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elevenkarUID: 2791267

以下为鄙人限时习作两篇。很希望资深牛友们告诉一下，我这样的习作大概得个啥子分数就好，如果能给出修改意见，自是感激涕零
NO.51
教育
"Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."只有针对每个学生的需要和兴趣,教育才真正的有效率
What is the fundamental purpose for the education? Cultivating people to become responsible, thoughtful and enterprising citizens so as to foster the individual’s, society’s and every humanity’s future development and prosperity.
This is an intricate, challenging task requiring deep understanding of ethical principles, moral values, political theory, aesthetics and economics. Grounding on such reality that specifically designed education do has its marvel but, we should take many other factors into account when exert the need-oriented theory of education.

Basing on many classic education theory generally acknowledged by modern society, such as the Plato’s liberal education and Rousseau’s progressive and radical orientations, is quite important for us, as it is all about this: learner is at the center of any education. Students have various intelligence and emotional intelligence, In terms of education; it seems that inquiry-and-interesting-based learning is indispensable. It has long been accepted by our progenitors and had been proved by contemporary educationally psychological experiments that interests are the invaluable motivation in impelling out studies in any field. When a student pursues what interests him, he feel centered and appreciated that will spur the student learn spontaneously and more effective to fully develop their distinct potential and talent. Basing our range of consideration not merely on the benefits of students and educators but, more crucially, on our social development and the interests of individuals also plays a pivotal role in promoting both technological innovations and scientific advancement.

Yet interesting-oriented education system may bring significant revenue to the society as a whole, it is illegitimate to judge that we should exert such theory at any circumstances. As we all know, the rapid growth of population come into being the root problem on earth today, which exert detrimental effects on education. Schools and other educational institutions suffer from severe tension to provide qualified and adequate education for the huge amount of students. If schools cannot afford to respond the basic requirements of traditional-style education for every students, how, and does it worth to imply the interest-oriented policy?

Even if educational resources abound, specifically designed education should not take the place of traditional general education, as a result of many other significant factors should take into consideration. Leading a well life in contemporary society requires versatile people equipping with not only they are truly interested but also rounded training in various respects. Supposing that a person has astonishing talent in some field he loved, however, as he accepted the un-rounded cultivation which only focus on narrow fields,
he can’t effectively communicate with others which may induce an paradox that their excellent aptitude cannot be discovered by the society. To be frankly, I am hard pressed to admit such kind of education system would attain the goal “effective”.

Another dilemma is that without a broader knowledge based, students hardly pick a new choose of concentration, complexity and profundity according to their variably changing interests. What’s more, the statement ignores the fact that it is hard to measure one’s interests and needs. to comprehensive train students guarantee they would not evolve into anti-social individuals.



For a poet wrote by James j Metcalf, a famous educationist in American:
I want to teach my students how to live this life on earth, to face its struggle and its strife and improve their worth. Not just the lesson in a book or how the rivers flow, but how to choose the proper path wherever they may go. I truly advocate that One’s individual development and the capacity of fulfill the society’s purpose depend on an adequate preparation of rounded education. Interesting-oriented policy should form a mixture into the traditional education style, that guarantee the qualified talents to better out society.

elevenkarUID: 2791267

48"The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."

History as a mirror is used to represent as study of the past – a study helps people live a better life in contemporary society. The historical study not only includes the official research in sociopolitical area and science area conducted by historians but also includes the study of families’ or institutions’ history by citizenry. Whether we human being should continuingly imply the “great people theory” on historical research is worth case-to-case discussion
There are many historical achievements and trends were created by anonymous groups of people instead of famous few as the speaker claims such as one of the most prevailing musical style in the world—blues, which derived from faceless and nameless black slaveries’ working songs. While the study of such musical history, historians usually focus on studying some famous and prenominent composers or singers instead of so called ancestors –the faceless labors. Why does this phenomenon occur? Simply because by contrast of studying anonymous, the research on famous few are more efficient and effective since the material record of famous few are available more than unknown person.
Admittedly, at times, the endeavor of masses buried in oblivion in every fields of our history is undeniable. In military area, success would have been impossible without the sacrifices of the martyrs who adhered to the generals; political reforms require the active participation of large groups of fellow people; and such similar circumstances can also be found in scientific area. YUAN LONG PING, known as the famous father of hybrid rice in the world, whose agricultural achievements dramatically increase the productivity of the hybrid rice per acre which is the main food of eastern people, protect more than 1 billion people from famine. He was not single-handedly responsible for his scientific and technical payoffs that his research team tackle a tremendous work of testing, calculating and modifying. However, if we subject the examples given above into careful scrutiny, we will easily find that though such distinct groups of people make tremendous contribution to the happen of historical event, undue attention only to the efforts and strives of groups tends to obscure the casual relationships with which the study of history chiefly concerned. The generals play the essential role in deciding, management, and controlling that render the corresponding historical events; the technology of soaring hybrid rice’s production was primarily the result of Yuan’s original thought way in his research, which had more to do with his own than with other. Those outstanding figures are who provide the initial impetus of the pivotal historical event though leading, inspiring and inciting faceless groups overcome barriers with their intellect.  In other words, anonymous people are important, while famous few are crucial. As recourse scarcity occurs in every fields including historical study, in order to reach optimal allocation of resources, historians should learning of representative famous few rather than forgettable people.
More impressively, when we recall the most profound events and trends in history, we discovered that Revolutionary advances prevail even when forgettable groups’ supporting for certain key individuals was minimal or even negligible. Darwin's research on evolution, Michael Faraday's work on electromagnetism and electro-chemistry, Newton's discoveries of calculus and the laws of motion were all done without others’ grants.
We know that the study of history not only includes the study conducted officially by historians but also contains the study for many fellow citizens, for many Americans, studying the history of one’s own family is the most obvious use of history, for it provides facts about genealogy and family culture which helps people establish and conform their reasonable indentity that can live a better life in contemporary society. In such case, the emphasis of historical study was inevitablely put on faceless and namelees groups in the society.
To sum up, on the study of history leaded by historians,comparing with the nameless, faceless massive groups, the key individuals play pivotal role in shaping the history. Moreover, many incidences can be found in history that famous few accomplish their fruition all by themselves. Under limited recourse, researching those famous few deeply is the sensible approach to reach the best-effort of studying history. While it comes to the historical reaserch on the fellow citizens themselves, study at their nameless famiels could also bring benefits to the society.

草木也知愁UID: 2487572

让自己的作文被改主要有以下几种途径：
1、参与/组建互助小组；
2、主动出击，到别人的习作中改别人的文章，然后留下连接请求回拍，绝大部分情况下版友都会很负责的回拍的；
3、斑竹定期会开习作修改铺，在里面占位置就可以让斑竹修改你的习作；
4、同主题写作时会规定参与的版友按照一定的回贴顺序进行互改；
5、坐等别人来拍，由于习作量很大，这种概率很小，所以效率也很低，建议不要采用。

P.S. 近期将推出几种新的互改模式

elevenkarUID: 2791267

3# 草木也知愁
恩，了解啦！ 谢谢斑主！ 呵呵 其实有参加互改，不过也不能给出个比较权威的评分的说~ 就是很想通过达人们的判分知道自己的习作到底是个什么水平。鉴于此，觉得会采纳斑竹说的到斑斑们开的互改铺去转转呵  
再次感谢啦！

草木也知愁UID: 2487572

3# 草木也知愁  
恩，了解啦！ 谢谢斑主！ 呵呵 其实有参加互改，不过也不能给出个比较权威的评分的说~ 就是很想通过达人们的判分知道自己的习作到底是个什么水平。鉴于此，觉得会采纳斑竹说的到斑斑们开的互改铺去 ...
elevenkar 发表于 2010-5-31 11:12

权威那就得找ETS了

达人们的时间都比较紧的说