Definitely, a victory 小组第1次作业 Issue25 By 10号10 悠凝雾月&9号互改

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25."Anyone can make things bigger and more complex. What requires real effort and courage is to move in the opposite direction—in other words, to make things as simple as possible."

It can not be doubted that nowadays people are living a more and more complex and specific world. Even though it probably is a great ordeal for us, it brings us a high level life out of dispute. Someone perhaps claims that increasing trifling things will drive him lost his mind. I agree. Large amount of trivial and the complexity of them did put highly pressure for us. But in most of the situation, the complexity is an inevitable way to achieve best outcome.
When confronting a problem, at first, we have to determine what the highest priority is. In the other word, what outcomes we are expecting for. When a serious earthquake happens like Sichuan and Chilly, what had the governments and international rescue organizations done? They try every effort to rescue every possible living no matter how hopeless it is. At that case, no one will consider if it is complex but save lives at any costs. We can see a situation through television; experts get together discussing for hours and applying heavy-duty machinery to save one moribund life. The life probably dies at last but no one will stop the complex rescue at that case even though the result. People are never willing to give up any tiny chance for the possibility. As I mentioned, the goal is the most important to guide our behaviors. If we really want a miracle happen, no matter how complex the work we have to do, no matter the results at last, no matter how difficult it is, anything for chasing the goal is worthy.
Other than priority, the possibility is also a significant element. Anything is a cause to later effects. Especially in laboratory situation a little mistakes will lead to great disasters. In laboratory, scientist kept sample of highly infective pathogen to test aiming at protecting humans from the harm. Certainly, the original intention is helpful and considerate. But suppose that, some day, the pathogens are released to the world, what will happen? Since scientist pay lots of attention on them, the damage caused by the pathogen must be relatively serious. Probably a massacre will appear. In this case, it is never too complex to prevent the risk of the pathogen outflow.
Someone said, the basic subject is not as useful as the application subjects. Nowadays universities paid less attention on mathematics or humilities and some subjects like those. Yes, those subjects are not obviously meaningful. But the researches on these ones can provide tools for further studies on application. We should never deny that most of the science study need math, politics needs humility. Sometimes, we do not know that complexities day may simplify later life.

On my opinion, it is not simple that we make thing but efficient. What we pursuit was whether the goal is achieve while the process is simple. That is also called result oriented. To sum up, the item, simple is based on the foundation of efficiency. The first priority is not simple but efficient.


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It can not be doubted that nowadays people are living a more and more complex and specific world. Even though it probably is a great ordeal for us, it brings us a high level（感觉用quality好些）
life out of dispute. Someone perhaps claims that increasing trifling things will drive him lost his mind.（，）I agree. Large amount of trivial and the complexity of them did put highly pressure for us. But in most of the situation, the complexity is an inevitable way to achieve best outcome.（观点为：把事物复杂化好）

When confronting（confront）a problem, at first, we have to determine what the highest priority is. In the other word, what outcomes we are expecting for. When a serious earthquake happens like Sichuan and Chilly, what had the governments and international rescue organizations done? They try（tried）every effort to rescue every possible living no matter how hopeless（difficult）it is. At that case, no one will consider if it is complex but save lives at any costs. We can see a situation through television; experts get together discussing for hours and applying heavy-duty machinery to save one moribund life. The life probably dies at last but no one will stop the complex rescue at that case even though the result. People are never willing to give up any tiny chance for the possibility. As I mentioned, the goal is the most important to guide our behaviors. If we really want a miracle happen, no matter how complex the work we have to do, no matter the results at last, no matter how difficult it is, anything for chasing the goal is worthy. （有矛盾。开篇说“what outcomes we are expecting for”但之后的论述则是说我们要努力做事，可能不管结果如何都要克服困难去做。）
   
Other than priority, the possibility is also a significant element.（论点）
anything is a cause to later effects. Especially in laboratory situation a little mistakes will lead to great disasters. In laboratory, scientist kept sample of highly infective pathogen to test aiming at protecting humans from the harm. Certainly, the original intention is helpful and considerate. But suppose that, some day, the pathogens are released to the world, what will happen? Since scientist pay lots of attention on them, the damage caused by the pathogen must be relatively serious. Probably a massacre will appear. In this case, it is never too complex to prevent the risk of the pathogen outflow（spread）.（为了防患于未然我们要complex）
Someone said, the basic subject is not as useful as the application subjects. Nowadays universities paid less attention on mathematics or（，）humilities and some subjects like those. Yes, those subjects are not obviously meaningful. But the researches on these ones can provide tools for further studies on application. We should never deny that most of the science study need math, politics needs humility. Sometimes, we do not know that complexities day may simplify later life.
（这两处的连接太突然了。他们好像没直接的联系。）

On my opinion, it is not simple that we make thing but efficient. What we pursuit was whether the goal is achieve while the process is simple. That is also called result oriented. （该句和本文论点不合，删去为好。） To sum up, the item, simple is based on the foundation of efficiency. The first priority is not simple but efficient.（最后一段感觉写的有点乱。）

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