Definitely, a victory 小组第1次作业 Issue180 By 10号10 悠凝雾月&9号wdx1986

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180. "Many problems of modern society cannot be solved by laws and the legal system because moral behavior cannot be legislated."
The factors that affect human behaviors are mainly about cost and revenue. The laws add some cost or put some extra revenue in the behaviors which are preached. In the other words, law rewards certain behaviors that help others’ lives while punish the ones which are interfere the freedom of other individuals. When the cost is much lower than the revenue, people will take risks. And more than that, some times, the morality has higher restriction ability.
In business field, people take business morality great granite while the laws. In different period of doing business, morality plays important roles. At very beginning, a small company is eager to gain its reputation to operate itself continuously. Surviving is the first goal for them. They not only will not break laws but also performance with highly morality to earn others’ trusts. When the business goes further, the company will have some certain goals to achieve. At this time, the decision maker probably will take some risk to grasp some opportunities. To enhance the company, the original reputation and business partner are the foundation. The solid basal structure will be the backup if the company was damaged greatly. And then, the company achieve great successful, for years have they been responsible, on my opinion, they will keep the words they made to present a great corporate image. In this case, law is not as important as we consider.
But for those companies that take profits as their only principles, the law is necessary. More than the contrast between companies, the relationship of employers and employees should be legislated. From the late news in China, there are more than 13 employees in Foxconn suicide. The reasons for this are not simply one, but from the working situation they are struggled in we can notice something. The workers are paid at the lowest rate of salary. To make enough money to feed family, they had to take the extra hours of work which will double the salary at these hours. Most of them work more than 60 hours per week. During the work, they are not allowed to talk to ensure the concentration. Standing beside the pipelines, even 1 minute rest to bend down is an extravagant hope for them. After work, they are too tired to have a talk. Loneliness and physical pressure are the great loads. It is inhuman. There is should be a law to protect the workers from these harms.
This also offers us another thought, the law is uncompleted. Situations we are in, there are not laws to obey. Morality is our only choice. Hence, the law is useful, but not always efficient. Other than that, new things and situations happen everyday alone with the increasing complexity of society. On my opinion, the morality like consideration, justice and the sorts is more meaningful than the laws. The human behaviors can be legislated by law but not always possible and efficient.






以下为互改后：

The factors that affect human behaviors are mainly about cost and revenue（感觉是不是用profit好一点？）. The laws add some cost or put some extra revenue in the behaviors which are preached.（这两句话的意义与论题的关系，我没搞清楚，不知该怎么理解） In the other words, law rewards certain behaviors that help others’ lives while punish (punishes, 感觉应与“rewards”相匹配) the ones which are interfere the freedom of other individuals. When the cost is much lower than the revenue, people will take risks. And more than that（更重要的是；不仅如此）, some times, the morality has higher restriction ability. （最后一句中“And more than that”删除感觉更好一点）

In business field, people take business morality great granite while the laws. In different period of doing business, morality plays important roles. At very beginning, a small company is eager to gain its reputation to operate itself continuously. Surviving is the first goal for them. They not only will（would）not break laws but also performance with highly morality to earn others’ trusts. When the business goes further, the company will have some certain goals to achieve. At this time, the decision maker probably will take some risk to grasp some opportunities. To enhance（develop）the company, the original reputation and business partner are the foundation. The solid basal structure will be the backup if the company was damaged greatly. And then, the company achieve great successful, for years have they been responsible, on my opinion, they will keep the words they made to present a great（good）corporate image. In this case, law is not as important as we consider. （叙述有些混乱，本段想表达morality在商业中更重要，为了发展公司会遵守规则，laws可以考虑得少一点；但是表述的没能体现中心。建议重新部署句子。）

But for those companies that take profits as their only principles, the law is necessary(论点). More than the contrast between companies（这句不理解）, the relationship of employers and employees should be legislated. From the late news（晚间新闻）
in China, there are more than 13 employees in Foxconn suicide. The reasons for this are not simply one（one替代什么？）, but from the working situation they are struggled in we can notice something.（这句表达混乱） The workers are paid at the lowest rate of salary. To make enough money to feed family, they had to take the extra hours of work which will double the salary at these hours. Most of them work more than 60 hours per week. During the work, they are not allowed to talk to ensure the concentration. Standing beside the pipelines, even 1 minute rest to bend down is an extravagant hope for them. After work, they are too tired to have a talk. Loneliness and physical pressure are the great loads. It is inhuman. There is should be a law to protect the workers from these harms. （员工权益需要法律保护。）

This also offers us another thought, the law is uncompleted. (Sometimes,)Situations we are in, there are not(no) laws to obey. Morality is our only choice. Hence, the law is useful, but not always efficient. Other than that(除此之外), new things and situations shape everyday alone with the increasing complexity of society.（该句不知作何解） On my opinion, the morality(,) like consideration, justice and the sorts(,)is more meaningful than the laws. The human behaviors can be legislated by law but not always possible and efficient.