是什么，就这样每天坚持翻译两篇文章，然后看抄写下的中文回想和记忆对应的英文部分，两周后就会翻译完这30篇文章。这个时候就要停下来不要再翻译新的文章。你要做的是再次从第一篇到第三十篇文章做汉译英的翻译练习。随着你的词汇和句式能力的提升，你会发现你这次的翻译结果还是和原文有所不同，但是与前者不同的是你发现它的语言和你的语言比起来比你容易得多，无论是词汇还有句式上，这就说明你进步了。你比它好的地方你自己要保留，而你不如它的地方还要用上述办法改进。就这样坚持1-2个月，你的造句的能力也会发生质的飞跃。你会发现无论你想表达什么，你都能在最短的时间内在做到词汇和句式兼顾下，高效率，低错误的写完你想要写的文章，通过英语语言完美的诠释你的思想和观点。注意：如果你只想高效率的练习造句能力的话也可以使用国内考研英语阅读的长难句进行汉译英的翻译，那个虽然更为痛苦些，但是效果却更加出众。笔者当时使用的是《北美范文》和《杨鹏GRE&&GMAT难句》作为写作汉译英的材料练习写作语言表达能力的，却只练习了不到2个月便突然于一次写作时发现自己的英文表达已经完全脱胎换骨，在表达GRE-ISSUE的时候，文字上竟然能体验到游戏自如一般的感受，真是妙极，爽极！！！”】
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3.致真正的杀G勇者：https://bbs.gter.net/thread-894485-1-1.html
这篇主要是在精神上鼓舞了一下我~
本来最近真的忙翻了~时间怎么挤都不够用~
也狠下心放弃了五一回家的机会，窝在寝室专心杀鸡。
昨天一整天的debate真是几欲让我疯癫~再加上之后的大扫除，到了晚上躺床上的时候感觉人都快灰飞烟灭了~
but今早又很神奇的7点钟自动醒~而且精神抖擞的一点都米有犯困~
应该要归功于最近有注意睡眠吧~知道事儿越多越得要有身体撑越要多休息的~

最近忙着赶赶赶计划，写AW，基本上没碰过单词。 也就是通过回单词贴还有做ECO这种缓慢不过挺高效的方式来记记~
也有部分原因是因为自己真的不想去看单词~因为第一遍后停了很久，第二遍去看的时候，很多都不记得~，看着就有点烦~

而读了作者这篇文~感觉又多了点信心~或许这也是所谓把自己的快乐建立在别人的痛苦之上吧~
虽然我红宝第二遍都没看完~(好羞愧的说~)但是我还并非看第二遍的时候什么印象都没有...
准备现在开始重新看单词~ 把新东方背单词那个破软件的问题搞定~(不知道为什么,我一进入 逐词浏览 它就自动关闭~烦死我鸟~)

作者的杀鸡心态和我很像~ 我现在还是重新坚定了考10G的信心.
五一基本上可以把落下的任务理清,虽然课内也有很多债,但是相信通过我之后的协调~也可以搞定的~
我相信我自己...~!
我就不信我啥都不玩~剩下的时间能用的全用在GRE和课业上都搞不定~!
磨练意志本就是我的初衷.
何况我现在很享受这样的过程.

今天太阳很大~晒了两床被子~心情很好的说~
虽然不能回家陪陪爸妈~吃吃美食~
但是我相信现在的付出都会有回报！不一定是高分，但至少我可以收获我的经历！

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4.报分求定位的都看过来，有关选校标准:https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=855186&extra=page%3D1%26amp%3Bfilter%3Dtype%26amp%3Btypeid%3D106
浅谈rescore和重考:https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=496385&extra=page%3D1%26amp%3Bfilter%3Dtype%26amp%3Btypeid%3D106%26amp%3Borderby%3Ddateline 两篇都是关于分数标准的问题.
第一篇之前看过了~不过不太记得了~
第二篇的可信度让我有些些怀疑~因为已经是几年前的了~貌似现在分数要求越来越高了吧~?
“【1、GRE在申请中的分量
G+ Q' Q
对不同的专业而言，GRE的重视程度不同。: w% N4 z* ~/ B+ b
对理工科而言，总分1100以上，作文3分以上就可以申请大部分学校了，1200以上就可以申请所有牛校了，虽然低于1400的非牛分无法成为你申请的亮点，但也不会是软肋。
2、GRE对申请牛校的影响
理工、设计等专业，GRE对申请牛校的影响很小，上了1200以后基本就是看其它背景了，比如研究经历、设计能力（作品集）、研究方向等等。】”

“【2、要不要重考。
a）很多人重考是因为觉得Verbal比较低。一般来说，在通常条件下（主要是说你不是清，北及中科的学生，还有你的导师和国外大学也没什么合作）450分以上，top100内的大学都是受理申请的。550+时可以申请top30-50的大学。所以语文低的同学要重考的一定要慎重了。下面第3点中我还有详细的分析。2 H% x" J7 |0 S2 ]# Y2 h
b）quantitative低的情况。什么叫数学低呢？一般来说吧，学数学或统计的不要低于760。基本上没听过比这还低还拿奖的。当然，学其它的可能的要求不同。但一般来说，760以下就可以考虑重考了（学文科的除外）。
c）AW低的情况。
这里说一句，如果不是太低，AW没什么大要紧的。（一般他们都不把它作为衡量标准）。但是不管你学什么的。AW如果是3.0或以下就比较危险了。你想下。4.0一般是30%左右，3.0都接近个位数了。
一般来说，理科，工科及经济学（不是商学院的那种）3.5以上就不用重考。有很多全奖的case。0 E7 R, e0 p& W8 Y
文科（社会，历史和商学）4.0以上。也有拿奖的例子。】”

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现在去补拉下的commentary去鸟~四篇啊~如果没搞错的话~
慢慢写吧~哎~
写了这么多~晚上有空再更新吧~
今天还打算看完要看的fundamental courses of writing
整理所有BS的内容
看看下篇要写的ISSUE，至少把提纲和思路搞定~
尽量做完~明天要先复习期中考试要考的科目了~有空再尽量杀鸡~

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3 MAY：

貌似我对杀鸡上瘾了~一杀就停不了了~
今早又是不到七点就醒了~压着自己又睡了会儿~
再次在八点半的时候坐在电脑前开始studying

This morning I mainly figured out how to use the software--- Personal Brains, a fantastic software that mean to help people find the connection between their scattered ideas,  and weave a web for them.  And I managed to sort two BS topics with it, which made me got a more clear concept of each topic.
Then I started reading the materials----【Fundamental Course of Writtng】.It's a little bit boring at first~ but when it start to talking about the THESIS STATEMENT, everything became so different. It's just the point that I didn't handled well.
Yesterday, I send my ISSUE to my good friend-- who are studying in US now. Clever as she is, after 2 years in US, her English do improved a lot, especially the logic sense. At first, I send the ISSUE with much confidence, cause I wrote it smoothly, and the outline I wrote also seems logical soundly enough to illustrate the ISSUE. However, things didn't turned out as I wished.  she pointed out that I have no thesis statement in the first paragraph, which made her feel a little confuse about what I said. what's more, she thinks that the paragraph noticeable longer than other was disproportionately long in fact, for it is not the main idea I to stress.
She just pointed two questions but were actually the very question I should considered when writing an article. Though I was a little bit upset, I  need to be grateful that I found those critical mistakes in the beginning. So when I read the  【Fundamental Course of Writtng】today, I am keenly aware of what the materials try to conveyed than others.
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staying on topic in every paragraph

Put your topic sentence at the top of each paragraph to keep the sentence in mind and not lose track of your topic.

using page or print view to check paragraphs

Switch to the page or print view so that you can see the whole view of each page on screen. Do the paragraphs look to be about the same length? Does one look noticeably shorter than the others? Does it need more development? Is there a paragraph that seems to be disproportionately long?

What is a thesis?
A thesis statement declares what you believe and what you intend to prove. （主题句说明你的观点和要论证的论点）A good thesis statement makes the difference between a thoughtful research project and a simple retelling of facts.（事实和论据不是主题句！）

The thesis statement is typically located at the end of your opening paragraph. (The opening paragraph serves to set the context for the thesis.) 注意，这里明确的指出了，主题句（thesis statement）必须出现在开头段（opening paragraph）的最后！
主题句一般出现在开头的最后一两句．这个规定我搜索了不下２０个网站，都是这样要求的，可见，这个规定大家最后遵守，我想，阅卷人一定会在你的Introduction里边的最后一两句找你的Thesis，你就是要确保他在这里找到！
Remember, your reader will be looking for your thesis. Make it clear, strong, and easy to find.使主题句清晰！

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再看一点教程就去写今天的ISSUE了~

哎 我的期中考试啊.....

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CONTINUED  3 MAY:

I just kept using the Personal Brain to sort the ISSUEs that were Brainstormed by our group. Though it still cost me some time trying to use the software well, which made me a little upset about the flying time, I still try to concentrate on it. Moreover, I reanalyzed the ISSUES, and sort them by the type of "should" and "is" after reading the course written by IMONG again. The whole process made me feel much more clear about the ISSUES we onced talked over, and I wanna make some notes of the courses.
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关于事实和倾向题：https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=201853&extra=page%3D1%26amp%3Bfilter%3Dtype%26amp%3Btypeid%3D50

先来看一下上次分析过的这道题：
issue52. "Education encourages students to question and criticize, and therefore does little to promote social harmony."

和下面这个“变形的版本”：
Education should not encourage students to question and criticize so as to better promote social harmony.

可以看出这两个命题针对的是同一个话题，但是更明显的是能够感觉到这两个命题实际上是不一样的。不一样在哪里？前者写的是Education encourages and therefore does，所陈述的是“事实”，而后者写的是Education should，所陈述的是一种suggestion，或者叫作“倾向”。两种命题在题库里面都广泛的存在。今天要讨论的，就是“事实性命题”和“倾向性命题”的关系与区别，以及写作时相应的注意事项。在issue综合参考区的Reasoning and Critical Thinking目录下也有一篇文章专门谈到这个问题。

还是看上面的两个例子。前者作为事实性命题陈述的是现象，状态，而并不涉及从情感、价值等方面做出的选择和判断。也就是说：issue52提出来的是Education到底是个什么状态，题目所关心的是“Education是什么样子”。而至于Education应该怎样，则全然不是issue52所关心的。后面的倾向性命题则恰好反过来，Education现在可以是encourage，也可以不是encourage，都不是该命题关心的——最多也只能作为背景陈述。倾向性命题所关心的，恰恰是“Education应该如何做”，不管和“事实”“状态”一致还是迥异。

看一个实例：
issue163. "Most people live, whether physically or morally, in a very restricted circle. They make use of a very limited portion of the resources available to them until they face a great problem or crisis."
该命题对people的一种行为进行了阐述，是一个标准的事实性命题。Okay, 如果在issue文章里面出现people should learn to better make use of their resources这样的分论点的话，恐怕这篇文章就要出问题：题目提出的是一个“状态”，而自己的文章立论无非是要论证题目提出的这个“状态”是对的，是错的，或者不一定的，或者etc. 无论如何，people should learn to better这一倾向性命题都没法拿来论证文章的论点——总不能“因为应该是，所以就是”吧？

我的总结观点：
1．倾向不能拿来证明事实
2．不涉及价值判断的事实不能拿来证明倾向

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关于MORE比较级：https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=201072&extra=page%3D1%26amp%3Bfilter%3Dtype%26amp%3Btypeid%3D50

issue2. "Competition is ultimately more beneficial than detrimental to society."
举个例子。当初在分析跑题文章的时候拿过一篇issue73做例子：题目说imagination is more important than knowledge，文章给了个回应叫做both are important云云，对题目进行了彻底的藐视。再往下看，人家的b1写imagination的重要性，b2写knowledge的重要性，b3写only the interaction will do us good云云——整个一篇下来，连一点儿补救的机会都没有。完全跑题。——人家要的就是做这个比较，对more的response在哪里？？？从thesis到body，等效于只字未提。

事实上，可以猜得到，原作者的本意是强调imagination和knowledge“都重要”，“都不可少”，但是这件事到了英文就有点麻烦。我们在中文里面说“哪件衣服好？”“两件衣服都好”的时候，往往imply的是“两件衣服同样好”——在这里潜在的给出了“比较”；但是到了英文，如果说“both of them are important”，这里面挖地三尺从北京挖到阿根廷也找不出来“they are of the same importance”的含义来。前者是对彼此的独立定性，后者才涉及比较。如果按照中文的“两个都好”来写“both are good”，中文的潜台词可才没带过去。这也是一个超典型的语言背景背叛思维的例子。

回来说More的问题。如果要论证they are of the same importance，其实并不复杂。以issue2为例，competition的作用当然有其beneficial和detrimental的各自方面，但是到了ultimately，如果我想要给出一个中性的评价，肯定要从各自方面对比：展示存在beneficial大于detrimental的方面，展示存在detrimental大于beneficial的方面，这些方面是society这个integrity的有机组成部分，不可少，不可互相替代，blabla…..说到底就是各自有各自用处，这种一概而论的观点是不可靠的，应该从完整的角度去看待得出equal这个结论云云。罗嗦半天实质就一句话：把contrast做足了。

人家既然提出more来了，你不可能不去对比。至于比出来是不是把more给比成equal了，人家无所谓也不管——只要比了就行。

把你的对比分析充分展现之后证明balance是正确结论，自然是论证充分的高分段作品。

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4 MAY：
TOO MANY CLASSES TODAY
just managed to correct a issue and do the BS~~

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5 MAY:
also too many classes~
no hope to register~TAT~
too tired~ go to bed now~

今天把IPONE的网弄好鸟~
可以在上课的时候也看论坛~
之前还在纠结要不要干脆买个好点的智能机加个上网本更划算~
现在觉得直接拿个IPHONE也挺值得~
以后上课就直接上论坛看帖子背单词了~
重拾我的单词~~~

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6 MAY：
forgot to write the diary again~~~
today I'm too tired that I slept all the afternoon, which made me so busy after I wake up.
But I thought a lot today.
It seems that I put the incidental before the fundamental.  it has been a long time that I haven't recite the GRE words and I never read the topics of A or I cause I really have no time to do it, what's more, I even have no time for my classes, Which made me wondering whether what I doing is right or not.
However, I decided starting to do those basic thing from now. and I'll recite some words after the electricity was cut.

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MAY 7:
all classes today. but  I managed to recite words during the class by using my IPhone.
though time is limited, I still cost some time on thinking about how to prepare my GRE, and is the right plan to prepare it. I though I have confused the top thing on my agenda.and  I have to admit that I didn't managed to read all the AW topics and recite words everyday as the plan required, which made me so regret  casuse I was too mercy to myself.
However, I have a exam tomorrow, and I just start to review from tonight.....
today I  also wrote the argument we need to wirte and correct two of others.  the process do deserved the time it has cost.

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8 MAY:
I had a exam today. after finishing it, i came back  and read the arument which worte by me and corrected by eleven.  we discussed for a long time, and I do got a lot. there were so many grammar mistakes that i can't realized by myself.
tonight i was totally stuck, wondering go to the national competition of SIFE or not. ao~~~

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9 MAY：
I always have to spend much time on debate, about 1 hours per passage~~~ao~~~

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10 MAY：
all classes~
finished an eco of a debate, revise two aruments, now i'll  go over the AW topics

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11 MAY:
today's issue also cost me at least one, more than 700 words again~GOD~
Today we started to BS through a new way~ new way again~ However, too much topics just made the BS like a brick battle ~haha ~ but feels great~ and it's really a good way to help me go through all the topics~~ but it still cost about 2 hours ~ may be due to the number of topics we BSed, one for each, 5 in totle(cynthia didn't prepared for having no time~), but it's really made me feel like brainstorming, brain is just storming~!

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12 MAY:
Managed to finished an ECO of the DEBATE.  
spend so much time on rereading the A&I that revised by dear eleven. she do point out my problems, and i benefit a lot.

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13 MAY：
I used to do a lot of preparation befor I strat to write AW, especially befor compose the ISSUE. and just now, when I read a temple issue of galaxy--嘉文博译, and I learned, or we could say realized, that is to use some own experice as evidence in ISSUE.
AGAIN, USE OWN EXPERICE.
AGAIN, USE OWN EXPERICE.
AGAIN, USE OWN EXPERICE.


just remember a song, "nursery rhythm"
by Zhangxuan, one of my favorite singers.
so springy, so buoyant, so lithesome, so airy, so brisk, so lightsome, so tripping, so volante. (i just try to memorize some words...)
no i feel a little bit released now, though i still have one ISSUE to write...

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14 MAY:
3 AW have to be revised
2 AW have to be composes
1 debate have to be read
1 passaged have to be translated

一个接一个的干掉它们！
超级无敌小泪~~~FIGHTING啊~~

first time to limit the time of composing AW
feels bad~
however, the time is saved~ and  i became a little bit efficitient.